雅思流程圖的寫作(含范文深度點(diǎn)評(píng))-6

Theillustrationsbelowshowhowchocolateisproduced.

Summarisetheinformaitonbyselectingandreportingthemainfeatures.

【高分范文及深度點(diǎn)評(píng)】Thediagramshowsthestagesintheprocessofmakingchocolate.【所有的小作文第一句話都要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。流程圖必備三個(gè)詞：process：整個(gè)過程,stage：階段，step：步驟】

Chocolatecomesfromthecacaotree,whichisgrowninpartsofSouthAmerica,AfricaandIndonesia.【開頭不能沖上來就直接介紹cacaotree，而是通過主題詞chocolate引出，否則顯得太唐突】【流程圖特點(diǎn)之一：介紹過程要使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)】【流程圖特點(diǎn)之二：大量使用定語從句，將有關(guān)聯(lián)的兩句話連接。】【流程圖特點(diǎn)之三：大量使用被動(dòng)語態(tài)】Thetreeproduceslargeredpodswhichcontainwhitecocoabeans.

Firstly,【流程圖特點(diǎn)之四：使用一些表示順序的連接詞】whenthepodsareripe,theyareharvested,thebeansareremovedandtheyarefermentedforseveraldaysinlargewoodenboxes.【三個(gè)句子的并列：“句子A，句子Band句子C”?！緿uringthefermentingprocess,thebeansturnbrown.【流程圖特點(diǎn)之五：要適當(dāng)?shù)靥砑觽€(gè)別圖中沒有交代但能從圖片中直接讀出來的的一些內(nèi)容，否則可能達(dá)不到字?jǐn)?shù)要求。但是一定要把握尺度，千萬不要加上自己的主觀觀點(diǎn)，否則會(huì)扣分】

Next,thebrownbeansarespreadinthesuntodry.Theyarethenputinlargesacksandtransportedbytrainorlorry.Afterthis,thebeansaretakentoachocolatefactorywheretheyareroastedinanovenattemperaturesofbetween250and350degreeCelsius.Afterbeingroasted,thebeansarecrushedandtheoutershellisremoved.Thispartisnotneededformakingchocolate.Finally,theinnerpartofthebeanispressedandliquidchocolateisproduced.

【流程圖特點(diǎn)之六：一般不需要寫總結(jié)】

最后再總結(jié)一下流程圖的特點(diǎn)：

特點(diǎn)一：現(xiàn)在時(shí)特點(diǎn)二：定語從句特點(diǎn)三：被動(dòng)語態(tài)特點(diǎn)四：順序詞特點(diǎn)五：適當(dāng)添加特點(diǎn)六：無總結(jié)雅思流程圖范文《磚塊的制作》(含9分范文及考官點(diǎn)評(píng)）WRITINGTASK1

Youshouldspendabout20minutesonthistask.

Thediagrambelowshowstheprocessbywhichbricksaremanufacturedforthebuildingindustry.

Summarisetheinformationbyselectingandreportingthemainfeatures,andmakecomparisonswhererelevant.

Writeatleast150words.

Brickmanufacturing

*Clay:typeofstickyearththatisusedformakingbricks,pots,etc.

【滿分范文】Theprocessbywhichbricksaremanufacturedforthebuildingindustrycanbeoutlinedinsevenconsecutivesteps.Firsttherawmaterial,clay,whichwasjustbelowthesurfaceofsoilincertainclay-richareashastobedugupbyadigger.

Thenthelumpsofclayareplacedonametalgridinordertobreakupthebigchunksofclayintomuchsmallerareas,whichfallthroughthemetalgridontoaroller,whosemotionfurthersegregatesthebitsofclay.Sandandwaterareaddedtomakeahomogenousmixture,whichistheneitherformedinmouldsorcutintobrick-shapedpiecesbymeansofawirecutter.

Thosefreshbricksarethenkeptinadryingovenforatleast24andamaximumof48hours,severaldozensifnothundredsofbricksatatime.Thedriedbricksarethentransferredtoaso-calledkiln,anothertypeofhightemperatureoven.Firsttheyarekeptatamoderatetemperatureof200℃-1300

Oncethebrickshavecooleddownandhavebecomehard,theygetpackagedanddeliveredtotheirfinaldestination,beitabuildingsiteorstorage.

(215words)

【考官評(píng)語】Band9Thisresponsefullysatisfiestherequirementsofthetask.Allkeyfeaturesofeachstageoftheprocessareappropriatelyandaccuratelypresented.Anexcellentoverviewisgivenatthebeginningoftheresponseandthisskilfullyincorporatespartoftherubric,changingthegrammaticalfunction,togiveabriefsummaryofthewholeprocess.Themessageisveryeasytoread,withseamlesscohesionthatattractsnoattention.Paragraphing,linkingandreferencingareallskilfullymanaged.Thelanguageusedisveryfluentandsophisticated.Awiderangeofvocabularyandstructuresareusedwithfullflexibilityandaccuracy.Onlyrareminor‘slips’canbefoundandthesedonotdetractfromthehighrating.雅思寫作劍橋范文解析流程圖下面是劍橋6的test3考到的流程圖，考官給的范文。范文中有兩步考官直接就寫成一步，本來是3-8天和16天兩個(gè)時(shí)間段，縮成了3個(gè)星期，大家寫的時(shí)候可以分別寫，不用寫這么精練?？脊俜段模篢hefirstdiagramshowsthattherearefourmainstagesinthelifeofthesilkworm.第一個(gè)圖顯示了，在蠶的生命過程中主要有四步。Firstofall,eggsareproducedbythemothandittakestendaysforeacheggtobecomeasilkwormlarvathatfeedsonmulberryleaves.首先，蛾子產(chǎn)出卵，每個(gè)卵用10天的時(shí)間變成蠶的幼蟲，他們以桑葉為食。Thisstagelastsforuptosixweeksuntilthelarvaproducesacocoonofsilkthreadarounditself.這個(gè)階段持續(xù)最多到六個(gè)星期，直到幼蟲周圍生產(chǎn)出繭（silkthread）.Afteraperiodofaboutthreeweeks,theadultmothseventuallyemergefromthesecocoonsandthelifecyclebeginsagain.經(jīng)過三個(gè)星期的一段時(shí)間之后，成年的蛾子最終從繭里面出來，這個(gè)生命的循環(huán)就再一次開始了。Thecocoonsaretherawmaterialusedfortheproductionofsilkcloth.繭是生產(chǎn)絲綢的原材料。Onceselected,theyareboiledinwaterandthethreadcanbeseparatedintheunwindingstage.一旦被挑選出來，他們?cè)谒镏蠓校z可以在打開的階段中被分離出來。Eachthreadisbetween300and900metreslong,whichmeanstheycanbetwistedtogether,dyedandthenusedtoproduceclothintheweavingstage.每條絲是300到900米長(zhǎng)，這就意味著，他們能夠被纏繞在一起，染色，然后在織布階段被用于生產(chǎn)布品。Overall,thediagramsshowthatthecocoonstageofthesilkwormcanbeusedtoproducesilkcloththroughaverysimpleprocess.范文總結(jié)：1．

163個(gè)字。2．

使用了很多合適的關(guān)聯(lián)詞，見陰影部分。3．

主要是簡(jiǎn)單的并列句。4．

句型，搭配了一些被動(dòng)語態(tài)。5．

動(dòng)詞使用豐富：produce,feedon,last,emerge,select,boil,separate,unwind,twist(多數(shù)原詞帶入)6．

名詞比較專業(yè)：lifecycle,rawmaterial.表述時(shí)間：in10days,duringtheperiodof10days,Theprocesslastsforupto10days.after10days,10dayspassedutillsomethinghappened.表示然后：then,next,inthenextstate,followingthat,afterthat,thenextstepinthestageis....表示過程：process,procedure,formation,development表示步驟：step,stage,phase

方法：l

找到流程圖的過程，起點(diǎn)，終點(diǎn)。l

找到圖上標(biāo)出的已知?jiǎng)幼?，如果出現(xiàn)生詞，盡量猜測(cè)。無詞，用自己語言。l

按照步驟，分段描述，千萬不能省略任何一步。l

切記！加入流暢合理的表示順序的關(guān)聯(lián)詞。l

句型以主動(dòng)為主，搭配被動(dòng)，以及主語從句（例如：Itcanbeseenfromthegraphthat…）l

時(shí)態(tài)要使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)補(bǔ)充的表達(dá)方式

流程圖常用詞匯：時(shí)間階段：

afteraperiodof..months/days/minutes,during…順序連詞：

first,firstofall,inthefirststage,initially,tobeginwith

Second,then,next,also

Afterthat,atthesametime,inthemeantime,meanwhile

Priorto,untilthefirststageinvolves…/inthesecondstage/inthethirdstage/inthelaststage//Thenextstepinthestageisthat….目的連詞：

inorderto/inorderthat;soasto/sothat常見動(dòng)詞：

Produce生產(chǎn),lay放置,put,accumulate積累gather/collect/收集obtain獲得,Heatup加熱expand膨脹bend彎曲turnoff關(guān)閉cooldown冷卻disconnect斷開連接spin旋轉(zhuǎn),紡,strike打擊,Compress壓縮,,release釋放,move,flow流動(dòng),accelerate加速,form形成,Press按壓,adjust調(diào)整,absorb吸收,,process加工,Rotate旋轉(zhuǎn),chop坎,grind磨(碎),碾(碎),Light點(diǎn)燃,burn燃燒,ignite點(diǎn)燃,Reflect反光，turn轉(zhuǎn)，starts開始stops結(jié)束records錄音turnsup調(diào)高