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MyNewBrotherContinuationWritingShaoxingYangmingHighSchoolYaoJiaqiAnalyzethetextIwasinmyroom,feelingunwillingtoheadtothecommunitytheatrewith"mybrother"Henry.HehadrecentlybeenadoptedbymyparentsandIwasnotinthemoodforbeingonstagewithhim."Kirstie,comehere,"mymomcalled.Followinghervoice,Ifoundheroutsidethebathroom,holdingawetbook.Shegavethebookashake."Henry'sbookwasinthebathtub.Didyouputitthere?"Sheglaredatme,somethingshehadneverdonebeforeHenrycametoourhome.Ihadn'twethisbookonpurpose.Raindropsfellfrommyeyes.Tomakemattersworse,shepromisedtobuyhimanewcopy.Myheartached.Henrywasstealingmymother'slove.Hewasruiningmylife.Meanwhile,Henrywasnearby,absorbedinworkingonacomplicatedropeknot(繩結(jié)),somethinghelikedtodo.Whydidaboylikehimlikedoinggirlywork?Itseemedfarfrommanly(男子漢氣概).Soon,itwastimetosetofftothecommunitytheatre.AsHenrywalkedaheadofustothecar,mymomtookmeasideandsaidinalowvoice,"ItwillbeHenry'sfirsttimeonstage.Bekindtohim,honey."Inoddedbutsighed(嘆氣).Ihadn'talwaysfounditthisdifficulttobekind.ButsinceHenryhadmovedin,everythingfeltdifferent.Thetheatreusedtobeaspecialplaceformyparentsandme.WithHenryinvolved,itdidn'tseemsospecialanymore.Finally,itwasourstagetime.Myheartbeatwildly.IforgotmyannoyanceatHenryforawhile.Aswekidslinedup,readytoactoutourshortplay,IrealizedhowlooselyIhadtiedthedrawstringonmyskirt.Sureenough,myskirtbegantodrop.Icouldheartheaudiencelaughing.EventhoughIwaswearingshortsundermyskirt,Icouldfeelmyfaceburstintoflames.However,myhandswerefull.Ifonlysomeonecouldhelpmeout.Readthetextandfindoutitsmainideaand“my”emotions.climaxendingKNOWNUNKNOWNReadformainideaandemotionsunwillingreluctantP1:IwasunwillingtobeonstagewithmyadoptedbrotherHenry.emotionsmainideaAnalyzethetextIwasinmyroom,feelingunwillingtoheadtothecommunitytheatrewith"mybrother"Henry.HehadrecentlybeenadoptedbymyparentsandIwasnotinthemoodforbeingonstagewithhim."Kirstie,comehere,"mymomcalled.Followinghervoice,Ifoundheroutsidethebathroom,holdingawetbook.Shegavethebookashake."Henry'sbookwasinthebathtub.Didyouputitthere?"Sheglaredatme,somethingshehadneverdonebeforeHenrycametoourhome.Ihadn'twethisbookonpurpose.Raindropsfellfrommyeyes.Tomakemattersworse,shepromisedtobuyhimanewcopy.Myheartached.Henrywasstealingmymother'slove.Hewasruiningmylife.Meanwhile,Henrywasnearby,absorbedinworkingonacomplicatedropeknot(繩結(jié)),somethinghelikedtodo.Whydidaboylikehimlikedoinggirlywork?Itseemedfarfrommanly(男子漢氣概).Soon,itwastimetosetofftothecommunitytheatre.AsHenrywalkedaheadofustothecar,mymomtookmeasideandsaidinalowvoice,"ItwillbeHenry'sfirsttimeonstage.Bekindtohim,honey."Inoddedbutsighed(嘆氣).Ihadn'talwaysfounditthisdifficulttobekind.ButsinceHenryhadmovedin,everythingfeltdifferent.Thetheatreusedtobeaspecialplaceformyparentsandme.WithHenryinvolved,itdidn'tseemsospecialanymore.Finally,itwasourstagetime.Myheartbeatwildly.IforgotmyannoyanceatHenryforawhile.Aswekidslinedup,readytoactoutourshortplay,IrealizedhowlooselyIhadtiedthedrawstringonmyskirt.Sureenough,myskirtbegantodrop.Icouldheartheaudiencelaughing.EventhoughIwaswearingshortsundermyskirt,Icouldfeelmyfaceburstintoflames.However,myhandswerefull.Ifonlysomeonecouldhelpmeout.unwilling/reluctanthurt/wronged
confusedembarrassedhelplessclimaxendingKNOWNUNKNOWNReadformainideaandemotionsunwillingreluctant?embarrassedhelplesshurtwronged
P2:IwasmisunderstoodbymymomforplayingjokesonHenrydeliberately.P4:Whileonstage,Irealizedmyskirtwasabouttodropbecausethedrawstringgotloose.P1:Iwasunwilling
tobeonstagewithmyadoptedbrotherHenry.confusedP3:Icouldn’tunderstandwhyHenrywasabsorbedinropeknots.emotionsmainideaDesigntheplotPara.1
Rightthen,Henrysensedmyembarrassment.Para.2
Aftertheperformance,IfoundHenryandtappedhimonthearmgratefully.WhatdidHenrydo?linking1ReadforcluesWhatcanweinferfromthefollowingsentence?Meanwhile,Henrywasnearby,absorbedinworkingonacomplicatedropeknot,somethinghelikedtodo.Henryhadtheabilitytotiethedrawstringon“my”skirt.DesigntheplotPara.1
Rightthen,Henrysensedmyembarrassment.Para.2
Aftertheperformance,IfoundHenryandtappedhimonthearmgratefully.WhatdidHenrydo?HowdidIfeel?
linking2linking1linking3HowdidIshowgratitude?WhatwasHenry’sresponse?What’sthetheme?surprised,relieved,...helpmetiemydrawstringsuccessful,smooth,...expressthanks,hughimtightly,...hugback,smile,nobigdeal,...Howwastheperformance?ReadforthemeTip1Echothetext1|轉(zhuǎn)變初始感受(para.1)Iwasinmyroom,feelingunwillingtoheadtothecommunitytheatrewith"mybrother"Henry.e.g.Maybe_____________________________________inthisnewchapterofmyworldafterall.Change:unwilling→acceptable2|復(fù)現(xiàn)關(guān)鍵詞塊(para.2)Henrywasstealingmymother'slove.Hewasruiningmylife.e.g.Henrywas______stealingmymother'slove___ruiningmylife.Instead,he__________________________________________.itwon’tbe
sobadtoacceptmynewbrotherneithernorusedhisownpowertobringnewvigorintomylifeCallback:
stealmymother’slove;ruinmylife3|形成對比意識e.g.Itwas
atthismoment
thatIrealized
familiesare____________________________(不是由血緣關(guān)系而是由愛所聯(lián)結(jié)的).e.g.Itdawnedonmethat
thestringknot
ontheskirt
would
gountied,
__________________________andnever(但是家庭的結(jié)永遠不會解開).Readforthemenotbondedbybloodbutbylovebut
thefamilyknotwouldn’tContrast:
not...but...Example1:Henry在臺上的及時幫助Ver.1.0|Herushedtohelpme.
Ver.2.0|Sentencepattern:Sb.did1,did2,anddid3.(para.4)mymomtookmeasideandsaidinalowvoice.
Inoddedbutsighed.他毫不猶豫地快速靠近我,彎下腰/俯身蹲下來,為我系了一個牢固又漂亮的蝴蝶結(jié)。“搞定?!彼穆曊f道。Withoutasecondthought,he______________________,_____________________________and_________________________.“Nailedit.”Hewhispered.
approachedmequicklybentdown/droppedtoacrouchAccumulatethelanguagetiedabeautifulfirmbowknotTip2SplittheactionExample2:演出成功Ver.1.0|Theshowwasahugesuccess.Ver.2.0|側(cè)面描寫觀眾反應(yīng)(para.4)Myheartbeatwildly.IforgotmyannoyanceatHenryforawhile.→Myheartbeatingwildly,IforgotmyannoyanceatHenryforawhile.
(獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu))演出一結(jié)束,觀眾就投來贊許的目光,雷鳴般的掌聲回蕩在大廳周圍。Themomenttheshowwasover,theaudiencecastapprovingglancesat
us,__________________________________________aroundthehall.AccumulatethelanguageTip3Adddetaileddescriptionfromdifferentperspectivesashower/stormofthunderousapplauseechoingExample3:我向Henry真心道謝Ver.1.0|“Thankyou,Henry.”Isaidsincerely.Ver.2.0|with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)/虛擬語氣(para.4)WithHenryinvolved,itdidn'tseemsospecialanymore.
Ifonlysomeonecouldhelpmeout.e.g.我的聲音顫抖著,臉發(fā)燙。我不得不承認,要不是有他的幫助/要是沒有他出色的打結(jié)技術(shù),我就不會鼓起勇氣站在舞臺上。Myvoicetrembled__________________________.Ihadtoadmitthat,
___________________________________________________________,I__________________________________tostandonthestage.butforhistimelyhelp/withouthiswonderfulknottingskillsAccumulatethelanguageTip4Fillwithadvancedstructureswouldn’thavepluckedupthecouragewithmyfaceburningWhatmakesagoodcontinuationwriting?SummarizeandappreciateSummarizeandappreciateRightthen,Henrysensedmyembarrassment.Withoutasecondthought,heapproachedmequickly,droppedtoacrouch,andtiedabeautifulfirmbowknot.
“Nailedit.”Hewhispered.Shockedbywhathehaddone,Ifeltsomethingdeepinmymindbegantochange.Itseemedasifhiskinddeedshadmeltedmyheart.ThinkingaboutwhatIhaddonetohim,Ifeltashamedofmyself.WhileIwaslostinthought,themusictookmebacktoreality.Weedgedtothestageandstartedourp
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