讀后續(xù)寫人與動(dòng)物雀之情學(xué)案-高三英語二輪專題

看到這篇讀后學(xué)寫材料想到很多年前俄羅斯作家寫的《羽毛留下的思念》：雪，融化了，濕漉漉的。玻璃窗上殘留著一片羽毛。鳥羽揉破了。沒有光澤而且看上去沒有生命的神采，令人痛心?？赡苁且恢恍▲B兒夜里用喙啄我的窗戶，哀求我給它些溫暖，而我這個(gè)人聽力不濟(jì)，沒有聽見，因此沒有把它放進(jìn)屋里來，于是這片潔白的羽毛就貼在了窗玻璃上，像是在責(zé)怪我。后來陽光曬干了窗玻璃，小鳥的羽毛不知飄落到哪兒去了。可是它卻給我留下了痛苦的思念。也許這只雛鳥兒沒有找到棲身之所過冬，沒有活到春暖花開的季節(jié)。我心中有一種莫名的郁悶和憂傷。無疑的是這片小小的羽毛飛入了我的心扉，黏貼在了我的心上。閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。OnesunnyafternooninJune,mysisterJennyandIwerewalkinghomefromschoolwhenweheardastrangesoundcomingfromanemptybox.Wewalkedovertoitandlookedinside.Asadlittlesparrow

（麻雀）wassittingatthebottomoftheboxanditsrightwingwasbroken.Jennyhelditinherhands,cooing（咕咕地叫）toit,soitwouldn’beafraid.AndthenJennyandItookithome.Mymomtookonelookatthelittlebirdandsaid,“Noway!

I’mnothavinganotheranimalinthehouse.”Butwhenshegotacloserlookatthebigandsadeyes,shechangedhermind.Momsetthesparrowonthekitchentabletogetabetterlookatit,Shesaiditsrightwingwasseriouslybroken,soshedesignedasplint

（夾板）

andcarefullyputitonitswing.Ourdog,Buttons,kepttryingtogetalookatthebird,butwedroveitaway.Oncethesplintwason,wefedthebirdwaterandgaveitbitsofbreadandberries.Atfirstitwouldn’teat,butafterawhile,itwouldn’tstop.ThelittlebirdgotthenamePeep.Wekeptitinacage.Everymorning,weputitscageoutside,soitcouldgetsomefreshair.Peepcouldn’tfly,whichseemedtomakeitsad.Afteraperiodoftime,Peep’swinggotbetter.WeputPeeponthekitchentable,andMomtookoffthesplint.Peepstartedflapping

（拍打）

itswingslikecrazy,andthenextmorningwhenweopenedthecage,itflewaboutfiftyfeetintotheairbeforecomingback.Wewatched

fromthegroundlikeproudparents,Fromthenon,weleftitscageoutsidewiththedooropen,andPeepflewfurthereachmorning,butitalwayscameback.1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2．請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Thenonemorning,anothersparrowstoppedonthePeepscage.__________...Afewmonthslater,asparrowlandedonthewindowofmyhome.__________...簡(jiǎn)要解讀：這是人與動(dòng)物之間生命和諧的一種精神敘事，敘事本身的顯性&隱性線索：1發(fā)現(xiàn)麻雀（隱性：憐憫、愛護(hù)、本能Jennyhelditinherhands,cooing（咕咕地叫）toit,soitwouldn’beafraid）——2帶麻雀回家(

隱性：真，善，美.）——3母親拒絕麻雀（鋪墊小波折：“Noway!

I’mnothavinganotheranimalinthehouse.”）——4

母親接受麻雀（隱性：真，善，美.）——5

全家總動(dòng)員-----（隱性：細(xì)膩，善良，純樸,）（Momsetthesparrowonthekitchentabletogetabetterlookatit/shedesignedasplint

（夾板）

andcarefullyputitonitswing/wedroveourdog--Buttonsaway/wefedthebirdwaterandgaveitbitsofbreadandberries/ThelittlebirdgotthenamePeep/Everymorning,weputitscageoutside,soitcouldgetsomefreshair.）——6麻雀“不辭而別”（隱性：作為生命個(gè)體，它有自己的追求與生活）——7麻雀“回歸”（隱性：反向【感恩，善良，純真，忠實(shí)】）。（6&7續(xù)寫段落）這是一個(gè)完美的人類的愛與動(dòng)物的愛相互印證的閉環(huán)結(jié)構(gòu)，將落腳點(diǎn)拉回到人類關(guān)懷萬物柔軟的心靈本身。麻雀與小作者之間的一場(chǎng)雙向奔赴，是美好與和諧最有力量的印證，這篇成熟的材料背后的文化負(fù)載和中國(guó)傳統(tǒng)文化中對(duì)待生命的態(tài)度是交融的。以獨(dú)特的生命教育，助力學(xué)生身心健康的發(fā)展。具有導(dǎo)向性價(jià)值和育人價(jià)值，為培養(yǎng)親自然情節(jié)的人（敬畏生命；立德樹人；正確價(jià)值觀）提供了依托。人類善待動(dòng)物的理念和實(shí)踐在我國(guó)有著漫長(zhǎng)的歷史。中國(guó)傳統(tǒng)文化中動(dòng)物與人關(guān)系論述《論語》中記載說，孔子“釣而不綱，弋不射宿”。知名漢學(xué)家理雅各將這句話譯作：ThehumanityofKonfucius.Themasterangled,—Butdidnotuseanet.Heshot,—Butnotasbirdsperching.這也就是說，為了滿足生活需要，人們也釣魚打獵，但是孔子不用漁網(wǎng)捕魚，也不射歸巢、歇宿的鳥，因?yàn)樗鼈兛赡苷陴B(yǎng)育幼鳥。敬畏自然是人們社會(huì)活動(dòng)的前提和基本規(guī)則。儒家對(duì)自然的認(rèn)識(shí)是有科學(xué)性的，它能讓人們產(chǎn)生敬畏自然而非盲目征服自然的意識(shí)。詩人范仲淹非常喜歡鶴的儀態(tài)和聲音，寫有“八變奇姿已過人”“獨(dú)愛九皋嘹唳好，聲聲天地為之清”的稱贊詩句。歐陽修喜歡鳥，在《啼鳥》中寫道：“鳥言我豈解爾意，綿蠻但愛聲可聽。”“黃鸝顏色已可愛，舌端啞咤如嬌嬰。”王安石的《放魚》說：“捉魚淺水中，投置最深處。當(dāng)暑脫煎熬，翛然泳而去。豈無良庖者，可使供七箸。物我皆畏苦，舍之寧啖茹。還有”杜甫的《病馬》:

乘爾亦已久，天寒關(guān)塞深。塵中老盡力，歲晚病傷心。毛骨豈殊眾？馴良猶至今。物微意不淺，感動(dòng)一沉吟。英譯：ToMySickHorseDuFuYouhavebeenriddenlongThroughcold,deepmountainpass.Industyoutoilalong,Sickatyear’send,alas!Isyourcoatnotthesame?Youaretameuptonow.Fardearerthanyourframe.CanInotbemoved?How?注釋與解讀：我長(zhǎng)久地騎著你，冒著天寒，朝著關(guān)塞前進(jìn)。仆仆風(fēng)塵的你年老體衰，卻還在繼續(xù)為我盡力。歲晚之際，你病了，這不由得讓我無比傷心。你的毛骨和其他的馬相比，難道有什么不同？卻和善馴良地伴隨我直到今天。你雖只是微小的生物，情意卻不可淺論。我內(nèi)心無比感動(dòng)，陷入深深的思索之中。哲學(xué)家叔本華很喜歡自己的卷毛狗，曾在一名友人的信上寫著：所有哲學(xué)家及學(xué)者的討論，都比不上“我和我的只有十七個(gè)月的小狗四目相視、無言交流?！眳⒖挤段模篢henonemorning,anothersparrowstoppedonthePeep’scage.ThesparrowkeptcooingtoPeepandtouchPeep’sheadwithitsownhead.Atthesametime,Peepalsoseemedexcitedandkeptflappingitswings.WesupposedthatthesparrowmustbePeep’smother.Afterawhile.Peepflewoutofthecage,followingthesparrow,graduallydisappearinginthesky.Ononehand,wewerehappythatitfinallyreunitedwithitsfamily.Ontheotherhand,wefeltsosadbuthadtoacceptitsleaving.Afewmonthslater,asparrowlandedonthewindowofmyhome.JennyandIbothlookedatitamazingly.Withthemarksonitsrightwing,weimmediatelyrecognizedthatitwasPeep.Itstoodtherelookingatusforacoupleofseconds,andIalsobegancooingtoitandtocheditsfeathertoexpressmyhappiness.Thenitflewuptotheskyagain.WelookedupandsawPeepoff,lookingforwardtoitsprobablevisitnexttime.下水作文：Thenonemorning,anothersparrowstoppedonthePeep’scage.A

cheerful

smile

played

over

Peep’s

face.It

ruffled

up

its

feathers

,

hopping

and

cooing,

as

if

showing

its

pain

oflovesickness

.Apparently,thesparrowisPeep’smom.Andthenthearrivaloftheuninvitedguestsmadeustakebettercareofthem.MymomandIwouldgoouttofeedthesparrows.Shetaughtmehowtocallthemwithaclickingsoundshemadewithhertongue.Iwouldobservingandcelebratingtheirdancefromourwindowinmysparetime.Istuffedthemwiththeleftoversonourtableclothaftereverymeal.Theyevengatheredupcourageandslidedintoourbedroomorevenreadingroom.

Weneverhavethefeelingthatweconsiderthemtroublemakers,butlovelyfamilymembers.

However,

one

day

they

dartedaway

without

saying

bye.

We

were

happy

with

its

reunion

with

its

mom

andlooking

forward

to

seeing

her

again.Afewmonthslater,asparrowlandedonthewindowofmyhome.Itsatrighttheretolookinforsomeone’sattention.ThemarksonitsrightwingrevealedthatitwasPeep.

JennyandIrushedoutofthedoortobegreetedandhappilyranbackinsidetothebigbowlofgrainsforher.Itsactionsofeatingwithcooingshowedthatitsappetitehadbeengreatlyexcited!...loveistheactiveconcernforthelifeandthegrowthofthatwhichwelove.Ican’twaititspresencenexttime!文本賞析（1）老舍的《小麻雀》英文賞析：ALittleSparrow

LaoSheAssoonastherainstopped,alittlesparrow,almost

full-fledged（adj.羽毛生齊的）,flewintothecourtyard.Ithopped,fluttered（V.拍打翅膀）,

dartingup（V.跳起來）

totheedgeofflowerpotsandbacktothegroundagain.Watchingitmoveupanddownacoupleoftimes,Irealizeddratitcouldnotflyanyhigherasthe

plumes（n.羽毛）onitsleftwinghadgottwistedwithonestickingoutasifabouttocomeoff.WhenImadeanattempttomovecloser,itjumpedoffahitandstoppedagain,staringbackatmewithitssmall,blackandbean-likeeyesthathadamixedlookofwantingtobefriendswithmeandnotbeingcertainthatIwastrustworthy.Itoccurredtomethatthismustbeatamebird,havingbeencagedsinceitwashatchedperhaps.Nowonderitwasnotmuchscaredofmypresence.Itsleftwingmighthavebeen

impaired(adj.受損的，出毛病的)

bysomekidandthatwaswhytherewasdistrustinitslookthoughitshowedsomeintimacywithman.SuddenlyIwasseizedwithsadness.Howmiserableitwasforabirdtoloseitswings!Withoutsomeonetakingcareofitthissmallthingcouldnotsurvive.Butmanhadinjureditswing.Howcruelhewas!Injuredasitwas,itstillwantedtorelyonman.Howpitiable!ThelookinitseyesshowedthatShelittlecreaturewasoftwominds.Itwassmallandbynomeanspretty,yetitsgesturesandexpressionsrevealedthatithadbeenwrongedandlandedinadifficultsituation.Itwasanxioustokeepitsdelicatelifeoutofdanger,butitdidnotknowwhattodo.Ithadlittleconfidenceinitselfandlesstrustinman,but

itneededsomeonetorelyon.Ithoppedandstopped,lookingatmebuttooshytocomeover.Ithoughtoffetchingsomecookedricetoattractit,butIdarednotleaveitalonetestitshouldbeattackedbythekitten.Asthekittenwasnotaroundatthemoment,Ihurriedtothekitchenandcausebackwithafewgrainsonlytofindthebirdmissing.Irantotheouteryardandsawthekitten

crouching(vi.蹲伏，蜷縮)byaflowerpotinfrontofthescreenwall.

I

hastened(v.j加速)todriveherawaybut,withaquickjump,shecaughtholdofthebird.Thetamesparrow,withitstailandclawsdanglingfromthekitten’smouth,didnotevenknowhowtostruggle.Itlookedmoredeadthanalive.Withmyeyesfixedonthebird,Iwatchedthekittenrunfirsttothekitchenandthentotheramatthewestend.Iwasafraidto

press（緊追）hard

afterher,butIhadtofollowherincasesheshouldtightenherjaws.Thoughthebird'sheadwasnotvisibletotoe,thelookof

anticipated（adj.受期待的）dangerinitseyeswasvividinmywind.Betweenitslookandmysympathystoodthatsmallwhitecat.HavingrunafewroundsafterherIquit,thinkingitwaspointlesstochaseherlikethatbecause,bythetimeIcaughther,thebirdwouldhavebeenhalfdead.Whenthecatslippedbacktothekitchenagain,Ihesitatedforasecondandthenhurriedovertheretoo.Itseemed,inmymind'seye,thelittlebirdwere

pleading（adj.懇求的）

forhelpwithitstwoblackbean-likeeyes.InthekitchenInoticedthecatwascrouchingbyatinpipewhichwasinstalledassmokeductinwinterand

dismantled（拆卸）inspring,atthecorner,butthebirdwasnotwithher.Thepipeleanedagainstthecornerand,betweenitslowerendandthefloor;therewasanopeningthroughwhichthecatwas

probing（V.探查）

withherpaws.Myhoperevived:thebirdwasnotdead.Asthekittenwaslessthanfourmonthsold,ithadnotteamedhowtocatchmice,orhowtokillforthatmatter.Itwasmerelyholdingthebirdinitsmouthandhavingfunwithit.WhileIwasthinkingalongtheselinesthelittlebirdsuddenlyemergedandthekitten,takenaback,boltedbackward.TilewaythelittlebirdlookedwassoregisteredtomeatthefirstglancethatIfeltlikeshuttingmyeyesimmediately.Itwasvirtuallycrouching,withitschestclosetothefloor,likeamansufferingfromastomachache.Therewasnostainofbloodonitsbody,butitseemedtobeshrinking

upintoitself.Itsheaddroppedlow,itssmallbeakpointingtothefloor.Itstwoblackeyes,unseeing,wereveryblackandlarge,lookinglast.Thelittlelifeleftinitwasallintheeyes.Itseemedtobeexpectingthecattochargeagain,withnostrengthtoresistorrun;orwishingthatthecatwouldbekindenoughtopardonitorthatsomesaviourwouldcomealongtoitsrescue.Lifeanddeathcoexistedinitseyes.Ithoughtthebinmustbeconfusedorstunned,orelsewhyshouldithavecomeoutfromthepipe?Stunnedasitwas,itstillcherishedsomehopewhich,thoughhardtodefine,wasthesourceoflife.Withthathopeitgazedatthefloor,expectingeithertosurviveordie.Iwassoreallyscaredthatitbecamecompletelymotionless,leavingitselfalltotheprecarioushope.Itkeptquietandstillasifwaitingforitslifetoflowoutofitseyes.Thekittenmadenomoreattempts

toattackit.Sheonlytriedtotouchitwithherlittlepaws.Asthekittentouchedit,ittiltedfromsidetoside,itsheadundisturbedanditseyeslookingblankatthefloor.Itwouldnotfightbacksolongastherewasachanceofsurvival.Butthebirdhadnotlostallofitscourage;itactedthiswayonlywiththecat.Iwentaverlight-footed,pickedupthecatandputheroutsidethedoor,thesparrowremainingwhereitwas.WhenItookitupinmyhandsandlooked,itwasriotseriouslyinjured,thoughsomefluffhadcomeoffitschest.Itwaslookingatme.Ihadnoideawhattodo.IfIletitgo,itwassuretodie;ifIkeptitwithme,Ididrothaveacageforit.Ihelditinmyhandsasifholdingallthelivesintheworld,notknowingwhattodo.'Mesparrowhuddledup,motionless,itseyesasblackasever,stillexpectant.Itremainedthatwayforalongwhile.Itookittomybedroom,putitonthedeskandwatcheditforafewmoments.SuddenlyittilteditsheadWitandthenrigh