【公開課課件】英語讀后繼寫課件36

ContinuationWriting---Howtowriteareasonablestory

11.Acknowledgebasicrulesofcontinuationwriting2.Learntoexploreusefulinformationinreading3.Learntodevelopcoherentemotionandlogicalplotline4.LearntopolishandupgradesentencesLearningObjectives2什么是讀后續(xù)寫？提供一篇350詞左右的閱讀材料（一般是記敘文，且以事件發(fā)生的時(shí)間為序）。根據(jù)該材料的內(nèi)容情節(jié)等，續(xù)寫兩段，150詞左右（每個(gè)段落都給出了第一句），將其發(fā)展為一篇邏輯合理情節(jié)完整的短文。3讀后續(xù)寫考查什么？核心素養(yǎng)：思維品質(zhì)：想象能力和創(chuàng)新精神語言能力：閱讀和寫作具體說來，四個(gè)方面：把握短文關(guān)鍵信息和語言特點(diǎn)的能力創(chuàng)造性思維能力對語篇結(jié)構(gòu)的把控能力語言運(yùn)用的準(zhǔn)確性和豐富性4評分細(xì)則評分檔次第一條第二條第三條第四條第五檔（21-25分）與所給短文融合度高，與所提供的各段落開頭語銜接合理。內(nèi)容豐富。所使用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯豐富、準(zhǔn)確，可能有些許錯(cuò)誤，但完全不影響意義表達(dá)。有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使所續(xù)寫的短文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。第四檔（16-20分）與所給短文融合度較高，與所提供的各段落開頭語銜接較為合理。內(nèi)容比較豐富。所使用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯較為豐富、準(zhǔn)確，可能有些許錯(cuò)誤，但不影響意義表達(dá)。比較有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使所續(xù)寫的短文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。第三檔（11-15分）與所給短文關(guān)系較為密切，與所提供的各段落開頭語有一定程度的銜接。寫出了若干有關(guān)內(nèi)容。應(yīng)用的語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯能滿足任務(wù)的要求，雖有一些錯(cuò)誤，但不影響意義表達(dá)。應(yīng)用簡單的語句間連接成分，使全文內(nèi)容連貫。第二檔（6-10分）與所給短文有一定的關(guān)系，與所提供的各段落開頭語有一定程度的銜接寫出了一些有關(guān)內(nèi)容。語法結(jié)構(gòu)單調(diào)，詞匯項(xiàng)目有限，有些語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯方面的錯(cuò)誤，影響了意義的表達(dá)。較少使用語句間的連接成分，全文內(nèi)容缺少連貫性。第一檔（1-5分）與所提供的短文和開頭語的銜接較差。產(chǎn)出內(nèi)容較少。語法結(jié)構(gòu)單調(diào)，詞匯項(xiàng)目有限，有較多語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯方面的錯(cuò)誤，嚴(yán)重影響了意義的表達(dá)。缺乏語句間的連接成分，全文內(nèi)容連貫。與原文劇情融洽，邏輯且合理續(xù)寫內(nèi)容豐富有看點(diǎn)語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯多樣準(zhǔn)確語句間銜接自然，結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊5解題思路讀懂原文情節(jié)回扣原文，結(jié)合段首句確定情節(jié)走向組織細(xì)節(jié)擬寫草稿豐富潤色細(xì)節(jié)67Challengeyourself1.Dobearsattackpeople?2.Wheredidtheeventhappen?3.Howmanypeoplewerementionedintheevent?Whowerethey?6.Wouldthetwoboysindanger?4.HowdidSamandDavidfeelwhentheytalkedaboutthebear?5.Whatwouldthebeardowhenitsensedthepresenceoftwoboys?8Dobearsattackpeople?Theansweriscertainlypositive.SopeopleinasmallcityinColoradowereconcerned.Why?Lastweek,alargeblackbearattackedafamily'scoopandatethechickens.ItwasreportedbyalocalTVstation.Attheendofthenewsreport,apolicemanaskedlocalresidentstokeepwaste,petfoodandevenbirdseedinside,andtoreportanybearsightingsuntiltheanimalwasfound.Thepolicemanalsotoldpeopletoalwaysstayawayfromthebearwhentheysawit.Samisa12-year-oldboy.Earlierthisweek,hecametothatsmallcitytovisithisuncle'sfamilywithhismother.Hisuncle'sson,David,wasveryexcitedaboutthebearthathadappearedinhisneighbor'sbackyard.“Sam,thereisabearinourcity,”soonafterSamarrived,Davidtoldhim.Samwascuriousaboutbearsandhehadalwaysdreamedofwatchingone.“Really?”heaskedexcitedly.“Yes.ItwentintoMrsBrown'sbackyardlastweek.Itateallherchickens.ButithadrunawayandIdidn'tevenseeit,”saidDavid.Samlistenedwithhiseyeswideopen.“Woulditreturn?”heasked.“Veryprobably,”saidDavid,“itwouldreturnforfood.”Atlast,heaskedSam.

“Doyouwanttoseethebear?”Samimmediatelynodded.Thenheasked,“Buthow?”9

“Wecanputsomefoodinthebackyard.Whenthebearseesit,hewillcomeinandeatit.Butweshouldbecareful.Thebearmayattackusifheseesus.Soweshouldnevermakeanynoise.”Samnoddedagain,stillinexcitement.Laterthatday,theadultsallwentout,leavingthetwoboysaloneathome.Soontheystartedtotakeaction.Theyputsomeleftoversfromlunchinthebackyard.Thentheywaitedbehindthewindowofthekitchenandwaitedcuriously.Butanhourpassedandtheydidn’tseeabear.Finally,theygotbored.Paragraph1:Justthen,theysawsomethingbigatthegateofthebackyard.Paragraph2:Whenthebearlookedup,hesawSam.

10續(xù)寫的兩個(gè)段落的段首句（已給出）Paragraph1:Justthen,theysawsomethingbigatthegateofthebackyard.Paragraph2:Whenthebearlookedup,hesawSam.

1112Challengeyourself1.Dobearsattackpeople?2.Wheredidtheeventhappen?3.Howmanypeoplewerementionedintheevent?Whowerethey?6.Wouldthetwoboysindanger?4.HowdidSamandDavidfeelwhentheytalkedaboutthebear?5.Whatwouldthebeardowhenitsensedthepresenceoftwoboys?13Who①②attack?③feel?④WhereWhat

didthebeardo?⑤⑥danger?certainlypositive(yes!)David,Sam,parents,MrsBrown,policeman

thebearwouldattackthem.backyardofDavid'sfamilyexcitedandeagertoseethebearwouldbeindangerifnescesaryhelpwasabsentBackgroundInformationBackgroundInformation

14Step1精讀文章Dobearsattackpeople?Theansweriscertainlypositive.SopeopleinasmallcityinColoradowereconcerned.Why?Lastweek,alargeblackbearattackedafamily’scoopandatethechickens.ItwasreportedbyalocalTVstation.Attheendofthenewsreport,apolicemanaskedlocalresidentstokeepwaste,petfoodandevenbirdseedinside,andtoreportanybearsightingsuntiltheanimalwasfound.Thepolicemanalsotoldpeopletoalwaysstayawayfromthebearwhentheysawit.Samisa12-year-oldboy.Earlierthisweek,hecametothatsmallcitytovisithisuncle’sfamilywithhismother.Hisuncle’sson,David,wasveryexcitedaboutthebearthathadappearedinhisneighbor’sbackyard.“Sam,thereisabearinourcity,”soonafterSamarrived,Davidtoldhim.Samwascuriousaboutbearsandhehadalwaysdreamedofwatchingone.“Really?”heaskedexcitedly.“Yes.ItwentintoMrsBrown’sbackyardlastweek.Itateallherchickens.ButithadrunawayandIdidn’tevenseeit,”saidDavid.Samlistenedwithhiseyeswideopen.“Woulditreturn?”heasked.“Veryprobably,”saidDavid,“itwouldreturnforfood.”Atlast,heaskedSam,“Doyouwanttoseethebear?”Samimmediatelynodded.Thenheasked,“Buthow?”

“Wecanputsomefoodinthebackyard.Whenthebearseesit,hewillcomeinandeatit.Butweshouldbecareful.Thebearmayattackusifheseesus.Soweshouldnevermakeanynoise.”Samnoddedagain,stillinexcitement.Laterthatday,theadultsallwentout,leavingthetwoboysaloneathome.Soontheystartedtotakeaction.Theyputsomeleftoversfromlunchinthebackyard.Thentheywaitedbehindthewindowofthekitchenandwaitedcuriously.Butanhourpassedandtheydidn’tseeabear.Finally,theygotbored.出現(xiàn)熊襲擊事件，警察警告Sam和David渴望親眼見到熊熊非常貪吃商量以食物為誘餌吸引熊待大人出門時(shí)開始行動(dòng)等待熊的出現(xiàn)時(shí)有點(diǎn)不耐煩了15Step2理清思路兩“情”相悅：coherentinemotionlogicalinplot情感連貫情節(jié)合理符合邏輯符合常識回找伏筆：情感和情節(jié)角色調(diào)度：沖突和配合16Step2理清思路兩“情”相悅：coherentinemotionlogicalinplot情感連貫情節(jié)合理符合邏輯符合常識回找伏筆：情感和情節(jié)角色調(diào)度：沖突和配合17Dobearsattackpeople?Theansweriscertainlypositive.SopeopleinasmallcityinColoradowereconcerned.Why?Lastweek,alargeblackbearattackedafamily’scoopandatethechickens.ItwasreportedbyalocalTVstation.Attheendofthenewsreport,apolicemanaskedlocalresidentstokeepwaste,petfoodandevenbirdseedinside,andtoreportanybearsightingsuntiltheanimalwasfound.Thepolicemanalsotoldpeopletoalwaysstayawayfromthebearwhentheysawit.Samisa12-year-oldboy.Earlierthisweek,hecametothatsmallcitytovisithisuncle’sfamilywithhismother.Hisuncle’sson,David,wasveryexcitedaboutthebearthathadappearedinhisneighbor’sbackyard.“Sam,thereisabearinourcity,”soonafterSamarrived,Davidtoldhim.Samwascuriousaboutbearsandhehadalwaysdreamedofwatchingone.“Really?”heaskedexcitedly.“Yes.ItwentintoMrsBrown’sbackyardlastweek.Itateallherchickens.ButithadrunawayandIdidn’tevenseeit,”saidDavid.Samlistenedwithhiseyeswideopen.“Woulditreturn?”heasked.“Veryprobably,”saidDavid,“itwouldreturnforfood.”Atlast,heaskedSam,“Doyouwanttoseethebear?”Samimmediatelynodded.Thenheasked,“Buthow?”18

“Wecanputsomefoodinthebackyard.Whenthebearseesit,hewillcomeinandeatit.Butweshouldbecareful.Thebearmayattackusifheseesus.Soweshouldnevermakeanynoise.”Samnoddedagain,stillinexcitement.Laterthatday,theadultsallwentout,leavingthetwoboysaloneathome.Soontheystartedtotakeaction.Theyputsomeleftoversfromlunchinthebackyard.Thentheywaitedbehindthewindowofthekitchenandwaitedcuriously.Butanhourpassedandtheydidn’tseeabear.Finally,theygotbored.Paragraph1:Justthen,theysawsomethingbigatthegateofthebackyard.Paragraph2:Whenthebearlookedup,hesawSam.

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“Wecanputsomefoodinthebackyard.Whenthebearseesit,hewillcomeinandeatit.Butweshouldbecareful.Thebearmayattackusifheseesus.Soweshouldnevermakeanynoise.”Samnoddedagain,stillinexcitement.Laterthatday,theadultsallwentout,leavingthetwoboysaloneathome.Soontheystartedtotakeaction.Theyputsomeleftoversfromlunchinthebackyard.Thentheywaitedbehindthewindowofthekitchenandwaitedcuriously.Butanhourpassedandtheydidn'tseeabear.Finally,theygotbored.Paragraph1:Justthen,theysawsomethingbigatthegateofthebackyard.Paragraph2:Whenthebearlookedup,hesawSam.

20developmentofemotionline情感線SamandDavidfelt_____toseethebear,andgot____whentheycan'tsowhentheyfinallysawthebear,theyoughttofeel_________sowhenthebearnoticedthemtheyoughttofeel__________butthebearwould__________thembecauseitwasfierceexcitedandeagerexcitedsofrightened/scaredattack

Para1Para2bored21excitedandeagerboredexcited/Para1scared/Para222Sam感到害怕了？說好的興奮呢？23tip:coherentinemotion!developmentofplotline情節(jié)線SamandDavidfelt_____toseethebearWhatwouldtheboysandthebeardowhenthebearcamein?whywouldthebearlookedup?whatwouldhappenbetweenbearandtwoboys?willtheboysdie?butthebearwould__________themoncetheysawSamandDavidexcitedandeagerattack

Para1Para224

“Wecanputsomefoodinthebackyard.Whenthebearseesit,hewillcomeinandeatit.Butweshouldbecareful.Thebearmayattackusifheseesus.Soweshouldnevermakeanynoise.”Samnoddedagain,stillinexcitement.Laterthatday,theadultsallwentout,leavingthetwoboysaloneathome.Soontheystartedtotakeaction.Theyputsomeleftoversfromlunchinthebackyard.Thentheywaitedbehindthewindowofthekitchenandwaitedcuriously.Butanhourpassedandtheydidn’tseeabear.Finally,theygotbored.Paragraph1:Justthen,theysawsomethingbigatthegateofthebackyard.Paragraph2:Whenthebearlookedup,hesawSam.

25如果沒發(fā)現(xiàn)，如何和第二段開頭看見銜接？26tip:logicalbetweenPara1andPara2!第一段就已經(jīng)深情對視了？27tip:logicalinplot!劇情神反轉(zhuǎn)28Dobearsattackpeople?Theansweriscertainlypositive.SopeopleinasmallcityinColoradowereconcerned.Why?Lastweek,alargeblackbearattackedafamily’scoopandatethechickens.ItwasreportedbyalocalTVstation.Attheendofthenewsreport,apolicemanaskedlocalresidentstokeepwaste,petfoodandevenbirdseedinside,andtoreportanybearsightingsuntiltheanimalwasfound.Thepolicemanalsotoldpeopletoalwaysstayawayfromthebearwhentheysawit.Samisa12-year-oldboy.Earlierthisweek,hecametothatsmallcitytovisithisuncle’sfamilywithhismother.Hisuncle’sson,David,wasveryexcitedaboutthebearthathadappearedinhisneighbor’sbackyard.“Sam,thereisabearinourcity,”soonafterSamarrived,Davidtoldhim.Samwascuriousaboutbearsandhehadalwaysdreamedofwatchingone.“Really?”heaskedexcitedly.“Yes.ItwentintoMrsBrown’sbackyardlastweek.Itateallherchickens.ButithadrunawayandIdidn’tevenseeit,”saidDavid.Samlistenedwithhiseyeswideopen.“Woulditreturn?”heasked.“Veryprobably,”saidDavid,“itwouldreturnforfood.”Atlast,heaskedSam,“Doyouwanttoseethebear?”Samimmediatelynodded.Thenheasked,“Buthow?”29熊壯慫人膽？熊被人喊跑了？？30tip:commonsense史上最佛系的熊31在熊的注視下表演裝死？32熊和孩子們分享食物？畫面美好得不忍直視。33腦洞開得有點(diǎn)大！34tip:logicalendingisappreciated!人與動(dòng)物和諧相處？大圓滿結(jié)局?35Step2理清思路兩“情”相悅：coherentinemotionlogicalinplot情感連貫情節(jié)合理符合邏輯符合常識回找伏筆：情感和情節(jié)角色調(diào)度：沖突和配合36Dobearsattackpeople?Theansweriscertainlypositive.SopeopleinasmallcityinColoradowereconcerned.Why?Lastweek,alargeblackbearattackedafamily’scoopandatethechickens.ItwasreportedbyalocalTVstation.Attheendofthenewsreport,apolicemanaskedlocalresidentstokeepwaste,petfoodandevenbirdseedinside,andtoreportanybearsightingsuntiltheanimalwasfound.Thepolicemanalsotoldpeopletoalwaysstayawayfromthebearwhentheysawit.Samisa12-year-oldboy.Earlierthisweek,hecametothatsmallcitytovisithisuncle’sfamilywithhismother.Hisuncle’sson,David,wasveryexcitedaboutthebearthathadappearedinhisneighbor’sbackyard.“Sam,thereisabearinourcity,”soonafterSamarrived,Davidtoldhim.Samwascuriousaboutbearsandhehadalwaysdreamedofwatchingone.“Really?”heaskedexcitedly.“Yes.ItwentintoMrsBrown’sbackyardlastweek.Itateallherchickens.ButithadrunawayandIdidn’tevenseeit,”saidDavid.Samlistenedwithhiseyeswideopen.“Woulditreturn?”heasked.“Veryprobably,”saidDavid,“itwouldreturnforfood.”Atlast,heaskedSam,“Doyouwanttoseethebear?”Samimmediatelynodded.Thenheasked,“Buthow?”37

“Wecanputsomefoodinthebackyard.Whenthebearseesit,hewillcomeinandeatit.Butweshouldbecareful.Thebearmayattackusifheseesus.Soweshouldnevermakeanynoise.”Samnoddedagain,stillinexcitement.Laterthatday,theadultsallwentout,leavingthetwoboysaloneathome.Soontheystartedtotakeaction.Theyputsomeleftoversfromlunchinthebackyard.Thentheywaitedbehindthewindowofthekitchenandwaitedcuriously.Butanhourpassedandtheydidn'tseeabear.Finally,theygotbored.Paragraph1:Justthen,theysawsomethingbigatthegateofthebackyard.Paragraph2:Whenthebearlookedup,hesawSam.

38beforethebearcame(Readingpart)afterthebearcame(Para1)afterthebearsawtheboys(Para2)bearateallofherchickenDavidandSamexcitedandeagertoseethebeartheirparentswentoutMrsBrownateallofherchickenpoliceaskedandwarnedmightnoticethebear

finallysawitsoexcitedmightbeattackedsofrightened

couldaskthepolicecouldcometotheirrescuecouldcometotheirrescue39tip:addupsomelogicalplotsifnecessary!atetheleafoverattack?caught?runaway?

Step3擬寫草稿怎樣讓記敘文生動(dòng)起來？動(dòng)作描寫3-5個(gè)表情或心理3-5個(gè)對話1-2個(gè)環(huán)境描寫1-2個(gè)話題激活詞匯：動(dòng)作：stepout,tighten,losebalance,shoot,apologize,forgive情感：excitement,curious,frightened,scared,fierce,ashamed環(huán)境：scenery40對話太多！分段太多！禁用涂改液！41Step4潤色成篇潤色包括動(dòng)作情感環(huán)境類的生動(dòng)描寫，豐富詞匯和語法句型的打磨升級等Tips:1.動(dòng)作，情感，環(huán)境類描寫日常積累。2.豐富詞匯和語法句型日常積累。（時(shí)態(tài)語態(tài)，定語從句，名詞性從句，狀語從句，非謂語動(dòng)詞，倒裝句式，強(qiáng)調(diào)句式，It形式主語句，虛擬語氣...）3.對話酌情使用，不要落入俗套。42

Justthen,theysawsomethingbigatthegateofthebackyard.

Uponseeingthebearcomingin,thetwoboys’eyestwinkledwithexcitement.Helookedintothebackyard.Obviously,hesawtheleftover.Hepushedopenthedoorandcamein.Helookedaround,andseeingnooneinthebackyard,hethenstartedenjoyingthefood.SocuriouswasSamthatheunconsciouslysteppedoutofthehouseinordertowatchthebearclosely.Itseemedasifthebearweresafeenoughtobeclosedto.連貫動(dòng)作二/非謂語做原因狀語情感一動(dòng)作一43動(dòng)作三/倒裝情感二/虛擬語氣

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