地震書(shū)面表達(dá)講評(píng)

課前準(zhǔn)備請(qǐng)拿出你的考卷(作文)、寫(xiě)作素材本,雙色筆Passioncomesfirst

激情第一!Ifyoucandreamit,youcandoit.

敢于夢(mèng)想，就能實(shí)現(xiàn)【學(xué)習(xí)目標(biāo)】1.激情投入，高效參與課堂，體驗(yàn)用英語(yǔ)表達(dá)的快樂(lè)。2.歸納總結(jié),提高寫(xiě)作能力.全力投入會(huì)使你與眾不同你是最優(yōu)秀的！你一定能做的更好！WritingWritingWritingWritingWritingWritingWriting1.內(nèi)容部分審題—1）細(xì)審文體確定時(shí)態(tài)

—2）編擬提綱

—3）列出要點(diǎn)2.語(yǔ)言部分—1）使用較復(fù)雜的語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)

2）使用高級(jí)詞匯替換普通詞匯3.組織結(jié)構(gòu)—使用連接詞語(yǔ)句連接寫(xiě)作指導(dǎo)與訓(xùn)練1976年7月28日我國(guó)唐山發(fā)生大地震，造成25萬(wàn)人死亡，2008年5月12日四川汶川發(fā)生大地震，造成近萬(wàn)人死亡，2010年4月14日青海玉樹(shù)發(fā)生大地震造成近兩千人死亡。書(shū)面表達(dá)：這些地震不僅造成人員傷亡，而且還毀壞橋梁建筑，供水供電中斷，大量人員無(wú)家可歸，為了預(yù)防地震，可采取下列措施：地球兩個(gè)板塊相連接的地方不要建房。把房屋建在巖石上，而不建在沙地上。把房屋建得盡可能牢固。注意：1.內(nèi)容應(yīng)包括所有以上要點(diǎn)。2.詞數(shù)：120左右。一：認(rèn)真審題：

1.體裁---記敘

2.時(shí)態(tài)---過(guò)去時(shí)，現(xiàn)在，

3.層次---3段導(dǎo)入：Earthquakeshappenfrequentlyrecently.開(kāi)頭方法:開(kāi)門(mén)見(jiàn)山、解釋和描述主題Theearthquakeisoneofthedisastersintheworld.二.遣詞造句:三.恰當(dāng)句式；連接詞It’simportant,necessary/helpfuldosthIt’sabetter/wise/effectivewaytodosthNotonly..butalso…;Insteadofcause…deathsandinjuries;make…h(huán)omeless,cutoff;takemeasuresreducetheloss/damage四：首尾照應(yīng)Ibelievewiththesemeasureswewill…onlyinthiswaycanwe…五.錦上添花Everyonecanmakeadifference.

要點(diǎn)不全34班陳冠佐(stuck)杜凱-白色涂改液潘路遙-書(shū)寫(xiě)也很差宿展豪徐紅劉璇璇(沒(méi)寫(xiě)完)所揮原,盛建杰;張悅—低級(jí)錯(cuò)誤太多典型錯(cuò)誤:2.occuer/happentosp3.inJuly28,19764.causingalotofpeopledied/lost

theirlife1.Therewasaearthquake

happenedin…TheearthquakehappenedinJuly28,1976caused….WeshouldbuiltthemonstonesinsteadofsandBuildhousesashardaspossibleTheearthquake(thatoccurredinTangshaninJuly28th,1976)causingmorethantwohundredandfiftythousanddeaths.Theearthquakecausedthousandsofpeopledeaths.OvertwothousandpeoplediedintheearthquakehappenedinYushu

in

April14th2010.Atlastweshouldbuildthehouseasstrongaspossible.改錯(cuò)(王俞心)佳句欣賞Theearthquakesdestroyedmanybuildingsandbridges.Theyalso

Hadtheelectricitycutoffandthecommunicationbrokendown.Victimssufferedalotfromthe

shortageoffoodandwater.(33班宋穎超34班張曉慎)Aterribleearthquakeoccurredin

Wenchuan

whichbelongstoSichuanProvinceItnotonlycausedmanydeathsandinjuriesbutalsodestroyedbridgesandbuildings.Andmanypeoplebecamehomeless.(33班鎖贈(zèng)伶34班王雪梅)Ibelieveifeveryonemakesacontributiontofightingagainsttheearthquake,wecansucceedinbeatingit(33班于堯)Facedwiththeearthquakes,wemusttakesomemeasures.(33班李思青)Theearthquakeisoneofthemostseriousdisastersintheworld.InChinaforexample,anearthquakeoncehitTangshanon28July,1976.Recently,theearthquakeoccurredmorefrequently…Sincetheearthquakesdogreatdamagetous,weshouldtakemeasuresto

reducetheloss.(33班曲姝潔;34班姜珊劉佳麗twoyearlater,..)

Althoughwecan’tpreventearthquakesfromoccurring,wecantakemeasurestoreducedamage…..ontheotherhand,peopleshouldbeeducatedwithcommonsensesabouthowtoprotectourselvesduringanearthquake.Onlyinthiswaycanwereducedamageasmuchaspossible.(33班趙浩)Allinall,earthquakeisn’tterrifying,ifwetakepropermeasures,wewillbeattheearthquakeabsolutely.let'sputitinaction.(34班陳曉男)Wecan’tstopearthquakestriking,butwecantrytoreducethedamage.(34班任彤彤)OnMay12,2008,Wenchuan,acityinSichuan,wasstrickenbyaheavyearthquakeandabout10,000peoplelosttheirlives.Right

inlastyear(on14,April,2010).(33班孫路明)(34班馮麗)Ithinkifweplacethestressonthehouse-buildingandlearnsomeusefulskills,wewillbesuretokeepsafeinanearthquake.(33班孫路明)Ibelievethateveryonecanmakeadifference.(34班沈琪)Aslongaswedothese,wecanreduceseriousdamagecausedbyearthquakes.(34班姜珊)Earthquakesappeartohaveincreasedrecently.Forexample,OnJuly28th,1976,anearthquakehitTangshan,causingabout250000deaths.OnMay12th,2008,Wenchuanwasstrickenbyaterribleearthquakewhichcausedthousandsofpeopletolosetheirlives…Facedwithsuchadisaster,whatshouldwedo…?(34班崔興超)Onlyinthiswaycanwetrytosufferlessfromearthquakes(34班任智慧;林子茹)AstrongearthquakestruckTangshanonJuly28,1976,causing250,000deaths.OnMay12,2008,anotherearthquakeoccurredinWenchuan,SichuanProvince,whichmadenearly10,000peoplelosetheirlives.范文April14,2010also

sawanearthquakeinYushu,QinghaiProvince,whichkillednearly2,000people.

Theseterribleearthquakesnotonly

causedmanydeathsandinjuries

butalso

madebridgesandbuildingsdestroyed,waterandelectricitysupplycutoff

andmanypeoplehomeless.Inorder

topreventtheearthquake,weshouldtakesomemeasures.Firstly,wemustn’tbuildhouseswheretwoplatesjoin.Secondly,buildingsshouldbeputuponrocksbutnotonsands.Lastly,housesthatarebuiltshouldbeasstrongaspossible,whichisveryimportant.

Aslongaswetakethesenecessarymeasures,wewillpreventsomanyhousesandbuildingsfrombeingdestroyedinthedisasterlikeearthqu