讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)之社會(huì)溫情 焦慮緊張篇課件【教學(xué)精研+高效課堂】 高三英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作專項(xiàng)

讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)社會(huì)溫情＋焦慮緊張篇1RReadforthecharactersIacommutertravelingtoworkonthetrainpassengersaprettygirlandherboyfriendayoungwomanandababyotherpassengerssittingnexttomeeveryonewasdoingtheirusualtimeReadforplotsandemotionalchangeseveryonewasdoingtheirusualpeacefulconfusedtenminuteslateranxious,worriednineo'clockam20minuteslaterthetrainstoppedsuddenlythetrainwastrappedinthetunnelbecauseofpowerfailureThehopelesswaitinginthedarknessdroveuscrazycrzayReadfortheconflictsconflictsarearising

thetrainsloweddownandthencametoastand-stillthetraindidn'tmovethepowerfailurehadfailednohopeofgettingtoworkontimethetrainwastrappedinthetunnelandwasgettinghotandstuffy,nocellphonesignalThehopelesswaitinginthedarknessdroveuscrazycare,help,responsibility

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Whattheycareiswhentheycangetoutofthetrouble.Asacommuterwhotraveledtoworkonthetraineveryday,Ithoughtitmydutytodosomething.Readforlanguage

人物和事物活動(dòng)場(chǎng)景的描寫(xiě)：開(kāi)心聊天的漂亮女孩和她的男友，年輕的媽媽，突然減速停車的地鐵心理活動(dòng)的描寫(xiě)：利用一般疑問(wèn)句和suppose的賓語(yǔ)從句，描寫(xiě)在地鐵停在隧道中不啟動(dòng)時(shí)，乘客們對(duì)地鐵的突然停運(yùn)的猜測(cè)，表現(xiàn)了乘客們的焦慮和煩躁。描寫(xiě)車廂的氛圍，和“我”的心理活動(dòng)，烘托乘客的焦躁，為續(xù)寫(xiě)埋下伏筆Readthe2givensentences推測(cè)續(xù)寫(xiě)情節(jié)Thehopelesswaitinginthedarknessdroveuscrazy.Howwasthesituationinthetrain?Whatdidthepassengersdo?Howcrazilydidtheyreact?想象人在悶熱黑暗的環(huán)境中的心情？會(huì)做什么？描寫(xiě)人物活動(dòng)的場(chǎng)景才能與原文銜接融洽添加細(xì)節(jié)描寫(xiě)“我”的所做、所說(shuō)、所感和其他乘客的所做所說(shuō)Asacommuter(上班族)whotraveledtoworkonthetraineveryday,Ithoughtitmydutytodosomething.WhatdidIsayanddotohelplessenothers'anxietyandworry?Howdidotherpassengersreact?

Whatwastheresultoftheincident?-------agoodending捕捉和對(duì)應(yīng)原文續(xù)寫(xiě)點(diǎn)特定細(xì)節(jié)和物品原文主題原文首段和結(jié)尾漂亮女孩和她的男友，年輕的媽媽和小寶寶在續(xù)寫(xiě)部分的人物活動(dòng)場(chǎng)景中應(yīng)“出鏡”如何減輕乘客們的焦慮是在續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段“我”應(yīng)解決的問(wèn)題之一沖突繼續(xù)升級(jí)，被困隧道、熱、悶、黑暗、手機(jī)無(wú)信號(hào)、無(wú)能為力.......，續(xù)寫(xiě)一段可寫(xiě)這些因素導(dǎo)致的人們的反應(yīng)-----crazycrzay的場(chǎng)景：人物的焦躁、憤怒、不耐煩、絕望,擔(dān)憂等anxiety,annoyance,anger,umpatience,hopelssness,worry平靜下來(lái)的場(chǎng)景：“我”作出努力后乘客們的場(chǎng)景、地鐵重新啟動(dòng)后乘客們的高興、如釋重負(fù)等活動(dòng)場(chǎng)景calmness,happiness，joy,relief添加人物活動(dòng)場(chǎng)景描寫(xiě)人物活動(dòng)的場(chǎng)景描寫(xiě)1.炎熱，沒(méi)有新鮮空氣使我們焦躁不安，滿腹牢騷。Heatandlackoffreshair________________andcomplaintsranthroughus.(無(wú)靈主語(yǔ)句）madeusrestless2.站在窗邊的人試圖把窗打開(kāi)，讓新鮮空氣進(jìn)來(lái)，但沒(méi)有成功。①Those__________________________attemptedtoopenthemtoletinfreshairbutinvain.(定語(yǔ)從句)②Those____________________________attemptedtoopenthemtoletinfreshairbutinvain.（分詞做定語(yǔ)）whostoodbythewindows

standingbythewindows3.漂亮女孩既惱火又焦慮，她對(duì)她的男朋友皺起了眉頭，指責(zé)他選擇了錯(cuò)誤的路線。①______________________________________________________________.Shefrownedatherboyfriend,andblamedhimforselectingthewrongroute.(無(wú)靈主語(yǔ)句+神態(tài)描寫(xiě)+語(yǔ)言描寫(xiě))②______________________________________________,theprettygirlfrownedatherboyfriend,blaminghimforselectingthewrongroute.（獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)+非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞做狀語(yǔ)）Annoyanceandanxietyswallowed/seized/sewptover/floodedovertheprettygirlAnnoyanceandanxietyswallowing/seizing/sweepingover/floodingoverher4.一些人不耐煩地跺腳，而另一些人則憤怒地捶打著墻。Some__________________whilesomeangrilypoundedonthewall.(動(dòng)作+副詞)5.沒(méi)想到，那個(gè)漂亮的女孩和她的男朋友一聽(tīng)到我唱就和我一起唱起來(lái)。____________,theprettygirlandherboyfriendjoinedmeimmediatelytheyheardme.（副詞做狀語(yǔ)）stampedimpatientlyUnexpectedly然后，越來(lái)越多的乘客跟著唱了起來(lái)。寶寶不哭了，聽(tīng)著，咯咯地笑起來(lái)。Then,moreandmorepassengerssangalong.Thebabystoppedcrying，listened,and_______.giggledagoodending①自然式結(jié)尾我們眉開(kāi)眼笑，燦爛的笑容照亮了整個(gè)車廂。Ourfacesbeamedand_________________________.②首尾呼應(yīng)式結(jié)尾每個(gè)人臉上都洋溢著歡樂(lè)。我知道我會(huì)永遠(yuǎn)記得這不同尋常的一天。Therewascheerineveryface.Iknewthiswouldbe___________________Iwouldalwaysremember.anunusualdayourbrightsmileslitupthetrain③場(chǎng)景+氛圍描寫(xiě)式結(jié)尾燈光閃爍著，火車慢慢地向下一站駛?cè)?。火車上彌漫著一種釋然而愉快的氣氛。Thelightflashedandthetrainmovedslowlyofftowardsthenextstation.___________________settledover