寫(xiě)出商務(wù)范兒公開(kāi)課市公開(kāi)課一等獎(jiǎng)省名師優(yōu)質(zhì)課賽課一等獎(jiǎng)?wù)n件

寫(xiě)出商務(wù)范兒

ByEricYouareamanagerinalargecompany.Youhavebeeninformedthatamemberofyourstaffoftenarriveslateforwork.Writehimamemoabouttheproblem:sayinghowoftenthememberofstaffarriveslatedescribingtheeffectonotherstaffsuggestingwhatthememberofstaffshoulddoaboutthesituationWrite40-50words.To:P.JonesFrom:ManagerDate:21NovemberSubject:LatenessHi,JonesNowadaysyouarriveslateforworkveryoften.Ifeelyoumayhaveparticularreasonsforit.Butifyoukeepgoingyourlateness,otherstaffintheofficemaybelatelikeyou.I’mworryingaboutit.Howaboutconsideringofbeingmorepunctual?Thanks!Thanksforyourletter.Igotit14thOct.I’vesentacopytocompHQalongwithamemoaboutyourfinancialsituation.I’vesetameetingfor3rdNovat11amtotalkaboutanotherbankloan.So,pleaseletusknowifyoucanmakeita.s.a.p.Canyoutellthedifferences?Thankyouforyourletterreceived15thOctober.acopyhasbeensenttothecompanyheadquartersinadditiontoamemorandumconcerningyourfinancialsituation.Ameetinghasbeenscheduledfor3rdNovemberat11:00amtodiscussyourrequestfor

afurtherbankloan.Therefore,pleaseinformusofyouravailabilityforthismeetingattheearliestopportunity.Youwillwriteanemailtoyourcustomertoapologizeforthelatedelivery.Thesentenceforyoutorevise:IamsosorrywhenIheardyourdeliverywaslate,butIknowitwillarriveonTuesday.Sorryagain.

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Mysincereapologiesforthedelayindelivery.Fortunately,IhavebeenreassuredthatthedeliverywillbearrivingnextTuesdaymorning.商務(wù)范兒？How？useappropriateopeningandclosingremarksformalorsemi-formal/neutralavoidrepetitiontryusemorepassivebedirectandon-point寫(xiě)什么像什么BEC寫(xiě)作題型分析由兩個(gè)寫(xiě)作任務(wù)組成，答題時(shí)需考慮信息點(diǎn)，寫(xiě)作目標(biāo)和目標(biāo)讀者答題時(shí)間45分鐘兩部分組成，PART1和

PART2，均為必答題PART1要求寫(xiě)一篇用于企業(yè)內(nèi)部交流短文PART2要求寫(xiě)一封商務(wù)信函，或一份商務(wù)匯報(bào)，或一份提議書(shū)PART1占寫(xiě)作總分1/3，PART2占寫(xiě)作總分2/3考綱支招

評(píng)分五個(gè)方面：ContentLanguageStructure&vocabularyOrganizationRegisterInformalWeneedtofindoutwhycustomersaren’tsatisfied.FormalInformalWehaven’timprovedourservice,socustomersarebecomingfewerandfewer.FormalInformalWiththetechnologygoingon,peoplegetmoreandmoremethodstocommunicatewithothers.FormalInformalWeneedtofindoutwhycustomersaren’tsatisfied.FormalThereisanurgentneedtoascertainthereasonsforcustomers’dissatisfaction.InformalWehaven’timprovedourservice,socustomersarebecomingfewerandfewer.FormalThefailuretoimproveourservicehasledtoafallinthenumberofourcustomers.InformalWiththetechnologygoingon,peoplegetmoreandmoremethodstocommunicatewithothers.FormalDuetothedevelopmentoftechnologyagreatnumberofcommunicationmethodsarenowavailable.Thecharacteristicsofformalwriting

名詞化趨勢(shì)

無(wú)靈主語(yǔ)被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)

VocabularyNounPhrasesWeoncecried,laughedanddisappointed.Thereweremomentsoftears,momentsoflaughter,andmomentsofdisappointment.注意:名詞化趨勢(shì)句子當(dāng)然還有動(dòng)詞,目標(biāo)是盡可能把表示句子中心意思那個(gè)詞匯用名詞表示.符合英文習(xí)慣.Thestafffeeldeeplyunhappythatmanagementdonotrecognizetheirefforts.Akeystaffcomplaintisthelackofrecognition.Thequalityoftheserviceisofthegreatestimportanceforus.ImpersonalLanguage

漢字寫(xiě)作中,習(xí)慣以人做主語(yǔ),而英文則相反,習(xí)慣以物做主格.Moreandmoreyoungstudentsstudiedfurtherinthepasttwodecades.Thepasttwodecadeswitnessedagrowingnumberofyoungstudentsforfurtherstudy.

Itisimportantthat....Itisclearthat...Itwouldbeadvisable....Thereisnobasisfor...ItisessentialthatactionistakenimmediatelyPassives因?yàn)槲移髽I(yè)和Mason&Co.合并，我企業(yè)名字改為MasonGolding.Thenameofourcompanywillbechangedto…Youareremindedthat…Iwasaskedtoorganizeaforeignlanguage…Iamwritingtoinformyouthatthenextprojectmeetingwillbepostponed.Greateffortsshouldbe