【曹軍喜】讀后續(xù)寫指導(dǎo)課

1、2021/3/91Welcome to Erics class!2021/3/92A storywhenwherewhowhathowwhyReading for Writing2021/3/93an old mana little boysell magazinesReading for Writing2021/3/94hardly ever came outnot say hello tosimply just glared atTip 1: By describing what a character does in detail instead of telling the reade

2、rs directly, you can show his personalities or feelings vividly.unfriendlyReading for Writing2021/3/95opened slowly, said impatientlyunwillingknocked on the doortried to sell magazinesstaredwithout a word uninterestedasked about the dog figurinesReading for Writing2021/3/96“Yes, I have many collecti

3、ons in my house. They are my family here and they are all I have.”Tip 2: By describing what a character says, you can picture his personalities or feelings vividly.lonelymy familyall I haveReading for Writing2021/3/97slowly, impatientlyunwillingknocked on the doortried to sell magazinesstaredwithout

4、 a word uninterestedasked about the dog figurinesmy familyall I haveinterestedtried again to sell magazinesclosed the door, No, goodbye impatientReading for Writing2021/3/98What would the boy do next?had an ideahad a little dog figurinedid not mean nearly as much to himgive the dog figurine to the o

5、ld manTip 3: The development of the story can be inferred from the given information.Reading for Writing2021/3/99Infer the development from the given sentencesPara. 1Para. 1The little boy headed back down to the old mans house.Para. 2Para. 2From that day on something changed inside the old man.Time:

6、 in one dayWhat?Place: at the old mans houseInferring the development2021/3/910Raise questions about the developmentTip 4: By raising questions on your own, you can produce more details of the development of the story.Para. 1Para. 1The little boy headed back down to the old mans house.Para. 2Para. 2

7、From that day on something changed inside the old man.Inferring the development2021/3/911Para. 1Para. 1The little boy headed back down to the old mans house.Q2: How would the old man react to the boys visit and offer? Q1: What would the little boy say and do?explained why he came againasked why the

8、boy came againfelt surprised and moved accepted the dog figurine gave the dog figurineInferring the development2021/3/912Para. 2Para. 2From that day on something changed inside the old man.Q1: What changed inside the old man?Q2: What would the boy do for the old man?Q3: How would the old man feel in

9、 the end?Inferring the development2021/3/913hardly ever came outnot say hello tosimply just glared atonly had dog figurines as his familyUnfriendly:Unfriendly:Lonely:Lonely:came outcommunicate withbecame his friend Not unfriendly:Not unfriendly:Not lonely:Not lonely:Q1: What change inside the old ma

10、n?Inferring the developmentQ2: What would the boy do for the old man?Q3: How would the old man feel in the end?often visited 2021/3/914Requirements for Writing第二節(jié)：讀后續(xù)寫（滿分第二節(jié)：讀后續(xù)寫（滿分25分）分） 閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。成一個完整的故事。注意：注意： 所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；左右； 應(yīng)使用應(yīng)使用5個以上短文中標(biāo)有

11、下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；個以上短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語； 續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；1. 續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。2021/3/915Choose the underlined key wordsmagazines, neighbors, the door, the old man, the little boy, quota, dog figurines, collections, lonely soul, real live dogTip 5: Choose the k

12、ey words covering the most important information, such as the main character(s) and the main object(s).Requirements for Writing2021/3/916Tip 1: _ you can show his personalities or feelings vividly.Tip 2: _ you can picture his personalities or feelings vividly.Tips for Writing By describing what a ch

13、aracter does in detail instead of telling the readers directly, By describing what a character says, 2021/3/917Assessment Criteria for WritingWriting Items （條目）（條目）Levels （檔次）（檔次）Cohesion（與所給短文和段落開頭銜接融合程度）（與所給短文和段落開頭銜接融合程度） Use of underlined words（下劃線詞匯使用情況）（下劃線詞匯使用情況） Rich Content（內(nèi)容的豐富性）（內(nèi)容的豐富性） A

14、ccuracy of language（語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯使用的準(zhǔn)確性）（語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯使用的準(zhǔn)確性） Variety of language（語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯使用的豐富性）（語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯使用的豐富性） Coherence（上下文以及語句間的連貫性）（上下文以及語句間的連貫性） Content: cohesive (well connected), rich, Language: accurate, rich, coherent, more than 5 underlined key words reasonable, logical2021/3/918Continuing the storyth

15、e story Para. 1Para. 1The little boy headed back down to the old mans house.explained why he came againgave the dog figurineasked why the boy came againfelt surprised and moved accepted the dog figurine Para. 2Para. 2From that day on something changed inside the old man.came out, communicatedbecame

16、friendsfelt no longer lonelyoften visited 2021/3/919Assessing students workstudents workTip 1: By describing what a character does in detail instead of telling the readers directly, you can show his personalities or feelings vividly.Tip 2: By describing what a character says, you can picture his per

17、sonalities or feelings vividly.Content: cohesive (well connected), rich, reasonable, logicalLanguage: accurate, rich, coherent, more than 5 underlined key words 2021/3/920Para. 1:Para. 1: The boy headed back down to the old mans house. He knocked on the door again and this time the old man came righ

18、t to the door. “Boy, I thought I told you no magazines!” The old man stared at him angrily. “I know that, sir. I just wanted to bring you a gift.” The little boy handed him the dog figurine. Looking at the boy, the old man was too surprised to say anything and simply smiled in tears, as no one had e

19、ver shown him so much kindness.Appreciating a possible versiona possible version2021/3/921Para. 2: Para. 2: From that day on something changed inside the old man. He started coming out of the house and talking to his neighbors. Soon, he and the boy became friends. The boy visited the old man frequen

20、tly and brought his real live dog to his house once in a while. He even invited the old man to join his family for Christmas dinner. With the boys company, the old man was no longer a lonely soul.Appreciating a possible versiona possible version2021/3/922Para. 1:Para. 1: The boy headed back down to

21、the old mans house. He knocked on the door again and this time the old man came right to the door. “Boy, I thought I told you no magazines!” The old man stared at him angrily. “I know that, sir. I just wanted to bring you a gift.” The little boy handed him the dog figurine. Looking at the boy, the o

22、ld man was too surprised to say anything and simply smiled in tears, as no one had ever shown him so much kindness.Appreciating a possible versiona possible version2021/3/923Para. 2: Para. 2: From that day on something changed inside the old man. He started coming out of the house and talking to his

23、 neighbors. Soon, he and the boy became friends. The boy visited the old man frequently and brought his real live dog to his house once in a while. He even invited the old man to join his family for Christmas dinner. With the boys company, the old man was no longer a lonely soul.Appreciating a possi

24、ble versiona possible version2021/3/924Para. 1:Para. 1: The boy headed back down to the old mans house. He knocked on the door again and this time the old man came right to the door. “Boy, I thought I told you no magazines!” The old man stared at him angrily. “I know that, sir. I just wanted to brin

25、g you a gift.” The little boy handed him the dog figurine. Looking at the boy, the old man was too surprised to say anything and simply smiled in tears, as no one had ever shown him so much kindness.Appreciating a possible versiona possible version2021/3/925Para. 2: Para. 2: From that day on somethi

26、ng changed inside the old man. He started coming out of the house and talking to his neighbors. Soon, he and the boy became friends. The boy visited the old man frequently and brought his real live dog to his house once in a while. He even invited the old man to join his family for Christmas dinner.

27、 With the boys company, the old man was no longer a lonely soul.Appreciating a possible versiona possible version2021/3/926Para. 1:Para. 1: The boy headed back down to the old mans house. He knocked on the door again and this time the old man came right to the door. “Boy, I thought I told you no mag

28、azines!” The old man stared at him angrily. “I know that, sir. I just wanted to bring you a gift.” The little boy handed him the dog figurine. Looking at the boy, the old man was too surprised to say anything and simply smiled in tears, as no one had ever shown him so much kindness.Appreciating a possible versiona possible versionstared athandedsimplysmiled in tearsLooking attoo to2021/3/927Para. 2: Para. 2: From that day on something changed inside the old man. He started coming out of the house and talking to his neighbors. Soon, he and the bo