2016高考英語寫作復(fù)習(xí)公開.ppt

基礎(chǔ)寫作訓(xùn)練 平均分 峰值 約15分 17 19分 最吃虧學(xué)生群 中等左右學(xué)生 書面表達(dá)是提分最大的潛力股 5分 9分 23分 高考滿分作文I mverypleasedtotellyouthechangesinmylifesinceourhomeworkhasreduced Beforethat learningduringthedaywasverysimple Havingclassanddoinghomeworkwastheonlythingweshoulddo Intheevening wealsohadalotofhomeworktodo Wecouldnotgotobeduntil11 30 Nevertheless sincereducingthelearningload mylifehasbecomemuchmoreinteresting Ioftenvisitmuseumsandcomputerroomsanddrawpicturesinmysparetime Intheevening IalsohavetimetowatchTVandreadnewspapers Inolongerstayuplate onthecontrary Igotobedatabout10pm Inshort Iamquitesatisfiedwithmylifenow 高考英語作文第五檔 很好 要求 21 25分 1 完全完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù) 覆蓋所有內(nèi)容要點(diǎn) 2 應(yīng)用了較多的語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯 3 有效地使用了語句間的連接成分 使全文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊 4 語法結(jié)構(gòu)或詞匯方面有些許錯(cuò)誤 但為盡力使用較復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu)或較高級(jí)詞匯所致 具備較強(qiáng)的語言運(yùn)用能力 5句話強(qiáng)化訓(xùn)練 Shooting originatedasameansofsurvival developedintoasportonlyinthelate19thcentury Thesport whichfirstappearedin1896 waseversuspendedduringthe1904and1928Games ItwasonlyfouryearsbeforethesportreturnedtotheOlympic However notuntil1968werewomenfirstallowedtocompeteintheOlympicshooting Withthesportbecomingmoreandmorepopular ithasgrownsteadilyfromjust3shootingeventsatthe1896OlympicGamesto17today 經(jīng)典案例 廣東08高考 句子表達(dá)有何亮點(diǎn) 寫作中復(fù)合句常見的錯(cuò)誤 1 只有從句 沒有主句 Thekeeperwhohadlivedinthelighttowerforalongtime sohecouldkeepcalminthestorm Thekeeper whohadlivedinthelighttowerforalongtime couldkeepcalminthestorm 2 以逗號(hào)代替句號(hào) 把兩個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單句當(dāng)成一個(gè)句子 Theoldmanthoughtofhisson tearscamedownfromhisface Thehallisdifferentfromallotherbuildings itismadeofglass 3 刻意使用從句 表達(dá)不自然 ThereareoverfiftystudentsinthisschoolwhoaregoingtotakepartinthesportsmeetnextSunday OverfiftystudentsinthisschoolaregoingtotakepartinthesportsmeetnextSunday Thehallisdifferentfromallotherbuildings whichismadeofglass Theoldmanthoughtofhisson withtearscomingdownfromhisface 4 過多地使用并列句組合信息 Weweredrivingoutintothecountry andwesawourEnglishteacherridinginabus andthebuswascrowded Itisabeautifulday andthesunisshiningandabreezeisblowing Itisabeautifuldaywiththesunshiningandabreezeblowing Asweweredrivingoutintothecountry wesawourEnglishteacherridinginacrowdedbus MyEnglishLearning ItissixyearssinceIbegantolearnEnglish Withthehelpofmyteachersandclassmates IhavemadeprogressinmyEnglish NowI mdoingwellbothinwritingandreadinginEnglish ButIstillfindithardtolearnEnglish suchassomedifficultidioms Difficultasitis Ihavemadeupmymindtomasterthisusefullanguagebymyhardwork 請(qǐng)看范例 從上述例子同學(xué)們可以明白什么樣的句子叫 規(guī)范的英語句子 其實(shí) 規(guī)范的英語句子 就是我們經(jīng)常講的三種句子 A Simplesentence Hearingthenews hewashappy B CompoundsentenceA HegavemeabookbutIforgottobringitbackhome C CompoundsentenceB Whatheisdoinghasnothingtodowithme Whenheheardthenews hewashappy Hereare3waystomakesentences I 巧妙運(yùn)用短語 寫出規(guī)范的簡(jiǎn)單句 1 借助名詞短語做同位語 如 李立 男 19歲 1986年生 籍貫 廣東 LiLi aboyof19 wasborninGuangdongin1986 2 借助介詞短語做定語 如 李飛 男 10歲 棕色短發(fā) 身穿白色茄克 LiFeiisaten year oldboywithshortbrownhairandawhitejacket 如 有了Tom的幫助 我們很快就找到了他們的村子 WiththehelpofTom wesoonfoundtheirvillage 4 借助非謂語動(dòng)詞短語做定語或狀語 如 他們站在大樹下 等待著總統(tǒng)的到來 Theyarestandingunderthebigtree waitingforthepresident 3 借助介詞短語做狀語 II 巧用連接詞 寫出規(guī)范的并列句 如 他給我錢 我不要 IwasjustwalkingdownthestreetcornerwhenIsawyou 如 我剛到拐角處 就見到你啦 HegavemealotmoneybutIrefused III 用好從句和引導(dǎo)詞 寫出規(guī)范的復(fù)合句 1 名詞性從句 如 老師生氣 原因 王力遲到 ThatWangLicamelatetoschoolmadetheteacherveryangry 2 定語從句 如 中國 地處亞洲東部 特點(diǎn) 地大物博 人口眾多 資源豐富 China whichliesintheeastofAsia isagreatcountrywithalargeareaandpopulationaswellasrichnaturalresources 3 狀語從句 如 雷鋒還活在我們心中 我深受感動(dòng) Iwasdeeplymovedbythis becauseIknowLeiFengisstilllivinginourhearts 學(xué)會(huì)運(yùn)用復(fù)合句和非謂語動(dòng)詞 Kateisanewstudent Shecomesfromanorthernprovince Shespeaksadialect Wefindithardtounderstandherdialect Kate anewstudentfromanorthernprovince speaksadialectwhichwefindhardtounderstand 用一句話表達(dá) 不是人人都能學(xué)好英語 小學(xué)生同時(shí)學(xué)漢語和英語反而會(huì)影響漢語學(xué)習(xí) 學(xué)會(huì)運(yùn)用復(fù)合句和非謂語動(dòng)詞 第一步 拆分成幾個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單句 不是人人都能學(xué)好英語 小學(xué)生同時(shí)學(xué)漢語和英語 這會(huì)影響漢語學(xué)習(xí) 第二步 分別翻譯這幾個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單句 NoteveryoneisgoodatlearningEnglish ChildrenfromprimaryschoollearnEnglishandChineseatthesametime ThiswillaffecttheirChinesestudy NoteveryoneisgoodatlearningEnglish ChildrenfromprimaryschoolstarttolearnEnglishandChineseatthesametime ThiswillaffecttheirChinesestudy 第三步 合并句子 ThatchildrenfromprimaryschoolstarttolearnEnglishandChineseatthesametimewillaffecttheirChinesestudy becausenoteveryoneisgoodatlearningEnglish NoteveryoneisgoodatlearningEnglish ChildrenfromprimaryschoolstarttolearnEnglishandChineseatthesametime ThiswillaffecttheirChinesestudy 第三步 合并句子 IfchildrenfromprimaryschoolstarttolearnEnglishandChineseatthesametime thiswillaffecttheirChinesestudy 方法2 becausenoteveryoneisgoodatlearningEnglish 情景說明 通知 新光中學(xué)高三年級(jí)學(xué)生將于9月9日去體檢 體檢地點(diǎn) 第一人民醫(yī)院體檢時(shí)間 9月9日 星期六注意 1 7 45在醫(yī)院門口集合 可以騎車或步行前往 2 體檢前空腹 3 在醫(yī)院要保持安靜 聽從醫(yī)生和護(hù)士的安排 實(shí)戰(zhàn)練習(xí) Notice ThestudentsinSeniorThreeofXinguangMiddleSchoolwillgotohaveaphysicalexaminationintheFirstPeople sHospitalonSaturday 9thSept We llmeetatthehospitalgateat7 45 Youmayeitherwalkthereorgotherebybike Wearenotallowedtoeatordrinkanythingbeforetheexamination Pleasekeepquietandlistentothedoctorsandnurseswhenyouarethere 學(xué)會(huì)使用復(fù)合句和非謂語動(dòng)詞 你來試試 參考詞匯 錯(cuò)別字 wrongly writtencharacters網(wǎng)絡(luò)語言 weblanguage 要求 1 用兩句話表達(dá)表格內(nèi)容2 兩句話要有連貫性 第一句 兩個(gè)信息點(diǎn) 1 學(xué)生作文中出現(xiàn)很多錯(cuò)別字2 他們 上網(wǎng)聊天時(shí)經(jīng)常使用網(wǎng)絡(luò)語言 Therearemanywrongly writtencharactersinstudents compositions Thereasonwhytherearemanywrongly writtencharactersinstudents compositionisthattheyoftenuseweblanguageswhenchattingonline 合并句子 Theyoftenuseweblanguageswhenchattingonline 1 Theyhavesomuchhomeworktodoeverydaythattheyfailtomemorizethenewcharacters 第二句 1 每天有很多作業(yè)做2 沒有記住生字 Theyhavemuchhomeworktodoeveryday 2 Withsomuchhomeworktodo theyfailtomemorizethenewcharacters 3 Becausetheyhavesomuchhomeworktodo theyfailtomemorizethenewcharacters 合并句子 Theyfailtomemorizethenewcharacters 連接兩句話 Thereasonwhytherearemanywrongly writtencharactersinstudents compositionisthattheyoftenuseweblanguageswhenchattingonline Moreover theyhavesomuchhomeworktodoeverydaythattheyfailtomemorizethenewcharacters Exchangeanddiscussyourpartner scomposition thengiveeachotherascoreaccordingtothefollowingcriteria Pairwork 1 一個(gè)乞丐在路邊討錢 askformoney 李先生匆忙趕路上班 沒有注意到那個(gè)乞丐 2 乞丐很生氣 伸出 stickout 拐杖 差點(diǎn)把李先生絆倒了 tripover 3 李先生意識(shí)到他是個(gè)殘疾人 便在口袋里找錢給他 4 李先生拿出了一張百元鈔票 a100 yuannote 突然一陣風(fēng)把鈔票吹到了空中 5 乞丐迅速跳起來去追那張鈔票 李先生站在那里 驚得合不攏嘴 實(shí)戰(zhàn)演練 以下是你根據(jù)圖畫內(nèi)容和題目要求 經(jīng)過觀察 整理排列成的五個(gè)信息塊 請(qǐng)分別用一個(gè)句子表達(dá)出來 并組成一篇連貫性的短文 Abeggar AbeggarOneday Mr Lihurriedonhiswaytowork Abeggarontheroadsidewasaskingformoney Mr Lipaidnoattentiononhim Thebeggargotangryandstuckouthiswalkingstick ItalmosttrippedMr Liover Whenherealizingthebeggarwasadisabledperson Mr Libegantosearchforsomemoneyinhispockettogivehim Hetookouta100 yuannote butitwassuddenlyblownintotheairbythewind Seeingthis thebeggarjumpedquicklytorunafterthenote ItmadeMr Lisosurprisedthathestoodtherewithhismouthopen AbeggarOneday whenMr Lihurriedonhiswaytowork abeggarontheroadsidewasaskingformoney butMr Lipaidnoattentiononhim Asaresult thebeggargotangryandstuckouthiswalkingstick whichalmosttrippedMr Liover Realizingthebeggarwasadisabledperson Mr Libegantosearchforsomemoneyinhispockettogivehim Hetookouta100 yuannote whichwassuddenlyblownintotheairbythewind Seeingthis thebeggarjumpedquicklytorunafterthenote whichmadeMr Lisosurprisedthathestoodtherewithhismouthopen 審題列要點(diǎn)依要點(diǎn) 擬草綱 組織成句 構(gòu)篇章 擴(kuò)句成文 檢查潤色書寫 寫作解題步驟 如何提高作文檔次 1 字跡工整 2 避免低級(jí)錯(cuò)誤 避免語法和拼寫的低級(jí)錯(cuò)誤 避免被扣印象分 多樣化句式 1 用itis was that 強(qiáng)調(diào)句式 2 用作狀語的介詞短語開頭的完全倒裝句或用以onlyinthisway等開頭的部分倒裝句 3 用with的復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu) with 賓語 賓補(bǔ) 作狀語 4 用非謂語動(dòng)詞簡(jiǎn)化狀語從句或并列結(jié)構(gòu) 5 用what引導(dǎo)的名詞性從句 6 用獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu) 7 恰當(dāng)運(yùn)用感嘆句 被動(dòng)句等 8 適當(dāng)使用插入語 如tobehonest Iguess Ithink personally等 9 盡量用短語代替單詞來表達(dá)同樣的意思 1 表示平行 對(duì)等或選擇關(guān)系and both and aswellas togetherwith neither nor also notonly butalso either or aswell 2 表示轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系but yet however nevertheless 然而 inspiteof although otherwise while afterall 3 表示對(duì)比關(guān)系onthecontrary insteadof ononehand ontheotherhand justlike 4 表示因果關(guān)系so for therefore asaresult of because owingto dueto thanksto 三 學(xué)會(huì)使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞 5 表示時(shí)