45分鐘寫作限時訓(xùn)練3講義及答案

寫作限時訓(xùn)練21講義(一)Onepossibleversion：Thatsummer,theotherteamsenjoyedtheirvacations.However,wemeteverydayandpracticed.Iwouldfirstmentontheirperformancethedaybefore,especiallyontheimprovementsthey'vemade.Hearingmypositivefeedbacks,theywereoverjoyed.Then,wespenthoursandhoursinthescorchingsun,passingandkickingthefootball.Thoughsoakingwet,nooneplained.Gradually,notonlydidtheyimprovetheiraccuracyandspeed,buttheysharpenedtheirskillsandpromotedtheircooperation.Daysandmonthsoftrainingwitnessedtheirprogress.Sixmonthslater,footballseasonstarted.Theboysbecameunsettled,soIcontinuedtopushandencouragethem.Wewonourfirstgameandoursecond,andcontinuedtoimprove.Finally,wefacedthenumberoneteam,whichwasbeyondmywildestdreams.Ifeltthatitwouldbeavictoryforusevenifwelostthegame.Butthatwasn'twhathappened.Myboysbeatthem,givingmeoneofthegreatestthrillsofmylife！Theexperiencetaughtmeamostimportantlessoninlife:winnersaremadebyourpositiveattitudeandourefforts.【讀后續(xù)寫變式訓(xùn)練】Nooneisbornawinner.Peoplemakethemselvesintowinnersbytheirown16.Ilearnedthislessonfroma(n)17manyyearsago.Itookthehead18jobataschoolinBaxley,Georgia.Itwasasmallschoolwithaweakfootballprogram.Itwasatraditionfortheschool’soldteamtoplayagainstthe19teamattheendofspringpractice.Theoldteamhadnocoach,andtheydidn’tevenpracticeto20thegame.Beingthecoachofthenewteam,IwasexcitedbecauseIknewweweregoingtowin,buttomydisappointmentweweredefeated.Icouldn’t21Ihadgotintosuchasituation.Thinkinghardaboutit,Icameto22thatmyteammightnotbethenumberoneteaminGeorgia,buttheywere23me.Ihadtochangemy24abouttheirabilityandpotential.IstarteddoinganythingIcouldtohelpthembuildalittle25.Mostimportant,Ibegantotreatthemlike26.Thatsummer,Whentheotherteamsenjoyedtheir27,wemeteverydayand28passingandkickingthefootball.Sixmonthsaftersufferingour29onthespringpracticefield,wewonourfirstgameandoursecond,andcontinuedto30.Finally,wefacedthenumberoneteaminthestate.Ifeltthatitwouldbea31forusevenifwelostthegame.Butthatwasn’twhathappened.MyboysbeatthebestteaminGeorgia,givingmeoneofthegreatest32ofmylife!FromtheexperienceIlearntalotabouthowtheattitudeoftheleadercan33themembersofateam.Insteadofseeingmyboysaslosers,Ipushedand34them.Ihelpedthemtoseethemselves35,andtheybuiltthemselvesintowinners.Winnersaremade,butborn.16.A.luck B.tests C.efforts D.nature17.A.experiment B.experience C.visit D.show18.A.operating B.editing C.consulting D.coaching19.A.successful B.excellent C.strong D.new20.A.cheerfor B.preparefor C.helpwith D.finishwith21.A.believe B.agree C.describe D.regret22.A.realize B.claim C.permit D.demand23.A.reactingto B.lookingfor C.dependingon D.caringabout24.A.decision B.attitude C.conclusion D.intention25.A.pride B.culture C.fortune D.relationship26.A.leaders B.partners C.winners D.learners27.A.rewards B.vacations C.health D.honor28.A.risked B.missed C.considered D.practiced29.A.defeat B.decline C.accident D.mistake30.A.relax B.improve C.expand D.defend31.A.shame B.burden C.victory D.favor32.A.chances B.thrills C.concerns D.offers33.A.surprise B.serve C.interest D.affect34.A.encouraged B.observed C.protected D.impressed35.A.honestly B.individually C.calmly D.differently【寫作思路】閱讀下面的材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Nooneisbornawinner.Peoplemakethemselvesintowinnersbytheirownefforts.Thewinnerofapetitionwasn’tborntowinthatpetition.He/Shemadeaconsciousdecisiontodosoandputintheefforttomakeithappen.Ilearnedthislessonfromanexperiencemanyyearsago.ItooktheheadcoachingjobataschoolinBaxley,Georgia.Itwasasmallschoolwithaweakfootballprogram.Theschooltookpartintheleaguematcheseveryyear,ofcourse.However,itneverendedwell.Weweremoreoftheaudience,watchingandcheeringinsteadofsweatingoutinthefields.Fortunately,theschoolheldthetraditionthattheschool’soldteamwastoplayagainstthenewteamattheendofspringpractice.Forlackofresources,theoldteamhadnocoach,andtheydidn'tevenpracticetoprepareforthegame.Iwasassignedasthecoachofthenewteam,whichwaswhyIwasexcited.Iwasconvincedthatweweregoingtowin,buttomydisappointmentweweredefeated.Icouldn'tbelieveIhadgotintosuchasituation.Thinkinghardaboutit,ItriedtofigureoutthereasonandwhatIshoulddonext.Itdidn'ttakelongbeforeIcametorealizethatmyteamwasdependingonme.Withoutproperguidanceorpreviousexperience,myteamwasatalosswhattodo.IhadtochangemyattitudesothatIcouldbringoutthebestinthemabouttheirabilityandpotential.Iwouldletmyactiondothetalking.First,IstarteddoinganythingIcouldtohelpthembuildalittlepride.Icouldseetheirspiritslifted,withtheirheadheldhighwithgreatconfidence.Mostimportantly,Ibegantotreatthemlikewinners.Onlywhentheyregardedthemselvesaswinnerscouldtheywillinglyinvesttimeandenergy.一審——審要素When&WhereIlearnedthislessonfromanexperiencemanyyearsago.→Fortunately,theschoolheldthetraditionthattheschool'soldteamwastoplayagainstthenewteamattheendofspringpractice.WhoI,theoldandnewfootballteam.WhatIwasassignedasthecoachofthenewteam,whichwaswhyIwasexcited.→Iwasconvincedthatweweregoingtowin,buttomydisappointmentweweredefeated.→IhadtochangemyattitudesothatIcouldbringoutthebestinthemabouttheirabilityandpotential.→First,IstarteddoinganythingIcouldtohelpthembuildalittlepride.WhyWithoutproperguidanceorpreviousexperience,myteamwasatalosswhattodo.HowExcited→disappointment→ataloss→confidence→willingly二定——定主題：正能量原則ThemeWinnersaremadebyourpositiveattitudeandourefforts.三推測——兩步段首句定發(fā)展：三銜接原則（一）標(biāo)出段首句的關(guān)鍵詞第一段：Thatsummer,theotherteamsenjoyedtheirvacations.第二段：Sixmonthslater,footballseasonstarted.（二）基于三銜接原則：利用復(fù)現(xiàn)、代詞指代及過渡銜接詞三大方法做好銜接。①根據(jù)第一段的段首句可知，暑假期間，對手球隊在享受假期。第一段應(yīng)描寫：作為戰(zhàn)敗方，身為教練的“我”帶領(lǐng)隊員們進(jìn)行訓(xùn)練。在訓(xùn)練過程中，“我”不斷地鼓勵他們，讓他們對自己充滿信心，將自己視為獲勝者。②根據(jù)第二段的段首句可知，新的賽季已經(jīng)開始。第二段應(yīng)描寫：“我”繼續(xù)鼓勵隊員們，他們打敗了一支又一支隊伍，最終與最厲害的隊伍爭奪冠軍。③由此可推測第一段的結(jié)局：雖然訓(xùn)練過程疲憊不堪，但隨著時間的流逝，隊員們?nèi)〉昧诉M(jìn)步。第二段的結(jié)局：新賽季比賽的結(jié)果——“我們”成功了。通過這次比賽“我”認(rèn)識到，獲勝者是積極的態(tài)度和努力造就的。四構(gòu)思——每段三個微情節(jié)原則第一段①“我”作為教練，帶領(lǐng)隊員們進(jìn)行訓(xùn)練；②“我”的做法：鼓勵隊員們；③雖然訓(xùn)練過程疲憊不堪，但隊員們?nèi)〉昧诉M(jìn)步★動作鏈：練習(xí)，訓(xùn)練v.___________→對……作出評論___________________→得出結(jié)論，終止v.___________→抱怨v.___________★心理描寫：積極的adj.___________；欣喜若狂的adj.___________第二段①隊員們感到不安，“我”繼續(xù)進(jìn)行鼓勵；②隊員們一路前進(jìn)，直面最厲害的隊伍；③隊員們打敗了他們，讓“我”無比激動★動作鏈：鼓勵v.___________→面對v.___________→打敗v.___________★心理描寫：不安的adj.___________；興奮，激動n.___________五遣詞造句——連詞成句，連句成文（1）高級詞匯及語塊①________________n.表現(xiàn)②________________n.反饋③________________adj.欣喜若狂的④________________v.得出結(jié)論，終止⑤________________v.宣布⑥scorchingadj.熾熱的⑦_(dá)_______________v.抱怨⑧________________n.合作⑨________________v.見證⑩________________adj.不安的?________________n.勝利?________________對……作出評論?soakingwet濕透的?________________做夢都想不到（2）v.ing作狀語我總是在講話結(jié)束時與大家擊掌，宣布他們就是冠軍。Ialwaysconcludedmyspeechwithfirmhighfiveswitheveryone,_____________________________________________________.（3）notonly置于句首引起部分倒裝逐漸地，他們不僅提高了準(zhǔn)確性和速度，而且精進(jìn)了技能，促進(jìn)了合作。Gradually,____________________________________________________________________,buttheysharpenedtheirskillsandpromotedtheircooperation.（4）adj.作狀語+比喻句男孩們變得不安，害怕失敗會像最可怕的噩夢一樣卷土重來。Theboysbecameunsettled,__________thefailurewouldeback_______________________.（5）發(fā)人深省的結(jié)尾這段經(jīng)歷教會我人生中最重要的一課：我們的積極態(tài)度和努力造就了獲勝者。Theexperience_______________________________________________________inlife:_____________________________________________________.六成文——謄寫清晰，字跡工整再次回讀原文，并積累以下高級詞匯、語塊、亮點(diǎn)句型及高級結(jié)構(gòu)1._________________v. 分配；布置2._________________v. 打敗3._________________n. 指導(dǎo)4._________________ 付出努力5._________________ 聯(lián)賽6._________________t 揮汗如雨7._________________ 讓某人失望的是8._________________ 弄清楚；搞明白9._________________ 茫然；不知所措14.v.ing作狀語我們更像是觀眾，在觀看和歡呼，而不是在球場上揮汗如雨。Weweremoreoftheaudience,____________________insteadof_________________inthefields.15.which引導(dǎo)非限制性定語從句我被任命為新球隊的教練，這就是我興奮的原因。Iwasassignedasthecoachofthenewteam,_________________________________________.16.sothat引導(dǎo)結(jié)果狀語從句我必須改變我的態(tài)度，這樣我才能把他們的能力和潛力激發(fā)出來。Ihadtochangemyattitude_________________________________________________________.17.with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)我可以看到他們精神振奮、昂首挺胸、非常自信。Icouldseetheirspiritslifted,___________________________________________________.18.“only+狀語”置于句首引起部分倒裝只有當(dāng)他們認(rèn)為自己是獲勝者時，他們才能心甘情愿地投入時間和精力。Onlywhentheyregardedthemselvesaswinners__________________________________.（二）參考范文1AnEducationalOutingLastweek,ourschoolorganizedaneducationaloutingwiththepurposeofbroadeningstudents'perspectives,cultivatingtheirabilitiesandincreasingtheirculturalliteracy.Duringtheactivity,wehikedthroughcountryside,visitedsomevillages,andadmiredthebreathtakingscenery.Wealsoparticipatedinoutdoorgamesandteambuildingactivities,whichhelpeduslearntoworktogetherandimproveourmunicationskills.Overall,theoutingwasavaluableexperience,wherewegainedabetterunderstandingoftheworldaroundus.What'smore,wewereabletodevelopasenseofresponsibilitytowardstheenvironment.參考范文2Toletstudentslearnandexploreinanaturalenvironmentandenhancetheirteamworkandproblemsolvingskills,ourschoolorganizedaneducationaloutingforstudentslastFriday.Theactivityincludedhikinginthenearbymountains,observingwildlifeandplants,andparticipatinginteambuildinggames.Thestudentsalsohadachancetosetuptentsandcooktheirownmeals,whichallowedthemtoexperiencelivingintheoutdoors.Theeducationaloutingwasagreatsuccess,providingamemorableandvaluableexperienceforallparticipants.Teacherswereimpressedbythestudents’enthusiasmandwillingnesstolearn.應(yīng)用文寫作是關(guān)于一次遠(yuǎn)足研學(xué)的活動報道。學(xué)生首先要明白活動報道的寫作范式是什么？什么是遠(yuǎn)足研學(xué)活動?遠(yuǎn)足研學(xué)有哪些形式，其目的是什么？具體的內(nèi)容有哪些？產(chǎn)生了什么影響？（一）活動報道的寫作范式活動報道的寫作模式內(nèi)容上一般包括四個方面，分別是導(dǎo)語、事件描述、活動評價和結(jié)尾。1、導(dǎo)語：介紹活動的背景和目的，引起讀者的興趣和注意?？梢院唵胃爬ɑ顒拥闹黝}和內(nèi)容，提出活動的意義和價值。2、事件描述：詳細(xì)描述活動的過程和細(xì)節(jié)，包括時間、地點(diǎn)、參與人員、活動內(nèi)容和亮點(diǎn)等，盡可能地還原活動現(xiàn)場的氛圍和感受。可以采用時間順序或者空間布局的方式進(jìn)行描述，使讀者能夠清晰地理解和感受活動的過程和意義。3、活動評價：對活動進(jìn)行評價和總結(jié)，包括活動的成功點(diǎn)和不足之處，以及對參與人員的影響和意義。可以從多個角度進(jìn)行評價，如教育教學(xué)、心理健康、環(huán)境保護(hù)等，讓讀者能夠了解活動的全貌和價值。4、結(jié)尾：對活動進(jìn)行總結(jié)和感悟，同時也可以展望未來的發(fā)展和改進(jìn)?？梢院粲踝x者加入環(huán)保行動，關(guān)注自然和保護(hù)環(huán)境的重要性。綜上可知，活動報道的寫作仍然是三段式：開頭（導(dǎo)語部分）+正文（事件描述）+結(jié)尾（活動評價+感悟）（二）遠(yuǎn)足研學(xué)活動（1）遠(yuǎn)足研學(xué)活動的目