上海2018-2022中考真題分類訓(xùn)練之作文-書面表達(dá)-教師版

上海2018-2022中考真題分類訓(xùn)練之作文(書面表達(dá))作文訓(xùn)練（共5篇，每篇20分，總計(jì)100分）1.(2018年上海中考真題)Writeatleast60wordsonthetopic"Myprogress(以“進(jìn)步了”為題,寫一信不少于60個(gè)詞的短文,標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號不占格)你在生活或?qū)W習(xí)中一定取得過不少進(jìn)步,比如生活枝能的獲得、學(xué)習(xí)方法的掌握、良好習(xí)慣的養(yǎng)成。請選取其中一個(gè)方面,結(jié)合自身經(jīng)歷,談一談你是如何取得這一進(jìn)步的。（注意:短文中不得出現(xiàn)任何人名、校名及其它相關(guān)信息,否則不予評分。)Thefollowingisforreferenceonly(以下表達(dá)僅供參考)usedtodo/be…trymybesttodo…makeprogressin(doing)…答案：

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Iusedtowritebadly,espaciallyinEnglish.Itaffectedmyperformanceeverycomposition.IfeltannoyedbecauseIdidn’tknowhowtodoit.Severalmonthesago,ourEnglishteacherremindedustopayattentiontoourEnglishWriting.Hepreparedacopybookforeachstudent.Wewereaskedtopracticeeveryday.Itriedmybesttocopywell.Theteacherencouragedmeandkeptontellingmewhattodonext.WiththehelpofmyEnglishteacher,Imadeprogressinwriting.Nopainsnogains.IwillstudyhardtoachievegreaterprogressandIbelieveIwilldobetterandbetter.解析：本篇寫作要求用過去時(shí)態(tài)，敘述自己一次進(jìn)步的過程。故怎樣取得進(jìn)步是描述的重點(diǎn)，以前怎樣，以后怎樣也需要簡單敘述?？键c(diǎn)分析：寫人記事型記敘文。2.(2019年上海中考真題)Writeatleast60wordsaccordingtothegiveninformation（根據(jù)以下材料，寫一篇不少于60個(gè)詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號不占格）以下是幾位同學(xué)在以貌取人、盲從朋友、看待謊言、抉擇人生等方面的感悟．請從中選擇你比較有感觸的一條，可結(jié)合自己的經(jīng)歷，談?wù)勀愕捏w會．?Don'tjudgepeoplebytheirlooks．Someonecouldbebad-lookingandstillbenice．-Katie?Whenyourfriendsdosomethingstupid，youdon'thavetofollow．-Jackie?Don'ttellateacheryourdogateyourhomework，especiallyifyoudon'thaveadog．-Alex?Lifeislikea"chooseyourownending"book-youcantakewhateveradventuresyouwant．-Sally（注意：1．先將你選擇的一條感悟抄寫在答題紙帶有引號的橫線上．2．短文中不得出現(xiàn)考生姓名、校名及其它相關(guān)信息，否則不予評分）【答案】Don'tJudgepeoplebytheirlooks．Asanoldsayinggoes，don′tjudgepeoplebytheirlooks．Ididn'trecognizethetruemeaningofituntillastyear．(開篇點(diǎn)明題意)Inmyneighborhoodcameamanwithascaryface．ThefirstseveraltimesIcameacrosshim，Ialwaysranwayquickly，withhandscoveringmyeyes．Later，Iknewfrommyparentsthathemadealotofefforttokeepourneighborhoodcleanasavolunteer（高分句型一），whichprovidesabetterlivingenvironmentforus．RealizingthemistakeImade，Iwenttosaysorrytohim（高分句型二）.AndIreallyappreciatedhimforhelpingmelearnthataperson'sinternalbeautyisalwaysthemostvaluablepartinsteadofhis

appearance．（從具體的事例中去說明不能以貌取人的道理）【解析】高分句型一：Iknewfrommyparentsthathemadealotofefforttokeepourneighborhoodcleanasavolunteer．

makealotofefforttodosth作出很多努力做某事．這句話意為：我從我父母那里知道他為了保持我們社區(qū)干凈當(dāng)志愿者作出了很多努力．高分句型二：Iwenttosaysorrytohim．saysorrytosb對某人說抱歉．這句話意為：我過去跟他說抱歉．在解答寫作這類試題時(shí)，要根據(jù)短文的中心思想考慮如何開頭、展開和結(jié)尾，設(shè)想幾個(gè)承上啟下的連詞，將主要句型、關(guān)鍵詞語草草記下，形成提綱，寫時(shí)切忌結(jié)構(gòu)分散，廢話連篇，嚴(yán)重跑題．3.(2020年上海中考真題)Writeatleast60wordsonthegivensituation（根據(jù)以下情況填寫一篇不少于60個(gè)詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號不占格）雕刻家Willard的成長經(jīng)歷告訴我們：人無完人，但每個(gè)人都有自己的獨(dú)特之處，在Willard的主頁上有一個(gè)留言區(qū)，每位瀏覽者都可以寫下自己的故事和感想．請以"Everyonecanbespecial（天生我才）"為題，在留言區(qū)分享你的經(jīng)歷或見聞．（注意：1．短文中不得出現(xiàn)考生姓名、校名等個(gè)人信息，否則不予評分．2．照抄閱讀語篇不得分．）_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】例文Everyonecanbespecial.Nooneisperfect，buteveryoneisuniqueintheirownway．Isawafilmyesterday．Themaincharacterofthefilmisanunusualboy．Whenhewasborn，hegrewfourtimesasfastasanormalperson，whichmeansthatwhenheis10，helooks40．Theotherchildrenalwayslaughsathim，soheisverysadandfeelslonely．Oneday，hismothersaidgentlytohimthatnoonewasperfect，buteveryonewasuniqueintheirownway．Fromthenon，heandhisclassmatesbecamegoodfriends．Everyonecanbespecialaslongasyoudon'tgiveupyourself．【解析】【詳解】1.題干解讀：該題屬于話題寫作。寫作時(shí)要注意文章的要求分享經(jīng)歷或見聞。2.例文點(diǎn)評：例文采用三段式，第一大段人無完人，但是又是特別的；第二大段陳述自己的經(jīng)歷；第三大段呼吁大家不要放棄成為特別的人，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，段落分明。用第三人稱來進(jìn)行寫作分析；時(shí)態(tài)采用一般過去時(shí)為主。3.高分亮點(diǎn)：短語：laughat,aslongas,beborn,giveup.句型：when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語從句，that引導(dǎo)的賓語從句，定語從句?！军c(diǎn)睛】能夠根據(jù)提示進(jìn)行書面表達(dá)，能夠圍繞主題準(zhǔn)確使用一定的語法、詞匯、短語和句型等，清楚連貫地表達(dá)自己的思想，進(jìn)而完成寫作任務(wù)．4.(2021年上海中考真題)Writeatleast60wordsaccordingtothegivensituation(根據(jù)以下情境寫一篇不少于60個(gè)詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號不占格)你的學(xué)校正在為以下活動課招募教學(xué)小助手(teachingassistant)：球類(BallGames)演講(Speech)器樂(InstrumentalMusic)戲劇(Drama)手工(Handicrafts)攝影(Photography)假設(shè)你是李華，請給教導(dǎo)處張老師寫封信，結(jié)合你的興趣和特長，說明你想擔(dān)任哪一門活動課的小助手及理由。注意：1.信中不得出現(xiàn)姓名、校名等個(gè)人信息，否則不予評分。2.照抄閱讀語篇不得分。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】寫作指導(dǎo)：要求寫一封信。書信的格式應(yīng)該正確：有對收信人的稱呼，正文，結(jié)語，發(fā)信人簽名。正文應(yīng)該主要回答兩個(gè)問題：1.結(jié)合六個(gè)興趣班的主題，闡明你的興趣和特長。2.闡明你想擔(dān)任哪一個(gè)活動課的助手，以及理由是什么。寫作時(shí)學(xué)生可以結(jié)合自己擅長的領(lǐng)域去撰寫。例文：DearMr.Zhang,Iamwritingtoyoutoapplyfortheteachingassistantofourinstrumentalmusiclesson.ThereasonwhyIaminterestedinthisjobisthatIlovemusicandIhavegotthelevel-10certificatesofbothpianoandguitar.Besides,musicisawaytodeepenourunderstandingoftheworldaswellasawaytorelaxourselves.Ihopemorestudentswillfinditsbeautythroughthiscourse,whichiscertainlymygoal.BeingtheteachingassistantisexactlywhatIamgoodatandwhatIdesire.Ireallyhopeyoucangivemethisopportunity.Sincerely,LiHua5.(2022年上海中考真題)Writeatleast60wordsaccordingtothegivensituation（根據(jù)以下情境寫一篇不少于

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個(gè)詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號不占格）你校將增設(shè)一間學(xué)生活動室（studentactivityroom），現(xiàn)有以下六種關(guān)于活動室用途的設(shè)想：讀者之家（Readingcorner）

勞技工坊（Miniworkshop）

藝體天地（Artsandsportscentre）義賣集市（Charitymarket）

科創(chuàng)小屋（High-techlab）

心靈驛站（Heart-to-heartroom）學(xué)校正通過校報(bào)了解學(xué)生的意向。假設(shè)你是李華，請給校報(bào)張老師寫封郵件，表明你最喜歡的一種設(shè)想，并說明理由。（注意：1.

郵件中不得出現(xiàn)姓名、校名等個(gè)人信息，否則不予評分。2

.照抄閱讀語篇不得分。）______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】例文Dea