2-09-續(xù)寫(xiě)段落的8種首句接話(huà)技巧

2023年新高考英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)提分技能2.09續(xù)寫(xiě)段落的8種首句接話(huà)技巧背景背景回顧1如何寫(xiě)好讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)在高考中博取閱卷老師的眼球獲得夢(mèng)寐以求的高分？如何讓學(xué)生的作品在高考中脫穎而出獲得高分？這是很多老師和學(xué)生一直在不懈努力的課題。那么，讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)的開(kāi)頭如何寫(xiě)呢？可以使用哪些寫(xiě)作技能和手法？我們知道，一個(gè)好的故事開(kāi)頭就好比是一堂成功的課的導(dǎo)入，能夠迅速抓住學(xué)生和老師們的興趣，并且愿意聽(tīng)下去，跟著授課老師的思路走。一個(gè)好的故事開(kāi)頭就好比是一個(gè)帶著香味十足的誘餌，誘使讀者上鉤并且饒有趣味地看完。而一個(gè)拙劣的故事開(kāi)頭，定會(huì)讓讀者大倒胃口，懨懨欲睡。“wellbegunishalfdone！”可見(jiàn)，寫(xiě)好一個(gè)好故事的好開(kāi)頭是多么的重要。那么，在時(shí)間緊迫的考場(chǎng)上如何寫(xiě)出靚麗的開(kāi)頭呢？我們可以從語(yǔ)法手段和寫(xiě)作涉及的內(nèi)容來(lái)探索。方法策略方法策略2續(xù)寫(xiě)段落的8種首句接話(huà)技巧1.用副詞顯現(xiàn)做出動(dòng)作反應(yīng)時(shí)的時(shí)間特征等例如：(2016.10浙江卷)Para1：Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Immediately,anabsolutedarknessruledtheforest.【分析】用時(shí)間時(shí)間副詞承接所給首句中的“itgettingdarkagain”，同時(shí)銜接后文的環(huán)境描寫(xiě)“thedarknessruledtheforest”。副詞銜接自然、順暢。2.用形容詞（短語(yǔ)）凸顯人物的情感情緒例如：（1）(2016.10浙江卷)Para1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Desperateandhopeless,Janekneltdown,tearsstreamingdownherface.【分析】用形容詞短語(yǔ)“Desperateandhopeless”凸顯了人物的情緒狀態(tài)，與后面的動(dòng)作“kneltdown”一起再現(xiàn)了情境中的人物的精神狀態(tài)。（2）(2016.10浙江卷)Para2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Weakasshewas,shestruggledtoherfeet,continuingsearchingforassistance.【分析】用“狀態(tài)形容詞+as/though引導(dǎo)的倒裝句”結(jié)構(gòu)體現(xiàn)了人物早上起來(lái)后的精神狀態(tài)。（3）(2018.06浙江卷)Para1:Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.AfraidthatImighthurtthelovelysmallcreature,Iautomaticallyletoutacrytostopmyhorse.【分析】用“情緒形容詞+從句”結(jié)構(gòu)闡釋了人物見(jiàn)到兔子后的心理反應(yīng)。（4）(2018.06浙江卷)Para2:Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.Exhaustedandhungry,Iwonderedifwecouldfindourwayback.【分析】用并列的表示心理狀態(tài)的形容詞，體現(xiàn)了人物心力交瘁的狀態(tài)。3.用分詞（短語(yǔ)）體現(xiàn)人物的心理變化等例如：（1）(2016.10浙江卷)Para1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Feelingdisappointed,Janehadtostayaloneforanothernight.【分析】用“現(xiàn)在分詞+情緒形容詞”結(jié)構(gòu)體現(xiàn)了人物失望的心理狀態(tài)。（2）(2016.10浙江卷)Para2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Feelingrefreshed,shecontinuedtowalkalongthestreamtofindthewayout.【分析】用“現(xiàn)在分詞+狀態(tài)形容詞”結(jié)構(gòu)傳遞了人物早上醒來(lái)后的精神狀態(tài)。4.用直接引語(yǔ)增強(qiáng)情境效果例如：(2017.06浙江卷)Para1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim."Getintothecar."PaulshoutedatMac.【分析】用含有祈使句的直接引語(yǔ)與首句提示中的“abruptlystopped”形成呼應(yīng)，進(jìn)一步烘托了緊張的情境。5.添加背景描寫(xiě)以烘托場(chǎng)景例如：(2017.11浙江卷)Para2:Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.Ilookedoutofthecarwindow,windingrivers,loftymountains,sunnybeachesanddeepvalleysholdingmeentirelyintheirfascination.【分析】用“視覺(jué)+環(huán)境描寫(xiě)+擬人修辭”結(jié)構(gòu)與首句提示語(yǔ)中的“l(fā)otsofgreatsights”遙相呼應(yīng)，再現(xiàn)了美麗風(fēng)景對(duì)視覺(jué)的沖擊效果。6.引入新動(dòng)作創(chuàng)造新的情境例如：(2017.11浙江卷)Para1:Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.Dadexchangedaglancewithme.WhynotcamptosatisfyMom?【分析】用“動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)+問(wèn)句銜接”結(jié)構(gòu)承接首句提示語(yǔ)創(chuàng)造了一個(gè)新的情境，即“露營(yíng)”。7.借助聲音效果增強(qiáng)描寫(xiě)功效例如：BOOM,CRASH!Thewindwashowlingoutsideofmyhouse.Wewerehavingaterriblethunderstorm.Iwasveryscared.【分析】用“howling”這一聲效進(jìn)一步拓展了首句所設(shè)定的情境效果。8.用疑問(wèn)句引出新的話(huà)題或?qū)κ录男碌目捶ɡ纾篧hydoestroublealwaysfollowmearound?DoIhavea"kickme"signonmybackorsomething?【分析】用一般疑問(wèn)句承接首句的特殊疑問(wèn)句，進(jìn)一步凸顯了作者對(duì)“trouble”的看法。實(shí)踐強(qiáng)化實(shí)踐強(qiáng)化31．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Iwastenthesummermydadhelpedmebuymyfirstten-speedbicyclefromasecond-handstore.Iputup$60ofmygrasscuttingandsnowshoveling(鏟)money,andmydadputuptheotherhalf.Iwouldpayhimbackininstallments(分期付款)overthenextsixmonths.Althoughitwasabitoutofstyle,itwasmytickettotheadultworld.Ispentthatsummerandautumnriding.Iwasabletoridetoeverycorneroftown.However,mysisterLiz,aprisonerofherfive-speedbicycle,neverhadachancetokeepup.JustbeforetheChristmasdeadlinetopaymydadback,wewerehitwithseveralsnowstorms.Thisallowedmetoshovelenoughdrivewaystopayoffmydebt.Iwasnowofficiallyabikeowner;itwasafeelingunlikeanyother.Whilemymomanddadwerefantasticparents,theyalwayspassedoffgloves,sneakers,andshirtsas“presents”.ThencamethatfatefulChristmasmorning,myfathergavemeausedportablerecordplayer.Iwasexcited.However,myexcitementwasshort-livedaftermydadtookmysistertothegarage.There,onthesteps,stoodabrandnewten-speedbicycle.Ididn’thearherscreamsofjoy-allIcouldhearwasthenoisyengineofthelawnmower,theendlessscraping(刮擦聲)ofthemetalsnowshovelonconcrete.I’dgonethroughfartoomanyhoursofhardworkformyusedbikewhileLizgothershinnynewmachinelessthanaweeklater.“Let’sgoforaride,Rob!”Lizsang,mydadholdingthebikeuprightasshegotontheshiningleatherseat.“Toosnowytoride,”Irefused,pushingtherecordplayerfartherawayfromme.注意：1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右：2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Iseethed(生悶氣)fortherestoftheday._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Reflectingonmydad’swords,Ifiguredoutwhathemeant._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【參考范文】Iseethed(生悶氣)fortherestoftheday.

Ilockedmyselfinmybedroomandavoidedtalkingwithmyfamily.Noticingmylowspirits,mydadpulledmeasideandasked,“Everythingokay?”Actually,itwasthelastthingIwantedtotalkabout.Withalltheangeranddisappointmentexplodinginmyheart,Ifinallycried,“It’snotfair.Iworkedsohardformybike,andit’snotevennew.HowcouldLizgetabrandnewbikewithoutdoinganythingforit?”Hearingmywords,mydadpattedmyarmgentlyandsmiled.“Wegaveherthebikesothatshecouldridewithyou.Actually,it’sagiftforyou.”Reflectingonmydad’swords,Ifiguredoutwhathemeant.Afterthesnowmelted,IpushedmybikeoutonceagainbutthistimeIinvitedLiztoridewithme.Wereallyspentawonderfuldayonbike.IhadneverimagineditwouldbesoexcitingandjoyfulwithherridingbesidenowthatLizcouldkeepup.Fromthenon,werodeallovertowntogethereveryday.GraduallyIrealizedthatwealmostdideverythingtogether!LizandIbecametruefriends.ThatbrandnewbikewasnotagiftforLiz—itwasagiftforme.Myfatherhadgivenmethegiftofmysister’scompany,whichI’vetreasuredeverydaysince.【寫(xiě)作指導(dǎo)】本文以人物為線(xiàn)索展開(kāi)，主要講述作者通過(guò)半年辛苦的勞動(dòng)掙到了一輛二手自行車(chē)，而他的妹妹卻只用了不到一周的勞動(dòng)就得到了一輛新的自行車(chē)，這讓作者感到很不公平。1.段落續(xù)寫(xiě)：①根據(jù)第一段首句內(nèi)容“那天剩下的時(shí)間我一直在生悶氣?！笨芍谝欢慰擅鑼?xiě)作者生悶氣之后父親對(duì)他的開(kāi)導(dǎo)和解釋。②根據(jù)第二段首句內(nèi)容“反思父親的話(huà)之后，我明白了他的意思。”可知，第二段可描寫(xiě)作者認(rèn)真思考了父親的話(huà)之后的做法。2.續(xù)寫(xiě)線(xiàn)索：生悶氣——父親開(kāi)導(dǎo)——理解父親的話(huà)——和妹妹一起騎車(chē)——感謝妹妹的陪伴3.詞匯激活行為類(lèi)①注意到：notice/see②爆發(fā)：explode/erupt情感類(lèi)①令人興奮的：exciting/thrilling②高興的：joyful/happy【典型句式】【句式1】Actually,itwasthelastthingIwantedtotalkabout.（由省略連詞that引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句）【句式2】Wegaveherthebikesothatshecouldridewithyou.（由sothat引導(dǎo)的目的狀語(yǔ)從句）【句式3】Afterthesnowmelted,IpushedmybikeoutonceagainbutthistimeIinvitedLiztoridewithme.（由After引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句）【句式4】IhadneverimagineditwouldbesoexcitingandjoyfulwithherridingbesidenowthatLizcouldkeepup.（由省略連詞that引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句）【句式5】GraduallyIrealizedthatwealmostdideverythingtogether!（由that引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句）【句式6】Myfatherhadgivenmethegiftofmysister’scompany,whichI’vetreasuredeverydaysince.（由which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句）2．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。AsIsatonthebuswaitingtoarriveatschool,thesunshining,Ijustsattherefullofexcitementreadytoenjoythefirstdayofspring.Atlast,thebusstoppedandIstartedmyday.ThewholedayIwaswaitingforonething,noonbreak.Asthedaypassedby,Iheardthebellrangandeveryonerushedoutofthedoor.Ihurriedandatelunchjusttogetoutside.AssoonasIwasout,myclosefriend,Rileycalledmeovertoplaybasketball.Weallstartedplayingandtimeflewbyasweheardthetimekeeperyell,“10moreminutes.”Fromthatpointon,thegamespedup.Scoreafterscore,thecompetitionprocesswasmoreintense.Ipassedittomyteammate,Austin,andhedisheditbackasIpulledupashot.Ifeltasiftheworldaroundmewerebarelymoving,andallIconcentratedonwastheballgoingtothehoop(籃筐).NotknowingIwaspushedbackhard,Ihittheground.Ahugepainenteredmyleftankle.Iwantedtoscream,butIdidn’t,hearingthepeoplearoundmeshoutforhelp.IjustlaythereasRileycameovertopickmeupandAustinfetchedawheelchairfromtheschoolclinic.Bothofthemhelpedmesitonthewheelchair.ItseemedlikethewholeschoolcircledaroundmeasIwasbeingpushedaway.ThemomentweenteredtheclinicwhereIalwaysfeltnervous,Ididn’tthinkmyanklehurtasbadlyasitdidjustnow,soIsaid,“I’mokay.”Thentheyhadtosendmebacktoclasswithoutanytreatment.TherestofthedayIfeltmyankleswelling(腫)upandIthoughtofhowstupidIwastosaythatmyankledidn’thurtintheclinic.“Ishouldhavegonehome.”IthoughttomyselfasIwasthrownthroughthisterriblepain.Afterschool,Iworriedhowtogobackhome.注意：1．續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2．請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。JustthenIfoundRileycomeinwithanicepackinhishand.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Aswewentout,weweresurprisedtofindAustinholdingsomemedicinaloil.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【參考范文】JustthenIfoundRileycomeinwithanicepackinhishand.Fromhislook,Icouldeasilyreadhisconcern,whichinstantlybroughttearstomyeyes.Heaskedifmyankleswelled,hisvoiceobviouslyfullofcareandanxiety.Inoddedhelplessly,eyesautomaticallysettlingonmyachingankle.Handingmetheicepack,hetoldmeitcouldhelprelievethepainandreduceswellingattheearlystage.SomovedwasIthatIextendedmyheartfeltgratitudetohim.Hejustsmiled,sayingthatweweregoodfriendsandofferingtosendmehome.Aswewentout,weweresurprisedtofindAustinholdingsomemedicinaloil.“IusuallyusethiskindofoilwhenIgethurtanditdoeswork.Youcanhaveatry.”hesaidwithsincerity.Allofasudden,IfeltIwasthehappiestpersonintheworld.Ihuggedmyfriendstightly,joyfultearsrollinginmyeyes.Blessedwithsuchfriends,IfeltIhadsomuchtobegratefulfor.Jokingaboutmybasketballskill,theysentmehome.【寫(xiě)作指導(dǎo)】本文以人物為線(xiàn)索展開(kāi)，講述了作者在中午吃完午飯后走出去，好朋友Riley叫作者過(guò)去打籃球，比賽很激烈，作者在比賽中被推倒，左腳踝一陣劇痛，Riley過(guò)來(lái)扶作者，Austin從學(xué)校診所拿了一輛輪椅，把作者推入了診室，作者認(rèn)為自己沒(méi)事，后來(lái)腳腫了，作者擔(dān)心自己該怎么回家。1.段落續(xù)寫(xiě)：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“就在這時(shí)，我發(fā)現(xiàn)Riley手里拿著一個(gè)冰袋走了進(jìn)來(lái)?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫(xiě)Riley對(duì)作者的關(guān)心和幫助。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“當(dāng)我們出門(mén)時(shí)，我們驚訝地發(fā)現(xiàn)Austin手里拿著一些藥用油?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫(xiě)Austin給作者藥用油以及作者的感想。2.續(xù)寫(xiě)線(xiàn)索：關(guān)心地詢(xún)問(wèn)——給冰袋——給藥用油——感想3.詞匯激活行為類(lèi)①詢(xún)問(wèn)：ask/inquire②遞：handsb.sth./passsth.tosb.③擁抱：hugsb./embracesb.情緒類(lèi)①感動(dòng)：moved/touched②感激：begrateful/bethankful【典型句式】[句式1]Fromhislook,Icouldeasilyreadhisconcern,whichinstantlybroughttearstomyeyes.(由關(guān)系代詞which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句)[句式2]SomovedwasIthatIextendedmyheartfeltgratitudetohim.(部分倒裝句)3．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整短文。Tinawasseventeenyearsoldandalwaysworeabrightsmile.Thismaynotseemthatunusualexceptthatshesufferedfromaconditionthatlefthermusclesstiffand,forthemostpart,unmanageable.Becauseshehadtroublespeaking,itwasthisbrightsmilethatreflectedhertruepersonality—agreatkid.Tinausedawalkermostofthetimetohelpherthroughthecrowdedschoolhallways.Alotoftimespeopledidn’tspeaktoher.Maybeitwasbecauseshelookeddifferentandtherestofthestudentsdidn’tknowhowtoapproachher.Tinausuallybroketheicewithpeopleshemetinthehallswithabig“Hi.”O(jiān)neday,theassignmentwastomemorizethreestanzas(詩(shī)節(jié))ofthepoem“

Don’tQuit.”IonlymadetheassignmentworthtenpointssinceIfiguredmostofmystudentswouldn’tdoitanyway.WhenIwasinschoolandateacherassignedaten-pointhomeworkassignment,Iwouldprobablyhaveblownitoffmyself.SoIwasn’texpectingmuchfromtoday’steenagerseither.Tinawasintheclass,andInoticedalookonherfacethatwasdifferentfromthenormalbrightsmile.Thelookwasoneofworry.“Don’tworry,Tina,”Ithoughttomyself,“it’sonlytenpoints.”ThedaytheassignmentcameduearrivedandasIwentthroughmyroster(花名冊(cè))myexpectationsweremet,asonebyoneeachstudentfailedtorecitethepoem.“Sorry,Mr.Krause,”wasthestandardreply.It’sonlyworthtenpointsanyway...right?“Finally,infrustrationandhalfkidding,Ideclaredthatthenextpersonwhodidn’trecitethepoemperfectlyhadtodroponthefloorandgivemetenpush-ups(俯臥撐).注意：1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.請(qǐng)按如下格式作答。Tomysurprise,Tinawasthenext.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Whenshefinished,astudentasked”Tina,whydidyoudothat?It’sonlyworthtenpoints!"________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【參考范文】Tomysurprise,Tinawasthenext.Sherose