讀后續(xù)寫-Richard廢棄公路邊救女孩故事+講義 高二上學期12月月考英語試題

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Richardwasworkingaloneonanabandonedhighwaywhenhenoticedakid’sbikeontheroadside.Ashewentforward,heheardalittlegirl’sweakcry.“Help…I’mstuck…Help!”Richardrushedtowardthevoicefromtheheartofthewoods.“Don’tgiveup!I’mcoming!”Heranscreamingafternoticingalittlegirlandherdogholdingontoalogintheriver.Thecurrentwaswashingawayeverythingonitscourse,andthegirlwassoluckybecausethedogwasstuckonsomethingunderthesurface.Butthatwouldn’tholdonforlongasthecurrentgrewfasterandstronger.Richardwasrunningoutoftime.Hisonlyintentionwastosomehowpullthetwoouttotheshorebeforetheywerewashedtowardtheedgeofthewaterfall.“Help!”Thegirl’svoicemadeRichardshake.Justthen,hismindactedfast.“Holdon…I’llbeback.”Momentslater,Richardreturnedwitharopetiedaroundhiswaist,andheknewitmightbehisonlyhopetosavethegirlandherdog.Hedivedintotheriverandswamtowardthem.Tohisshock,thecurrentwasevenstrongerthanexpected,andsincethewaterwasmuddy,hecouldn’tseeclearly.Buthekeptgoing.Thegirlwasextremelyfrightenedbecausethewaterfallwasjustafewmetersawayfromher.“Trustme!Justgivemeyourhand,”hetoldthegirl.Thegirldidn’tknowhowtoswim.ShethrewherhandsandlegsintothewaterandstruggledtowardRichard,grabbinghishand.“Holdmetight!”Richardusedallhisstrengthandpulledthelogtowardhim.Hegotholdoftheloginonehandandswamtowardtheshore.“Thankyousomuch!”Thegirlcriedasshefinallyfellontheshore.Richardbreathedheavilyandwasgladhehadsavedthemintime.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Afterawhile,Richardgentlyliftedupthegirl._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________“Gooddog!”saidRichard._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________文章大意：Richard在廢棄公路工作時，發(fā)現(xiàn)路邊一輛小孩的自行車，進而聽到林中傳來小女孩呼救聲。循聲趕至河邊，見小女孩與她的狗緊抓河中圓木，湍急水流隨時可能將她們沖向瀑布。情況危急，Richard迅速找來繩子系在腰間，不顧渾濁河水與強勁水流，奮力游向她們，最終成功救起小女孩。小女孩上岸后連連道謝，此時Richard已疲憊不堪但慶幸及時救人。整個故事展現(xiàn)Richard的勇敢無畏與善良熱心，凸顯在危急時刻人性的光輝。伏筆及續(xù)寫中的回應(yīng)：伏筆：“Richardwasworkingaloneonanabandonedhighway”，暗示環(huán)境偏僻，后續(xù)救援困難重重，難以及時求助他人。回應(yīng)：續(xù)寫中Richard只能依靠自己的力量與智慧展開救援，獨自面對湍急水流，突顯其果敢。伏筆：“noticedakid’sbikeontheroadside”，預(yù)示附近有孩子遭遇危險，為小女孩出現(xiàn)做鋪墊。回應(yīng)：續(xù)寫里小女孩被救上岸后，可圍繞自行車詢問她出行緣由，進一步豐富故事細節(jié)。伏筆：“thedogwasstuckonsomethingunderthesurface”，暗示狗的處境危險，也為后續(xù)救狗情節(jié)埋下伏筆?；貞?yīng)：續(xù)寫時著重描寫Richard再次入水救狗的艱難過程，與前文呼應(yīng)，展現(xiàn)他的善良，不放棄任何生命。伏筆：“thewaterfallwasjustafewmetersaway”，渲染緊張氛圍，強調(diào)救援緊迫性?；貞?yīng)：續(xù)寫提及小女孩上岸后仍心有余悸，回憶靠近瀑布的恐懼，側(cè)面反映當時危險程度，襯托Richard英勇。伏筆：“Richardbreathedheavily”，體現(xiàn)救援耗費體力，暗示后續(xù)行動受限?；貞?yīng)：續(xù)寫即便疲憊，Richard依舊堅持照顧小女孩、救狗并聯(lián)系救援，展現(xiàn)其堅韌，升華人物形象。續(xù)寫要點：第一段：情感線：突出關(guān)心與呵護，Richard對小女孩展現(xiàn)溫柔一面，安撫她受驚情緒，讓讀者感受溫暖。故事線：描述Richard查看小女孩身體狀況，詢問家庭信息，試圖聯(lián)系其家人，同時留意周圍環(huán)境，確保暫無其他危險靠近，如觀察河水水位是否上漲等。例如：Afterawhile,Richardgentlyliftedupthegirl.Shewasshiveringuncontrollably,herfacepaleasasheet.Richard’sheartachedseeingherlikethis.Hecarefullyinspectedherforanysignsofseriousinjury,allthewhilemurmuringsoftwordsofcomfort.“Don’tbescared,sweetheart.We’llgetyouhomesafe.”Then,hestartedaskingaboutherfamily,hopingtoreachthemquickly.Ashedidso,hekeptaneyeontheriver,justincasethewaterlevelroseagain.第二段：情感線：表達贊揚與欣慰，對狗的英勇行為給予肯定，也為成功救援感到欣慰，傳遞正能量。故事線：講述Richard救起狗后，狗與小女孩親昵互動，他聯(lián)系相關(guān)部門告知情況，等待救援期間，回想整個過程，為自己勇敢行動自豪，也感慨生命脆弱與珍貴。例如：“Gooddog!”saidRichard.Hewadedbackintothewater,hisbodyachingwithfatiguebuthisspiritunbroken.Afterrescuingthedog,itboundedstraighttothegirl,lickingherfaceasiftosayitwasallokaynow.Richardsmiledandpulledouthisphonetocallforhelp.Ashewaited,hewatchedthetwo,hismindfilledwiththoughts.Hewasproudofwhathehaddone,knowinghehadsavedtwopreciouslives.Itwasareminderthatinthefaceofdanger,alittlecouragecouldgoalongway.情感線：從發(fā)現(xiàn)小女孩呼救時的急切，救援過程中的緊張專注，到救上岸后的溫柔關(guān)懷、對狗的贊揚欣慰，情感豐富且有層次，緊緊抓住讀者內(nèi)心，展現(xiàn)人性美好。主旨升華句：Inthefaceofperil,everyactofkindnessisabeaconofhope,lightingthewayforthoseindistress.（在危難面前，每一次善舉都是希望的燈塔，為困境中的人照亮前行之路。）Trueheroesarenotthosewithsuperpowers,butthosewho,likeRichard,musterthecouragetostepforwardwhenothersneedthemmost.（真正的英雄并非擁有超能力之人，而是像Richard這樣，在他人最需要時鼓起勇氣挺身而出之人。）Asinglemomentofbraverycanchangethecourseoflives,provingthateveninthemostdesperatesituations,wehavethepowertomakeadifference.（一瞬間的勇敢可以改變?nèi)松壽E，證明即便在最絕望的境地，我們也有能力帶來改變。）Thebondbetweenhumansandanimalsisatestamenttothepowerofloyaltyandlove,asseeninthedog’sunwaveringprotectionofthegirl.（人與動物之間的紐帶見證了忠誠與愛的力量，正如小狗對小女孩堅定不移的保護所示。）Whenlifethrowschallengesourway,it’sourkindnessanddeterminationthatenableustoovercomethemandcreateabetterending.（當生活向我們拋出挑戰(zhàn)時，是我們的善良與決心讓我們克服困難，創(chuàng)造更美好的結(jié)局。）寫作示范一：Para.1:Afterawhile,Richardgentlyliftedupthegirl.Shewassobbingquietly,hertinyhandsclutchingatRichard’sshirt.Richardcradledherinhisarms,feelingapangofsympathy.“There,there,littleangel.You’resafenow.”Hesatherdownonadrypatchofgrassandstartedtocheckherover.Fortunately,therewereonlyminorbruises.Richardthenaskedheraboutherparents,whereshelived,andhowsheendedupinthispredicament.Asshehiccuppedoutheranswers,Richard’smindwasracing,tryingtofigureoutthequickestwaytoreuniteherwithherfamily.Para.2:“Gooddog!”saidRichard.Withrenewedenergy,heplungedbackintothewater.Thedogwasstillstruggling,butRichardwasdetermined.Afterwhatfeltlikeaneternity,hemanagedtofreethedog.Itswamtoshoreandcollapsednexttothegirl,itstonguelollingout.Richardsatdownbesidethem,exhaustedbutcontent.Hedialedthelocalpolicestationandexplainedthesituation.Ashewaitedforhelptoarrive,helookedatthegirlandherdog,asenseofaccomplishmentwashingoverhim.Thiswasadayhewouldneverforget,adaywhenhebecameahero,notbychoice,butbyinstinct.寫作示范二：Para.1:Afterawhile,Richardgentlyliftedupthegirl.Shewastremblingallover,hereyeswidewithfearandshock.Richardrubbedherarmstowarmherupandsaid,“You’reokay,honey.Iwon’tletanythinghappentoyou.”Henoticedhershoesweremissing,sohetookoffhisownsocksandputthemonhersmallfeet.Then,hetriedtogethertotalk,todistractherfromthetrauma.Heaskedheraboutherbike,ifshelikedtorideitinthewoodsoften.Asshestartedtorelaxabit,Richard’sphonebeeped,remindinghimtocallforbackup.Para.2:“Gooddog!”saidRichard.Heknewhecouldn’tleavethedogbehind.Thecurrentwasstillstrong,buthedidn’tcare.Hedoveinandfoughthiswaytothedog.Onceashore,thedogwhinedandnuzzledthegirl.Richardsmiledandpattedthemboth.Hecalled911andreportedtheincident.Whilewaiting,hetoldthegirlandthedogstoriestokeepthemcalm.Lookingatthem,herealizedthatlifewasfullofunexpectedchallenges,butwithcourageandcompassion,wecouldalwaysfindawaythrough.Hewasgladhehadbeentheretomakeadifferencethatday.【答案】參考范文：Afterawhile,Richardgentlyliftedupthegirl.“Is