讀后續(xù)寫之“助人類”主題（講義）-高考英語一輪復(fù)習(xí)（新教材新高考）

A第06講助人類（講義）

目錄

目標(biāo)1助人類續(xù)寫概述和寫作步驟

目標(biāo)2困難處境來鋪墊

目標(biāo)3消極情緒來烘托

目標(biāo)4助人過程來描寫

目標(biāo)5感激、感動(dòng)來升華

目標(biāo)6最新模擬

目標(biāo)7真題感悟

讀后續(xù)寫中常常會(huì)遇到自己幫助別人或者自己受到他人幫助的故事情節(jié)，我們就把這類文章歸為“脫

險(xiǎn)型”。在近年高考真題中，如2022年新高考I卷鼓勵(lì)David越野跑；2020年新高考I卷幫助他人渡過難

關(guān)等。

【寫作步驟】

1.Thewaterwasdeepandrunningfastfromabigrainstormthenightbefore.

暴雨，水又深又急。

2.Athickburningsmellfilledtheair.

空氣里彌漫著濃厚灼熱的味道。

3.Itriedtoclimboutofthehole,butwhenIgotakneeontheice,itbrokelikewindowglass.

我試圖從洞里爬出來，但當(dāng)我的膝蓋跪在冰上時(shí)，它就像窗戶玻璃一樣斷裂了。

4.Asflamesshotathisfeet,hebrokethewindow'sglasswithhisbarehand.Bloodflowedfrombetweenhis

fingersandheignoredthepain.

當(dāng)火焰射向他的腳邊時(shí)，他徒手打破了窗戶的玻璃。血從他的手指間流出，他沒有理會(huì)疼痛。

5.Thedoorwaywassealedbyfire.Theglassofthewindowwasbroken,somesmokeranoutofthe

window,andtherewaslesssmokeinthehouse.

門口被火封住了。窗戶的玻璃被打碎了，窗外有一些煙，房子里的煙也少了。

6.Catherinesaidtoherfollowerswithsincerity,"I'llcontinuetodistributethecardsandbagstothe

homelessonthestreetandatlocalshelter.^^

凱瑟琳真誠地對(duì)她的追隨者們說：“我將繼續(xù)把這些卡片和包分發(fā)給街上和當(dāng)?shù)厥杖菟臒o家可歸者?！?/p>

二消極情緒來烘托

感到一陣……/一種……情緒襲來

情緒名詞+floodedoversb;sweptoversb

awaveof...;afeelingof;asenseof...;aflushof...

情緒名詞：joy/shame/guilt/excitement/pride/anger/rage/panic/terror/sorrow/embarrassment

/dispointment/sadness/sorrow/grief/fear...

因……顫抖

ilS+tremble/shake/shiver/quiver...withfear/panic/rage/anger/excitement/horror/fright...

進(jìn)一步細(xì)節(jié)描寫（通常是肢體五官等細(xì)節(jié)來展現(xiàn)）

1.Tearsrolleddownmyeyes/cheeks.

淚水模糊了雙眼/留下臉頰。

2.Watchingtheshoreinthedistance,Ifeltpowerlessasifwewerebrokentinyboatsatthemercyofstrongwaves.

看著遠(yuǎn)處的海岸，我感到無力（無力的），就好像我們是被強(qiáng)浪摧毀的小船。

3.Exhaustedandcold,thethoughtthatwemightdiehereflashedacrossmymind,whichmademequiverwithan

uncontrollableterror/horror/fright.

疲憊而冰冷，我們可能死在這里的想法在我的腦海中閃現(xiàn)，這使我因一種無法控制的恐懼/恐懼/恐懼而顫抖。

4.Lookingatthevastsea,Ifeltasenseoffearsurgingthroughmywholebody.

看著浩瀚的大海，我感到一種恐懼感掠過我的全身。

三助人過程來描寫

l.Asthecoatbecamecompletelywet,itdraggedmedown.Iwastiredofthestruggleandrestedwithmyarms

stretchedoutontheice.

當(dāng)外套完全濕了，它把我拖了下來。我厭倦了掙扎，伸出雙臂在冰上休息。

2.Astheydrovetothelibrary,Sebastiannervouslyapproachedtheroofersandofferedthewater.

當(dāng)他們開車去圖書館時(shí)，塞巴斯蒂安緊張地走近屋頂工人，給了水。

3.Withoutamoment9shesitation,Cheemijumpedthroughthewindow.Carlwassleepingsoundly.Picking

himup,Cheemiputhimonherbackandtiedhimtightlytoherselfwithabedsheet.

切米毫不猶豫地跳過了窗戶?？査煤芟?。切米把他抱起來，把他放在背上，用床單把他緊緊地綁在自

己身上。

4.Slowlyshescaledtheladderandpeepedthroughthewindow.Carefullysheundidthebedsheetand

handedit,withthechild,toapoliceman.

她慢慢地爬上梯子，從窗戶里偷看。她小心翼翼地解開床單，把它和孩子一起交給了一個(gè)警察。

5.“Weneedtothinkoutaway!”Imuttered,scratchingmyhead.

“我們需要想個(gè)辦法！”我抓著頭，嘟嚷著。

6.Nervousandanxious,JohnstruggledtocalmherselfdownandcarriedoutfirstaidtoSmith.

盡管緊張而焦慮，約翰努力讓自己鎮(zhèn)靜下來，對(duì)史密斯進(jìn)行了急救。

7.Surroundedbyfireandsmoke,herecognizedthedirectionofthecryandrushedtowardsit.Hefeltthe

child,quicklypickedherup,andranoutasfastashecould.

在火和煙霧的包圍下，他認(rèn)出了哭聲的方向，就朝它沖去。他感覺到了那孩子，迅速地把她抱起來，盡

快地跑了出去。

四感激、感動(dòng)來升華

1.Ensuingtheirsafety,Ifeltasurgeoftriumph.

當(dāng)他們安全下來后，我感到一陣勝利。

2.Ultimately,wewereback,safeandsound.

最終，我們又回來了，安然無恙。

3.Hearingthenews,Icouldn*thelprestrainingmyexcitement.

聽到這個(gè)消息，我忍不住抑制住了自己的興奮。

4.Whentheyleft,thedogturnedandgaveawinkgoodbye,seeminglysayingthatPaulwastobethanked.

當(dāng)他們離開時(shí)，狗轉(zhuǎn)過身，眨眼道別，似乎在說要感謝保羅。

5.Onhearingthegoodnews,TomandIsighedingreatrelief,grinningmerrilyateachother.

聽到這個(gè)好消息，湯姆和我如釋重負(fù)地嘆了口氣，愉快地咧著嘴笑。

6.（2023年浙江卷1月真題）Ifeltasurgeofreliefandaweatthesightofthissoundandgratefulcreature,

andIknewthatIwouldalwayscherishthememorieswesharedasIclimbedintomycaranddroveaway.

看到這個(gè)聲音和感激的生物，我感到一陣欣慰和敬畏，我知道我將永遠(yuǎn)珍惜我們爬上車開車離開時(shí)分享的

回憶。

7."IfIhadnotbeengivenfirstaid,Iwouldhavedead.^^SimmonssaidtoNorwoodgratefully.Simmonsshowed

hergratitudetoNorwood,saying“Itwasyouwhocametomyaidandsavedmy

如果我沒有得到急救，我就會(huì)死了。西蒙斯感激地對(duì)諾伍德說。西蒙斯對(duì)諾伍德表示了感謝，她說：“是

你來幫助我，救了我一命?！?/p>

8.Rosesgiven,fragranceinhand.

贈(zèng)人玫瑰，手留余香。

9.Smallkindnesscanbring/contributeto/giverisetoabigdifference.

小小的善意可以產(chǎn)生大大的影響。

lO.Inaflash,withtearswellingupinmyeyes,Iwastouchedbeyondwords.Ifeltsowarmasiftherewerenine

sunsinmychest.

一瞬間，我眼里涌起了淚水，我被言語感動(dòng)了。我感到很溫暖，好像胸口有九個(gè)太陽。

11.（2020年山東卷真題）Needlesstosay,theyweredeeplymoved,especiallyBernardwhofinallyfoundaway

tomakemoneyforhisfamily.

不用說，他們非常感動(dòng)，尤其是伯納德，他終于找到了為家人賺錢的方法。

12.TheythankedSebastianandhisdadagainandwavedthemgoodbyeastheydroveaway.

他們?cè)俅胃兄x了塞巴斯蒂安和他的父親，并在他們開車離開時(shí)揮手告別。

13.SomovedandoverjoyedwasIthatIwantedtogiveherabighug,toexpressmydeepestgratitud

e,butinaCOVIDworld,allIcoulddowassay,"Oh,mygoodness!Thankyousomuch!^^

我非常感動(dòng)，欣喜若狂，我想給她一個(gè)大大的擁抱，以表達(dá)我最深切的感激之情，但在一個(gè)冠狀病毒病的

世界里，我所能做的就是說：“哦，我的天哪！非常感謝！”

14.1silentlythankedSisterEstherinmyheart.Whatagreatteacherandagoodfriend!Whatshe

didbroughthappinesstoourdarkdays!

我在心里默默地感謝以絲特修女。多么偉大的老師和好朋友！她所做的一切給我們黑暗的日子帶來了幸福！

【最新模擬】

（2023.河北?校聯(lián)考模擬預(yù)測(cè)）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整

的短文。

AsanundergraduateinauniversityinPhiladelphia,Pennsylvania,CatherinehadvolunteeredattheHope

RescueMissioninherhometownwithhermotherwhoservedastheshelter'sdevelopmentdirector.Afterworking

withthehomelessandreceivingcardsfromhermominthemail,Catherinedecidedtobeginherproject."You've

GotMail".Shehadahugeheartforthoseinneed.

Forthepeoplethatshewashelping,shesawthehomelessnessfirsthandanditwasabattle.Shethoughtno

onewantedtochoosetobehomeless,andshealwaysdonatedthebasicneeds,includingthetoiletries,the

shampoosandtoothbrushes.

Inhermind,individualsfacinghomelessnesscertainlysufferedphysically,butformany,theemotional

sufferingwasevenmorepainful.Feelingaloneandhopelesscutdeeperthanfeelinghungryandcold.Therefore,

shehelditthat,akindgesture,suchasherprojectaboutencouragementcards,couldbethatlightinsomeone'sday

tokeepthemstrivingandhopingforabettertomorrow.

Oneday,shesharedherideawithhermother,t4Iwasthinkingofaboxfilledwithholidaycards.Iwanttodo

somethingtomakethehomelesswithemptyheartssmile,lettingthemknowmanypeoplestillcareaboutthem.^^

Hermother,smiledandsaid,"Justdoitandspreadyourlove!”

ThenCatherinelaunchedaholidaycarddriveforthehomelessafterbeinginspiredbyvolunteeringatthe

shelter.Shecollected2,000cards,surpassingheroriginalgoalof500injustafewweeks.

Catherine'scompassionforothersdidn'tstopatjustfeelingsympathyforthemintheirhardships.Shealso

followedhermother'sadvicetolookforwaystohelpthembeatthosehardshipsthroughherkindness.

SoCatherineaskedheronlinefriendsforholiday-themedcards,andsoon,herinboxwasfloodedwithpeople

offeringtohelp.Amazingly,thepeoplesheknew,thepeopleshehadn'tspokentosinceprimaryschool,andthe

peopleshehadneverspokentobefore,sentthecardstoher.Thensheaskedforcardsfromanyone.Shewasnot

turningdownany.Shethoughtitwasreallygreattoacceptthem.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Inhonorofthe"You'veGotMail"initiative,Catherineandhermotherhostedacardmakingparty.

Catherinehopedherprojectwouldremindotherstomakeadifferenceinsomeone'slife.

【答案】

Inhonorofthe"You'veGotMail“initiative,Catherineandhenmotherhostedacardmakingparty.Intheparty,

shemetagroupofhergoodfriendswhoofferedheralargenumberofcards.Shealsoranintoacompany's

manager,whodonatedmanybagsandaccessoriestoher.Besides,amongtheparticipantsweresomefamousmedia

thatsanghighpraisefbrCatherine'skinddeeds,callingontheworldtofollowsuit.Theymadethecardstogether.

Catherinesaidtoherfollowerswithsincerity,6<rilcontinuetodistributethecardsandbagstothehomelessonthe

streetandatlocalshelters.^^

Catherinehopedherprojectwouldremindotherstomakeadifferenceinsomeone'slifb.Sheappealedtothe

worldtocareforthepoor,andmeanwhileurgedthepoortospeakupforthemselves.Uptillnow,shehas

conductedinterviewswithsomeofthemandputtogetheravideotobeonairinsociety.Shelistenedtotheirstories,

learningabouttheirhealthconditions,theirfamiliesandtheirdreams.Inherhumbleopinion,simplybecauseyou

onlypassthemonthestreet,youknownothingaboutthem.Sothebiggestthingisjusttolistenbecauseeverybody

hasastory,fromwhichyoucanfindouthowtohelp.

【導(dǎo)語】本文以人物為線索展開。主人公凱瑟琳在大學(xué)時(shí)做志愿者幫助了很多無家可歸的人，所以在她畢

業(yè)后，她開展了自己的“你有一封郵件”的項(xiàng)目，給無家可歸的人寄送鼓勵(lì)賀卡。在項(xiàng)目進(jìn)行的過程中，也有

無數(shù)人不斷向凱瑟琳寄卡片。

【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“為了紀(jì)念“你收到了郵件”倡議，凱瑟琳和她的母親舉辦了一個(gè)賀卡制作派對(duì)。”可知，

第一段可描寫凱瑟琳在派對(duì)上和參與派對(duì)的人之間的互動(dòng)。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“凱瑟琳希望她的項(xiàng)目能提醒其他人去改變別人的生活?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫凱瑟琳為

無家可歸的人進(jìn)行發(fā)聲，呼吁大家關(guān)心窮人、幫助窮人。

2.續(xù)寫線索：凱瑟琳做大學(xué)志愿者——決定開展鼓勵(lì)卡項(xiàng)目——?jiǎng)P瑟琳收集鼓勵(lì)卡——開展制作賀卡派對(duì)

——呼吁社會(huì)關(guān)心窮人

3.詞匯激活

行為類

①主辦：host/hold

②提供：offer/supply/give

③高度贊揚(yáng)：singhighpraise/speakhighlyof

④呼吁：callon/appealto/urge

情感類

①友善的：kind/sweet/friendly

②真誠：sincerity/honesty/earnesty/goodfaith

③謙虛的：humble/modest

【點(diǎn)睛】【高分句型1】Intheparty,shemetagroupofhergoodfriendswhoofferedheralargenumberofcards.

（使用了who引導(dǎo)定語從句）

【高分句型2】Besides,amongtheparticipantsweresomefamousmediathatsanghighpraiseforCatherine'skind

deeds,callingontheworldtofollowsuit.（使用了that引導(dǎo)定語從句）

【高分句型3]Sothebiggestthingisjusttolistenbecauseeverybodyhasastory,fromwhichyoucanfindouthow

tohelp.（使用了fromwhich引導(dǎo)非限制性定語從句）

【真題感悟】

1.（2023?全國?高考真題）

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Iwasinvitedtoacookoutonanoldfiriend'sfarminwesternWashington.Iparkedmycaroutsidethefarmand

walkedpastamilkinghousewhichhadapparentlynotbeenusedinmanyyears.Anoiseatawindowcaughtmy

attention,soIenteredit.Itwasahummingbird（蜂鳥），desperatelytryingtoescape.Shewascoveredin

spider-webs（蛛網(wǎng)）andwasbarelyabletomoveherwings.SheceasedherstruggletheinstantIpickedherup.

Withthebirdinmycuppedhand,Ilookedaroundtoseehowshehadgottenin.Thebrokenwindowglasswas

thelikelyanswer.Istuffedapieceofclothintotheholeandtookheroutside,closingthedoorsecurelybehindme.

WhenIopenedmyhand,thebirddidnotflyaway;shesatlookingatmewithherbrighteyes.Iremovedthe

stickyspider-websthatcoveredherheadandwings.Still,shemadenoattempttofly.Perhapsshehadbeen

strugglingagainstthewindowtoolongandwastootired?Ortoothirsty?

AsIcarriedheruptheblackberry-linedpathtowardmycarwhereIkeptawaterbottle,shebegantomove.I

stopped,andshesoontookwingbutdidnotimmediatelyflyaway.

Hovering（懸停），sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface.Foraverylongmoment,thistinycreature

lookedintomyeyes,turningherheadfromsidetoside.Thensheflewquicklyoutofsight.

Duringthecookout,Itoldmyhostsaboutthehummingbirdincident.Theypromisedtofixthewindow.AsI

wasdeparting,myfriendswalkedmetomycar.Iwasstandingbythecarwhenahummingbirdflewtothecenter

ofourgroupandbeganhovering.Sheturnedfrompersontopersonuntilshecametome.Sheagainlookeddirectly

intomyeyes,thenletoutasqueakingcallandwasgone.Foramoment,allwerespeechless.Thensomeonesaid,

“Shemusthavecometosaygoodbye.^^

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題紙的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.

Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.

【答案】

Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.Asmycarneareditmythoughtsdriftedbacktothemomentwhen

Irescuedthehummingbirdfromthespider?sweb.Irushedbacktothedesertedhouse.Itwasagreatcomfortthat

theoriginalholeinthewindowwasnowheretobefound.Leavingthehouse,Icouldn'thelpwonderinghowitwas

gettingonnow.Haditmanagedtofinditswaybackhome,orwasitstillouttheresomewherestrugglingto

survive?

Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.Aflashofmovementcaughtmyattention.I

turnedaroundtoseethesamehummingbirdhoveringintheair.Itseemedthatthebirdwaswaitingforme,its

beadyeyeslockedonmineasiftryingtoconveysomedeep,unspokengratitude.Ifeltasurgeofreliefandaweat

thesightofthissoundandgratefulcreature,andIknewthatIwouldalwayscherishthememorieswesharedasI

climbedintomycaranddroveaway.

【導(dǎo)語】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者被邀請(qǐng)去一個(gè)農(nóng)場(chǎng)野餐，發(fā)現(xiàn)一個(gè)房子里有只蜂鳥被蜘蛛網(wǎng)

困住了，作者把蜂鳥救了，把蜂鳥帶出去的時(shí)候它遲遲不肯走，當(dāng)作者走到一條布滿黑莓的小路時(shí)，它開

始動(dòng)了，但是卻不肯飛走，徘徊著，后來終于飛走了，當(dāng)作者準(zhǔn)備離開時(shí)，蜂鳥又飛到作者面前，好像是

在和作者告別。

【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫：

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“幾個(gè)星期后，我又去了農(nóng)場(chǎng)?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫作者回到農(nóng)場(chǎng)時(shí)所看到的和所想到

的。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“我正要離開，這時(shí)蜂鳥出現(xiàn)了。”可知，第二段可描寫蜂鳥是如何對(duì)作者的以及作者的

感想。

2.續(xù)寫線索：想起救蜂鳥的時(shí)候一回到那個(gè)房子一想到那只蜂鳥一看見蜂鳥一蜂鳥的表現(xiàn)一作者

的感想

行為類

①思緒回至!J.......：thoughtsdriftbackto/thoughtsreturnto

②匆匆回到：rushbackto/hunybackto

③盯著：eyeslockedon/eyesstaringat

情緒類

①寬慰：feelasurgeofrelief/feelrelieved

②感激：grateful/thankful

【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型1]AsmycarneareditmythoughtsdriftedbacktothemomentwhenIrescuedthe

hummingbirdfromthespider'sweb.（由as引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語從句和when引導(dǎo)的限制性定語從句）

[高分句型2]Itwasagreatcomfortthattheoriginalholeinthewindowwasnowheretobefound.（由that弓I導(dǎo)的

主語從句）

2.（2022?浙江?統(tǒng)考高考真題）閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。

Ineededtodosomethinginmycommunity（社區(qū)）inordertocompletethecommunityservicehoursrequired

tograduatefromhighschool.Someofmyfriendshadsigneduptospendtimeatasoupkitchen,soIdid,too.It

seemedlikeagoodthingtodo.

Ithoughtthatwewouldjustbepassingoutdinnerstothoseinneed,butIfoundoutwewouldbedoing

everythingfrompreparingtoservingthedinner.Webeganpreparingthefood,frommixingsaladdressingto

separatingfrozenmeat.Muchstillneededtobedonebeforedinnerwasserved,butalreadyoutsidethebuilding

manyhomelesspeopleweregathering.Itwasn'tuntilacoupleofhourslaterthatweopenedthedoorsandbegan

servingdinner.

Asthelineofpeoplecametowardme,Igotalittlescared.I'dcomefacetofacewiththehomeless:How

shouldIact?Howwouldtheytreatme?Wouldtheyhatemeforhavingmorethantheydid?Whilesomeofthe

peoplelookedveryfriendly,someofthemlookedsodangerous.Ididn'thavetoomuchtimetoworryaboutit.I

wasassigned（分酉己）toservethesaladwiththeladynexttome.ShesmiledatmeandsaidifIneededhelp,she'd

berightthere,whichIfoundquitecomforting.

Ihadneverseensomanypeoplewantingfood.Theywereofallagesandnationalities.Mostofthemwore

clothesthatweretomanddirty.Somelookedliketheyhadtallygivenuponlife,whileothersseemedtobemaking

thebestofthesituation,smilingandjoking.Somewerebetteroffthanothers,buttheyallneededagoodmealand

awarmplacetoeat.Itsaddenedmetothinkofhowmanypeopletherewerewhodidn'thaveaplacetocallhome

andtheonlyfoodtheygotcamefromasoupkitchen.

注意：

1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.至少使用5個(gè)短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；

3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；

4.續(xù)寫完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。

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