2023年1月浙江英語首考讀后續(xù)寫課件-2024屆高三英語二輪復(fù)習(xí)

23年浙江首考讀后續(xù)寫真題：人鳥情未了讀懂故事，確定主題Understandthestoryanddefinethetheme分析性格，助力推理Analyzethetraitsoftheleadingcharacters分析首句，完成推理

Accordingtothegivensentencestoinferthestory積累語言，優(yōu)化輸出Languageaccumulation示例范文，相似拓展

Excellentsampleessay&Similarextension1.梳理故事（5W1H）whowherewhenwhatwhyhowI,myfriends,ahummingbirdamilkinghouse,outsidenearmyfriend’sfarm

WhenIwasinvitedtovisitthefarmforcookout…afewweekslaterAnoiseinthemilkinghousecaughtmyattention,soIenteredit,savingahummingbird.Thebrokenwindowglasswas

thelikelyreasonwhythehummingbirdwashere.Paragraph1:Afewweekslater…

Paragraph2:Iwasjustabouttoleave…story

Iwasinvitedtoacookoutonanoldfriend’sfarminwesternWashington.Iparkedmycaroutsidethefarmandwalkedpastamilkinghousewhichhadapparentlynotbeenusedinmanyyears.Anoiseatawindowcaughtmyattention,soIenteredit.Itwasahummingbird(蜂鳥),desperatelytryingtoescape.Shewascoveredinspider-webs(蛛網(wǎng))andwasbarelyabletomoveherwings.SheceasedherstruggletheinstantIpickedherup.Withthebirdinmycuppedhand,Ilookedaroundtoseehowshehadgottenin.Thebrokenwindowglasswasthelikelyanswer.Istuffedapieceofclothintotheholeandtookheroutside,closingthedoorsecurelybehindme.WhenIopenedmyhand,thebirddidnotflyaway;shesatlookingatmewithherbrighteyes.Iremovedthestickyspider-websthatcoveredherheadandwings.Still,shemadenoattempttofly,Perhapsshehadbeenstrugglingagainstthewindowtoolongandwastootired?Ortoothirsty?AsIcarriedheruptheblackberry-linedpathtowardmycarwhereIkeptawaterbottle,shebegantomove.Istopped,andshesoontookwingbutdidnotimmediatelyflyaway.Hovering(懸停),sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface.Foraverylongmoment,thistinycreaturelookedintomyeyes,turningherheadfromsidetoside.Thensheflewquicklyoutofsight.Duringthecookout,Itoldmyhostsaboutthehummingbirdincident.Theypromisedtofixthewindow,AsIwasdeparting,myfriendswalkedmetomycar.Iwasstandingbythecarwhenahummingbirdflewtothecenterofourgroupandbeganhovering.Sheturnedfrompersontopersonuntilshecametome.Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyes,thenletoutasqueakingcallandwasgone.Foramoment,allwerespeechless.Thensomeonesaid,“Shemusthavecometosaygood-bye.”

attentive（細(xì)心的）benevolent（有愛心的）2.“我”的性格分析

people-person（人緣好的）作用：通過人物性格的分析，暗示了續(xù)寫第一段首句“Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.”中主人公為什么再次來到農(nóng)場：因為主人公對蜂鳥的牽掛，他/她想知道蜂鳥的現(xiàn)狀。

Iwasinvitedtoacookoutonanoldfriend’sfarminwesternWashington.Iparkedmycaroutsidethefarmandwalkedpastamilkinghousewhichhadapparentlynotbeenusedinmanyyears.Anoiseatawindowcaughtmyattention,soIenteredit.Itwasahummingbird(蜂鳥),desperatelytryingtoescape.Shewascoveredinspider-webs(蛛網(wǎng))andwasbarelyabletomoveherwings.SheceasedherstruggletheinstantIpickedherup.Withthebirdinmycuppedhand,Ilookedaroundtoseehowshehadgottenin.Thebrokenwindowglasswasthelikelyanswer.Istuffedapieceofclothintotheholeandtookheroutside,closingthedoorsecurelybehindme.WhenIopenedmyhand,thebirddidnotflyaway;shesatlookingatmewithherbrighteyes.Iremovedthestickyspider-websthatcoveredherheadandwings.Still,shemadenoattempttofly,Perhapsshehadbeenstrugglingagainstthewindowtoolongandwastootired?Ortoothirsty?AsIcarriedheruptheblackberry-linedpathtowardmycarwhereIkeptawaterbottle,shebegantomove.Istopped,andshesoontookwingbutdidnotimmediatelyflyaway.Hovering(懸停),sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface.Foraverylongmoment,thistinycreaturelookedintomyeyes,turningherheadfromsidetoside.Thensheflewquicklyoutofsight.Duringthecookout,Itoldmyhostsaboutthehummingbirdincident.Theypromisedtofixthewindow,AsIwasdeparting,myfriendswalkedmetomycar.Iwasstandingbythecarwhenahummingbirdflewtothecenterofourgroupandbeganhovering.Sheturnedfrompersontopersonuntilshecametome.Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyes,thenletoutasqueakingcallandwasgone.Foramoment,allwerespeechless.Thensomeonesaid,“Shemusthavecometosaygood-bye.”astrongsurvivalinstinct

（強烈的求生欲）ataloss（茫然不知所措）Keepthebenefactorinmind（將恩人牢記于心）Shewasreluctanttopartwithhisbenefactor.（對救命恩人戀戀不舍）2.蜂鳥的心理活動分析因為蜂鳥想用自己的方式報答和感謝救命恩人。作用：通過分析蜂鳥的心理活動，暗示故事后續(xù)發(fā)展的第二段“Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.”蜂鳥為什么會再次出現(xiàn)，她來這兒的目的是什么？她又做了什么，為什么要這樣做？Paragraph1:

Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.Paragraph2:

Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.1.WhydidIgotothfarmagain?Mymood?2.WhatdidIdoonthefarm?3.Whatweremyfeelingswhenthehummingbirdwasabsent?1.Whydidthehummingbirdappear?2.Whatdidthehummingbirddo?3.WhatdidIdo?Whatweremyfeelings?4.Whatdoesthestorytellus?3.推斷故事情節(jié)1.“she”—pronoun—todirectlynarratewhat“I”saw,heard,touchedandthought—personification(rhetoricaldevice修辭手法)2.“thebird,thistinycreature,ahummingbird”—usedifferent/variednamestoavoidrepetition.3.usesomecohesivewords—still;again…toshowhowinteractionofcharactersdevelopsovertime4.usesimplebutdescriptivewordsandexpressionsfromthepassage5.difficultwordslike“cookout”,“theblackberry-linedpath”tellusthesignificanceofknowingtheformationofwords.Withthebirdinmycuppedhand…Hovering(懸停),sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface.…thistinycreaturelookedintomyeyes,turningherheadfromsidetoside.lookingatmewithherbrighteyes/Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyesthemilkinghouse/theblackberry-linedpath4.語言積累-原文細(xì)節(jié)Joyfullyflappingherwings,shecircledaroundmeforawhileandkepthoveringoverme.Shelandedonmycuppedhandandlookintomyeyesasifshowinghergratitude.Description

fromthe1stpersonlimitedpointofviewhearingAnoiseatawindowcaughtmyattention.…thenletoutasqueakingcall…Thensomeonesaid,“Shemusthavecometosaygood-bye.”visionShewascoveredinspider-webs(蛛網(wǎng))andwasbarelyabletomoveherwings.Sheceasedherstruggle…Withthebirdinmycuppedhand,Ilookedaroundtoseehowshehadgottenin.WhenIopenedmyhand,thebirddidnotflyaway;shesatlookingatmewithherbrighteyes.Istopped,andshesoontookwingbutdidnotimmediatelyflyaway.Hovering(懸停),sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface.Foraverylongmoment,thistinycreaturelookedintomyeyes,turningherheadfromsidetoside.Thensheflewquicklyoutofsight.Iwasstandingbythecarwhenahummingbirdflewtothecenterofourgroupandbeganhovering.Sheturnedfrompersontopersonuntilshecametome.Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyes,…touchIremovedthestickyspider-websthatcoveredherheadandwings.thinkingPerhaps

shehadbeenstrugglingagainstthewindowtoolongandwastootired?Ortoothirsty?B2U4ReadingforWritingBeautifulIrelandanditsTraditions4.語言積累-原文細(xì)節(jié)利用五感描寫農(nóng)場的環(huán)境（視覺、聽覺、嗅覺、味覺、觸覺）翻譯：1.當(dāng)我再次來到農(nóng)場時，農(nóng)場看上去和我上次來時一樣：相同的山、相同的水，相同的風(fēng)景。WhenIwenttothefarmagain,thefarmlookedthesameasIcamelasttime:thesamemountain,thesamewater,thesamescenery.視覺翻譯：2.河岸兩邊有各種各樣的花，鮮花的香味沁人心脾，同時引來了很多蝴蝶，圍著他們轉(zhuǎn)來轉(zhuǎn)去。Withavarietyofflowersonbothsidesoftheriver,thefragrantflowersdelightedtheheart,andattractedlotsofbutterflies,lingeringaroundthem.嗅覺4.語言積累-豐富語言Themelodioussongofbirdsmademespellbound.翻譯：3.潺潺的流水聲讓我很放松。利用五感描寫農(nóng)場的環(huán)境（視覺、聽覺、嗅覺、味覺、觸覺）Thegurgling/burblingstreamsoothedme.聽覺翻譯4：我沉浸在小鳥悅耳的歌聲中。聽覺翻譯：5.古老的風(fēng)葉像張開的翅膀，迎風(fēng)轉(zhuǎn)動，不僅與綠草、野花構(gòu)成了獨特的風(fēng)景，更為這童話般的世界增添了神奇的色彩！Ancientwindmill'sleavesopenedlikethebirds’wings,rotatingagainstthewind.Thewindmill,thegreengrassandthewildflowernotonlyconstitutedtheuniqueview,butalsoaddedmysteriouscolortothefairy-taleworld!視覺4.語言積累-豐富語言沒看到蜂鳥時的失望2.Disappointmentoverwhelmedmyheart.7.Notseeingthehummingbird,Ifeltnoend(非常)disappointed.4.Iwasmorethangutted,

tearsstreamingdownmycheeks.5.Icouldn'tresistcryingbitterly,buryingmyfaceinmyhands.6.Myheartsank,justlikeastonefalling

heavilytotheground.3.Myheartwas

drizzling,heartwet.

我的心下著淅淅瀝瀝的小雨，心里濕漉漉的。

1.Ibrokedownemotionally.4.語言積累-豐富語言看到蜂鳥時的欣喜/開心5.Seeingthehummingbird,myeyestwinkledwithexcitement.8.Thehummingbirdinsight,myeyesdancedwithjoyandsweetness.7.Exhilarationtookpossessionofmeuponseeingthehummingbird.2.shecheeredandjumpedwithjoy.1.Iwasatthetopoftheworld.3.Iwasinhighspiritsasiffloatingontheair.4.Igrinfromeartoearasiftheworldweremyown.6.Iwaslikeadogwithtwotailswhenseeingthehummingbird.4.語言積累-豐富語言1.Therelationshipbetweenhumanandanimalsisgraduallycausingpeople’sattention.人與動物的關(guān)系正在逐漸引起人們的注意。2.Itisareminderthatweneedtocareabouttheworldweliveinandthatweshouldlearntorespectlifeandnature.

它提醒我們要關(guān)心我們生活的世界，我們應(yīng)該學(xué)會尊重生命和大自然。3.Itistimeforeveryoneofustostarttodowhatwecantoprotecttheanimalsthatarebeneficialtoman.

它是時候?qū)ξ覀兠總€人開始做我們能

做的事情去保護(hù)有益于人類的動物了。4.語言積累-豐富語言升華部分-人與自然和諧相處Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.Irushedtothehouselikeanarrowleavingthebowtoseewhetherthehummingbirdwasthere.Disappointmentvisitedmewhennotseeingthehummingbird.Buttomyrelief,thewindowwasfixed.Igavethefarmeracall.Hetoldmeaboutthehummingbird,sayingthehummingbirdhadfliedbackfor101timesasiftowaitforme.Hearingthis,Myheartmelted,tearsstreamingdownmycheeks.Bathedinthewarmsun,breathingthefreshair,Ihadnomoodinenjoyingthebeautifulscenery.Scanningaround,Itriedtolookforthehummingbird'sshadow.Withthetimetickingby,thehummingbirddidn’tstillcomeintomysight.Myheartsank,likeastonefalling

heavilytotheground.Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.Icheeredwithjoywitheyesdancingwithsweetness.Thehummingbirdhoveredbeforeme,lookingdirectlyintomyeyes.Sheletoutasqueakingcalltheinstantsherecognizedme,jumpedontomyoutstretchedlefthandandkisseditdesparately,whichmademyheartmeltagain.Istretchedoutanotherhand,gentlystrokingherheadasifsheweremyownchild.Thesoftbreezeandtheamber-likesunshinewitnessedthegreatfriendshipbetweenus.Itdawnedonmethatbirdsaretoourhumanwhatfriendsaretous.Therefore,weshouldprotectbirdssoastomakethembecomeourfriendsforever.比喻修辭寫出了我希望看到蜂鳥的急切心情無靈表達(dá)寫出了我沒看到蜂鳥的失望

夸張修辭表達(dá)了蜂鳥無數(shù)次回來尋找救命恩人，同時也表達(dá)了蜂鳥回報恩人的決心。

被蜂鳥的行為所感動

景物反襯法：景物雖好，卻沒心情欣賞，寫出了

主人公沒看到蜂鳥的失望。

雖心有不甘，可終究還是失望了。此句既寫出了

主人公的失望，又呼應(yīng)了下文的給出句：Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.

看到蜂鳥時的欣喜

原文詞匯產(chǎn)出,尤其是“l(fā)ookingdirectlyintomyeyes”，在原文中被三次提到。

與續(xù)寫第一段相呼應(yīng)

這是人與鳥兒和諧相處的溫馨瞬間，微風(fēng)與陽光見證了這一切。此句既渲染了主題，又為升華主題做了鋪墊。

升華主題，突出人與自然和諧的重要性5.優(yōu)秀范文

契訶夫法則，呼應(yīng)原文：Duringthecookout,Itoldmyhostsabout

thehummingbirdincident.Theypromisedtofixthewindow

In2000,whenIwasaroundsevenyearsold,allmyfamilywerecomingbackfromaT-ballgame,whichwasourusualweekendadventure,butunlikeeveryotherweekend,asurprisewaswaitingforusinourdriveway—twoadultgeeseandasmallgoose.Obviouslystartledbyourreturn,theadultsflewawayinpanic,withtheirbaby,tooyoungtofly,leftinplace,tinyanddelicate.Hourspassedoneafteranother,andnighteventuallyfell.However,withitalsocameadeepchillandafearofwatchfulanimals.Itwasapparentthatthegoslingneededprotection,warmth,andfoodtomakeittothemorning,sowehadtohelpit,andwebroughthimontoourbackyard.5.相似拓展Weallprettymuchsleptwithoneeyeopentillmorningcame.Andthenanothermorning.Andstillanother.Eachmorning,wewouldtrytodrivethegooseawaytohisparents,whokeptcomingbacktoouryard.Hewouldn’tgotothem,though,andneitherwouldtheycomecloseenoughtoclaimhim.Wekeptthisupforfivedays,butnoluck.Realizingtheyounggoosehadclearlydecidedwewerehisfamilybythen,wehadtogivehimaname,callingthelittleguyPeeper,becausehewouldoftenfollowusaroundtheyardmakingapeeping(唧唧叫)noise,nonstop.Besides,wedecidedthatPeeperwasaboy.Idon’tknowwhy;itjustfeltright.

Ayearpassedandwesettledintoaroutine.Peepersleptonourbackyardeachnightand,intypicalgoosefashion,useditasalatrine(公共廁所).Mydadwouldsprayoffallthegoosedroppingsdaily.PartofthisceremonyincludedDadthrowingPeeperupintotheairsohecouldflapitswingsandflewaloop(圈)aroundthehouse,andthencamebackagainoncetheporchwasclean.Daysturnedintoweeks,andweeksturnedintomonths.Beforeweknewit,thelittlethinghadgrownintoabigbirdwithtwopowerfulwings.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Itcameasatotalsurprisetomewhen,in2019,anadultgoosemadehiswaybacktomyfamilyhome.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________細(xì)節(jié)描寫“ItmustbeYOU!”SothrilledwasIthatIcouldn’thelpexclaiming.“肯定是你！”我是如此激動，情不自禁地大喊。[激動情緒/倒裝句]2.NeverinmywildestdreamdidIimaginetheadorablecreaturecouldcomeback20yearslater.我做夢都不敢想這只可愛的生物20年后會再回來。[倒裝句]3.Iwatchedherflyinggracefullyhighintheskyandsmiledwithrelief.我看著她優(yōu)雅地在空中飛翔，欣慰地笑了笑.4.liveinharmonywith.和……和諧共處[結(jié)尾感悟]5.Itwasatrulyheart-warmingmomentandonethatwouldnevervanish.這是一個真正溫暖且永恒的時刻。[結(jié)尾感嘆]6.Thedayswithhimisauniquegiftthatneedstobeapprec