讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)應(yīng)試技巧一座山兩條魚(yú)課件高三英語(yǔ)二輪復(fù)習(xí)

一座山，兩條魚(yú)

--continuationwriting親情類(lèi)：Adam偷玩具車(chē)1.Readthestory2.Predictthestory3.Writethestory目錄Warmingup

Yellow&RedFrogWatchavideoabouttwolarvas[?lɑ?v?]（幼蟲(chóng)）andanswerquestions.Q1:What’simportantforastoryQ2:What’simportantforwritingastory(/continuationwriting)characterplottheme（葛文山，2022）LeadinQ1:What’simportantforastoryQ2:What’simportantforwritingastory(/continuationwriting)（衡很亨，2023）characterplotthemecharacterportraitplotdesignthemeexposition1Readthestory閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。OncetherewasalittleboycalledAdamwhocamefromarichfamily.Hewasayoungstudentatprimaryschoolandwasveryclever.Healwaysgainedgoodmarksinhisexams.Adamgoteverythinghewanted,suchastoycars,airplanemodels,watergunsandsoon.Hisparentsboughthimwhateverhewanted.Onedayhewentouttoastorewithhismotherandinthetoysectionhefoundaverycooltoycar.Hewassurprisedtoseethatkindoftoycar,soherantohismotherandtoldhereverythingaboutit.Adamtookhismothertothetoysectiontoshowhowitworked.However,hismotherrefusedtobuyitforhimbecausehealreadyhadalotoftoycars.Adamwassadandwonderedwhyhismotherdidnotbuyitforhim.Twoweekslater,Adamandhismotherwenttothesamestoreagain.Adamthoughtthathismotherwouldbuyitforhimthistime,soheaskedhismotherforthetoycaragain.Hismotherignoredhimbecauseshewaslookingforsomethingelse.ButAdamreallywantedthetoycar.So,whilehismotherwasbusylookingforsomeotheritems,hetookthetoycarandputitinsidehisbackpack.ThesalesmansawAdamstealingthetoycarandtriedtostophim.Adamtriedtorunbutthesalesmancaughthim.Adamstartedtocry.Hismotherheardhisvoiceandrantohim.Shewasshockedtoseethesalesmanholdingherson.注意：1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.請(qǐng)按照如下格式在相應(yīng)位置作答?！癢hathappened”sheaskedwithconcern.________________________________________________________________________________________________Aftertheygothome,Adamwenttohisroomandregrettedhavingdonethat.________________________________________________________________________________________________1.閱讀全文，確定背景(Readforsetting)Ayoungandcleverboy(Adam),Adam’smother，thesalesmanoneday;twoweekslater（過(guò)去時(shí)）inthestorehomeAdamlivedinarichfamilyandgainedgoodmarksinexams.Adamgoteverythinghewanted.time(When)place(Where)character（Who）

background(What)setting2.畫(huà)故事山，構(gòu)情節(jié)線(xiàn)和情感線(xiàn)(Readforplotsandemotions)risingactionfallingactionendingplotsbeginningemotionsclimaxMom

whathappened.Adam’smom_______tobuythetoycar.Twoweekslater,hismother______himagain.Adamwenttohisroomand

havingdonethat.Adam

thetoycar,triedto

butthesalesman

him.Adam:sadAdam:desperateAdam:scaredandcriedMom:concernedAdam:regrettedrefusedignoredstolenruncaughtaskedregretted2Predictthestory3.根據(jù)故事山，預(yù)測(cè)情節(jié)和主題(Predicttheplotsandtheme)risingactionfallingactionendingplotsbeginningMom

askedwhathappened.Adam’smomrefusedtobuythetoycar.Twoweekslater,hismotherignoredhimagain.Adamstolenthetoycar,triedtorunbutthesalesmancaughthim.Adamwenttohisroomandregrettedhavingdonethat.emotionsclimax銜接句Adam:regrettedAdam:sadAdam:desperateAdam:scaredandcriedMom:concerned主題句Paragraph1:“Whathappened”sheaskedwithconcern.Paragraph2:Aftertheygothome,Adamwenttohisroomandregrettedhavingdonethat.銜接句1.Whoanswered2.Beforetheygothome,whatdidtheydo1.Whathappenedintheroom2.WhyAdamregrettedandhowtoshow3.WhatwillAdamdonexttime3.根據(jù)故事山，預(yù)測(cè)情節(jié)和主題(Predicttheplotsandtheme)主題句回應(yīng)前文/點(diǎn)出主題·偷東西是絕對(duì)錯(cuò)誤的。It’sabsolutelywrongtostealthings.·反思并承認(rèn)錯(cuò)誤，吸取教訓(xùn)。Reflectandadmitthemistake.Learnfromthelesson.·該怎么做？--結(jié)合家庭實(shí)際，判斷是需要還是想要？樹(shù)立正確的金錢(qián)觀。Wecan’tbuyanythingwewant,instead,weshouldbuysomethingwereallyneed.3.根據(jù)故事山，預(yù)測(cè)情節(jié)和主題(Predicttheplotsandtheme)口訣：兩段首句定一框，二框二首正能量銜接句主題句Aftertheygothome,Adamwenttohisroomandregrettedhavingdonethat.“Whathappened”sheaskedwithconcern.Step1:MaincontentsofPara2andpositiveending.Step2:MaincontentsofPara1.售貨員回答事情經(jīng)過(guò)，歸還玩具?；丶衣飞希赣H與兒子交流?！癓et’sgohomeandseehowmanytoycarsyouhavealreadyowned”.回家后，兒子主動(dòng)承認(rèn)錯(cuò)誤，向母親道歉，并從中得到教訓(xùn)。母親原諒兒子。4.DraftforwritingSalesmanexplainedreturnedthetoyMomaskedwhyMomwasangryMomscoldedAdamreplied“Whathappened”sheaskedwithconcern.Para1銜接句wantedthetoycardesperatelyindetailsquicklywhyhedidthatAdamloweredhishead,inshameonthewaybackhome,seriously一個(gè)角色的所言、所行、所感、所想會(huì)引起其他角色的一系列反應(yīng)。ActionResponse主題句AdamreflectedMomforgivedAdamlearnedAdamapologizedMomeducatedAdam’sthoughtAftertheygothome,Adamwenttohisroomandregrettedhavingdonethat.Para2nottostealbuythings:whetherneeditorwantitthinkwhydidtoldnottodoagainforstealingitisnotright一個(gè)角色的所言、所行、所感、所想會(huì)引起其他角色的一系列反應(yīng)。4.DraftforwritingActionResponse3Writethestory評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)參考Tipsforwriting口訣：人物時(shí)態(tài)和事件，語(yǔ)言特色不要變Tip1:58細(xì)節(jié)添加法Tip2:Toshow,nottotell.(王初明“寫(xiě)長(zhǎng)法”)Tip3:語(yǔ)言協(xié)同：創(chuàng)造性的模仿（原文風(fēng)格）Tip1forwriting口訣：人物時(shí)態(tài)和事件，語(yǔ)言特色不要變58細(xì)節(jié)添加法Tip2forwritingToshowin3aspects:①Bodylanguage②Facialexpression③Voice?Toshow,nottotell.(王初明“寫(xiě)長(zhǎng)法”)Telling:Hefeltashamed.他很羞愧。Showing:bodylanguage+facialexpression肢體語(yǔ)言+面部表情Hearingwhattheysaid,hewassoashamedthathedroppedhiseyesandstaredathisfeet,withhisfaceturningred.聽(tīng)到他們的話(huà)，他羞愧的低下頭，盯著腳，臉紅起來(lái)了。Tip2forwritingToshow,nottotell.(王初明“寫(xiě)長(zhǎng)法”)Tip3forwriting語(yǔ)言協(xié)同：創(chuàng)造性的模仿（原文風(fēng)格）原文:·However,hismotherrefusedtobuyitforhimbecausehealreadyhadalotoftoycars.·Hismotherignoredhimbecauseshewaslookingforsomethingelse.寫(xiě)作:·Adamrepliedthatjustbecausehewantedthetoycardesperately.·HismotherforgavehimandtoldAdamnottodothatagainbecauseitisnotrighttostealanything.小試身手請(qǐng)你將自己的習(xí)作寫(xiě)在題目的橫線(xiàn)上。Paragraph1:“Whathappened”sheaskedwithconcern.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Aftertheygothome,Adamwenttohisroomandregrettedhavingdonethat.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________參考范文Paragraph1:“Whathappened”sheaskedwithconcern.ThenthesalesmantoldAdam’smotherindetailsaboutwhatthelittleboyhaddone.Adam’smotherwasveryangrywith