廣東省深圳二模應(yīng)用文寫作的“新”與“舊”講義

24深圳二模應(yīng)用文寫作的“新”與“舊”2024深圳二模應(yīng)用文寫作的“新”與“舊”作文圖表遺漏，請(qǐng)參考深圳二模試卷原稿第四部分寫作(共兩節(jié)，滿分40分)第一節(jié)(滿分15分)假定你是李華，你班在校英語(yǔ)戲劇節(jié)中獲得一等獎(jiǎng)，外教James打算為此慶祝，并委托你調(diào)查同學(xué)們喜歡的方式。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)調(diào)查結(jié)果，給外教寫一封郵件，內(nèi)容包括：1.表達(dá)感謝;2.提出個(gè)人建議；3.說明理由。注意：1.詞數(shù)80左右;2.請(qǐng)?jiān)诖痤}卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。DearJames,Yourssincerely,LiHua一、題源分析從描述來看，圖表的呈現(xiàn)和描述可追溯到2020的江蘇老高考；但命題的情景更加具體化，需要有禮節(jié)性用語(yǔ)，更要依據(jù)“FindingsonPreferredCelebrationActivities”提出個(gè)人切合實(shí)際的建議，并輔以支撐的理由。二、審題層次1.單向的表達(dá)感謝及理由；（段一）2.扼要的圖表調(diào)查結(jié)果描述；（段二）3.個(gè)人抽取其中一項(xiàng)或多項(xiàng)推薦給外教James;（段二）4.并對(duì)推薦項(xiàng)目輔以理由；（段二）5.禮貌性收尾和回扣首段。（段三）三、新與舊這一篇應(yīng)用文的命題具有以下幾個(gè)新穎之處：1.情景交融：命題將情景設(shè)置為實(shí)際的學(xué)校活動(dòng)，這使得學(xué)生能夠更好地融入情境，激發(fā)他們的寫作熱情。2.調(diào)查數(shù)據(jù)的引入：通過提供一個(gè)具體的調(diào)查結(jié)果圖表，要求學(xué)生在寫作中引用數(shù)據(jù)，這不僅考查了學(xué)生對(duì)數(shù)據(jù)的理解和分析能力，也提高了寫作的邏輯性和說服力。3.建議與理由結(jié)合：學(xué)生不僅要提出個(gè)人建議，還要說明理由，這要求學(xué)生在寫作中展現(xiàn)批判性思維和論證能力。4.多選項(xiàng)的考慮：命題提供了三種不同的慶祝方式，要求學(xué)生在考慮大多數(shù)人意見的同時(shí)，也要展示個(gè)人判斷和偏好，這種多維度的思考對(duì)寫作提出了更高的要求。5.互動(dòng)性增強(qiáng)：命題模擬了一個(gè)真實(shí)的交流場(chǎng)景，即學(xué)生與外教之間的溝通，這種互動(dòng)性的寫作任務(wù)更貼近實(shí)際生活。6.語(yǔ)言的多樣性：命題要求學(xué)生使用多樣的語(yǔ)言表達(dá)形式，包括感謝、建議、理由說明等，這考查了學(xué)生對(duì)不同語(yǔ)言功能的掌握。所謂舊，是指圖表的引用，語(yǔ)言的嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)，層次的邏輯等，但這是應(yīng)用文不變的元素。四、語(yǔ)言知識(shí)，表達(dá)能力，句式呈現(xiàn)1.表示感謝1.1Iamwritingtoexpressourheartfeltgratitudeforyourintentiontocelebrateourclass’sfirstprizewinattheschool’sEnglishDramaFestival.Itisamomentofprideforallofus,andyoursupportmeansalot.1.2Thankyoufortrustingmewiththetaskofsurveyingourclassmates’preferredactivitiestocelebrateoursuccessattheEnglishDramaFestival.Herearethesurveyfindingsalongwithmypersonalopinion.1.3It’smyhonortoextendourheartfeltthanksforyourgenerousoffertocelebrateoursuccess.Yoursupportandenthusiasmaretrulyinspiring.2.描述圖表2.1BasedonthesurveyIconducted,88%ofusareenthusiasticaboutaweekendouting,while59%favouranEnglishmovienight,followedby32%whopreferafoodparty.2.2The‘outingatweekends’wasthetopchoiceforcelebration,favoredbyasignificantmajoritywith88%ofthevotes.Sharingfoodanddrinkscameinsecond,preferredby32%,whilewatchingEnglishmoviesattractedtheleastinterestat59%.2.3Thesurveyrevealsthat88%ofstudentsarekeenoncelebratingwithaweekendouting.Sharingfoodanddrinksalsofoundfavor,accountingfor59%.Ontheotherhand,watchingEnglishmoviesfellbehind,withonly32%ofthevotes.2.4Fromthesurvey,outingsonweekendsandEnglishmovienightsarefavoredby88%and59%ofusrespectively,with32%keenonsharingfoodanddrinks.3.建議+理由3.1Mysuggestionisinlinewiththedesireofmanytoengageinamoreactiveandoutdooractivity,whichwouldserveasarefreshingbreakfromouracademicroutine.Moreover,anoutingallowsustorelaxandcelebrateoursuccessinawaythatisbothhealthyandinclusive,acmodatingavarietyofinterestsandpreferences.3.2Iwouldoptforthe"outingatweekends"asthecelebrationmethodduetoitsoverwhelmingpopularityandtheopportunityitpresentsforfosteringcamaraderieandcreatinglastingmemoriesamongstudents.Additionally,itoffersachanceforrelaxationandpersonalinteraction,whichcanbebothrefreshingandeducational.3.3Mypreferenceagreeswiththemajority,soIsuggestahikingtripalongthenearbygreenway,whichhaslivelyplantsandstunningviews.Suchanoutingisperfectforustotakeabreakfromstudyroutines,strengthenfriendshipandmakeoursuccessmorememorable.4.禮貌回扣4.1Ieagerlyawaityourthoughtsonthissuggestionandlookforwardtocelebratingourvictorytogether.4.2Thanksagainforyourthoughtfulgesture.Lookingforwardtoourexcitingcelebration!4.3I’llappreciateitifyoucantakemysuggestionintoaccount.4.4Iamconfidentthatanoutingwillnotonlybeadelightfulexperiencebutalsoameaningfulwaytocelebrateoursuccess.Ilookforwardtohearingyourthoughtsonthisproposal.官方范文：DearJames,Ihopethisemailfindsyouwell.WearegratefulforyourenthusiasmincelebratingourclasswinningthefirstprizeattheEnglishDramaFestival.Yoursupportmeansalottous!BasedonthesurveyIconducted,88%ofusareenthusiasticaboutaweekendouting,while59%favouranEnglishmovienight,followedby32%whopreferafoodparty.Mypreferenceisinlinewiththemajority,soIsuggestahikingtripalongthenearbygreenway,whichhaslivelyplantsandstunningviews.Suchanouting