備考2024屆高考英語一輪復(fù)習(xí)第二部分讀后續(xù)寫專題二熱考話題素材4同學(xué)關(guān)系

熱考話題4同學(xué)關(guān)系[2022浙江1月改編]WhenDr.Hendersonwasassigning（指定）projectmatesforhispsychologyclass，IsecretlyhopedthathewouldpairmewithmybestfriendoratleastaclassmateIcouldhavesomefunwith.Aboveall，Ihopedhewouldn’tassignmetoworkwiththefiercelycompetitiveandextremelyseriousfellowwhoalwaysworedarkclothesandapparentlyhadapersonalitytomatch.Asfate（命運(yùn)）wouldhaveit，Dr.HendersonverydeliberatelymatchedeveryoneinclassandannouncedthatIwouldbeworkingwiththeonepersoninclassIwantedtoavoid.Iwentuptomynewteammateandintroducedmyself.HelookedatmeasthoughIweren’tthere.IfelthetreatedmeasthoughIwouldholdhimbackandprobablymakehimfailtogetanAinthecourse.Hewasn’tmeanorabusive；hejustgavemetheimpressionthathecoulddowhateverprojectwedreamedupbetterifhediditalone.Needlesstosay，Ididn’tlookforwardtoanentiretermofbeingbrushedoff，butItriedtomakethebestofitanddidn’tsayanythingforfearthatIwouldmakethingsworse.Theprojectrequiredeachteamtodevelopahypothesis（假說），setupanexperimenttotestthehypothesis，dothestatisticalanalysisandpresentthefindings.Whatevergradetheteamreceivedwouldbesharedbybothstudents.WhenmyteammateandImettodiscussourproject，Iwasuneasy.Herewasthischallengingstudentwhohadareputationforsingle-mindednessandgoodgrades—theexactoppositeofme.Iactuallywantedtodroptheclassatonepoint，butstoppedshortbecauseIdidn’twanttogivehimthesatisfactionofmychickeningout.Idecidedtosticktoitnomatterwhat.Afterlongdiscussionswesomehowagreedtodoastudyonthepsychologicalwell-beingofteenagers.Iwasn’tsurewhatitmeantexactly，butatleastwehadatopic.Westartedtomeetregularlytodrawupourplans.OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtothehospitalforaseriousdisease.人物主要人物myteammate：文中描述的"fiercelycompetitiveandextremelyserious""dowhateverproject...betterifhediditalone"和"hadareputationforsingle-mindednessandgoodgrades"表明，myteammate成績優(yōu)異、性情高傲、學(xué)習(xí)專注、好勝心強(qiáng)，且"我"和"我"的隊友關(guān)系冷淡，似乎互相看不上對方。主要人物"I"：從文中描述的"makethebestofitanddidn’tsayanything""single-mindednessandgoodgrades—theexactoppositeofme"和"decidedtosticktoitnomatterwhat"可以看出，"我"學(xué)習(xí)成績一般、性情隨和、努力且不輕言放棄。兩個主要人物幾乎相反的性格為續(xù)寫部分兩人合作中的摩擦埋下了伏筆，第五段尾句"Idecidedtosticktoitnomatterwhat"也為續(xù)寫部分"我"在項(xiàng)目中起到積極作用奠定了基礎(chǔ)。情節(jié)及情感線"我"被安排與一位自己原本想避開的同學(xué)合作（感到自己很不幸）→"我"主動向隊友介紹自己，卻被冷漠對待（感覺自己被忽視，同時很擔(dān)心倆人的合作）→"我"與隊友會面討論項(xiàng)目（面對優(yōu)秀的隊友，"我"自慚形穢，想放棄但又不甘心，于是決定堅持）→最終確定了課題（感到一絲寬慰）主題根據(jù)續(xù)寫兩段提示語可知，"我"和隊友開始逐漸進(jìn)入狀態(tài)，但隊友卻因病住院，結(jié)合讀后續(xù)寫"結(jié)局圓滿"的原則可以推測，"我"和隊友在合作上應(yīng)該是從消極配合到積極參與，最終研究項(xiàng)目一定會成功。文章最終是要體現(xiàn)戰(zhàn)勝困難、精誠合作、隊友情深的主題。續(xù)寫第一段根據(jù)原文中講到的人物性格特征和續(xù)寫第一段的提示語可知，本段主要講"我"和隊友定期碰面推進(jìn)項(xiàng)目、相互磨合的情景，主要通過敘述和心理描寫展現(xiàn)搭檔在推進(jìn)項(xiàng)目中的表現(xiàn)、"我"對此的反應(yīng)、倆人關(guān)系的發(fā)展情況。續(xù)寫第二段根據(jù)續(xù)寫第二段提示語以及續(xù)寫"故事曲折，結(jié)局圓滿"的原則可知，本段應(yīng)該主要講述在得知隊友生病后，"我"的反應(yīng)、"我"對待項(xiàng)目的態(tài)度、為了最終完成項(xiàng)目"我"做了哪些努力等。尾句可以升華主題："我們"意識到了團(tuán)隊合作的重要性。1.Hetookchargeoftheproject.①增加副詞，凸顯隊友的專權(quán)。Hetookchargeoftheprojecttotally.②為句①補(bǔ)充as引導(dǎo)的原因狀語從句，講述隊友專權(quán)的原因。Ashewasafiercelycompetitivefellow，hetookchargeoftheprojecttotally.③為句②補(bǔ)充結(jié)果，并運(yùn)用現(xiàn)在分詞短語作狀語，講述隊友專權(quán)對"我"的影響，體現(xiàn)初期合作的不順暢。Ashewasafiercelycompetitivefellow，hetookchargeoftheprojecttotally，leavingmedoingnothingbutsimplyfollowinghisstepsandinstructions.2.Iwenttothehospital.①增加副詞，并用hurry替換句中的go，體現(xiàn)"我"想去探望隊友的急切心情。Immediately，Ihurriedtothehospital.②為句①增加定語從句，講述"我"在醫(yī)院了解到的情況，使故事性更強(qiáng)，情節(jié)更完整。Immediately，Ihurriedtothehospital，whereIlearnedthathehadtobehospitalizedforquiteawhile.3.Itriedhardtodotheproject.①用putallmyheartinto替換tryhard，體現(xiàn)用詞的豐富性。Iputallmyheartintodoingtheproject.②用原文中的表達(dá)細(xì)化句①中做項(xiàng)目的過程，使情節(jié)發(fā)展更加自然完整。Iputallmyheartintodoingtheanalysisandpresentingourfindings.③用with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)優(yōu)化句②，并用副詞體現(xiàn)"我"分析和呈現(xiàn)結(jié)果的狀態(tài)，凸顯"我"的努力和認(rèn)真。Withallmyheartputintotheproject，Ididtheanalysisaccuratelyandpresentedourfindingsreasonably.Westartedtomeetregularlytodrawupourplans.Ashewasafiercelycompetitivefellow，hetookchargeoftheprojecttotally，leavingmedoingnothingbutsimplyfollowinghisstepsandinstructions.Thoughunwilling（盡管不情愿），Ididmypartbutdiditinablindway.Astheprojectprogressed，Iseemedtogetthetrick，whichbuiltupmyconfidence（增強(qiáng)了我的信心）andmademyteammateslightlyrelieved.Atthispoint，westartedtoreallyworkasateam.OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtothehospitalforaseriousdisease.Immediately，Ihurriedtothehospital，whereIlearnedthathehadtobehospitalizedforquiteawhile.Seeingtheworryandweaknesswrittenonhisface（看著他臉上的憂慮和虛弱），IassuredhimthatIwouldcarryonwithourproject.Withallmyheartputintotheproject（我全身心投入到這個項(xiàng)目中），Ididtheanalysisaccuratelyandpresente