2023學年完整公開課版作文復習

EnglishWriting11年BreakfastIsImy_____Teacher中考書面表達貼近生活，貼近時代,作文題目由限制性題目到半開放性題目，提示性詞語越來越少，而給同學們的空間越來越大影響作文分數(shù)的因素：

題目要求、內(nèi)容要點；句子準確、通順；層次結(jié)構(gòu)清晰；拼寫、語法等錯誤；卷面整潔度；Howtowriteagoodcomposition?書面表達六步法一、審題體裁，時態(tài)，人稱，要求，提示我們每個人都應(yīng)該懂得感恩，學會感恩，在你成長的過程中，老師對你幫助很大，根據(jù)下列表格寫一篇短文

TheteacheryouwanttothankPersonalitykind,easygoingHelphelp...with,encourage,cheerupFeeling...Wishes...體裁時態(tài)人稱要求提示審題記敘文一般現(xiàn)在時，一般過去時第三人稱題目補充完整，感恩personalities,help,feeling,wishes書面表達六步法二、列提綱，抓要點我們每個人都應(yīng)該懂得感恩，學會感恩，在你成長的過程中，老師對你幫助很大，根據(jù)下列表格寫一篇短文

TheteacheryouwanttothankPersonalitykind,easygoingHelphelp...with,encourage,cheerupFeeling...Wishes...分幾段根據(jù)段落整理寫作要點1.教師個人特點信息(綜述)（Who...easygoing,kind...）2.教師事跡（正文）（Why...help...with,encourage,cheer...up）3.我的感受，希望（結(jié)尾）（feelings....thanks，wishes...）Outline三、擴展成句書面表達六步法在提綱的基礎(chǔ)上補充要點,把要點擴展成句，（在無把握情況下盡量使用簡單句，有把握的情況下句式可以多樣化,選好詞句，美化文章）選好詞句，美化文章例如；1.我喜歡爬山，我妹妹喜歡游泳，我哥哥喜歡音樂。Ilikeclimbingsisterenjoysswimming,whilemybrotherisfondofmusic.Eg:盡力去做。。。tryone'sbesttodo(makeeffortstodo)玩得開心enjoyoneself(haveagoodtime)

避免重復選好詞句，美化文章例如；2..thank.teacher.Jack。IwanttothankmyEnglishteacher,hisnameisJack.--TheteacherIwanttothankmostisJack,myEnglishteacher.

3.he,handsomeboy,humorHeisahandsomeboy.Hehasasenseofhumor.Heisahandsomeboywithasenseofhumor.

better用介詞短語替換句子可以使用復合句選好詞句，美化文章,workinXindeSchool,graduatefromcollege--Afterhegraduatedfromthecollege,heworkedinXindeSchool.--HeworkedinXindeSchoolaftergraduatingfromthecollege.用分詞替代從句5.感謝他為我所做的。Thankhimforwhathedidforme.I'mgratefultohimforwhathedidforme.使用高級詞匯1.教師個人特點信息(綜述)（Who...easygoing,kind...）2.教師事跡（正文）（Why...help...with,encourage,cheer...up）3.我的感受，希望（結(jié)尾）（feelings....thanks，wishes...）根據(jù)提綱擴展成句TheteacherIwanttothankmostis...,my...teacher.She/Heiskindandeasygoing.Sheismyteacher,sheismyfriends,too.ShealwayshelewithmyEnglish.WhenIfailed,he/sheencouragedme....He/Shecheersmeuveryhae.Ihoorestudentslikeme....擴展成句Walkingtoschoolisawonderfulwaytoexercise.Nowletmetellyousomeadvantagesofit.Second,it’sgoodfortheenvironment.Itdoesn’tcauseairpollutionanditcansaveenergy.Third,whenwewalkwithourclassmates,wecantalkaboutsomethinginterestingandknoweachotherbetter.Also,wehelpeachother.What’smore,ifwewalk,ourparentsdon’thavetosendustoschool.Wecanlookafterourselves.Asaresult,therewillbefewercarsinthecity.Thenthestreetsarenolongercrowed.Ihooreandmorestudentswillgotoschoolonfoot.First,it’sgoodforhealthandit’ssafe.四、連句成文時間空間細節(jié)連貫呼應(yīng)注意常用承接，過渡詞語以使行文連貫,美化文章書面表達六步法注意過渡，美化文章例如；Everycoinhastwosides.It'seasyforyoutobuygoodsontheInternetShoaycauseawasteofmoney.

betterEverycoinhastwosides.Ontheonehand,it'seasyforyoutobuygoodsontheInternet.Ontheotherhand,shoaycauseawasteofmoney.常用連接詞表示原因表示結(jié)果表示順序表示總結(jié)表示目的because;for…;becauseof…;thankstoso;asaresult;so…that…;such...thatfirst...second...then...afterthat...finally;...sothat…;inorderthat…;(inorderto)inall/short;inaword;lastbutnotleast;last;...MyEnglishteacherTheteacherIwanttothankmostisMissWang,myEnglishteacher.SheiskindandisnotonlymyteacherbutalsomyIfailedtheexam,sheencouragedmeandhele.Withherheladegreateuverygladtobeherstudent.Thanksforwhatshehaddoneforme.Ihopeshewillbehappyandhealthyforever.1.詞數(shù)是否達到90詞2.要點是否齊全3.語法(grammarmistakes)主謂是否一致動詞的時態(tài)是否合理語態(tài)的使用是否正確詞組的搭配是否合乎習慣4.單詞拼寫(sistakes)5.大小寫(caistakes)...五、查錯改錯書面表達六步法MyEnglishteacherIlikeEnglishteacherbecausesheiskindandeasygoing.Whenshegaveuslessonsforthefirsttime,Shesaidshehoeyoufriend.WelistenedcarefullyinherEnglishclassandshe,sheencouragesmeandcheeredmeoftenhelewithmyEnglish.SomyEnglishmadeyEnglishteacherhappy.ourplayedencouragedSoImadegreatyEnglishwillbehappyhelps六、謄寫用水筆謄寫,注意字跡要求整潔端正.書面表達六步法卷面整潔一定會加分，卷面潦草一定要扣分！課堂練習Writetheoutline我們每個人都有許多朋友，在你成長的過程中，哪個朋友對你幫助、影響最大。根據(jù)下列表格寫一篇短文(詞數(shù)90左右)

MybestfriendPersonalitywarm-hearted,easygoing,patientrelationshipgetalongwith,learn...from,help...introublelooks...Feeling/Wishes...SharingTimeWhodidbest!1.朋友個人特點信息(綜述)（Who,warm-hearted,easygoing,...）3.我的祝愿（結(jié)尾）（feelings....thanks，wishes...）OutlineSummary審題，列綱擴句，連文查錯，抄謄書面表達六步法HomeworkFinishyourcomposition

Thankyou！請不吝賜教！2014福州市質(zhì)檢作文評分標準第一檔（12-15）包含所有信息，內(nèi)容完整，語句通順，意思連貫，沒有或基本沒有拼寫，語法錯誤，書寫規(guī)范，詞數(shù)符合要求。第二檔（8-11）包含大部分信息，內(nèi)容比較完整，表達基本清楚，語句較通順，有少量語法，拼寫錯誤，書寫規(guī)范，詞數(shù)基本符合要求。第三檔（4-7）寫出基本信息，語句較通順，但句子比較簡單，表達不夠清楚，有部分語法和拼寫錯誤。第四檔（1-3）僅能傳遞個別信息，通篇只有個別句子可讀。第五檔（0分）只字未寫，通篇不知所云或?qū)懙膬?nèi)容與所要求的內(nèi)容無關(guān)。MybestfriendJaneismybestisverybeautifulwithlongblackhair.(2分)Sheiswarm-heartedandeasygoing.(2分)Soshegetsalongwellwithherclassmates.(2分)Besides,JaneisalwaysreadytoheleIhads,Ialwaysturnedtoher.Shewaseandgavememuchhelakeuymindtolearnfromher.I'dliketosaythankstoherforthekindnessshehasshown.（只要能寫出"感受"句子沒錯就給2.5分）Ihopeourfriendshipcanlastforever.（只要能寫出"希望"句子沒錯就給2.5分）

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