【高考英語書面表達】讀后續(xù)寫與概要寫作

考點33書面表達之讀后續(xù)寫

序號內(nèi)容

1考點解讀命題趨勢

2考向策略答題技巧真題（典例）引領(lǐng)

3考點過關(guān)真題再現(xiàn)模擬檢測

【考點解讀】

讀后續(xù)寫是隨著我國高考改革由教育部考試中心研制的英語高考新題型，2016年10

月在浙江省首次使用。該題型通過讀寫結(jié)合，檢測學生的英語書面語言理解與表達能力。

要求學生能夠梳理故事文體的結(jié)構(gòu)、分析故事發(fā)展的線索、想像故事發(fā)展的情節(jié)以及續(xù)寫

故事的發(fā)展和結(jié)局。

從試題結(jié)構(gòu)看，讀后續(xù)寫評價的是書面理解能力和書面表達能。因此，在寫作之前，首

先讀懂文本，理清故事情節(jié)，然后構(gòu)思故事的發(fā)展和結(jié)局。下面介紹一下讀后續(xù)寫的答題

技巧：

【考向策略】

答題技巧

第一步：通讀文本，提取線索詞和信息句，寫出每段段落大意。

第二步：根據(jù)文本每段內(nèi)容，結(jié)合所給續(xù)寫部分的首句，構(gòu)思完整的故事情節(jié)。

第三步：根據(jù)續(xù)寫部分所提供的首句，寫出續(xù)寫部分每段的段落大意，圍繞續(xù)寫

部分的段落大意進行合理的細節(jié)描寫。

第四步：潤色成篇。

真題X典例）引領(lǐng)1

【2021?全國新高考1卷】

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

AMOTHER'SDAYSURPRISE

Thetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningfor

Mother'sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.

TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthe

kitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.

Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothe

kitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.Theyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftitto

boilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.

Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstove

burnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.

Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothe

sinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.

ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,

theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmand

turnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycould

continuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJefTshandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryof

pain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!

Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.

注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右。

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。

Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.

Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.

【答案】Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Father's

appearingwaslikeasaviortothetwochildren.Undertheguidanceoftheirfather,theytook

positiveactionsandstartedalloveragain.Theymadethebreadandthenwentoncookingporridge.

Fatherhelpedthemadjustthefire,whichwasthekeytosuccess.Itwasallrightthistime.Delicious

breakfastwasready.Howhappytheywere!

Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Whentheirmothersawthe

deliciousandperfectbreakfastinfrontofher,shewasverysurprised.Itwasnotonlythegift,butthe

loveofthechildrenforherthatmovedherverymuch.Thetwochildrencouldfinishcookinga

breakfast,whichshedidn'texpect.Thechildrensaidloudly,uHappyMother'sDay!”Mother

huggedthemtightlyandkissedthemagainandagain.

【解析】

【分析】本文以母親節(jié)為線索展開，講述了雙胞胎Jenna和Jeff為了獻給母親一份美味的早

餐，自己動手，做起飯餐來，但是不幸的是，他們連連失敗，后來在父親的幫助下，獲得

成功，他們把早餐獻給親愛的母親，媽媽非常感動的故事。

【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫：

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“當雙胞胎失望地環(huán)顧四周時，他們的父親出現(xiàn)了?“可知，第一段可

描寫他們的父親指導幫助他們準備早餐。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“這對雙胞胎把早餐端到樓上，叫醒了他們的母親。“可知，第二段可

描寫母親收到孩子們的禮物早餐，非常感動。

2.續(xù)寫線索：幫助一指導一積極一獻禮—感動

3.詞匯激活

行為類

①幫助：help/assist

②.指導：guide/conduct

③.獻禮：presentagift/giveagift

情緒類

①.積極：positive/positively/takepositiveactions

②.感動:moved/touched

【點睛】

[高分句型1].Fatherhelpedthemadjustthefire,whichwasthekeytosuccess.

（which引導的非限制性定語從句）

[高分句型2].Itwasnotonlythebreakfast,buttheloveofthechildrenforherthatmovedhervery

much.（使用notonly...but（also）句型及強調(diào)句型）

真題（典例）引領(lǐng)2|

【2020?浙江】

閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。

Onefall,mywifeElliandIhadasinglegoal:to-holographpolarbears.Wewerestayingata

researchcampoutside“thepolarbearcapitaloftheworld^-thetownofChurchillin

Manitoba,Canada.

Takingpicturesofpolarbearsisamazingbutalsodangerous.Polarbears-likeallwild

animals-shouldbephotographedfromasafedistance.WhenI'mfacetofacewithapolarbear,I

likeittobethroughacamerawithatelephotolens.Butsometimes,thatiseasiersaidthandone.

Thiswasoneofthosetimes.

AsElliandIcookeddinner,ayoungmalepolarbearwhowasplayinginanearbylake

sniffed,andsmelledourgarlicbread.

Thehungrybearfollowedhisnosetoourcamp,whichwassurroundedbyahighwirefence.

Hepulledandbitthewire.Hestoodonhisbacklegsandpushedatthewoodenfenceposts.

Terrified,ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.Weyelledatthebear,hitpots

hard,andfiredblankshotgunshellsintotheair.Sometimesloudnoiseslikethesewillscarebears

off.Notthispolarbearthough-hejustkepttryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassive

paws（爪子）.

Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp.Hetoldmeahelicopterwasonitsway,butitwouldbe

30minutesbeforeitarrived.Makingthebestofthiscloseencounter（相遇），Itooksomepicturesof

thebear.

Elliand1fearedthefencewouldn*tlastthrough30moreminutesofthebear'spunishment.The

campmanagersuggestedIusepepperspray.Thesprayburnsthebears'eyes,butdoesn'thurtthem.

SoIapproachedouruninvitedguestslowlyand,throughthefence,sprayedhimintheface.With

anangryroar（吼叫），thebearrantothelaketowashhiseyes.

注意:1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右；

2.至少使用5個短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；

3,續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好;

4.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。

【范文】

Paragraph1:Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.Heexposedhissharpteeth,

glaringatusasheranforward.Andagainthebearstoodonhisbacklegs,wantingtosnapatthe

fencelikeamonster.Itseemedthathismouthwasfullofbloodandhiseyeswereredwithanger.

Seeingsuchterriblesight,Icouldfeelacoldnessfloodingfrommyback.Elliswasstunnedthere,

withthemouthwidelyopen.Ihadtotakeaction,soIpickedmycourageandtriedtofrightenhim

awaywiththepepperspray,butfinallyfailed.

Paragraph2:Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.Itlandednearourcampanditsloud

noisesscaredthebear.Helookedirritatedandchargedatusagain.Icriedout,"Watchout!”We

instantlysteppedawayandranasfastaswecouldtothehelicopter.ThankMyGod!Wesucceeded

inclimbingontotothehelicopter,gaspingwithrelief.Lookingdownatthebear,wefoundthathe

waseatingthebreadwejustmade.Severalhourslater,wearrivedathomesafeandsound,butwe

realizedthatweshoulddosomethingtohelpthebears.

【解析】

讀后續(xù)寫作為新題型之一，突出考查了考生根據(jù)所獲得的綜合信息，吸收，內(nèi)化并轉(zhuǎn)變成

自我語言的一種能力，同時通過對文本結(jié)構(gòu)的分析和合理性地推測與想象，用自己的語言

接續(xù)文本，體現(xiàn)了核心素養(yǎng)中的思維品質(zhì)和語言能力。讀后續(xù)寫是對原文的閱讀，然后進

行“狗尾續(xù)貂”，在寫作時，要注意“三個讀”：先讀原文，了解文章的大意，主旨，文章邏

輯結(jié)構(gòu)，故事的6要素，情節(jié)發(fā)展等等；第二讀要注意10個關(guān)鍵詞，對關(guān)鍵詞進行合理地分

類，確定哪些是最重要的詞，哪些次之，然后構(gòu)思合理的使用；第三讀要注意讀給出的兩

個首句，確定全文結(jié)尾的邏輯關(guān)系。與此同時，也要注意字數(shù)的安排，控制在150+20左右

,建議兩段的長短均勻為宜。

真題（典例）引領(lǐng)3|

[202（）年全國新高考1】

閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

TheMeredithfamilylivedinasmallcommunity.Astheeconomywasindecline,somepeople

inthetownhadlosttheirjobs.Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet.People

weretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges.

Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman.Shespentagreatdealoftimevisiting

thepoor.Sheknewtheyhadproblems,andtheyneededallkindsofhelp.Whenshehadtime,she

wouldbringfoodandmedicinetothem.

Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore.Therewasa

mansickinbed,hiswife,whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork,andtheirlittleboy.

Thelittleboy-hisnamewasBernard-hadinterestedherverymuch.

“Iwishyoucouldseehim,“shesaidtoherownchildren,John,Harry,andClara.t4Heissucha

helptohismother.Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney,but1don*tseewhathecando.”

Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom,thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard.wishwecouldhelp

himtoearnmoney,“saidClara."Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch.^^

“SodoI,“saidHarry.44Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem.^^

Forsomemoments,Johnsaidnothing,but,suddenly,hesprangtohisfeetandcried,“Ihavea

greatidea!Ihaveasolutionthatwecanallhelpaccomplish（完成）

Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention.WhenJohnhadanidea,itwassuretobea

goodone."Itellyouwhatwecando,“saidJohn.44YouknowthatbigboxofcomUncleJohnsentus?

Well,wecanmakepopcorn（爆米花）,andputitintopaperbags,andBernardcantakeitaroundto

thehousesandsellit.”

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右：

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。

WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.

Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.

【范文】

WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.So,theywenttothe

localsupermarkettogether.Theyboughtabagofcomandsomespecialbagsforpopcorn.When

theygothome,theymadealotofpopcornandputitinthespecialbags.Withthepopcorn,theywent

toBernard'shome.TheytoldBernardhowtosellthepopcorn.Bernardandhisparentswerevery

grateful.AndtheMeredithfamilyalsofeltveryhappytohelpthisfamily.

Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Hetookthepopcornaroundto

thehousesandsoldallhispopcorn.Heearnedalotofmoney.Then,hewantedtobeself-dependent.

Therefore,heaskedMrs.Meredithtoteachhimhowtomakepopcorn.Afterthat,notonlydidhe

sellpopcorn,buthealsoaddedcreamandsalttothepopcorntomakeittastebetter.Bernardgrew

uptobearemarkableman.HedidnotforgetthehelpofMeredith'sfamily,andhealsodidwhathe

couldtohelpthoseinneed.

【解析】本文是根據(jù)短文進行續(xù)寫，使之成為一個完整的故事。

1.認真讀懂所給提供的材料:善良的Meredith一家住在一個小社區(qū)里，他們想幫助一個貧困

的家庭。那家的男主人生病臥床，女主人要照顧丈夫、無法外出賺錢，家中的小男孩Bema

rd也做不了什么事情，生活十分困難。后來，Meredith的孩子想出了一個主意-制作爆米花

,讓Bernard去賣爆米花。

2.根據(jù)所給材料確定文章主題:Meredith如何通過制作和賣爆米花幫助Bernard一家擺脫困境

的。

3.續(xù)寫部分和前面的文章銜接得上，并且與原文情節(jié)發(fā)展和人物性格相一致，故事情節(jié)的

向后延續(xù)發(fā)展要合乎情理。

4.根據(jù)第一一段首句WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,

too.（當Meredith太太聽到John的主意時，她也認為這是個好主意）可以針對如何實現(xiàn)制作爆

米花這個提議展開構(gòu)思；根據(jù)第二段首句Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnew

business.（一切準備就緒后，Bernard開始了他的新生意）可以針對Bernard如何通過賣爆米花

讓家庭擺脫困境展開構(gòu)思。

5.續(xù)寫的語言要盡可能與原文的語言保持風格上的一致。文章時態(tài)以一般過去時為主。應

使用自己熟悉的句型和短語進行寫作，考生要注意盡可能使句子的表達形式多樣化，適當

的使用一些高級句式和高級詞匯，以提高書面表達的檔次和可讀性。作文要層次清晰，要

點全面，表達流暢，切合題干要求，句子結(jié)構(gòu)準確，適當補充信息，使篇章結(jié)構(gòu)連貫。

【考點過關(guān)】

讓真題再現(xiàn)

（2018?浙江省高考真題）閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整故事

O

AVacationwithMyMother

Ihadaninterestingchildhood.Itwasfilledwithsurprisesandamusements,allbecauseofmy

mother-loving,sweet,yetabsent-mindedandforgetful.OnestrangefamilytripwetookwhenI

waseleventellsalotabouther.

MytwosetsofgrandparentslivedinColoradoandNorthDakota,andmyparentsdecidedto

spendafewweeksdrivingtothosestatesandseeingallthesightsalongtheway.Asthefirstdayof

ourtripapproached,David,myeight-year-oldbrother,andIunwillinglysaidgood-byetoallofour

friends.Whoknewifwe'deverseethemagain?Finally,themomentofourdeparturearrived,and

weloadedsuitcases,books,games,campingequipment,andatentintothecarandbravelydroveoff.

Webravelydroveoffagaintwohourslaterafterwe'dreturnedhometogetthepurseandtraveler's

checksMomhadforgotten.

DavidandIwerealwaysalittlenervouswhenusinggasstationbathroomsifMomwasdriving

whileDadslept:"Youstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookout（放哨）whileIgo,andI'llstand

outsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileyougo.”Ihadterriblepicturesinmymind:"Honey,where

arethekids?”"What?!Oh,Gosh...Ithoughttheywerebeingawfullyquiet.,,Wewerenever

actuallyleftbehindinastrangecity,butweweren'tabouttotakeanychances.

Onthefourthorfifthnight,wehadtroublefindingahotelwithavacancy.Afterdrivinginvain

forsometime,Momsuddenlygotagreatidea:Whydidn'twefindahousewithalikely-looking

backyardandaskifwecouldsetuptentthere?DavidandIbecamenervous.Toourgreatrelief,Dad

turneddowntheidea.Momnevercouldunderstandourobjections（反對）.Ifastrangefamily

showeduponherfrontdoorstep,Momwouldhavebeendelighted.Shethinkseveryoneintheworld

isasniceassheis.Wefinallyfoundavacancyinthenexttown.

注意：

1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右；

2.至少使用5個短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；

3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭已為你寫好；

4.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。

Paragraph1:

Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.

Paragraph2:

Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.

（2017?浙江省高考直題）

第二節(jié)讀后續(xù)寫（滿分25分）

閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。

Onabright,wannJulyafternoon,MacHollan,aprimaryschoolteacher,wascyclingfromhis

hometoAlaskawithhisfriends.Oneofhisfriendshadstoppedtomakeabicyclerepair,butthey

hadencouragedMactocarryon,andtheywouldcatchupwithhimsoon.AsMacpedaled（騎行）

alongalone,hethoughtfondlyofhiswifeandtwoyoungdaughtersathome.Hehopedtoshow

themthisbeautifulplacesomeday.

ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim."Man,that*sabigdog!”hethought.But

whenhelookedtotheside,hesawinstantlythatitwasn'tadogatall,butawolf,quicklycatching

upwithhim.

Mac'sheartjumped.Hefoundouthiscanofhearspray.Withonehandonthebars,hefiredthe

sprayatthewolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMac'srelief,itfellback,shaking

itshead.Butaminutelater,itwasbyhissideagain.ThenitattackedthebackofMac'sbike,tearing

openhistentbag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime,andagain,itfellbackonlytoquicklyrestartthe

chase（追趕）。

Macwaspedalinghardnow.Hewavedandyelledatpassingcarsbutwascarefulnottoshow

down.Hesawasteepuphillclimbbeforehim.Heknewthatzxxkoncehehitthehill,he'dbeeasy

caughtupandthewolfsteethwouldbetearingintohisflesh.

Atthismoment,PaulandBeekyweredrivingtheircarontheirwaytoAlaska.Theydidn't

thinkmuchofitwhentheysawtwocyclistsrepairingtheirbikeonthesideoftheroad.Abitlater,

theyspottedwhatthey,too,assumedwasadogrunningalongsideamanonabike.Astheygot

closer,theyrealizedthatthedogwasawolf.Macheardalargevehiclebehindhim.Hepulledin

frontofitasthewolfwascatchingupfast,justadozenyardsawaynow.

注意：

1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右；

2.應使用5個以上短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；

3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段開頭語已為你寫好；

4.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。

2021.全國高考真題）閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事,

Mydad,George,onlyhadaneighthgradeeducation.Aquietman,hedidn*tunderstandmy

worldofschoolactivities.Fromage14,heworked.Andhisdad,Albert,tookthemoneymydad

earnedandusedittopayfamilyexpenses.

Ididn'treallyunderstandhisworldeither:Hewasalivestocktrucker,andIthoughtthatI

wouldsurpass（超過）anythinghehadaccomplishedbythetimeIwalkedacrossthestageathigh

schoolgraduation.

Summersinthemid-70swerespentathomeshootingbaskets,hittingabaseball,orthrowinga

football,preparingformyfutureasaquarterbackonafootballteam.Inpoorweather,Ireadabout

sportsorpracticedmytrombone（長號）.

ThesummerbeforemyeighthgradeIwasoneofagroupofboysthataneighboringfarmer

hiredtoworkinhisfield.Heexplainedourbasictask,thetractorfiredupandwewereoff,riding

downthefieldlookingforweedstospraywithchemicals.Afterashortway,thefarmerstoppedand

pointedataweedwhichwemissed.Thenwebeganagain.Thishappenedoverandover,butwe

soonlearnedtoidentifydifferentgrasseslikecockleburs,lamb's-quarters,foxtails,andthekingof

weeds,theprettypurplethistle.Itwastiringwork,butIlookedforwardtothepay,eventhoughI

wasn'tsurehowmuchitwouldamountto.

Athome,mydadsaid,"Ajob'sabigsteptogrowingup.I'mgladyouwillbecontributingto

thehousehold.0Mydad'swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmightnotbeminetodowithasI

wished.

Mylaborslastedabouttwoweeks,andthefarmersaidtheremightbemorework,butIwasn't

interested.IdecideditwasnotfajrthatIhadtocontributemymoney.

注意：

1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右；

2.至少使用5個短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；

3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；

4.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。

Paragraph1：Thepayarrivedatlast.

Paragraph2：Iunderstoodimmediatelywhatmyparentswereworriedabout.

模擬檢測,

（2021.重慶南開中學高三月考）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭續(xù)寫兩段，使

之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

In2019,1rescuedaskittishdonkey（容易受驚的驢）.Bocamefromanearbycattleranchand

nowlivespeacefullyonmyranchintheBitterrootValleyofMontana,alongwithanotherdonkey,

threehorses,andtwodogs.ButthekeytoBo'ssuccessfulrecoveryfromnervousrescuetohappy

ranchanimalwasn'tanythingIdid.Itwasmygrandson,Dylan.

Whenhewasjustshyoffouryearsold,DylancamewithhisparentstospendtheFourthofJuly

withmeontheirwaytoCanadaforavacation.Bokepthisdistancefromthegrown-ups,buthe

displayedanunusualfascinationwithDylan.Sowedecidedtointroducethem."Moveslowly,keep

yourarmsdown,bequiet,andstoopdownsometimes,vItoldmygrandson.Dylancautiously

approachedBo,stepbystep,holdingasoftrubbercomb.Boheldhisground,butheseemed

interestedwiththislittlevisitor.DylanrubbedBo'sshouldersandnecksoftlywiththecomb,

removingremainsofhisthickwintercoat.

Ifshardforanalmostfour-year-oldtostaystillforlong,andmotivationovercameself-control.

Dylanmadeonequickmove,andBojumpedoffwithlightsteps.ButBoandDylanwerenotready

togiveup.Dylanapproachedagain.Towitnessapreschoolerlearntocontrolhimselfinsuchashort

timewasamazing.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；

2.請按照如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。

Aswewatched,truelovedevelopedbetweenthisoncedistrustfuldonkeyandagentleboy.

Theymetagainoneweeklaterasthefamilypassedthroughontheirreturntrip.

（2021?重慶巴蜀中學高三月考）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭續(xù)寫兩段，使

之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Arshadhadbeenoutwindowshoppingwithhisparents.Thatwasalltheydidthesedays

becausetheydidn'thaveenoughmoneytoaffordalltheshinyclothes,shoesandotherfancyitems

thewindowsdisplayed.Evenfromadistance,theylookedsopromisingandinvitingthatone

couldn'thelpbutgooverandlookatthem.

EversinceArshad'sfatherlosthisbusinessandhadtoclosedownhisgarmentshop,Arshad's

familybarelyhadthemoneytomakeendsmeet.Theyevenhadtomovetoarentedhouse,which

wassmallerandwassituatedintheshabbierpartofthecity.Unlikehisprevioushouse,wherehe

hadabigluxuriousroomalltohimself,hereArshadhadtosharehisroomandbedwithhisnaughty

youngerbrotherwhoalwayshadtheroominahorriblemess.

Whatwasworse,theplaygroundinthisneighbourhoodwasnothingliketheoneinhis

previousneighbourhood;theswingswereallbroken,themonkeybarswereallrustedandgrimy,

andthesee-saw（蹺蹺板）onlyhadoneseat.Thereweren'tevenanybookshopsnearbywherehe

couldspendhisfreetime,flippingthroughhisfavouritecomicbooksandnovels.

Thatday,Arshadandhisbrotherweretemblyboredwhentheirfatherdecidedtotakethemall

outforwindowshopping.WhenhisfathersawthesadlookonArshad'sface,hesatdownnextto

himandsaidinasolemntone,"Remember,therearechildrenouttherewhodon'tevenhavethe

thingsyoudo,like,warmclothes,aroofovertheirheads,goodeducationandallthedeliciousmeals

thatyourmotherpreparesforyou,threetimesaday.Youshouldalwaysbegratefulforwhatyou

have.”

Afterthetriptothemall,Arshad'sfatherdecidedtotakehistwoboystoagovernmentschool

intheirneighbourhood.Thechildrenintheschoolbarelyhadchairsintheirclassrooms.Instead,

theysatonruggedcarpetsdrapedoverahard,stonefloor.Threeorfourchildrensharedtorn,

second-handbooksamongstthemselves.Theplaygrounddidn'tevenhaveanyswingsandthere

wasnotevenacafeteria!

注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。

Arshadrememberedhowhealwayscomplainedabouttheswingsinhisplayground.

Thinkingofthehappychildreninthatschool,Arshaddecidedtodosomething.

2021?湖南高三二模）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇

完整的短文。續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應為150左右。

WrinklesofconfusionrippledacrossHolly'sforeheadassheopenedthegiftfromherbest

friend,Susan.

“I…Ithoughtyoucoulduseitforsomething."Susan'sstammeredexplanationdidnothingto

helpusunderstandwhyatwelve-by-eighteen-inchdarkbluecarpetremnant（殘余物）wasbeing

presentedasabirthdaygift.

Holly,mydaughter,triedbravelynottoallowherdisappointmenttoshow.Shelaidthecarpet

onthekitchencounter,andthetwogirlsheadedoutsidetoplay.

Thenextmorning,Icarriedakitchenbagoutside.MyheartachedasIsawSusan'scarpetlying

inthetrashcan.Hesitatingonlyamoment,Ireachedinandpickeditup.Aftergivingitalight

brushing,Ibroughtitintothehouseandplaceditinthehallcloset.Occupiedwiththebusinessof

dailyliving,thecarpetwassoonforgotten.

PriortoHolly'sbirthday,Susanhadbeenaregularvisitorinourhome.Onseveraloccasions,

sherodethebushomewithHollyandwasoneofthefewfriendseverpermittedtostayoverona

schoolnight.ButnowIrealizedithadbeennearlythreeweekssincewe'devenheardmentionof

Susan'sname.Imissedherwarmsmileandeager-to-pleaseways.

Oneday,Hollyhadarrivedhomefromschool.4tSusaninvitedmetocomeovertoherhouse

afterschooltomorrow,sheannouncedasshetookherbooksdownonthekitchentable.Although

hervoicecarriedaso-whatattitude,Isensedshewaspleasedbytheinvitation.

Arrangementsweremade,andthegirlsrodehometogetherontheschoolbusthefollowingday.

AsInegotiatedthewindingcountryroadthatledtoherhouse,Susanchattednervouslyabouther

fostermomandtheseventeencatsshehadtakeninandcaredfor.SoonwearrivedatSusan'shouse.

Paragraph1:

Awomanwearingashapelesssweaterstoodinthedoorwaytogreetusasweapproachedthe

smallshabbyfarmhouse.

Paragraph2:

HearingmywordsabouteverythingofSusan,Hollysatsilentlyinthecar,withherhead

stretchingforward（前伸）asifwillingthecartomovefaster.

【考點過關(guān)】參考答案

唳真題再現(xiàn)

【范文】

Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.Thinkingofthistent,

Momsuggestedthatwegocampinginthenextvillageinexcitement,withhereyesglittering.

Consideringherenthusiasm,weallagreed.Whenthedoorofourcaropened,Momstormedout

instantlyandurgedustoputupthetent.DavidandIwereaskedtopickupsomebranchestobuilda

fire.Andwhenwecameback,DadandMomhadalreadylaindownthegrasscomfortablyinfront

ofthetent,talkingmerrilywithalocalboyatourage,whokeptglancingatthistentcuriously.Soon

welearntthattheboyinragsevendidn'thaveahometolivein.Ofcourse,Mom“fbrgot”totake

thistentwithusagain.

Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.Andwealsohadanice

timelivingwithmygrandparentsduringthattrip.Butwhatimpressedmemostwasthattent,which

wasforgottendeliberatelybyMom.Thoughshedidlovegoingcamping,shepresentedthatpoor

boywiththistentoutofsympathy.ItwasMomthatmademychildhoodcolorful.Anditwasalso

shethatshowedmethetruemeaningofgiving.

【解析】這是一篇讀后續(xù)寫。短文敘述了作者的母親很健忘，一家四口自駕旅游去祖父母

所居住的地方，途中發(fā)生了有趣的事情。

【詳解】

首先，根據(jù)文章當中第二段內(nèi)容比較開心的基調(diào)，第一段的故事情節(jié)應該比較偏向正面感

情色彩，例如：我們在露營過程中一起搭建帳篷的開心時光或露營過程中的趣事（尤其是前

文有鋪墊媽媽是個forgetful的人，這一點也可以埋下伏筆來表達后面過程中由于媽媽健忘而

帶來的趣事）（也有同學在此處描述了露營過程中對其他陌生人提供幫助，來集中體現(xiàn)nice這

一個點）；

其次，第二段開頭說來描述欣賞風景：

此處可以用一些描述景色環(huán)境的表達來烘托下氛圍，但是第二段不能僅僅只能有景色描述

;例如：這里可以實寫和虛寫結(jié)合的方式，看到景色（同時回憶往事），最終把故事的落腳

點放在“家人的感情"''親情”"生活的樂趣"''與媽媽一起的趣事”等等角度都可以的;當然也有

同學描述與陌生人的相遇，引出了陌生人的善意這個主題;總之這次的話題比較開放，情節(jié)

可以寫的角度比較多；

再次，除了情節(jié)方面的內(nèi)容以外，以下幾個方面是考生需要著重關(guān)注的得分點：字跡清晰

程度，語法多樣性和句式豐富性，銜接成分的使用，語言的場景恰當程度;高考英語寫作中

,考生所采用的句型結(jié)構(gòu)一定程度上影響了老師對考生寫作水平的判斷;說到語法豐富性方

面，例如在作文中用到從句結(jié)構(gòu)、強調(diào)句、非謂語結(jié)構(gòu)等。尤其應該注意的是：避免句型

單一化，如通篇使用定語從句，這樣反而使閱卷老師覺得該考生對句型掌握的不夠充分。

應該在文章寫作中有意識地多使用不同的句型結(jié)構(gòu)。

【點睛】

文章思路清晰，語言規(guī)范，段落整齊，語篇連貫，層次清晰。使用了較為高級的句式:虛

擬語氣和with復合結(jié)構(gòu)Momsuggestedthatwegocampinginthenextvillageinexcitement,

withhereyesglittering.Consideringherenthusiasm,weallagreed.

what引導的主語從句和which引導的非限制性定語從句Butwhatimpressedmemostwasthat

tent,whichwasforgottendeliberatelybyMom.

高級句式的應用提升了寫作的檔次，整個短文顯示出了作者高水平的英語表達能力。

遇皿gggj?

【范文】Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.PaulandBeckygotoutofthecar

immediatelytogivethehelp.Withnothingonthehand,theydidn'tdaretofightagainstthewolf.

However,theystillapproachedtothewolfbravely.Atthesametime,thewolfalsonoticedthem

andturneditsheadback,howlingangrilytowardsPaulandBecky.Macthenjumpedoffthebicycle

andwasreadytofightagainstthewolf.Thencamethedeadlock.

Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.Theyfoundthedangeroussituation,where

threemencircledthewolf.Mac*sfriendsalsojumpedofftheirbicyclesandjoinedthefightwiththe

wolf.Moreandmorecarsstopped.Somedriverstookoutthesticksfromthecars,andsometook

outtheknives,eventhegunstowardsthewolf.Inthemeanwhile,thewolfmightfeelthepeople's

threatsaround,soitbegantostepbackslowly.Soon,itranawayofftheroadanddisappearedinthe

distance.

【解析】

本文主要講述了Mac在騎自行車前往阿拉斯加的途中，被一只狼追趕的故事。時態(tài)要

考慮以一般過去時為主，人稱以第三人稱為主。同時要兼顧字數(shù)的要求，不要過多，關(guān)鍵

詞列出5個以上，需要均勻分布在兩段中?？忌⒁鈳讉€關(guān)鍵信息和情節(jié)變化并結(jié)合給出

的內(nèi)容提示進行合理構(gòu)思。

Thepayarrivedatlast.Althoughthejobwasverytiring,Iwasveryhappyinmy