讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)主題語(yǔ)境01校園生活課件-高考英語(yǔ)一輪復(fù)習(xí)

校園生活PART01語(yǔ)篇演練MyBestTeachingExperienceHehadbeeninsomuchtroubleovertheyears.Heexpectedhisteacherstoknowabouthispast:abouthowmanytimeshehadbeensenttotheofficeorsuspendedfromschool.Ihadfoundthatthesesortsofreferrals(移交)werenotveryeffectiveandthatstudentswouldreturnfromtheofficebehavingworsethanbefore.Oneday,TylerwastalkingovermewhileIwasteaching.Istoppedmylessonandsaid,“Tyler,whydon’tyoujoininourdiscussioninsteadofhavingoneofyourown?”Withthat,hegotupfromhischair,pusheditoverandyelledsomething.Ican’trememberwhathesaidotherthanthatheincludedsomeimpolitewords.IsentTylerstraighttotheoffice,andhereceivedaweek’ssuspension.MyBestTeachingExperienceMyBestTeachingExperience1.connectwith(sb.)2.get(sb.)involvedin...3.bycontrast4.push(sb./sth.)over 5.otherthan6.befearfulof(sth.)（一）找出詞塊對(duì)應(yīng)的中文含義并連線A.除……之外B.使（某人）參與C.害怕/擔(dān)心（某事）D.相比之下；與……相反E.把（某人或某物）推倒F.與（某人）建立良好關(guān)系，溝通（二）概括原文故事情節(jié)beensuspendedtoconnectseriouslytojoin effectiveimpolite（一）語(yǔ)篇表達(dá)意圖（why）——故事主題閱讀材料，找出最能體現(xiàn)故事主題的兩個(gè)詞。①celebration ②understanding ③friendship④change ⑤charity ⑥loyalty沖突：_________________________________________________↓行動(dòng)：_________________________________________________↓解決：_________________________________________________（二）語(yǔ)篇表達(dá)內(nèi)容（what）——故事情節(jié)（1）情節(jié)結(jié)構(gòu)“我”和Tyler產(chǎn)生矛盾，他因大鬧課堂被停課。Unfortunately,everytimeIcalledonTyler,hewouldrespondwithajoke.Bycontrast,Tylerwasoftenloudandsometimesrude.Oneday,TylerwastalkingovermewhileIwasteaching.Istoppedmylessonandsaid,“Tyler,whydon’tyoujoininourdiscussioninsteadofhavingoneofyourown?”Withthat,hegotupfromhischair,pusheditoverandyelledsomething.Ican’trememberwhathesaidotherthanthatheincludedsomeimpolitewords.IsentTylerstraighttotheoffice,andhereceivedaweek’ssuspension.（二）語(yǔ)篇表達(dá)內(nèi)容（what）——故事情節(jié)沖突：↓行動(dòng)：_________________________________________________↓解決：_________________________________________________續(xù)寫(xiě)部分Tyler意識(shí)到自己的問(wèn)題并加以改正。（1）情節(jié)結(jié)構(gòu)“我”和Tyler產(chǎn)生矛盾，他因大鬧課堂被停課。（二）語(yǔ)篇表達(dá)內(nèi)容（what）——故事情節(jié)（2）情節(jié)線索MyBestTeachingExperienceTylerenteredmyseniorclass.Aboutamonthintotheyear,IwasstilltryingtoconnectwithTyler.Oneday,TylerwastalkingovermewhileIwasteaching.TheweekTylerwassuspendedfromschool.OnthedayofTyler’sreturn...Ithoughttheworst.________________________...時(shí)間線情感線續(xù)寫(xiě)部分①②③在①②③三個(gè)時(shí)間點(diǎn)，“我”分別有怎樣的情感？A.Ifeltfrustrated(沮喪的).B.Iwasdesperate(絕望的)andcouldn’tstanditanymore.C.Ifeltrelieved(如釋重負(fù)的),butwasfearfulofhisreturn.ABC（二）語(yǔ)篇表達(dá)內(nèi)容（what）——故事情節(jié)（3）伏筆與呼應(yīng)這三個(gè)句子表明了“我”在經(jīng)歷了一系列事件后意識(shí)到移交和停課之類的懲罰措施對(duì)Tyler確實(shí)沒(méi)效果，所以接下來(lái)在續(xù)寫(xiě)部分（第一段）“我”可能會(huì)轉(zhuǎn)變思路，用其他方式解決問(wèn)題。分析Icanusuallygetstudentsinvolvedinclassdiscussions...Bycontrast,Tylerwasoftenloudandsometimesrude.Tyler,whydon’tyoujoininourdiscussioninsteadofhavingoneofyourown?→_________________________________________________________________________________Tothispoint,thiswasoneofmyworstteachingexperiences.→__________________________________________________________________________________（二）語(yǔ)篇表達(dá)內(nèi)容（what）——故事情節(jié)（3）伏筆與呼應(yīng)練習(xí)Tyler積極參與到課堂討論當(dāng)中（第二段）。在Tyler發(fā)生改變之后，這段我之前覺(jué)得最糟糕的教學(xué)經(jīng)歷變成了最棒的經(jīng)歷（第二段結(jié)尾）。結(jié)合文中出現(xiàn)的以下伏筆，預(yù)測(cè)續(xù)寫(xiě)部分可能發(fā)生的改變。（二）語(yǔ)篇表達(dá)內(nèi)容（what）——故事人物（1）主次人物原文主要講述了師生之間矛盾的產(chǎn)生和激化，矛盾的雙方分別是“我”和Tyler，因此“我們”兩人是主要人物。分析續(xù)寫(xiě)段首句可知，后續(xù)情節(jié)中主要人物（?會(huì)?不會(huì)）發(fā)生變化。（二）語(yǔ)篇表達(dá)內(nèi)容（what）——故事人物（2）人物特點(diǎn)情緒描寫(xiě)、動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)。這些情節(jié)體現(xiàn)了Tyler目無(wú)尊長(zhǎng)、桀驁不馴的性格特點(diǎn)。在續(xù)寫(xiě)的第一段可以通過(guò)描寫(xiě)“我”在門口剛見(jiàn)到他時(shí)，他的一些行為來(lái)印證這一點(diǎn)。情緒描寫(xiě)動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)（二）語(yǔ)篇表達(dá)內(nèi)容（what）——故事環(huán)境原文的故事環(huán)境屬于（?自然環(huán)境?社會(huì)環(huán)境），地點(diǎn)主要設(shè)置在___________，續(xù)寫(xiě)部分可能出現(xiàn)的地點(diǎn)：_______________________________________。校園、課堂班級(jí)門口、課堂、辦公室等校園相關(guān)的地點(diǎn)（三）語(yǔ)篇表達(dá)技巧（how）下面句子運(yùn)用的修辭手法為（?比喻?擬人?夸張?排比）。Withthat,hegotupfromhischair,pusheditoverandyelledsomething.understandingchange時(shí)間線：Tylerenteredmyseniorclass…Aboutamonthintotheyear…Oneday…TheweekTylorwassuspended…OnthedayofTyler’sreturn…情感線：thoughttheworst…frustrated…desperate…relievedbutfearfulofhisreturn…Tyler積極參與到課堂討論當(dāng)中（第二段）。在Tyler發(fā)生改變之后，這段我之前覺(jué)得最糟糕的教學(xué)經(jīng)歷變成了最棒的經(jīng)歷（第二段結(jié)尾）。排比(Withthat,hegotupfromhischair,pusheditoverandyelledsomething.)

原文環(huán)境：校園、課堂續(xù)寫(xiě)環(huán)境：班級(jí)門口、課堂、辦公室等校園相關(guān)的地點(diǎn)主要人物：“我”、TylerTyler：目無(wú)尊長(zhǎng)、桀驁不馴（一）構(gòu)思續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段主要情節(jié)結(jié)合原文解讀中對(duì)主題、情節(jié)、人物、環(huán)境等要素的分析以及對(duì)續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段、第二段首句的分析，可以構(gòu)思續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段和第二段的主要情節(jié)。續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段的主要情節(jié)為：___________________________________________________續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段的主要情節(jié)為：___________________________________________________“我”在班級(jí)門口與Tyler進(jìn)行了溝通?！拔摇焙蚑yler之間的矛盾消除，Tyler朝著好的方向轉(zhuǎn)變。（二）構(gòu)思續(xù)寫(xiě)“四點(diǎn)”內(nèi)容根據(jù)原文解讀和兩個(gè)段首句推測(cè)兩段首尾部分“四點(diǎn)”（①②③④）的內(nèi)容，確保段落當(dāng)中和段落之間情節(jié)連貫以及文章的主題和結(jié)局積極向上。②_______________________________________①_______________________________________……Para.1:OnthedayofTyler’sreturn,Istoodatthedoorawaitinghim.④_______________________________________③_______________________________________……Para.2:Asparkofsurpriseflashedacrosshisface.Tyler出現(xiàn)/“我”看到Tyler?！拔摇闭f(shuō)了一些讓Tyler驚訝的話。Tyler驚訝的其它表現(xiàn)/Tyler驚訝的原因。Tyler轉(zhuǎn)變之后取得的進(jìn)步/Tyler向“我”表達(dá)感謝/“我”對(duì)Tyler轉(zhuǎn)變的感想。（三）構(gòu)思續(xù)寫(xiě)段落細(xì)節(jié)確定合適的主干情節(jié)之后，接下來(lái)構(gòu)思兩段的具體細(xì)節(jié)。續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段：①HowdidTylerbehavewhenIsawhim?_________________________________________________________________________②HowdidIfeelwhenIsawTyler?_________________________________________________________________________③WhatdidIsaytoTyler?_________________________________________________________________________Tylercame,butstillshowednorespectforme.IthoughtofwhathadhappenedbeforeandfeltIshouldtryadifferentway.Iapologizedforthequarrelthatwehadintheclass.（三）構(gòu)思續(xù)寫(xiě)段落細(xì)節(jié)續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段：①WhywasTylersurprised?_________________________________________________________________________②Howdidhereact?_________________________________________________________________________③HowdidIreact?_________________________________________________________________________④WhathappenedtoTylerinthedaysthatfollowed?_________________________________________________________________________⑤WhatdidIlearnfromtheexperience?_________________________________________________________________________Hehadneverheardanapologyfromateacherbefore.Hefeltashamedandapologizedtome.Iwasgladtohearthatandsenthimbacktoclass.Hebehavedlikeagoodstudent.Irealizedthepowerofunderstanding.根據(jù)提示和要求，完成下列內(nèi)容優(yōu)化1.Tylercame,butstillshowednorespectforme.①使用動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)（walkwithone’shandsinone’spocket）改寫(xiě)優(yōu)化所給句子，體現(xiàn)Tyler目無(wú)尊長(zhǎng)、桀驁不馴的性格特點(diǎn)。AtlastTylercameand________________________________.②使用分詞結(jié)構(gòu)作狀語(yǔ)，改寫(xiě)優(yōu)化句①中的動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)。AtlastTylercame,______________________________.hewalkedwithhishandsinhispocketwalkingwithhishandsinhispocket根據(jù)提示和要求，完成下列內(nèi)容優(yōu)化2.Hehadneverheardanapologyfromateacherbefore.①使用主語(yǔ)從句（itisclearthat）改寫(xiě)優(yōu)化句子，凸顯Tyler驚訝的原因。_______________hehadneverheardanapologyfromateacherbefore.②使用倒裝結(jié)構(gòu)改寫(xiě)優(yōu)化句子，凸顯Tyler驚訝的原因。__________________anapologyfromateacherbefore.ItwasclearthatNeverhadheheard根據(jù)提示和要求，完成下列內(nèi)容優(yōu)化3.Hefeltashamedandsaidsorrytome.①使用“說(shuō)”的具體動(dòng)作替換句中的say，體現(xiàn)Tyler此時(shí)的羞愧。Hefeltashamedand_________,“I’msorry.”②使用強(qiáng)調(diào)句型（itis...who/that...）改寫(xiě)優(yōu)化句①，體現(xiàn)Tyler充分認(rèn)識(shí)到了自己的錯(cuò)誤。Hefeltashamedand_________,“___________________________.”③使用神態(tài)描寫(xiě)（one’sfaceburnwithshame）改寫(xiě)優(yōu)化句②，體現(xiàn)Tyler的羞愧。________________________andhe_________,“___________________________.”④使用with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)，改寫(xiě)優(yōu)化句③中的神態(tài)描寫(xiě)部分。____________________________,he_________,“___________________________.”murmuredmurmuredItisIwho/thatshouldsaysorryHisfaceburnedwithshamemurmuredItisIwho/thatshouldsaysorryWithhisfaceburningwithshamemurmuredItisIwho/thatshouldsaysorryOnthedayofTyler’sreturn,Istoodatthedoorawaitinghim.Atlasthecame,walkingwithhishandsinhispockets.Thatimageimmediatelybroughtbackmemoriesoftheboythrowingatantruminclasstheotherday.YetImanagedtorestrainmyangerthistime.Thesepastfewdays,Ihadbeenbuildingawallbetweenuswithblameandpunishment,soIthoughttomyselfthatmaybeIshouldtryanotherway.“Iwanttoapologizeforthequarrelthatwehadinthemiddleofclass,andI’mreallysorryifithurtyourfeelings,”Isaid,finallybreakingtheice.分詞結(jié)構(gòu)作狀語(yǔ)無(wú)靈主語(yǔ)狀語(yǔ)從句賓語(yǔ)從句定語(yǔ)從句狀語(yǔ)從句分詞結(jié)構(gòu)作狀語(yǔ)Asparkofsurpriseflashedacrosshisface.Thenaughtyboyfrozethere,staringatmewithwideeyes.Itwasclearthathehadneverheardanapologyfromateacherbefore.“ItisIwhoshouldsaysorry,”hemurmured,hisfaceburningwithshame.“Ishouldhavelearnedtocontrolmyself.”Withasmile,Isteppedforwardandpattedhimonhisshoulder,signalingtohimtogobacktohisseat.Inthedaysthatfollowed,Tylerdidn’tmisbehaveinclassanymoreandtookanactivepartinclassdiscussions.Ihadneverexpected“understanding”couldmakesuchahugedifference—itturnedoneofmyworstteachingexperiencesintoperhapsthebestone.分詞結(jié)構(gòu)作狀語(yǔ)主語(yǔ)從句強(qiáng)調(diào)句型獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)分詞結(jié)構(gòu)作狀語(yǔ)賓語(yǔ)從句寫(xiě)作技能培養(yǎng)情景回顧詞匯：（場(chǎng)景概括）scene,image（激起回憶）strike,recall,recollect,bringback,flashback,memory,thought句子：Seeingheragainrecalledthosememorieshewouldratherhaveforgotten.Suddenlythescene

struckmewherehefellflatandIlaughedathimcrazily.Thechancemeetingwithhimbroughtbackmemoriesoftheirviolentquarrel.Herthoughtsflashedbacktothedaywhenshehadafightwithherbestfriend.（一）主題微情節(jié)——冰釋前嫌道歉詞匯：（道歉動(dòng)作）apologize,admit,askforforgiveness,makeanapology（道歉態(tài)度）sincerely,frankly,genuinely,truthfully（道歉事項(xiàng)）misconduct,mistake,misbehavior,wrongdoing句子：WhatIdidwasanaccident,andI’mterriblysorryforit.Isincerelyapologizedtohimformymisconductonthebus.Withtearsinmyeyes,Iapologizedforeverbelievingtherumors.Weigheddownbyhisguiltandregret,hemadeanapologytome.“HowcanImakeupforthewayI’vetreatedyou?”heasked,hisfaceburningwithshame.（一）主題微情節(jié)——冰釋前嫌道歉詞匯：（道歉動(dòng)作）apologize,admit,askforforgiveness,makeanapology（道歉態(tài)度）sincerely,frankly,genuinely,truthfully（道歉事項(xiàng)）misconduct,mistake,misbehavior,wrongdoing句子：IwanttoapologizetoyouforwhatIsaid.Ididn’tmeanit,andI’msorryifithurtyourfeelings.IhavetoadmitthatIletalotofpeopledownwiththatmisbehavior,andIstandheretodaytoreflectonthatandtoaskforforgiveness.（一）主題微情節(jié)——冰釋前嫌接受道歉詞匯：（直接說(shuō)明）forget,accept,forgive（間接體現(xiàn)）smile,pat,hug,embrace句子：Shecameuptomeandhuggedmeclose,sayingitwasallover.Iknewitwasnotyourintentiontodothat.Nowit’stimetoletitgo.Withabroadsmile,hepattedmeontheshoulderandtoldmetoforgetaboutit.Acceptinghisapology,Igentlypattedhimontheback,andhandedhimachocolatebar.Asmileappearedonherfaceassheheardmyapology,alittlebitatfirst,andthenbiggerandbigger.（一）主題微情節(jié)——冰釋前嫌（一）主題微情節(jié)——冰釋前嫌1.此情此景讓我馬上想起了前些天他大鬧課堂的場(chǎng)景。________________________wherehethrewatantruminclasstheotherday.__________________________________________theboythrowingatantruminclasstheotherday.2.“我想為上課期間和你爭(zhēng)吵這件事向你道歉，如果因此傷害了你的感情的話我很抱歉?！蔽易詈蟠蚱屏顺聊！癬_______________________________________________________,andI’mreallysorryifithurtyourfeelings,”Isaid,finallybreakingtheice.3.我微笑著走上前去，拍了拍他的肩膀，示意他回到座位上。Withasmile,_________________________________________,signalingtohimtogobacktohisseat.練習(xí)SuddenlythescenestruckmeThatimageimmediatelybroughtbackmemoriesofIwanttoapologizeforthequarrelthatwehadinthemiddleofclassIsteppedforwardandpattedhimonhisshoulder結(jié)合以上所學(xué)表達(dá)翻譯句子。（二）續(xù)寫(xiě)微技能——?jiǎng)幼髅鑼?xiě)之細(xì)化過(guò)程在描寫(xiě)某個(gè)動(dòng)作場(chǎng)景時(shí)可以嘗試將其過(guò)程細(xì)化，也就是把一些“大”的動(dòng)作拆分成一系列“小”的動(dòng)作，并按照時(shí)間順序依次呈現(xiàn)出來(lái)，這樣可以將場(chǎng)景描繪得更加具體、更富有畫(huà)面感。過(guò)程細(xì)化之后最好保證至少有3個(gè)“小”的動(dòng)作，它們?cè)诰渲谐Ｒ?jiàn)的呈現(xiàn)方式有以下兩種：①謂語(yǔ)并列（V1,V2andV3）Withthat,hegotupfromhischair,pusheditoverandyelledsomething.隨即他從椅子上站了起來(lái)，把它推倒然后大喊大叫。句中將“起身”“推倒椅子”和“大喊大叫”三個(gè)動(dòng)作并列，形成排比，把Tyler聽(tīng)到老師的話后情緒失控的樣子生動(dòng)地展現(xiàn)了出來(lái)。分析（二）續(xù)寫(xiě)微技能——?jiǎng)幼髅鑼?xiě)之細(xì)化過(guò)程②謂語(yǔ)并列+非謂語(yǔ)（V1andV2,V3ing或V1ing,V2andV3）Hequicklytookoffhisjacketandofferedittome,signalingtometocovermytornjeans.他迅速把自己的上衣脫下來(lái)遞給了我，示意我蓋住裂開(kāi)的牛仔褲。句中將“他把自己的衣服遞給我”這一動(dòng)作拆分成了“脫上衣”“遞上衣”“示意我”三個(gè)環(huán)節(jié)，構(gòu)成了一組完整的動(dòng)作鏈，對(duì)場(chǎng)景的描寫(xiě)非常生動(dòng)、具體。分析在描寫(xiě)某個(gè)動(dòng)作場(chǎng)景時(shí)可以嘗試將其過(guò)程細(xì)化，也就是把一些“大”的動(dòng)作拆分成一系列“小”的動(dòng)作，并按照時(shí)間順序依次呈現(xiàn)出來(lái)，這樣可以將場(chǎng)景描繪得更加具體、更富有畫(huà)面感。過(guò)程細(xì)化之后最好保證至少有3個(gè)“小”的動(dòng)作，它們?cè)诰渲谐Ｒ?jiàn)的呈現(xiàn)方式有以下兩種：（二）續(xù)寫(xiě)微技能——?jiǎng)幼髅鑼?xiě)之細(xì)化過(guò)程完成以下細(xì)化動(dòng)作過(guò)程的練習(xí)。1.我生氣地走出了房間。

細(xì)化動(dòng)作過(guò)程我狠狠地瞪了他一眼，沖出房間，把門砰地關(guān)上。(storm,slam)Iwentoutoftheroomangrily.→Igavehimahostileglare,_____________________,and_________________________.(V1,V2,andV3形式)→Igavehimahostileglareand_____________________,__________________________.(V1andV2,V3ing形式)練習(xí)stormedoutoftheroomslammedthedoorbehindmestormedoutoftheroomslammingthedoorbehindme（二）續(xù)寫(xiě)微技能——?jiǎng)幼髅鑼?xiě)之細(xì)化過(guò)程完成以下細(xì)化動(dòng)作過(guò)程的練習(xí)。2.他不情愿地向我道了歉。

細(xì)化動(dòng)作過(guò)程他不情愿地走到我的座位前，咬了咬嘴唇，咕噥著向我道了歉。(drag)Heunwillinglymadeanapologytome.→He________________________,bithislipandmumbledanapologytome.(V1,V2andV3形式)練習(xí)draggedhimselftomyseat（二）續(xù)寫(xiě)微技能——?jiǎng)幼髅鑼?xiě)之細(xì)化過(guò)程完成以下細(xì)化動(dòng)作過(guò)程的練習(xí)。3.他不做聲了。

細(xì)化動(dòng)作過(guò)程他撓了撓耳朵，小聲說(shuō)了些什么，然后低下頭不做聲了。(murmur,droop)Hewassilent.→Hescratchedhisear,____________________________________________.(V1,V2andV3形式)練習(xí)murmuredsomethinganddroopedhisheadinsilence（二）續(xù)寫(xiě)微技能——?jiǎng)幼髅鑼?xiě)之細(xì)化過(guò)程完成以下細(xì)化動(dòng)作過(guò)程的練習(xí)。4.我對(duì)他說(shuō)道，就讓這些不快到此為止吧。

細(xì)化動(dòng)作過(guò)程我示意他過(guò)來(lái)，含淚擁抱著他，輕聲說(shuō)道就讓這些不快到此為止吧。(whisper)Isaidtohimthatitwastimetoletitgo.→Igesturedhimoverandheldhiminatearfulembrace,_____________________________________.(V1andV2,V3ing形式)練習(xí)whisperingtohimthatitwastimetoletitgoPART03語(yǔ)篇鞏固Mondaystartedoutwell.Iwokeupontime,atebreakfastanddidsomelastminutestudyingformyfirsthourmathtest.Iwasconfidentofgettinggoodgrades.ThenIleftmyhouse.Tenminuteslater,Iwassettledwithmyfriendsontheschoolbus.Wewerebusychattingabouthowwespentourweekend.Atonestop,FatRyangotonhurriedly.Hetripped(絆倒)oversomeone’sfootaccidentallyandTHUMP!Hefellflatontothefloor.Everyoneofusonthebuslookedonandlaughedcrazily.Ryanstruggledtohisfeet,dusted(擦灰)offhisjacketandmadehiswaytoanemptyseat.Hetriedtolaughwithus,buthisfacewasburningwithembarrassment.Therestofthemorningflewby.Ididwellinmymathtest.IreadtwomorechaptersofToKillaMockingbirdinEnglishclass.Itwasn’tlongbeforeweheardthelunchbell.Imetmyfriendsfromthecheerleadingteaminthedininghall.ThenIcouldn’thelpbutnoticeRyanafewtablesaway,sittingallalone.Hecaughtmelooking.Ismiledathimquicklyandlookedaway.AGreatMondayWhenwehadfinishedeating,weheadedouttothecourtyardtopracticeacheerwewoulddoatthatnight’sfootballgame.Aftermuchpractice,wefinallymanagedtodothecheerperfectly.Wedecidedtopracticeitagainonelasttime.Again,justliketherestofmydaysofar,thecheerwasgoinggreat.Iraisedmylegforonelasttoetouch.RIIPPP!Ifeltmyjeanssplitdownthemiddleofmybackside.Ifroze.Ihadnoideawhattodobutstandstill.ThenIheardpeopleburstoutlaughingandIsawthempointingatmytornjeans.Tryingtocovermyselfwithmyhands,Itriedtolaughtoo,butIfelttearsbegintowellupinmyeyes.AGreatMonday續(xù)寫(xiě)要求：1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1:ThenIsawRyanrunningtowardsme._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Thatnight,afterthecheeratthefootballgame,IfoundRyan.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________AGreatMonday第一章節(jié)本文主題關(guān)鍵詞為_(kāi)_____和______。主要講述了“我”在排練時(shí)牛仔褲裂開(kāi)，在“我”感到無(wú)助之際，之前被“我們”嘲笑的Ryan伸出援手，之后“我”向Ryan道歉并獲得原諒的故事。故事解讀續(xù)寫(xiě)構(gòu)思參考范文主題情節(jié)人物環(huán)境表達(dá)技巧幫助諒解故事情節(jié)結(jié)構(gòu)為：沖突：_________________________________________________↓行動(dòng)：_________________________________________________↓解決：_________________________________________________原文主要呈現(xiàn)了“沖突”部分，續(xù)寫(xiě)部分應(yīng)該圍繞“行動(dòng)”和“解決”展開(kāi)。故事解讀續(xù)寫(xiě)構(gòu)思參考范文主題情節(jié)人物環(huán)境表達(dá)技巧“我”在排練時(shí)牛仔褲裂開(kāi)，遭遇窘境。之前摔倒被“我們”笑話的Ryan向“我”伸出援手?！拔摇毕騌yan道歉并獲得了原諒。故事的情節(jié)線索為_(kāi)________________________________________。故事設(shè)置了兩個(gè)讓人感到尷尬的場(chǎng)景（Ryan摔倒和“我”的牛仔褲裂開(kāi)），續(xù)寫(xiě)時(shí)可以通過(guò)回憶將兩者聯(lián)系起來(lái)，同時(shí)通過(guò)Ryan和“我”在兩個(gè)場(chǎng)景中舉動(dòng)的對(duì)比引出“我”的情感變化，凸顯Ryan的正面形象。故事解讀續(xù)寫(xiě)構(gòu)思參考范文主題情節(jié)人物環(huán)境表達(dá)技巧“我”在遭遇窘境及獲得幫助前后的情感變化_____________是故事的主要人物，其他同學(xué)是故事的次要人物。原文中通過(guò)對(duì)“我”在牛仔褲裂開(kāi)之后的動(dòng)作、心理、神態(tài)等描寫(xiě)，體現(xiàn)了“我”___________________________的性格特點(diǎn)。而幫“我”擺脫尷尬處境的Ryan應(yīng)該是一個(gè)善良、體貼、樂(lè)于助人的人，在續(xù)寫(xiě)部分可以通過(guò)動(dòng)作、神態(tài)、語(yǔ)言等描寫(xiě)來(lái)體現(xiàn)這一點(diǎn)。故事解讀續(xù)寫(xiě)構(gòu)思參考范文主題情節(jié)人物環(huán)境表達(dá)技巧“我”和Ryan遇到問(wèn)題容易緊張、不知所措“我”排練時(shí)牛仔褲裂開(kāi)是發(fā)生在校園廣場(chǎng)。根據(jù)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段的段首句可知，續(xù)寫(xiě)的內(nèi)容屬于該事件的延續(xù)，地點(diǎn)______（會(huì)/不會(huì)）有大的變化。故事解讀續(xù)寫(xiě)構(gòu)思參考范文主題情節(jié)人物環(huán)境表達(dá)技巧不會(huì)故事采用第______人稱視角敘述，語(yǔ)言平實(shí)自然。續(xù)寫(xiě)時(shí)應(yīng)注意使用相應(yīng)的表達(dá)技巧，如細(xì)節(jié)描寫(xiě)和修辭。故事解讀續(xù)寫(xiě)構(gòu)思參考范文主題情節(jié)人物環(huán)境表達(dá)技巧一故事解讀續(xù)寫(xiě)構(gòu)思參考范文從情節(jié)結(jié)構(gòu)來(lái)看，續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段屬于故事的“行動(dòng)”階段，應(yīng)重點(diǎn)寫(xiě)Ryan向“我”走來(lái)之后如何幫助“我”以及“我”的感受、想法和行動(dòng)等。續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段屬于故事的“解決”階段，應(yīng)著墨于“我”向Ryan道歉以及Ryan接受道歉的過(guò)程。分析第一段：我看到Ryan朝我跑過(guò)來(lái)→我突然想起自己嘲笑他摔倒的場(chǎng)景，以為Ryan會(huì)嘲笑我（尷尬）→Ryan沒(méi)有笑我，反而脫下自己的衣服，幫助我擺脫了窘境（驚訝、羞愧）→我想表達(dá)感謝，但沒(méi)能鼓起勇氣（感激）→我默默離開(kāi)第二段：那天晚上我找到了Ryan→我把衣服還給他并感謝了他（感激）→我鼓起勇氣為自己之前的行為道歉（羞愧、后悔）→Ryan大度地接受了我的道歉→我意識(shí)到Ryan是一個(gè)非常棒的朋友（輕松、愉快）參考思路①故事解讀續(xù)寫(xiě)構(gòu)思參考范文從情節(jié)結(jié)構(gòu)來(lái)看，續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段屬于故事的“行動(dòng)”階段，應(yīng)重點(diǎn)寫(xiě)Ryan向“我”走來(lái)之后如何幫助“我”以及“我”的感受、想法和行動(dòng)等。續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段屬于故事的“解決”階段，應(yīng)著墨于“我”向Ryan道歉以及Ryan接受道歉的過(guò)程。分析第一段：我看到Ryan朝我跑過(guò)來(lái)→Ryan在我面前停下來(lái)，把自己的外套遞給了我→我愣了一下，接過(guò)了衣服（驚訝）→我急匆匆地離開(kāi)了（尷尬）→我的腦海中不斷回想起校車和廣場(chǎng)上發(fā)生的事情（羞愧）第二段：那天晚上我找到了Ryan→我把衣服還給他，Ryan轉(zhuǎn)身準(zhǔn)備離開(kāi)→我叫住了他，向他道歉并表達(dá)了感謝（后悔、感激）→Ryan大度地接受了我的道歉→我和Ryan因?yàn)檫@件事成為了好朋友參考思路②故事解讀續(xù)寫(xiě)構(gòu)思參考范文Paragraph1:ThenIsawRyanrunningtowardsme.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________