Dyfuqc雅思教父劉洪波：兒童類雅思作文高分范文及點(diǎn)評(píng)

生活需要游戲，但不能游戲人生；生活需要歌舞，但不需醉生夢(mèng)死；生活需要藝術(shù)，但不能投機(jī)取巧；生活需要勇氣，但不能魯莽蠻干；生活需要重復(fù)，但不能重蹈覆轍。-----無名兒童類雅思作文高分范文及點(diǎn)評(píng)——摘自劉洪波2010新作《最簡(jiǎn)化雅思寫作》Somepeoplebelievethattimespentontelevision,videoandcomputergamescanbebeneficialtochildren.Othersbelievethishasnegativeeffectsonachild.Discussbothviewsandgiveyourownopinion.InrecentyearsparentshavehadtomaketoughdecisionsabouthowmuchtimetheirkidsshouldspendwatchingTVandplayingcomputerorvideogames.Somehavearguedthattheyarenotonlyawasteoftime,butpotentiallyharmful.Others,however,claimthatkidsshouldbekidsanddeservesomeentertainment.Personally,Ifeelthatthebestapproachismoderation.Ontheonehand,toomuchTVandgamingcanhaveanegativeinfluence.Physically,hoursinfrontofamonitorareharmfulontheeyes.Andmentallyifkidsspendtoomuchtimelivinginavirtualworld,theymaylosetheabilitytomakefriendsandsocializeinanormalway.Moreover,seeingtoomuchviolenceandquestionablecontentcouldinfluenceyoungpeople’sbehavior,astheyareimpressionable.Ontheotherhand,allchildrenneedtohavefunandplay.Ifstudentsonlystudy,theywillsurelysufferfrommentalandemotionalpressureandstress.Also,notallcontentonTVoronlineisunhealthy;therearelotsofeducationalshowsandcontentthatispositive.Speakingfrompersonalexperience,Ithinktherightapproachistohaveahealthybalance.Inthisregard,parentshavearesponsibilitytosetboundariesandmakesurethatthecontenttheirkidsareviewingisappropriate.Aswell,TVandvideogamesarenottheonlywaystohavefun,soparentsshouldencouragetheirkidstointeractandplaywithotherkidsinpersontoo.Intheend,weshouldfollowourcommonsense.ParentsshouldbefirmbutfairwithlettingtheirkidsplayonlineorinfrontofaTVscreen.Mostthingsinmoderationarehealthy,andTVandvideogamesarenodifferent.(289words)

劉洪波點(diǎn)評(píng)：寫作線索：觀點(diǎn)中立，適度即可。第二段ontheonehand，講負(fù)面；第三段ontheotherhand，講正面；最后講家長(zhǎng)要重視和起作用。經(jīng)典的中立型文章。可學(xué)習(xí)的點(diǎn)很多：首先，首段最后一句中Thebestapproachismoderation.（最好的辦法是適度）moderation一詞可以理解為中文的“（把握）火候”，是中立文章的點(diǎn)睛大詞，不可不學(xué)。其次，第二段中分別用physically和mentally拓展了寫作思路；最后，文章末句提升至哲學(xué)高度：Mostthingsinmoderationarehealthy,TVandvideogamesarenodifferent.（大多數(shù)事情適度都是好的，電視和視頻游戲也不例外）是啊，適度飲酒對(duì)身體好；打打小麻將，買買彩票還怡情呢。但最難把握的就是這個(gè)moderation“度”?。∠葘W(xué)習(xí)下面的詞匯和短語(yǔ)，然后再重讀范文，體會(huì)它們?cè)谖闹械倪\(yùn)用點(diǎn)睛詞匯deserve[]vt.應(yīng)受，值得moderation[]n.適度socialize[]社會(huì)交往virtual[]adj.虛擬的questionable[]adj.有問題的interact[]vi.互相作用，互相影響firm[]adj.嚴(yán)格的必備短語(yǔ)makedecision作出決定spendsometime(in)doingsth./spendsometimeonsth.花時(shí)間在（做）某事上haveanegativeinfluence有不良影響beharmfulto/onsth.對(duì)……有傷害makefriends交朋友sufferfrom遭受inthisregard在這點(diǎn)上havearesponsibilitytodosth.有責(zé)任去做某事setboundaries限制inperson親自三分鐘熟讀或背誦本文最實(shí)用的三個(gè)句子Andmentallyifkidsspendtoomuchtimelivinginavirtualworld,theymaylosetheabilitytomakefriendsandsocializeinanormalway.Aswell,TVandvideogamesarenottheonlywaystohavefun,sopare