專題02讀后續(xù)寫（如何巧妙構(gòu)思讀后續(xù)寫的故事情節(jié)）-2023年新高考英語滿分作文讀后續(xù)寫高分突破萬能金句

專題02如何巧妙構(gòu)思讀后續(xù)寫的故事情節(jié)之高分技巧、高分手段和易錯點(diǎn)故事構(gòu)思讀后續(xù)寫能否拿否拿高分某種程度上取決于故事情節(jié)的構(gòu)思。這就要求考生做到學(xué)會分析情節(jié)。分析故事情節(jié)一般從故事六要素著手，即who,when,where,what,why,how。然后根據(jù)故事情節(jié)發(fā)展線和主人公的情感變化來續(xù)寫文章。簡化為：第一步：分析段首句。根據(jù)其關(guān)鍵信息，提出問題，預(yù)設(shè)故事情節(jié)發(fā)展走向。第二步：關(guān)注段首句和續(xù)寫部分的銜接。思考續(xù)寫第一段和第二段的銜接。根據(jù)情節(jié)發(fā)展構(gòu)思末句，通過收尾呼應(yīng)，達(dá)到文章升華，體現(xiàn)故事主題。高分技巧高分手段讀后續(xù)寫的故事情節(jié)設(shè)計中，矛盾沖突和轉(zhuǎn)折總體上應(yīng)當(dāng)體現(xiàn)清代袁枚《隨園詩話》中“文似看山不喜平”的意思，即寫文章好比觀賞山峰那樣，喜歡起伏，不喜歡平鋪直敘。所以讀后續(xù)寫的沖突就體現(xiàn)了這種跌宕起伏，而最終的矛盾沖突會變?yōu)榉e極的正能量。易錯點(diǎn)在續(xù)寫過程中，應(yīng)當(dāng)體會原材料故事中的語言特點(diǎn)，從人物動作描寫，場景描寫，情感情緒描寫，人物心理和神態(tài)外貌描寫等方面進(jìn)行潤色，提升語言表達(dá)的準(zhǔn)確性，完成語言風(fēng)格高契合度的短文。典例剖析【2022年高考浙江卷6月】閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。Ineededtodosomethinginmycommunity(社區(qū))inordertocompletethecommunityservicehoursrequiredtograduatefromhighschool.Someofmyfriendshadsigneduptospendtimeatasoupkitchen,soIdid,too.Itseemedlikeagoodthingtodo.Ithoughtthatwewouldjustbepassingoutdinnerstothoseinneed,butIfoundoutwewouldbedoingeverythingfrompreparingtoservingthedinner.Webeganpreparingthefood,frommixingsaladdressingtoseparatingfrozenmeat.Muchstillneededtobedonebeforedinnerwasserved,butalreadyoutsidethebuildingmanyhomelesspeopleweregathering.Itwasn’tuntilacoupleofhourslaterthatweopenedthedoorsandbeganservingdinner.Asthelineofpeoplecametowardme,Igotalittlescared.I’dcomefacetofacewiththehomeless:HowshouldIact?Howwouldtheytreatme?Wouldtheyhatemeforhavingmorethantheydid?Whilesomeofthepeoplelookedveryfriendly,someofthemlookedsodangerous.Ididn’thavetoomuchtimetoworryaboutit.Iwasassigned(分配)toservethesaladwiththeladynexttome.ShesmiledatmeandsaidifIneededhelp,she’dberightthere,whichIfoundquitecomforting.Ihadneverseensomanypeoplewantingfood.Theywereofallagesandnationalities.Mostofthemworeclothesthatweretornanddirty.Somelookedliketheyhadtallygivenuponlife,whileothersseemedtobemakingthebestofthesituation,smilingandjoking.Somewerebetteroffthanothers,buttheyallneededagoodmealandawarmplacetoeat.Itsaddenedmetothinkofhowmanypeopletherewerewhodidn’thaveaplacetocallhomeandtheonlyfoodtheygotcamefromasoupkitchen.注意：1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.至少使用5個短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。Paragraph1:Astheycameinmydirection,Iputonmybrightestandhappiestsmile.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:IwassohappythatIhadearnedmyservicehoursinthisway._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________第一步：故事情節(jié)構(gòu)思：Who:homelesspeopleandmeWhere:atasoupkitchenWhen:whentheybeganpreparingthefoodforcompletingthecommunityserviceWhy:Thinkofhowmanypeopletherewerewhodidn’thaveaplacetocallhomeandtheonlyfoodtheygotcamefromasoupkitchenWhat:manyhomelesspeopleweregatheringbeforetheshopopened故事梗概：本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者為了完成高中畢業(yè)所需的社區(qū)服務(wù)時間，需要在所在的社區(qū)做點(diǎn)什么，作者去了施粥所，作者發(fā)現(xiàn)準(zhǔn)備過程中要做的事情很多，作者看到無家可歸的人靠近時心里有點(diǎn)害怕，但是卻忙得沒有時間去擔(dān)心這些，作者看到了年齡和國籍各不相同的人，這讓作者感到很難過。情節(jié)構(gòu)思：無家可歸的人笑——作者舀粥——無家可歸的人感激——作者感悟——作者發(fā)出呼吁第二步：第一段和第二段首句的銜接由第一段首句內(nèi)容“Astheycameinmydirection,Iputonmybrightestandhappiestsmile.”可知，第一段描寫作者是怎么為無家可歸者施粥。由第二段首句內(nèi)容“IwassohappythatIhadearnedmyservicehoursinthisway.”可知，第二段描寫作者對這次社區(qū)服務(wù)的感悟。高分手段1行為類倒：pour/decant意識到：realizethat/beawarethat③主張：urgesb.todo/advocatesb.todo情緒類感謝：gratefully/thankfully急切的：anxious/eager高分手段2[高分句型1]Thisexperiencemademerealizethattherearesomanypeopleinthisworldwhoneedourhelp.(由that引導(dǎo)的賓語從句和who引導(dǎo)的定語從句)[高分句型2]Iwillneverforgetthewaytheylookedatmewhentheyweregivenfood.(由關(guān)系代詞that引導(dǎo)的定語從句，省略了that和when引導(dǎo)的時間狀語從句)【滿分范文】Astheycameinmydirection,Iputonmybrightestandhappiestsmile.IwantedtomakethemknowthatIwasreallyanxioustohelpthem.Tomyrelief,theysmiledpolitelybackatmewhentheysawmysmile,andIcouldseetheirexhaustionintheireyes.IwantedtoknowwhattheyweregoingthroughandIwasdesperatetoknowwhatIcoulddoforthem.TheynoddedgratefullyasIpushedmyspoonintothepotandtookalargespoonfulandpoureditintotheirbowls.IwassohappythatIhadearnedmyservicehoursinthisway.Thisexperiencemademerealizethattherearesomanypeopleinthisworldwhoneedourhel