2023學(xué)年完整公開課版讀后續(xù)寫3

Continuationwriting(讀后續(xù)寫）Aflowerto“Mother”衡東一中張艷LeadinHaveadiscussionWhatareyoudoing?Mymomhasgonetowork.CanIhaveaflowerforher?OfcourseCanIhaveanotherforAuntKimmie?SendingflowerstomothersAFlowerto“Mother”

AFlowerto“Mother”LikeeveryotherSundaymorning,mybestfriend,Patty,droppedmygodchildJeremiahoffatmyapartmentaround6:30a.m.beforeshewentonherwaytowork.And,justlikeeveryotherSundaymorning,weallwentbacktosleepforacoupleofhours.WheneveryoneawokeImadeaquickbreakfastandthenthethreeofus,myhusband,Larry,thekidandmyself,hurriedandgotourselvesoutthedoorforchurch,justlikeeveryotherSundaymorning.Itwasn’tuntilwewalkedthroughthechurchdoorsandIsawthegirlstandingtherepassingoutflowersthatIrealizeditwasMother’sDay.BeforeIcouldstophim,Jeremiah,alwaysthecuriouschild,wentuptothegirlandasked,“Linda,whatareyoudoing?”Lindasmiledathimandsaidbrightly,“I’mgivingaflowertoeverymotherinchurchtodaybecauseit'sMother'sDay.”Jeremiah’seyesgrewbright.“Mymomhadtoworktoday.CanIhaveaflowertotakehometogiveher?”Iwassoproudofhimatthatmoment.Jeremiahwasoftenhyper(亢奮的),anditwassometimeshardforhimtoremembertospeakslowlyandaskforthingspolitelywhenhewasexcited.Buthehadbeentheperfectlittlegentlemanwhenheaskedforthatflower.“Ofcourse.”Lindaanswered,andloweredtheboxshewasholdingsothatJeremiahcouldpickoutaflowerforPatty.Jeremiahturnedtowardsme,proudlyholdingapinkcarnationinhishand.Hesmiledatme.Hisdarkeyesdancedwithprideandloveandexcitement.

Ismiledathimandsignaledhimtocomewithmesowecouldgotakeourseatsinchurch,butinstead,heturnedbacktowardsLinda.“CanIpleasehaveaflowerforAuntKimmietoo?”Atthatverymoment,Ifeltmybreathcatchsomewhereinmychest.ThatwasthelastthingIhadexpectedJeremiahtodo.ItwasoneofthesweetestandmoresincerethingsIhadeverheardhimsay.Butneitherofuswasreadyforwhathappenednext.注意：1.所續(xù)寫的短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150字左右。2.續(xù)寫部分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好。3.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。Givensentences:第一段：“Oh,no,Jeremiah.Shecan'thaveaflower.Sheisn'tamom.”Lindareplied.第二段：Afterwecameback,Jeremiahwenttothecourtyardofourapartmentbuilding.讀后續(xù)寫的具體要求

提供一段350詞以內(nèi)的語言材料，要求考生依據(jù)該材料內(nèi)容、所給段落開頭語進行續(xù)寫（150詞左右），將其發(fā)展成一篇與給定材料有邏輯銜接、情節(jié)和結(jié)構(gòu)完整的短文。如何構(gòu)思續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容

Step1Readforelements

Step2Gatherideas

Step3Makepredictions

Step4Createnewplots

Step1ReadforelementsWhatWhereWhen

Whoooo

I,Patty,Jeremiah,Larry,Linda

OnMother'sDay

atthechurchdoors

Sendingaflowerto“mother”ElementsLarryandI(AuntKimmie)PattyJeremiah[?d?eri?mai?]

Linda

→Mygodchild←Hismother→Aflowerto“Mother”Friends

Step2Gatherideas

Step2Gatherideasfirstperson（I,we）secondperson（you）thirdperson（he,she,they)ReadingforfeaturesStyle(體裁)Person(人稱)Tense(時態(tài))Narrationexposition（說明文）narration（記敘文）argumentation（議論文）FirstpersonPasttensepasttensesimplepresenttensefuturetenseLikeeveryotherSundaymorning,myhusbandandItookJeremiah,mybestfriendPatty'sson,hurriedtogoto_____.Itwasn'tuntilwewalkedthroughthechurchdoorsandsawLinda________(pass)outflowerstoeverymother_______IrealizeditwasMother'sDay.Happyand_________(excite),Jeremiahhadaflowerforhismother.Iwasproud_______hisperformance.Amomentlater,Jeremiahsuddenlyaskedforanotherflowerforme,whichmademe________(move)verymuch.______,Lindarefused/disagreed.churchpassingthatexcitedofmovedHoweverAsummaryofthestory

Step3MakepredictionsPredictPossible

PlotDevelopmentProblemSolutionLindarefused?(theending)Theme?textGivensentence:1.“Oh,no,Jeremiah.Shecan’thaveaflower.Sheisn’tamom.”Lindareplied.2.Afterwecameback,Jeremiahwenttothecourt-yardofourapartmentbuilding.GiveninformationBeginningClimaxEndinggotochurch

Lindarefusedpickabunchofwildflowers

Processaskforflowersexcitedandproudsadanddisappointed

happy

Theme1.Theworldisfulloflove.2.Tobekindtoothersistobekindtoyourself.Step4

CreatenewplotsPara.1:.“Oh,no,Jeremiah.Shecan’thaveaflower.Sheisn’tamom.”Lindareplied.

續(xù)寫部分：WhatwasJeremiah'sresponse?

HowdidIfeel?WhatdidIdo?Para.2:Afterwecameback,Jeremiahwenttothecourtyardofourapartmentbuilding.續(xù)寫部分：Whatdidhedointhecourtyard?

Didherealizehisdream?

Whatwasmyresponse?

Whatisthethemeofthestory?

Usefulexpressions:1.Lindasmiledathimandsaidbrightly,..........2.Jeremiah’seyesgrewbright.3.Jeremiahturnedtowardsme,proudlyholdingapinkcarnationinhishand.4.Hisdarkeyesdancedwithprideandloveandexcitement.5.Atthatverymoment,Ifeltmybreathcatchsomewhereinmychest.6.ThatwasthelastthingIhadexpectedJeremiahtodo.7.ItwasoneofthesweetestandmoresincerethingsIhadeverheardhimsay.Whilewritingpleasepayattentiontothefollowingaspects:1.Language(grammar,coherence…)2.Logic3.Handwriting4.70-80words獲得高分的寫作技巧Tip1:故事要圍繞著主要人物展開。Tip2:詳細刻畫角色及其情感。Tip4:使用恰當(dāng)?shù)男揎椩~以使描寫更加生動。Tip3:使用恰當(dāng)?shù)你暯釉~以使故事更有連貫性。Tip5:做到首尾呼應(yīng)以使故事更加有條理。Tip6:確保第二段和第一段的銜接有邏輯。“Oh,no,Jemeriah.Shecan'thaveaflower.Sheisnotamom.”Lindareplied.

Withamixtureofconfusionanddisappointmentinhiseyes,littleJemeriahturnedbacktome,openingismouthasiftosaysomething.Seeingthat,Iheldhishandandcomfortedhimsoftly,“That'sallright,honey.Ihavereceivedyoursweetest