讀后續(xù)寫個(gè)人成長(zhǎng)類-吃醋的“小王子”講義- 高考英語二輪作文專項(xiàng)復(fù)習(xí)

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。人與自我（家庭素材——二胎現(xiàn)象與孩子的成長(zhǎng)）Fortheinitialtenyearsofhislife,

Victor

wastheprinceofthehousehold.Ashewasanonly

child,his

parents

pettedhimandshoweredalltheirloveandattentiononhim.Whatevertoyshis

parentsbought,theywerealwaysmeantforhim.Whateverfoodwasintherefrigerator,therewas

noonetocompetewithhimtopolishitofffirst.Victorcouldleavehis

toys

orbooksaroundthe

housewithcompleteeaseofmind,knowingthattherewasnoonewhowouldgettheirhandson

hisbelongingsandcauseanydamage.However,allthatwastochangeovernightwhenVictor'sparentsbroughtbackhis

newbaby

sister,

Lina,fromthehospital.Withherrosycheeks,wideopeneyesandangelicsmile,

Lina

caughttheheartsofherparents,grandparentsandrelatives.Everyonefocusedtheirattentionon

thecute

bunchofjoy.Whenevershecried,hermotherorfatherwouldrushtoherbed.She

simplycriedbecauseshewantedtobecarried.TherewaslittletimeleftforVictor.NowthatVictor'smotherhadhisbabysistertotakecareof,sheexpectedVictorhimselfto

domostofthe

chores

hecando.Victorwasaskedtocleanhisownroom,ironhisownschool

uniformandcleanhisownshoes.BeforeLina'sarrival,hehadneverliftedafingertohelpout

withthesetasks.ThewholefamilyalsowentoutlessbecauseitwasunhealthytoexposeLinato

thebacteria

(細(xì)菌)

beingintheoutsideworldtoooften.Victorfelt

neglected

byhisparents.HefeltthattheylovedLinamorethanhim.Asaresult,

hetriedtoattracthisparents'attentionbybecoming

resistant.Oneevening,Victor'sparents

werecalledupbyhisteacherbecauseVictorhadgotintoafightatschool.Histeacherhad

noticedVictor's

behaviour

and

workattitude

changingdownwardsinthepasttwomonths.Before

that,hehadbeenamodelstudent.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1：Onhearingtheteacher'sfeedback,Victor'sparentsgotlostinthought.第一段續(xù)寫：“聽到老師的反饋，Victor的父母陷入了沉思”——本段續(xù)寫的關(guān)鍵在于把“沉思”的“靜態(tài)”層面如何展開為“動(dòng)態(tài)”層面。同時(shí)結(jié)合提供的語篇材料，我們不難分析出原因，即導(dǎo)致Victor行為變換的原因在于妹妹的出生，同時(shí)由于二段的收據(jù)提示為“Victor意識(shí)到他的父母任然關(guān)心他”，可以得知本段續(xù)寫的結(jié)尾一定是父母與兒子已經(jīng)解開了心結(jié)?！赡苌婕暗脑~匯有：Victor；parents；newbabysister；Lina；resistant；behaviour；workattitude下水文Paragraph1：Onhearingtheteacher'sfeedback,Victor'sparentsgotlostinthought.

They

immediately

realizedthattheroot

whichled

Victor

tothe

improper

behaviour

andnegative

workattitude

atschool

existedinthefact

thatthe

newbabysister,Lina

wasbroughtback.

Andmostimportantly,

withthe

familiarfamily/homeatmosphere

changing

allofasudden,Victorfelthewasnotlovedbythemanymore,

so

he

temptedtodrawhisparents’

attention

againbydoingsomething

resistant.

Atonce,theyenteredVictor’sroom,

tellinghimalthoughthey

spentmuchtimein

caringLina,he

aswellas

hissisterwas

ofequalweightin

theirhearts.

And

theywouldloveandhelphimasusual.（4句）Paragraph2：Victorrealizedthathisparentsstillcaredforhim.第二段續(xù)寫：“Victor意識(shí)到他的父母任然關(guān)心他”——本段續(xù)寫的關(guān)鍵在于既然心結(jié)已經(jīng)解開，所以情節(jié)的創(chuàng)設(shè)便可以圍繞Victor如何回歸到常態(tài)并進(jìn)一步成長(zhǎng)的軌道上來。因此本段續(xù)寫郭老師創(chuàng)造性的使用了空間邏輯，分別利用“在學(xué)?！焙汀霸诩彝ァ钡膬蓚€(gè)邏輯，全面的展現(xiàn)Victor改變和成長(zhǎng)的全貌?！赡苌婕暗脑~匯有：bunchofjoy；toys；modelstudent；choreParagraph2：Victorrealizedthathisparentsstillcaredforhim.

Thatnight,hedidn’tfeelanyconfusedand

eveninhissleepwashearda

bunchofjoy.

Duringthefollowingdays,

Victor

acted

asifhehadturnedintosomeoneelse.

Atschool,hestudiedhardagain,

using

sparetimetotakingpartin

allkindsofafter-classactivities.The

modelstudent

cameback.

Athome,he

notonly

washis

parents’

goodhelpertotakecareofhis

babysister,

makingherlaughingbysharinghis

toys,

butalso

learnedtodofamily

chores

independently,

fromwhichhereceivedmoreloveandunderstoodthejoyofgrowingup.（5句）【答案】"Thatbigreddressisgone,"shesaidindisbelief."It'sactuallygone."Dadlookedquicklyandsmiled,“Yes,itisnothere!”“Butwhowouldliketobuythatsillydress,whichisneitherpracticalnorcheap?”Mommarveled,butmeanwhilebothfatherandIcoulddiscernaninexplicablebutconspicuousdisappointmentcreptoverherface.“Someromantic,reservedlovingmanmightbuythatfortheirwife.”Fatherwinkedslylyatmomandmefromtherearmirrorasifhewerethesecretivedevotinghusbandhedepicted.I'llneverforgetthatChristmasmorningasMomunpackedalargeboxthatread"Eaton'sFinestDishpan".

“Tada,themostsillygiftformyprincess!”fatherexclaimed,eyeingathiswifeinalovingandexpectantway.Mother,toostunnedtospeak,receivedtheboxwithhertremblinghands.Herpalmssweating,throattightening,mother’shandslidedthroughtheredsatinandlingeredatthetwinklingstars.“Oh,Tom,youshouldn’thavebeenthatextravagant.”“No,baby,youdeservethehighesthonorandmypassionateloveonthisSpecialChristmas.”本次三模讀后續(xù)寫分析：本份試卷的大作文屬于一篇典型的“人與自我”話題，重點(diǎn)突出在當(dāng)今二胎政策的背景下，老大和老二之間的微妙變化，由于對(duì)于老大而言，由于家庭結(jié)構(gòu)的改變或多或少都會(huì)對(duì)其內(nèi)心產(chǎn)生一定的影響。因此就會(huì)出現(xiàn)文章材料中的一些列“不良的”行動(dòng)和行為。我們不難看出，本篇讀后續(xù)寫的命題目的還是