專題09讀后續(xù)寫2023屆新高考英語寫作精講解題(教案)

專題09讀后續(xù)寫-2023屆新高考英語寫作精講+解題演示【典題1解讀】AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISE(2021·新高考I卷)ThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.a.m.bigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff’shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Father’sappearingwaslikeasaviortothetwochildren.Undertheguidanceoftheirfather,theytookpositiveactionsandstartedalloveragain.Theymadethebreadandthenwentoncookingporridge.Fatherhelpedthemadjustthefire,whichwasthekeytosuccess.Itwasallrightthistime.Deliciousbreakfastwasready.Howhappytheywere!Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Whentheirmothersawthedeliciousandperfectbreakfastinfrontofher,shewasverysurprised.Itwasnotonlythegift,buttheloveofthechildrenforherthatmovedherverymuch.Thetwochildrencouldfinishcookingabreakfast,whichshedidn’texpect.Thechildrensaidloudly,“HappyMother’sDay!”Motherhuggedthemtightlyandkissedthemagainandagain.【解讀】【原文解讀】本文以第三人稱，以母親節(jié)為線索展開，講述了雙胞胎Jenna和Jeff為了獻給母親一份美味的早餐，自己動手，做起飯餐來，但是不幸的是，他們連連失敗，后來在父親的幫助下，獲得成功，他們把早餐獻給親愛的母親，媽媽非常感動的故事?！纠m(xù)寫線索】幫助——指導(dǎo)——積極——獻禮——感動。【段落續(xù)寫】由第一段首句內(nèi)容“當雙胞胎失望地環(huán)顧四周時，他們的父親出現(xiàn)了。”可知父親的出現(xiàn)給他們帶來了希望，故第一段可描寫他們的父親指導(dǎo)幫助他們準備早餐?？梢詮囊韵碌膸讉€方面入手去考慮問題：呈上：?Howdidfatherfeelonseeingthemess?細節(jié)：?Whatdidfatherdotohelp?啟下：?Whocookedthebreakfastatlast?在這一段的描寫當中，可以充分的利用原文中的信息，描寫做飯的場景。以達到與原文呼應(yīng)的目的。父親幫忙后，怎樣還讓母親感覺到驚喜呢？這是父親和孩子們之間的一個小秘密。由第二段首句內(nèi)容“這對雙胞胎把早餐端到樓上，叫醒了他們的母親。”可知，第二段可描寫母親收到孩子們的禮物早餐，非常感動。本段則是向媽媽獻上驚喜的時刻了?？梢詮囊韵碌膸讉€方面入手去考慮問題：呈上：Whatdidtheysay?細節(jié)：Howdidmotherreactandfeel?點題：Whatasurprise!【典題2解讀】(2022·浙江6月卷)Ineededtodosomethinginmycommunity(社區(qū))inordertocompletethecommunityservicehoursrequiredtograduatefromhighschool.Someofmyfriendshadsigneduptospendtimeatasoupkitchen,soIdid,too.Itseemedlikeagoodthingtodo.Ithoughtthatwewouldjustbepassingoutdinnerstothoseinneed,butIfoundoutwewouldbedoingeverythingfrompreparingtoservingthedinner.Webeganpreparingthefood,frommixingsaladdressingtoseparatingfrozenmeat.Muchstillneededtobedonebeforedinnerwasserved,butalreadyoutsidethebuildingmanyhomelesspeopleweregathering.Itwasn’tuntilacoupleofhourslaterthatweopenedthedoorsandbeganservingdinner.Asthelineofpeoplecametowardme,Igotalittlescared.I’dcomefacetofacewiththehomeless:HowshouldIact?Howwouldtheytreatme?Wouldtheyhatemeforhavingmorethantheydid?Whilesomeofthepeoplelookedveryfriendly,someofthemlookedsodangerous.Ididn’thavetoomuchtimetoworryaboutit.Iwasassigned(分配)toservethesaladwiththeladynexttome.ShesmiledatmeandsaidifIneededhelp,she’dberightthere,whichIfoundquitecomforting.Ihadneverseensomanypeoplewantingfood.Theywereofallagesandnationalities.Mostofthemworeclothesthatweretornanddirty.Somelookedliketheyhadtallygivenuponlife,whileothersseemedtobemakingthebestofthesituation,smilingandjoking.Somewerebetteroffthanothers,buttheyallneededagoodmealandawarmplacetoeat.Itsaddenedmetothinkofhowmanypeopletherewerewhodidn’thaveaplacetocallhomeandtheonlyfoodtheygotcamefromasoupkitchen.注意：1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.至少使用5個短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。Paragraph1:Astheycameinmydirection,Iputonmybrightestandhappiestsmile.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:IwassohappythatIhadearnedmyservicehoursinthisway.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Astheycameinmydirection,Iputonmybrightestandhappiestsmile.ContrarytowhatIhadthought,someofthosehomelesspeoplewholookedunapproachableatfirstsightactuallywereratherfriendly.Theywouldsmilebroadlybackatmetoshowtheirgratitudewhentheywereserved,whichimmediatelyputmeatease.Filledwithconfidence,alongwiththecomfortingsmileoftheladybesideme,Iwasquicklyengagedinthebusywork,forgettingallaboutthenegativethoughts.Agreatsenseofhappinessandrelieffloodedoverme.IwassohappythatIhadearnedmyservicehoursinthisway.Ihadalsolearnedalifelonglessoninbeinggratefulandoptimistic.Seeingthoseinneed,whohadnoaccesstoenoughfoodorcleanclothes,wehaveeveryreasontotreasureourlifeandofferahelpinghandwheneverpossible.Evenasmallactofkindnesscanmakeabigdifference.Inaddition,theirsmile-to-lifeattitudeeveninsuchtoughsituationsalsoinspiredmetoovercomeanydifficultiesinlife.【解讀】【原文解讀】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者為了完成高中畢業(yè)所需的社區(qū)服務(wù)時間，需要在所在的社區(qū)做點什么，作者去了施粥所，作者發(fā)現(xiàn)準備過程中要做的事情很多，作者看到無家可歸的人靠近時心里有點害怕，但是卻忙得沒有時間去擔心這些，作者看到了年齡和國籍各不相同的人，這讓作者感到很難過?！纠m(xù)寫線索】無家可歸的人笑——作者舀粥——無家可歸的人感激——作者感悟——作者發(fā)出呼吁?！径温淅m(xù)寫】由第一段首句內(nèi)容“當他們朝我走來的時候，我露出了最燦爛、最幸福的笑容?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫作者是怎么為無家可歸的人施粥。由第二段首句內(nèi)容“我很高興我用這種方式贏得了我的服務(wù)時間?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫作者對這次社區(qū)服務(wù)的感悟。兩段續(xù)寫自然要涉及到人物以及對人物的描寫：homelesspoeple:lookedunapproachable,actuallyratherfriendly;thelady:comfortablesmile;thoseinneed:noaccesstoenoughfoodorcleanclothes;We:treasureourlife.這樣就順利解決“至少使用5個短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語”。【寫作點撥】讀后續(xù)寫是一種將閱讀與寫作緊密結(jié)合的考查形式，旨在考查考生的綜合語言運用能力，是英語寫作的“集大成者”：包含了“閱讀”、“寫作”、“分析”和“創(chuàng)造”等四種能力。鑒于高考讀后續(xù)寫的閱讀材料一般都是以故事類記敘文或者夾敘夾議文為主的情況，故本專題從以下幾個方面就此種讀后續(xù)寫做些點撥。一、借助兩段續(xù)寫首句分析原文通讀原文，借助兩段續(xù)寫首句分析原文。分析的主要內(nèi)容如下：1.理清情節(jié)，尋找伏筆：利用記敘文的六個要素理清故事情節(jié)的發(fā)展；根據(jù)兩段續(xù)寫首句為續(xù)寫尋找伏筆。2.弄清大意，生成主題：根據(jù)情節(jié)發(fā)展弄清原文大意，生成續(xù)寫需要弘揚的主題。3.分析人物，把握性格：分析主要人物把握其性格特點，拿捏原文與續(xù)寫之間的契合點。除以上三點外，還需要分析文章的語言特點，續(xù)寫要盡力與原文在語言風格上保持一致。二、根據(jù)原文分析構(gòu)思續(xù)寫框架根據(jù)對原文的分析，銜接兩段續(xù)寫首句，劃出其中的關(guān)鍵詞句，弄懂關(guān)鍵句蘊含的意思，構(gòu)思第一段和第二段續(xù)寫框架。三、結(jié)合續(xù)寫框架構(gòu)思主要情節(jié)確定好續(xù)寫的框架后，一要設(shè)計好三個“銜接”和第二段的尾句：銜接第一段首句的內(nèi)容；第一段尾銜接第二段首句的內(nèi)容；銜接第二段首句的內(nèi)容以及第二段尾句的設(shè)計；二要設(shè)計好主要情節(jié)。四、細化情節(jié)擬稿潤色謄寫上卡【常用素材】(主要是敘事寫人和結(jié)尾升華句)Tamarastaredathimindisbelief,shakingherhead.塔瑪拉搖著頭，不相信地盯著他看。Singinghappily,shegazedathersurroundingswithlarge,innocenteyes.她快樂地唱著歌，一雙天真的大眼睛凝視著周圍的環(huán)境。Shelookedatherfatherstraightintheeyeandansweredhisquestiontruthfully.她直視著他父親的眼睛，誠實地回答了他的問題。Hereyesfellonthephotoofherandhersonathisfourthbirthdayparty.她的目光落在了兒子四歲生日派對上她和兒子的照片上。Histeammateswereallscreamingashedashedtowardthefinishline.當他沖向終點線時，他的搭檔們都在尖叫。Shenoddedherheadnervously.她緊張地不斷點頭。Hedecidedtogoforawalktoclearhishead.他決定去散散步，清醒一下頭腦。Shelayonthegrass,herheadpillowedonherarms.她頭枕著胳膊躺在草地上。there.headthere.headback,framedagainstthebluesky.他站在那里，頭向后仰，襯托在藍天下。Hetookafirmgriponherarmandrantowardsthedoor.他緊緊抓著她的手臂，往門口跑去。Shedidn’tsayaword,butheldhermother’shandtightlywithawaterysmile.她一句話也沒說，只是緊緊地握著母親的手，淡然一笑。Shedraggedherheavylegsandmovedtiredlyforward.她拖著沉重的雙腿，疲憊前行。Aterriblesorrowwashedoverme.一陣悲傷向我襲來。Wordsfailtoexpressmysorrow.語言不能表達我的悲傷。Therewasmorethanahintofsadnessinhisvoice.他的聲音中流露出了深切的悲傷。Astheeveningprogressed,sadnessturnedtorage.隨著夜幕逐漸降臨，悲傷變成了憤怒。Uponhearingthebadnews,shefeltseizedbyaburstofsadnessandcouldn'thelpcryingbitterly.聽了這個壞消息，她感到一陣悲傷，忍不住痛哭。Shebecamesonervousthatshetrembledviolently.她緊張得猛烈顫抖。Sheshookallover,feelinglikesittingonpinsandneedles.她渾身顫抖，覺得如坐針氈。Hefrozewithterror,tooscaredtomoveaninch.他嚇呆了，害怕得不敢移動一步。Hearingthebadnews,Maryfrozewithshock,asifsherootedontheground聽到這個壞消息，瑪麗嚇得呆住了，好像在地上扎了根。Hefelthisfaceburningwithshame.他的臉因羞愧而發(fā)燙。Soashameddidshefeelthatshewasclosetotears.她羞愧得幾乎要哭了。Hebowedhisheadinshamewhenhethoughtofhowhetreatedher.他想到是如何對待她的，羞愧地低下了頭。SeeingIwasOK,myfatherwasquiterelieved.看到我沒事，我父親松了一口氣。Hedesperatelycriedforhelpanditwasluckythatthedriverstoppedhiscar.他絕望地大聲呼救，幸運的是司機把車停了下來。FrightenedasIwas,Itriedtokeepmybalancetopreventmyselffromfallingoff.盡管我很害怕，我還是努力保持平衡以免摔下去。Intheend,thelittlechildrenreturnedtothevillage,safeandsound.最后，這些孩子安然無恙地回到了村子里。Hisfacelightingup,Arthursprangupintohismom’swarmhug.亞瑟喜笑顏開，投進了媽媽溫暖的懷抱。Seeingthegift,George’smotherwasveryglad,tearsrunningdownherface.看到禮物，喬治的媽媽非常高興，眼淚順著她的臉流下來。Deeplymovedbyallhissondid,thefathercouldsaynothingbuttohughimtightly,tearswellingupinhiseyes.父親被兒子所做的一切深深地感動了，說不出話來，緊緊地摟著他，熱淚盈眶。Mybestfriendistheonewhobringsoutthebestinme.最好的朋友使我表現(xiàn)得特別出色。Evenasmallactofkindnesscanmakeabigdifference.哪怕是一個小小的善舉也能帶來巨大的改變。Walkingwithafriendinthedarkisbetterthanwalkingaloneinthelight.在黑暗中與朋友并肩同行好過在光亮中獨自行走。Friendsshowtheirloveintimesoftrouble.notintimesofhappiness.朋友是在患難的時候表達愛意，而不是在幸福時。Shefeltwarmthinthecoldday，andbelievedtherewaskindnessineverycorner.她在寒冷的日子里感受到了溫暖，并且相信每個角落都有善意。Heleftpeopleahiddentreasure-hiskindheart，whichshallneverdieawaywiththepassageoftime.他給人們留下了一個隱藏的寶藏——他那顆善良的心，它將永遠不會隨著時間的流逝而消失。Shesmiledbackintears.Notuntilthatmomentdidsherealizewhatabigdifferenceonesmallgesturehadmade.她含淚回以微笑。直到那一刻她才意識到一個小小的手勢有多大的影響。Itisbettertolightonecandlethantocursethedarkness.與其詛咒黑暗，不如燃起蠟燭。Perseverancecansometimesequalgeniusinitsresults.毅力在效果上有時能同天才相比。Difficultcircumstancesserveasatextbookoflifeforpeople.困難坎坷是人們生活的教科書。Thereisnodignitywithouthonesty.沒有誠實何來尊嚴。Honestyisthemosttouchingthing.誠實最能打動人心的。Completesinceritycanaffectevenmetalandstone.精誠所至，金石為開。Itismoreimportantforamantokeephispromisethantoguardhisproperty.一個人嚴守諾言比守衛(wèi)他的財產(chǎn)更重要。Helpothersmoreandcreatemorehappiness.多幫助他人，多創(chuàng)造快樂。Tolivebyoneselfistomakeotherslivebetter.獨立就是為了讓他人活得更好。Lightalampforothers,andyouwillnotonlylightupforothersbutalsoyourself.為別人點一盞燈，照亮別人，也照亮了自己。Itisakindofhappinesstobelovedbyothers,anditisalsoakindofhappinesstocareforothers.得到他人的關(guān)愛是一種幸福，關(guān)愛他人也是一種幸福?！窘忸}演示】解題主要過程演示現(xiàn)以“2022·新高考I卷”為例演示一下主要解題過程，供考生平時練習時參考。(2022·新高考I卷)Itwasthedayofthebigcross-countryrun.Studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolsinandaroundthesmalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingtheroute(路線)throughthickevergreenforest.IlookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid,whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafence.Hewassmallfortenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn’twiththeotherchildren.Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.Whatwaswrong?Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent!Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfortheschool’scoachandaskedhimwhathadhappened.“Iwasafraidthatkidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughathim,”heexplaineduncomfortably.“Igavehimthechoicetorunornot,andlethimdecide.”Ibitbackmyfrustration(懊惱).Iknewthecoachmeantwell—hethoughthewasdoingtherightthing.AftermakingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme,hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren,butatschoolhisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.ThatwaswhynoneofthechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecross-countryteam.Itjusttookhimlonger—that’sall.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren,hedidalwaysfinish.Asaspecialeducationteacherattheschool,IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1:Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________一、借助兩段續(xù)寫首句分析原文通讀原文，借助兩段續(xù)寫首句分析原文，主要分析以下內(nèi)容：1.理清情節(jié)，尋找伏筆：利用記敘文的六個要素理清故事情節(jié)的發(fā)展；根據(jù)兩段續(xù)寫首句為續(xù)寫尋找伏筆。理清情節(jié)：when:越野賽前where:越野賽的賽場who:David(withabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren)I(aspecialeducationteacherattheschool),theschool’scoach,studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolswhyandwhat:腦部疾病引發(fā)腿部殘疾的男孩David擔心自己參加越野賽會被嘲笑，決定放棄比賽，作為他的老師我見證了David的毅力和為這次比賽所做出的努力，并為他的堅強意志而驕傲。how:文章的結(jié)局正是續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容。尋找伏筆：①Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.(出現(xiàn)問題)②“Iwasafraidthatkidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughathim,”heexplaineduncomfortably.(欲退賽原因)③AftermakingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme(暗示有了轉(zhuǎn)機),hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward(他異于常人的具體表現(xiàn)).④Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren(欲退賽的根本原因),butatschoolhisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing(同學不會嘲笑他和他決定參賽的原因).ThatwaswhynoneofthechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecross-countryteam(意志堅定的表現(xiàn)).2.弄清大意，生成主題：根據(jù)情節(jié)發(fā)展弄清原文大意，生成續(xù)寫需要弘揚的主題。文章大意：本文作者是一名特殊教育教師，在大型越野賽跑那天，發(fā)現(xiàn)患有大腦疾病的大衛(wèi)獨自站在一旁。作者問其原因，他說準備放棄比賽。從教練口中得知，因為擔心同學們會嘲笑大衛(wèi)，所以教練想讓大衛(wèi)自己去決定是否參加賽跑。作者讓大衛(wèi)追尋自己的內(nèi)心，不理會別人的看法，大衛(wèi)最終參賽，盡管遇到困難，他戰(zhàn)勝了自己，這已經(jīng)無關(guān)名次，而是他的勇敢和堅定讓這一切成為可能。根據(jù)原文大意生成需要弘揚的主題：大衛(wèi)身殘志堅，積極向上。3.分析人物，把握性格：分析主要人物把握其性格特點，拿捏原文與續(xù)寫之間的契合點。主要人物及其性格特點：①David:身殘志堅，積極向上，為實現(xiàn)目標努力奮斗，困難面前從不放棄，但因自身殘疾又有些怯懦自卑；②I:作為David的老師熱愛并欣賞自己的學生；③原文與續(xù)寫之間的契合點：David身殘志堅，渴望參加比賽，但稍有自卑，“我”作為他的老師熱愛學生并欣賞David的堅強意志，在David要退出比賽的時候會用自己的愛心去支持和鼓勵他克服困難，積極面對，并且David會接受老師的建議，勇敢地完成比賽。除以上三點外，還需要分析文章的語言特點，續(xù)寫要盡力與原文在語言風格上保持一致。二、根據(jù)原文分析構(gòu)思續(xù)寫框架根據(jù)對原文的分析，銜接兩段續(xù)寫首句，劃出其中的關(guān)鍵詞句，弄懂關(guān)鍵句蘊含的意思，構(gòu)思第一段和第二段續(xù)寫框架。①由第一段首句“Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.我們挨著坐著，但大衛(wèi)不愿看我一眼?！眲澗€處蘊含的意思是：大衛(wèi)的心理是內(nèi)疚、不甘、亦或是其他什么心理？②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.我看著大衛(wèi)和其他選手一起走到起跑線上?！眲澗€處蘊含的意思是：勸說成功，大衛(wèi)參賽。由以上分析可知：第一段可描寫作者鼓勵大衛(wèi)繼續(xù)完成比賽，大衛(wèi)經(jīng)過激烈的心理斗爭，最終決定參加比賽；第二段可描寫大衛(wèi)開始參賽，雖然中途遇到困難，仍然在大家的鼓勁下堅持到最后，完成了比賽。三、結(jié)合續(xù)寫框架構(gòu)思主要情節(jié)確定好續(xù)寫的框架后，一要設(shè)計好三個銜接和第二段的尾句：銜接第一段首句的內(nèi)容；第一段段尾銜接第二段首句的內(nèi)容；銜接第二段首句的內(nèi)容以及第二段的尾句的設(shè)計；二要設(shè)計好主要情節(jié)。銜接第一段首句：如何打破僵局？Iturnedtohimandpattedhim,sayinggently...情節(jié)1：鼓勵David參加比賽；情節(jié)2：大衛(wèi)的心理活動或動作描寫。第一段尾句要銜接第二段首句：大衛(wèi)決定參加比賽。銜接第二段首句：直接寫比賽開始或?qū)懸粚懳液退幕樱蛘呤谴笮l(wèi)的心理活動等。Theracestarted...情節(jié)1：對大衛(wèi)跑的過程中的一些描寫；情節(jié)2：我或其他人在大衛(wèi)跑的過程中為大衛(wèi)加油鼓勁場面的描寫；情節(jié)3：大衛(wèi)克服困難堅持跑完全程的描寫。第二段尾句：情感升華：我的感悟或大衛(wèi)感獲得挑戰(zhàn)自我的成就感。四、細化情節(jié)擬稿潤色謄寫上卡【答案1】Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.Iturnedtohimandpattedhim,sayinggently,“Noonecanchangeyourmind,exceptyourself.Ifyoudesiretochallengeyourself,thereisnothingtodowithothers’thoughts.”Hesatstillwithadeepbreath.“Youhaveafullpreparationbeforethisevent,whichisthemostimportantreasonwhyyoushowuphere”,Iaddedwithasinceretone.Hearingmywords,Davidlookingupatme,hisusualbigtoothysmilecameback.“Ihavedecidedtorun.”hesaiddeterminedly.IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Theracestarted.Itseemedthattherunwaywasextremelylongforyoungchildren,nottomentionachildwithaheartdisease.Davidinsistedonrunningasifhehadforgottenallhisweaknesses,thoughhewastrippedoverwithintherace.Itdidn’ttakelongbeforehepickedhimselfupagainandcontinuedhismission.Classmatesallappearedontheracingtrack,cheeringforhimenthusiastically.“Comeon!Youcanmakeit!Weareproudofyou!”.Toeveryone’sjoy,hereachedthefinallineeventually.Itwasnomoreimportantwhetherhewonthefirstplaceornot.Itwashisbraveheartandstrongfaiththatcouldmakesomethingunusualhappenfinally.【答案2】Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.Isaidgently,“You’reeagertorun,right?”“Yes,butI’mafraid…”saidDavidinalowvoice,withhisheaddropping.“Iknowyou’reafraidofbeinglaughedat,butIthinkit’sagoodchanceforyoutoproveyourself.Youhavebeenworkingsohardfortherun,andI’msoproudofyou,David.Ifyoureallywanttorun,don’tletanythingoranybodystopyou.”Davidlookingupatme,hisusualbigtoothysmilecameback.“Ihavedecidedtorun.”hesaiddeterminedly.IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Therunbegan.Alltherunnersrushedforward.Davidwastheonlyonewhorockedfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward,whichmadehimveryspecialamongtheotherparticipants.Thecrowdsbeganwhispering.Suddenly,Davidtrippedoverasmallstone.Ihurriedlyshouted“Comeon,David.”Unexpectedly,thewhisperofcrowdstransferredintoencouragement,“Comeon!Comeon!”Davidpickedhimselfupandwentallouttomoveforward.Althoughhestillwasthelasttofinishtherun,hedidmakeit.Allthecrowdscheeredforhim!【寫作實踐】(改編自2022·浙江1月卷)WhenDr.Gullicksonwasassigningprojectmatesforhispsychologyclass,IsecretlyhopedhewouldpairmewithmybestfriendoratleastaclassmateIcouldhavesomefunwith.Aboveall,Ihopedhewouldn’tassignmetoworkwiththefiercelycompetitive,extremelyseriousfellowwhoalwaysworedarkclothesandapparentlyhadapersonalitytomatch.Asfate(命運)wouldhaveit,Dr.GullicksonverydeliberatelymatchedeveryoneinclassandannouncedthatIwouldbeworkingwiththeonepersoninclassIwantedtoavoid.Iwentuptomynewteammateandintroducedmyself.HelookedatmeasthoughIweren’tthere.IfelthetreatedmeasthoughIwouldholdhimbackandprobablymakehimfailtogetanAinthecourse.Hewasn’tmeanorabusive.Hejustgavemetheimpressionhecoulddowhateverprojectwedreamedupbetterifhediditalone.Needlesstosay,Ididn’tlookforwardtoanentiresemesterofbeingbrushedoff,butItriedtomakethebestofitanddidn’tsayanythingforfearthatIwouldmakethingsworse.Theprojectrequiredeachteamtodevelopahypothesis(假說),setupanexperimenttotestthehypothesis,dothestatisticalanalysisandpresentthefindings.Whatevergradetheteamreceivedwouldbesharedbybothstudents.WhenmyteammateandImettodiscussourproject,Iwasuneasy.Herewasthischallengingstudentwhohadareputationforsingle-mindednessandgoodgrades—theexactoppositeofme.Iactuallywantedtodroptheclassatonepoint,butstoppedshortbecauseIdidn’twanttogivehimthesatisfactionofmychickeningout.Idecidedtosticktoitnomatterwhat.Afterlengthydiscussions,wesomehowagreedtodoastudyonthepsychologicalwell-beingofteenagers.Iwasn’tsurewhatitmeantexactly,butatleastwehadatopic.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1:Westartedtomeetregularlytodrawupourplans.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________