【課件】讀后續(xù)寫解題策略

讀后續(xù)寫解題策略閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫,使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。AfunnythinghappenedtoArthurwhenhewasonthewaytoworkoneday.AshewalkedalongParkAvenueneartheFirstNationalBank,heheardthesoundofsomeonetryingtostartacar.Hetriedagainandagainbutcouldn'tgetthecarmoving.Arthurturnedandlookedinsideatthefaceofayoungmanwholookedworried.Arthurstoppedandasked,“Itlookslikeyou'vegotaproblem,”Arthursaid.“I'mafraidso.I'minabighurryandIcan'tstartmycar.”

“IstheresomethingIcandotohelp?”Arthurasked.Theyoungmanlookedatthetwosuitcasesinthebackseatandthensaid,“Thanks.Ifyou'resureitwouldn'tbetoomuchtrouble,youcouldhelpmegetthesesuitcasesintoataxi.”

“Notroubleatall.I'dbegladtohelp.”Theyoungmangotoutandtookoneofthesuitcasesfromthebackseat.Afterplacingitontheground,heturnedtogettheotherone.JustasArthurpickedupthefirstsuitcaseandstartedwalking,heheardthelongloudnoiseofanalarm.Itwasfromthebank.Therehadbeenarobbery(搶劫)!ParkAvenuehadbeenquietamomentbefore.Nowtheairwasfilledwiththesoundofthealarmandtheshoutsofpeoplerunningfromalldirections.Carsstoppedandthepassengersjoinedthecrowdinfrontofthebank.Peopleaskedeachother,“Whathappened?”Buteveryonehadadifferentanswer.Arthur,stillcarryingthesuitcase,turnedtolookatthebankandwalkedrightintotheyoungwomaninfrontofhim.Shelookedatthesuitcaseandthenathim.Arthurwassurprised.“Whyisshelookingatmelikethat?”Hethought.“Thesuitcase！ShethinksI'mthebankthief!”Arthurlookedaroundatthecrowdofpeople.Hebecamefrightened,andwithoutanotherthought,hestartedtorun.Paragraph1：Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!”___________________________________________________________________________________________________

Paragraph2：ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthur____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________onArthur'swaytoworkonedayWhenWhereIntheParkAvenueneartheFirstNationalBankWhoArthur,ayoungman,people,ayoungwomanMainIdeaWhileArthurwashelpingayoungmantogethissuitcasesintoataxi,analarmfromthebankrang,whichmeanttherehadbeenarobbery.WhatMainIdeaWhyTheyoungmancouldn'tgethiscarmoving,andhehastwosuitcases,HowAyoungwomansawArthurcarryingasuitcaseandassumedthathewasthebankthief.Arthurbecamefrightened,soheranwiththesuitcase.(1)讀大意，抓中心主題

把故事六要素結(jié)合起來，我們即可得知原文大意：Arthur在幫助一位年輕人搬行李箱時，銀行警鐘突然大響。他因抬著行李箱而被懷疑是搶劫犯，過于害怕，他便拿著行李箱逃跑了。(2)讀人物，找續(xù)寫人物讀續(xù)寫兩段的首句可知，Arthur和那位年輕人是續(xù)寫內(nèi)容的關(guān)鍵人物，故年輕女士及人群可以排除不要。(3)讀時態(tài)，選續(xù)寫時態(tài)通讀全文可知，該故事主要是用一般過去時講述的，故續(xù)寫內(nèi)容的時態(tài)也應(yīng)一致。(4)讀結(jié)構(gòu)，辨劃分方式弄清故事的結(jié)構(gòu)特點及表現(xiàn)形式，選擇合適的方式劃分段落，常用的有4：①以時空變化劃分(指時間和地點)；②以人物思想感情的變化來劃分；③按記敘內(nèi)容的變化來劃分；④按描述角度的變化、事情發(fā)展的階段來劃分。

再看回樣題，一開始，Arthur是在ParkAvenue，而由續(xù)寫兩段首句可知，續(xù)寫第一段Arthur是在的士里，第二段是在警察局里，Arthur所處地點不斷變化，由此可知,樣題是按照時空變化來劃分的。而我們在構(gòu)思續(xù)寫內(nèi)容時也應(yīng)在這兩個地點的基礎(chǔ)上進(jìn)行拓展。(5)讀語言，定風(fēng)格特色

挖掘文本語言表達(dá)風(fēng)格，模仿原文語言寫句子。使續(xù)寫部分的語言風(fēng)格與原文的風(fēng)格相一致，以促進(jìn)語言協(xié)同。此外，如果原文有較多對話,續(xù)寫也可出現(xiàn)對話；如原文沒有對話,盡量少用對話形式。如樣題原文中的語言特色:①由as引導(dǎo)的時間狀語從句：AshewalkedalongParkAvenueneartheFirstNationalBank,heheardthesoundofsomeonetryingtostartacar.JustasArthurpickedupthefirstsuitcaseandstartedwalking,heheardthelongloudnoiseofanalarm.Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!”②并列動詞來描述人物的動作：Arthurturnedandlookedinsideatthefaceofayoungmanwholookedworried.Arthurstoppedandasked…Theyoungmangotoutandtookoneofthesuitcasesfromthebackseat.③介賓短語作狀語：Afterplacingitontheground,heturnedtogettheotherone.④分詞短語作狀語：Arthur,stillcarryingthesuitcase,turnedtolookatthebankandwalkedrightintotheyoungwomaninfrontofhim.現(xiàn)將短文關(guān)鍵信息梳理成以下表格：故事發(fā)展的要素起因WhenArthurwasonhiswaytowork,hefoundayoungmanintrouble.經(jīng)過JustasArthurhelpedtheyoungmantomovehissuitcasesintoataxi,heheardthelongloudnoiseofanalarm.轉(zhuǎn)折AyoungwomansawArthurcarryingasuitcaseandassumedthathewasthebankthief.Arthurbecamefrightened,soheranwiththesuitcase.三個關(guān)鍵句

高潮(續(xù)寫第一段)首句:Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!”以及最后一句結(jié)局(續(xù)寫第二段)首句：ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthur…

基于以上信息，再根據(jù)口訣“兩段首句定一框”可知，第一段內(nèi)容發(fā)生的地點應(yīng)該是在的士里，我們設(shè)想Arthur懷疑那個年輕人是銀行搶劫犯，于是他打的士去警察局報案。注意：這段結(jié)尾要與下段首句銜接。再由口訣“二框二首正能量”去構(gòu)建第二段的框架:Arthur到警察局后跟警察說明情況,并且把行李箱交給他們檢查。最終那個年輕人被抓到。這里還可以設(shè)計第二種結(jié)局：Arthur到警察局后跟警察說明情況，并且把行李箱交給他們檢查。年輕人隨后也到了，經(jīng)過調(diào)查，是誤會一場。

基于第二段的框架，我們可以補充以下細(xì)節(jié)：

結(jié)局1：Arthur的動作描寫(沖進(jìn)警察局，跟警察說明情況,并且把行李箱交給了他們檢查)→警察動作描寫(打開行李箱發(fā)現(xiàn)滿箱是鈔票,向Arthur問罪犯特征)→年輕人被抓到,Arthur被表揚為見義勇為。

結(jié)局2：Arthur的動作描寫(沖進(jìn)警察局，跟警察說明情況，并且把行李箱交給了他們檢查)→警察動作描寫(打開行李箱發(fā)現(xiàn)是衣服和日用品)→年輕人的動作描寫(年輕人到警察局)→年輕人的語言描寫(年輕人向警察報案Arthur偷行李)→Arthur的人物描寫(感到尷尬，滿臉通紅)→Arthur的動作描寫(向年輕人道歉)→警察的動作描寫(表揚了Arthur的見義勇為)。Onepossibleversion:

Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!”Allofasudden,ahorriblethoughtjustcameintoArthur'smind:theyoungmanmightbethebankrobber!Havingrealizedtheseriousnessofthematter,Arthurranstraighttoataxiandjumpedinwiththesuitcase.Helookedbackandsawtheyoungman,whosefacewasfilledwithfury,shoutingandchasingaftertheirtaxi.Arthurturnedtothedriverandsaid,“Quickly,gotothePoliceStation!Themanchasingbehindisthebankrobber!”ThetaxiarrowedtowardtheStation.結(jié)局1ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthurrushedintoit,toldthepolicewhathadhappenedandhandedthesuitcaseintothem.Theyopenedthesuitcaseandfoundthattherewasfullofmoneyinside,justasArthurhadexpected.WiththedescriptionoftherobberfromArthur,thepolicecaughttherobberverys