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讀后續(xù)寫講評HonestyWon’tLetYouDown
Asad,an_______andhardworkingboy,wasanewcomertotheschoolwithoutfriendsaround.Onedayhewasinsucha________thatheforgottotake______withhim.Asaresult,hehadeitherto_________foodorborrowmoneyfromFahad,anarrogantboywhowasoneoftherichestboysandthoughteveryoneelsewasa_________.
Naturally,Fahad_____________hisrequestandevenlaughedathim,whichmadehim__________(embarrass).Leftaloneonthebenchinfrontofthecanteen,hequite______________spottedawalletonthebench.Heimmediatelyrecognizedit_________toFahad,withalotofmoneyinside.UnderstandingthestoryturneddownhurrymoneygowithoutloserhonestembarrassedaccidentallybelongedUnderlinetheimportantdetailsinthetext.Asadwasa13-year-oldboywhowasveryhonest
andhardworking.Recently,hehadenteredanew
schoolsohehadno
friendsyet,OnMondaymorning,hewasnearlylate
for
school.Thenightbefore,hisfamilyattendedhiscousin’sweddingandreachedhomelate,whichwaswhyhecouldn’t
get
up
on
timeasusual.
Atschool,Asadcouldnotpayattentiontoanythingandwantedthebelltoringsothathecouldbuy
something
to
eat.Afterafewhours,whenthebellrang,Asadquicklyopenedhisschoolbagtofindhismoney,butjustthenherememberedthathehadleftforschoolinahurryinthemorningandforgotten
totakemoney,Helookedunderhisbooks,hopingtofindsomemoneybuttherewasnothing.
Notknowingwhattodo,hewalkedoutoftheclassroomandsatonabenchinfrontofthecanteen.Hesawafewofhisclassmatesthere,amongthemwasFahad.Hewasoneoftherichest
kidsinhisclassbuthewasaveryarrogantboywhothoughteveryoneelsewasaloser.ButasAsadwasnew,hedidn’tknowmuchaboutFahad.
WhenhewenttowardsFahadandaskedifhecouldborrowsomemoneyforhislunch,Fahadlaughed
alotandsaid,“Iknewyouwerealoser,maybeabeggar?"Fahadlaughedoutsoloudthatotherkidsalsoheardandmadefunofthesituation.Hedidn’tanswerFahad,andslowlywalkedbacktowardsanempty
bench.ReadingWhenhereachedthebench,henoticedsomethinglyingnearit.Itwasawallet.Hepickeditup
andrecognizeditasFahad's,asherememberedFahadshowingittohisfriendsandtellingthathisuncleboughtitforhimfromtheUK.Therewasquitealotofmoneyinsideforakid.
Para1:Atfirst,AsadwantedtoKeepitasecretandpunishedFahad.
______________________________________________________________________________
Para2:ThenFahadsaid,“Whyareyougivingitback?”______________________________________________________________________________________________________________ReadingReading
problem---solution---problem---solution---problem---solutionUnderstandingthestoryStorylineEmotionlineStorylinenew,nofriends,nomoneyborrow…fromFahadFrefusedtherequest,laughatSpottedF’swalletWhattodowiththewallet?lonely,helplesshopefulunhappy,embarrassedexcitedtorn?Echotheimportantdetailsinyourwriting.
Para1:Atfirst,Asadwantedtokeepitasecretandpunished
Fahad.
Para2:ThenFahadsaid,“Whyareyougivingitback?!”Whatinformationcanyougetfromthegivensentences?WhathappenedbeforeFahadaskedthequestion?1.DidAsadchangehismindatthelastminute?Whatmadehimchangehismind?2.Whatwashisnewidea?3.HowdidhegivebackthewalletandwhatwasFahad’sreaction?1.HowdidAsadexplainthewholething?Andhowdidhefeel?2.DidFahadbelievehisexplanation?Andwhatdidhedo?3.Asad’sreflections./Whatdidtheyeachlearnfromtheincident?Threeconnectionsandonecoda點1:位于續(xù)寫第一段段首,流暢銜接前面的記敘文和第一段段首語:點2:位于續(xù)寫第一段段尾,流暢銜接第二段段首語:點3:位于續(xù)寫第二段段首,續(xù)寫銜接第二段段首語;點4:文章結(jié)尾升華,給予讀者正能量,揭示和強調(diào)劇情的寓意。Makeadraft:Threeconnectionsandonecoda(Payattentiontowordchoice)續(xù)寫參考思路:
Paragraph1:Atfirst,AsadwantedtokeepitasecretandpunishedFahad.思路1:我內(nèi)心糾結(jié)
---做誠實的人這一信念讓我做出歸還的決定---我追上去,歸還錢包---
Fahad不解地拿了回去;
思路2:我想看他出丑,作為對我嘲笑的報復(fù)---理智(做個誠實人)讓我把錢包還給他。
Paragraph2:ThenFahadsaid,"Whyareyougivingitback?"思路1:我解釋了我內(nèi)心的想法----被觸動,他對我表示感謝,對所有人表示歉意---請我們吃午餐,成為好朋友
---誠實讓我收獲了友誼和信任;思路2:Fahad懷疑我的動機---我解釋原因---借我錢,成了好朋友–反思:honesty伴我同行。
Soembarrassedwashethathestoodthereclumsily,feelingtheblood
rushtohisface.Helowered
hisbody,hesitatedforamoment,wonderinghowtohidehisinner
embarrassment.Heopenedhermouth,his
face
turning
red.Alltheairseemedtodisappearandhefelt
as
ifthewholeworldwerewatchinghim.Languageaccumulation--embarrassment
AninnervoiceaskedmetobuythepairofbootsIliked,butanothervoicecameintomymind,urgingmetobuysomedecorationsandfeastsforthefamily.
Feelingquitetornbetween....And....,
Icouldhardlymakethedecision.Languageaccumulation–糾結(jié)Honest---Beinghonest--Honesty
Asadcongratulatedhimselfonmakingtherightdecision,makingtheschoollifeaheadnolongerlonely.Thebelief“Beinghonestwon’tletyoudown”willstickwithhimthroughthetoughdaysahead.
Asadscratchedhishead,notknowinghowtorespondtoFahad’sapologies,butheknewhewas,hasbeenandwillbehonest.
MakeagoodendingA.Message點睛式:
Beinghonestnotonlyhelpedhimgainothers’trustbutalsomadenewfriendsinthisnewschool,anewchapterof
lifebeginningtounfoldbeforehim.
MakeagoodendingB.環(huán)境描寫烘托式:
Bathedinthewarmnoonsunshine,Asadcouldn’thelpsmiling,gladthathissimplehonestywasrewardedwithsuchalargecircleofnicefriends!
Moreexamples:
Outsidethewindow,thebirdsperchedonthetopofthebranchessinging
happily,asifcelebratingmywisechoice.
MakeagoodendingC.展望將來式:
Withmorefriendsaround,Asadwasconvincedthatanewlifewaswaitingforhimtoexplore.
MakeagoodendingD.回首反思式:
Lookingback,Asadcongratulatedhimselfonmakingtherightdecision,whichhelpedhimturnoverachapteroflife.
MakeagoodendingE.自然過程式:Bybeinghonestandsayingthetruth,notonlydidAsadgetsomemoneytobuylunchwhenFahadlenthimsome,buthewasalsoabletomakenewfriends.Ontheotherhand,Fahad’slifechanged,allhisprideandselfishnesswentawayandhelearnedanimportantlesson,that“Honestywon’tletyoudown.”MakeagoodendingAtfirst,AsadwantedtokeepitasecretandpunishedFahad.Atleasthecouldaffordthelunchnow.However,anothervoicepoppedup,urginghimtogiveitbacktoFahad,whichmadehimfeeltorn.“Ishouldneverkeepthewalletatthecostofmyhonesty,andFahadwouldbeextremelyembarrassedwithoutanymoneyinthepresenceofsomanyclassmates!”Asadconvincedhimself.Oncehemadeuphismind,heacceleratedhispaceandcaughthimup.“Fahad,it’syourwalletandIfounditonthebench.”Takingoverthewallet,FahadstaredintoAsad’seyeswithapuzzledlookwritten
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