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1、書面表達專題書面表達專題(四四) 學(xué)生習(xí)作點評學(xué)生習(xí)作點評(一一)實現(xiàn)有效的溝通，建立良好的人際關(guān)系，不僅要善實現(xiàn)有效的溝通，建立良好的人際關(guān)系，不僅要善于言表、更要學(xué)會傾聽。請你根據(jù)下表中所提供的信息，于言表、更要學(xué)會傾聽。請你根據(jù)下表中所提供的信息，寫一篇題為寫一篇題為“Being a Good Listener”的英文演講稿。的英文演講稿。為何傾聽為何傾聽表示尊重，增進理解，建立良好的人表示尊重，增進理解，建立良好的人際關(guān)系際關(guān)系誰來誰來傾聽傾聽家長傾家長傾聽孩子聽孩子理解孩子，消除代溝，理解孩子，消除代溝，老師傾老師傾聽學(xué)生聽學(xué)生了解學(xué)生，滿足需求，了解學(xué)生，滿足需求，同學(xué)相同學(xué)相互傾

2、聽互傾聽增進友誼，互幫互學(xué)，增進友誼，互幫互學(xué)，怎樣怎樣傾聽傾聽(請考生聯(lián)系自己擬定內(nèi)容，列舉兩至三點。請考生聯(lián)系自己擬定內(nèi)容，列舉兩至三點。)注意：注意：1.對所給要點，逐一陳述，適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，不要對所給要點，逐一陳述，適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，不要簡單翻譯。簡單翻譯。2詞數(shù)詞數(shù)150左右。開頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)寫好，不計入總左右。開頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)寫好，不計入總詞數(shù)。詞數(shù)。3演講稿中不得提及考生所在學(xué)校及本人姓名。演講稿中不得提及考生所在學(xué)校及本人姓名。Good afternoon，everyone!The topic of my speech today is“Being a Good Listener”_Thank

3、you for your listening!學(xué)生習(xí)作學(xué)生習(xí)作Good afternoon，everyone!The topic of my speech today is“Being a Good Listener”Good listening can always show respect，promote understanding，and improve interpersonal relationship.Many people suggest that parents should listen more to their children，so they will understa

4、nd them better，and find it easy to narrow the generation gap；teachers should listen more to their students，then they can meet their needs better，and place themselves in a good relationship with their students；students should listen more to their classmates，thus they will help and learn from each oth

5、er，and a friendship is likely to be formed.What I want to stress is that each of us should listen more to others.Show your respect and never stop others till they finish their talk；show you are interested by a supportive silence or a knowing smile；be openminded to different opinions even though you

6、dont like them.In a word，good listening can really enable us to get closer to each other.Thank you for your listening!教師點評教師點評文章開門見山，點明文章開門見山，點明“為何傾聽為何傾聽”，并且運用了，并且運用了并列謂語動詞來表達。并列謂語動詞來表達。在在“誰來傾聽誰來傾聽”一部分，作者運用并列的一部分，作者運用并列的“parents should listen.；teachers should listen.；students should listen.”，使文章讀來瑯瑯

7、上口，很有氣，使文章讀來瑯瑯上口，很有氣勢。勢。在在“怎樣傾聽怎樣傾聽”這一部分，作者提出了三點建議。這一部分，作者提出了三點建議。本段首先運用本段首先運用what引導(dǎo)的主語從句；其次用了三個并列的引導(dǎo)的主語從句；其次用了三個并列的祈使句，符合演講稿的語言特點；最后，以祈使句，符合演講稿的語言特點；最后，以in a word 作作出總結(jié)。出總結(jié)?？傊?，文章不管是從結(jié)構(gòu)上，還是從語言上，都不總之，文章不管是從結(jié)構(gòu)上，還是從語言上，都不愧為一篇佳作。愧為一篇佳作。(二二)Directions：Write an English composition in about 100 to 120 word

8、s according to the points given in Chinese.1我最難忘的一課。我最難忘的一課。2具體說明為什么難忘。具體說明為什么難忘。3感想。感想。_學(xué)生習(xí)作學(xué)生習(xí)作On my study way，a English class makes a deep impression on me and is remian in my memory.At that time，Im not interested in English and always do other something in English classes.However，this English cl

9、ass makes me change my mind about English.The English teachers lecture attracts me deeply.She opens a door for me，make me realize English is very important and interesting.She gives me enough confidence learn English well.In a word，this class changes my life in some way.Therefore，I swear I must learn English well and I can.教師點評教師點評本文漢語式英語較多，出現(xiàn)了許多時態(tài)錯誤。既然本文漢語式英語較多，出現(xiàn)了許多時態(tài)錯誤。既然是記敘是記敘“難忘的一課難忘的一課”，應(yīng)以一般過去時為主。本文除最，應(yīng)以一般過去時為主。本文除最后一句外，其他各句的時態(tài)均應(yīng)改為過去時態(tài)。后一句外，其他各句的時態(tài)均應(yīng)改為過去時態(tài)。此處為漢語式表達，應(yīng)改為此處為漢語式表達，應(yīng)改為In my study life/career。冠詞使用錯誤，冠詞使用錯誤，a應(yīng)改為應(yīng)改為an。remain 為系動詞，故應(yīng)將為系動詞，故應(yīng)將is remai