初中英語作文專題講解-作文1-人物薈萃-學(xué)生版

1、Revision2020作文共20分，評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)包括內(nèi)容 8分，語言8分，組織結(jié)構(gòu)分4分。如果學(xué)生的 作文內(nèi)容充實(shí)，不寫廢話；上下文連貫；用語規(guī)范，表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確，無或少見語法錯(cuò)誤；詞匯和 句型句式運(yùn)用恰當(dāng)，多見好句型和習(xí)慣表達(dá)用語者，才可給4分結(jié)構(gòu)分。一般情況下，學(xué)生要得到4分組織結(jié)構(gòu)分，內(nèi)容和語言積累得分在15分以上者（含）。作文內(nèi)容和語言累積不足15分者，如文中有值得肯定的好的句型和表達(dá)，可酌情考慮給1-3分組織結(jié)構(gòu)分。但是如果作文的通篇句型，句式單一，詞匯貧乏，即使在習(xí)作中無語法錯(cuò)誤，一般亦不予給組織結(jié) 構(gòu)分。自從2012年中考寫作有了結(jié)構(gòu)分后，改變了以往評(píng)價(jià)作文只從內(nèi)容和語言兩方面評(píng)分 的單

2、一性，近年來中考組織結(jié)構(gòu)分的不斷調(diào)整和上升，也充分體現(xiàn)了對(duì)于學(xué)生英語語言能力 更高要求。在平時(shí)的寫作閱卷及歷年的中考英語閱卷中，我們常常將評(píng)分細(xì)則綜合成五個(gè)檔次。在評(píng)分時(shí)，閱卷老師先根據(jù)文章的內(nèi)容和語言初步確定其所屬檔次，然后以該檔次的要求來衡 量，確定或調(diào)整檔次，最后給分。A 檔：16-18 分B 檔:12-15.5 分C 檔：8-11.5 分D 檔：5-7.5 分E 檔：1-4.5 分以下表格是教育部五級(jí)寫作評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)各檔次的給分范圍和要求，相信對(duì)中考英語作文評(píng)分解析會(huì)有幫助。檔次（分?jǐn)?shù)）評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)第五檔（18-20 分）很好地完成了規(guī)定的寫作任務(wù)，包含所有內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，結(jié)構(gòu)完成，語句流暢， 意思

3、清楚，連貫。使用較為豐富的語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯，語法和詞匯錯(cuò)誤極少， 格式正確，書寫規(guī)范第四檔（14-17 分）較好地完成了規(guī)定的寫作任務(wù)，基本上包含所有內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，結(jié)構(gòu)較為完整， 語句完整，意思清楚。語法和詞匯錯(cuò)誤極少，格式基本正確，書有較為規(guī) 范第三檔（10-13 分）基本上完成了規(guī)定的寫作任務(wù)，包含主要內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，結(jié)構(gòu)欠完整，少數(shù)語 句不通順，意思基本清楚。語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯錯(cuò)誤較多，格式基本正確，書 寫基本規(guī)范第二檔（6-9 分）未能按要求完成規(guī)定的寫作任務(wù)，只包含少數(shù)內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，結(jié)構(gòu)不完整，多 數(shù)語句欠完整，意思不夠清楚。語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯錯(cuò)誤較多，影響理解，格 式不夠正確，書寫欠規(guī)范第一檔（0-5 分

4、）未能按要求完成規(guī)定的寫作任務(wù)，只寫出個(gè)別要點(diǎn)，結(jié)構(gòu)不完整，多數(shù)語 句不完整或意思不明。語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯錯(cuò)誤很多，書寫不規(guī)范Introduction說到寫作，大多數(shù)學(xué)生都會(huì)頭皮發(fā)麻，覺得很難把握，是一個(gè)非常棘手的問題。的確， 由于初中生詞匯量的有限，有時(shí)又受到漢語思維的干擾，所以就不能正確的遣詞造句，切中 題意，久而久之就懼怕寫作了。 但是，在英語學(xué)習(xí)中，寫的能力是一種非常重要的語言能力。 他是通過書面形式來表達(dá)作者的思想、觀點(diǎn)，從而達(dá)到傳遞信息的目的。寫作主要考查同學(xué) 們實(shí)際運(yùn)用英語的語言能力和初步的交際能力，而且寫的水平在很大程度上能說明你語言能 力的優(yōu)劣。因此每年的中考都有寫作這一考查的內(nèi)

5、容。隨著英語學(xué)科教改的不斷深入，初中 階段寫作的要求比以往幾年提高了，分值也提高了。所以同學(xué)們一定要重視寫作的技巧，要 消除畏懼心理，排除心理障礙。初中階段英語寫作的常見題型：1、是根據(jù)所給標(biāo)題寫作2、是根據(jù)英語情景提示寫作3、是根據(jù)英漢提示寫作4、是看圖寫作。寫作的題材一般是寫人、寫事、寫物、寫景、議論、日記、書信、通知、便條等應(yīng)用類 文體。一般來說，不同的寫作題材，它的人物，時(shí)間，寫作的重點(diǎn)也是不盡相同的。這節(jié)課 就著重講解訓(xùn)練關(guān)于人物的寫作訓(xùn)練。寫人重寫外貌特征如果是寫人的，一般我們用第一或第三人稱寫，時(shí)態(tài)一般用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。寫人的文章，學(xué)生們一定要注意用詞的恰當(dāng)。比如，我們能說 ,我們不

6、能說 He is very high. 我們能說 . 我們不能說 He very like this job.只有正確的遣詞造句，才能寫出通順的話，表達(dá)你想要說的意思?？谝?brainstorm(vocabularies and phrases)T: When we mention people, what vocabularies and phrases can we use?名詞：favorite actor , comedy , pen pal, shop assistant, doctor, reporter, policeman, waiter, bank clerk, police

7、woman, nurse, police, man, hair, height, build, captain, person, beard, glasses, look, singer, sex, king, host, members of the family, university, engineer, pilot, dream, artist, instrument, talent, talent show, success, achievement, medal, championship, violinist, pianist, programmer, exhibition, r

8、esolution , high school, college, computer programmer, house, apartment, dream job動(dòng)詞： go to movies, go to see Beijing opera , be like, be from, work as a teacher, be of medium build, be of medium height, look like, wear glasses, perform, become, skate, tour, travel, hold, be good at, like to do, tak

9、e part in, have a yard sale, get good grades, get a part-time job, make more friends, make me laugh, major in, grow up, live alone, keep a pet, look smart, make a living, get married, dress casually, used to ，be terrified of ，give up, worry about, take pride in, pay attention to形容詞 ：successful, bori

10、ng, hungry, smart, kind of, ugly, clever, friendly, beautiful, shy, other, lazy, young, surprised, relaxed, curly, straight, tall, medium, thin, heavy, popular, blonde, good-looking, a little bit, brown, unfriendly, outgoing, calm, serious, tall, long hair, short hair, curly hair, funny, heavy, quie

11、t, talented, loving, creative, kind, well-known, rich,cool, popular, wild, athletic, funny, outstanding, unusual, national, alive, professional, polite, friendly, beautiful, interesting, short, tall, outgoing, funny, shy, serious, friendly, quiet, excellent, devoted （投入的）,easygoing, outgoing, passio

12、nate （有激情的）energetic, strict, patient, kind, weak/poor, confident8Presentation書面表達(dá)：假如彳在2019亞運(yùn)會(huì)期間碰到外國(guó)朋友， 請(qǐng)你根據(jù)下表的提示介紹進(jìn)入 NBA的中國(guó)球員 易建覽的情況。要求：主題鮮明，語句通順，意思連貫，適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，拼寫正確，書寫工整。80詞左右。易建聯(lián)|生日1987.10.27 出生:廣東身高 2.12向經(jīng)歷2003 年成為大學(xué)生(college student)2004 年 1 月選入國(guó)家籃球隊(duì)(National Basketball Team)2007年7月進(jìn)入NBA愛好喜歡聽流行音樂、玩電

13、腦其他現(xiàn)在還在努力學(xué)習(xí)英語、審：人物介紹、一般過去時(shí)態(tài)、一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)、抓：抓要點(diǎn)，確定主要詞匯籃球運(yùn)動(dòng)員(basketball player) 出生(be born) 被選入國(guó)家隊(duì)(be chosen to play for the National Basketball Team )成為 NBA 一員(become an NBA player)流行音樂(pop music)努力學(xué)好英語(try to learn )擴(kuò)：擴(kuò)展成句Eg: 1. basketball player, be born,Yi Jianlian, a famous basketball player, is from Gu

14、angdong China.He on October 27th,1987.2. be chosen ,play , the National Basketball Team,in January 20043. become a player, in July, 2007, NBA隨堂練習(xí)：1.我們發(fā)現(xiàn)禮堂坐滿了2.我們發(fā)現(xiàn)大禮堂坐滿了。3.我們發(fā)現(xiàn)大禮堂坐滿了學(xué)生和教師。4.我們發(fā)現(xiàn)大禮堂坐滿了學(xué)生和教師，在斤個(gè)5.我們發(fā)現(xiàn)大禮堂坐滿了學(xué)生和教師，在斤個(gè)重要的報(bào)告。6 .我們發(fā)現(xiàn)大禮堂坐滿了學(xué)生和教師，在聽布朗先生作重要報(bào)告。7 .我們發(fā)現(xiàn)大禮堂坐滿了學(xué)生和教師，在聽人民日?qǐng)?bào)的布朗先生作個(gè)重

15、要 報(bào)告。8 .我們發(fā)現(xiàn)大禮堂坐滿了學(xué)生和教師，在聽人民日?qǐng)?bào)的布朗先生作有關(guān)日 本地震的重要報(bào)告。四、連：連句成文(form a passage)本文應(yīng)按時(shí)間順序,in 2003, in his spare time常用連接詞：五、改：查漏改錯(cuò)Yi Jianlian, a famous basketball player, is from Guangdong, China. He is born on October 27 th 1987. He is 2.21meters tall. This handsome boy become a college student in 2003. He

16、 was chose to play for the National Basketball Team in January, 2004. This young man became an NBA player in July, 2007. In his spare time, he like listening pop music and to play computer games. Now he is trying his best learn English well.六.抄寫中考書面表達(dá)常見錯(cuò)誤一、名詞的單復(fù)數(shù)：There are two hundreds student on th

17、e playground.2 .主謂一致：David with his little brother go to the park every Sunday.3 .時(shí)態(tài)和語態(tài)：A thief is seen break a window to climb into an office of the factory last night4 .邏輯性問題：She wasn t careful, but she fell into the river.5 .詞類錯(cuò)用：When I was happily, I played computer games.6 .中式英語：I very like Eng

18、lish.如何拿高分1 .靈活運(yùn)用短語或詞組他們?cè)诙虝r(shí)間內(nèi)把火撲滅了.They the fire.2 .巧用連接詞他吃了很多，雖然他說他不餓.He ate a lot ,he said he wasn t hungry.3 .句型活用不準(zhǔn)在圖書館大聲喧嘩.1) You talk loudly in the library.2) You to talk loudly in the library.3)talk loudly in the library.4 .用詞生動(dòng)Jack went to the telephone.Jack rushed to the telephone5 .避難就易我最喜

19、歡的科目是英語.My subject is English.I English any other subject.I English.6 .長(zhǎng)短句交錯(cuò)運(yùn)用The town in which my parents live is very beautiful. We all love it very much.Focused practiceAAlice and Jack are middle school student. They volunteer them time to help other people. The work take them 3 hours a week. Ali

20、ce loves read. She often helps young children to read. Jack likes animals. He wants to be a vet before he leaves school. Every Saturday morning he goes to work in a animals hospital. He says he has learnt a lot of about animals. Alice and Jack both think volunteering is great. They feel good about h

21、elp other people. They spend time doing what they love to do.BDear sir,Im very sorry trouble you.My name is Mary. I usually do the shop at your store. Three days ago, I bought some clothes at your store. But I was not carefully enough then. When I went home, I found some problem. The pants is too sh

22、ort for my husband. And my daughter don t like the red skirt. She likes a yellow skirt one. I will glad if you can change me some new one.Mary二.寫作練習(xí)案例：Here is an application form （ 申請(qǐng)表）of Sara. Suppose you are Sara and want to study in Australia. Write a letter of at least 60 words to introduce your

23、self.（ 下面是 Sara 的申請(qǐng)表。假如你 是Sara,請(qǐng)根據(jù)表格信息，寫一封不少于60個(gè)詞的信介紹你自己，申請(qǐng)參加暑假澳大利亞交換學(xué)生項(xiàng)目。已給出的短文開頭及標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格。）注意：必須包括表格內(nèi)容：Application FormNameSaraAge15NationalityChineseGradeJunior 3SchoolNo.1 Middle SchoolPersonalityoutgoing and friendlyFavorite subjectsEnglish and musicHobbiescollecting stamps, listening to musicPl

24、anlearn English and make many friends學(xué)生習(xí)作：Dear Sir,I wish to be an exchange student in Australia this summer vacation. My name is Sara. I m 15years old. I come from China. I m a Junior 3 student. I study in No.1 Middle School. I ioutgoing and friendly girl. My favorite subjects are English and music

25、. I can speak English very well. My hobbies are collecting stamps and listening to music. I want to be an exchange student in Australia. I can learn English and make many friends. I hope my wish will be true.YoursSara剖析：這是一篇材料作文，假如你叫Sara,要根據(jù)已有的信息寫封信到澳大利亞，說明想去澳大利亞學(xué)習(xí)的愿望。試題本身給出了信息，學(xué)生要重組信息，表達(dá)愿望。該學(xué)生的 寫作中雖然沒有重大語言錯(cuò)誤，但是