2025屆高三英語上學(xué)期二輪復(fù)習(xí)基礎(chǔ)寫作：海報設(shè)計修改意見（2023年10月22日英語周測 ）應(yīng)用文寫作課件

2023年10月22日英語周測應(yīng)用文寫作假定你是李華,你的英國朋友David準備參加以“保護野生動物”為主題的海報設(shè)計大賽,現(xiàn)就參賽作品初稿征求你的意見。請回復(fù)郵件,內(nèi)容包括:1.提出存在的問題;2.提出修改建議?！?023年6月全國卷(I卷)】假定你是李華，外教Ryan準備將學(xué)生隨機分為兩人一組，讓大家課后練習(xí)口語，你認為這樣分組存在問題。請你給外教寫一封郵件，內(nèi)容包括：1.說明問題；2.提出建議。注意：1.寫作詞數(shù)應(yīng)為80個左右；

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。審題四問假定你是李華,你的英國朋友David準備參加以“保護野生動物”為主題的海報設(shè)計大賽,現(xiàn)就參賽作品初稿征求你的意見。請回復(fù)郵件,內(nèi)容包括:1.提出存在的問題;2.提出修改建議。注意：1.寫作詞數(shù)應(yīng)為80個左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答?！?023年6月全國卷(I卷)】假定你是李華，外教Ryan準備將學(xué)生隨機分為兩人一組，讓大家課后練習(xí)口語，你認為這樣分組存在問題。請你給外教寫一封郵件，內(nèi)容包括：1.說明問題；2.提出建議。注意：1.寫作詞數(shù)應(yīng)為80個左右；

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Q.Howtowritesuchaletterwithremarksandsuggestions?Whatshouldwefocuson?Remark?

Suggestion?

Remarkindicatesthefollowingsuggestions,whilesuggestionsshowthesolutionstoproblems.DearDavid,Yours,LiHuaStepstocompose1.OutlinePara.1Backgroundinformation+purposePara.2BodyRemark(s)+suggestion(s)Para.3EndingBestwishes寫作逐步走DearDavid,Stepstocompose2.DraftPara.1

Backgroundinformation+purposeVocabularyBank見信好查看初稿海報設(shè)計大賽給某人提供改良建議

Ihopethisletterfindsyouwell.reviewtheinitial/firstdraftposterdesigncompetitionoffersb.suggestionsforimprovementprovidesuggestionstobetter/improve/perfect/refinetheworkIhopethisletterfindsyouwell.Sodelightedtoreceiveyourfirstdraftfortheposterdesigncompetitionthemedwith“ProtectingWildlife”,I’mwritingto

brief簡要介紹

youonthenoticeable明顯的problemsandoffersomepracticalsuggestionsforimprovement.Havingreviewedyourinitialdraftfortheposterdesigncompetitionon“ProtectingWildlife”,I’mwritingto

providesuggestions

concerningthepossibleshortcomingstobetterthework.經(jīng)典句式成模態(tài)DearDavid,Stepstocompose2.DraftPara.2BodyRemark(s)+Suggestion(s)Possibleproblems1.color2.layout3.title/theme4.picturestoodark/dull單調(diào)的color/light淺色的color/brightcolorinchaos混亂/rambling雜亂無章的layout/chaoticlayoutdisorganized雜亂的

failtohighlightthetheme/offthetheme跑題了/notstrikingenoughtoarrest/seize/catchthejudges’attentionfailtohighlightendangeredanimalsfailtodisplaytheriskysituationofwildlife

從問題到方案（1）：套句式練

dazzling耀眼的、使人眼花繚亂的colorDearDavid,Stepstocompose2.DraftPara.2BodyRemark(s)+Suggestion(s)Sentencepatterns建議

Iwonderifyoucould…Itwouldbebetterifyou…

WereIyou,Iwould…Itisadvisable/sensibletodosth.…Itissuggestedthat...

從問題到方案（1）：套句式練

DearDavid,

Stepstocompose2.DraftPara.2BodyRemark(s)+Suggestion(s)主句中用插入+過去分詞作后置定語+定語從句Thethemeoftheposterpresentedinit,failingtoraise/arousepeople’sawarenessofprotectingwildanimals,shouldbehighlighted,whichisexpectedbythejudge.非謂語動詞作狀語+主句+定語從句Blanketedwith被覆蓋toobrightcolors,theposterofferedamisconceptionofprotectiontothereaders,whichisrecommendedtoadoptsomegreyanddarkcolorstohighlightthesignificanceofanurgentaction.從問題到方案（1）：套句式練

DearDavid,Stepstocompose2.DraftPara.2BodyRemark(s)+Suggestion(s)主句+定語從句+狀語從句Asforthelayoutoftheposter,whichwasalittlebitchaotic,ifyouputtheminacertainorderorrefertospecificdisplay,theoverallviewwouldbegreatly/significantlyimproved.從問題到方案（1）：套句式練

DearDavid,Yours,LiHuaStepstocompose2.DraftPara.2BodyRemark(s)+suggestion(s)第1句的目的是什么？有指出作品中的問題嗎？visibleresign是什么意思？3,4兩句是在針對問題給建議還是單純提出建議？沒有針對性的回復(fù)，無效交流！避開文不對題的應(yīng)答DearDavid,Yours,LiHuaStepstocompose2.DraftPara.2BodyRemark(s)+suggestion(s)第2點是針對什么問題提的建議？沒有針對性的回復(fù)，無效交流！避開文不對題的應(yīng)答DearDavid,Stepstocompose2.DraftPara.2BodyRemark(s)+suggestion(s)妙筆1問題

到銜接到方案DearDavid,Yours,LiHuaStepstocompose2.DraftPara.2BodyRemark(s)+Suggestion(s)

從問題單刀直入方案DearDavid,Yours,LiHuaStepstocompose2.DraftPara.2BodyRemark(s)+Suggestion(s)妙筆3從問題

到委婉建議首先，你的作品傳達的信息和主題不太相配。此外，你在創(chuàng)作中采用的技巧和元素也遠沒有給人留下深刻的印象。為了讓你的參賽作品大放異彩,你可以通過在海報中關(guān)注野生動物如何遭受苦難以及人類活動對它們的影響來突出主題。此外，可以加入一句口號來讓你的想法被理解，并可以添加一個卡通形象使其更醒目。

First,themessageconveyed

throughyourworkdoesn’tquitegowiththetheme.Besides,thetechniquesandtheelementsadoptedinyourcreationarefarfromimpressive.Tomakeyourentryshine/striking,youcan

highlightthethemebyfocusingonhowwildlifeissufferingandwhateffectshumanactivityhasontheminyourposter.Also,aslogancanbeincludedtogetyourideaacrossandacartoonimagecanbeaddedto

makeiteye-catching.從問題到方案（2）：羅列式呈現(xiàn)DearDavid,Yours,LiHuaStepstocompose2.DraftPara.3EndingBestwishesHopemysuggestionsareofhelptoyourimprovement.Yourrevisedworkishighlyexpected!Hopemysuggestionsworkonyourimprovement,andIholdthefirmbeliefthatyouwouldgetabetterone.充滿期待的結(jié)尾Stepstocompose3.integrateStepstocompose3.integrateDearDavid,

Ihopethisletterfindsyouwell.Sodelightedtoreceiveyourfirstdraftfortheposterdesigncompetitionthemedwith“ProtectingWildlife”,I’mwritingtobriefyouonthenoticeableproblemsandoffersomesuggestionsforimprovement.

Fabulousasyourworkis,thereisstillsomethingtobeimproved.Thethemeoftheposter,presentedinyourposterfailingtoarousepeople’sawarenessofprotectingwildanimals,shouldbehighlighted.Asforthelayoutoftheposter,itwasalittlebitchaotic.Ifyouputtheminacertainorderorrefertospecificd