讀后續(xù)寫-畸形足男孩的跑步故事講義-四川省名校聯(lián)盟2024-2025學(xué)年高三上學(xué)期12月聯(lián)考英語(yǔ)試卷

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Asayoungcouple,Iandmyhusbandwereoverjoyedtowelcomeourfirstbaby,Joey.Butamidstthejoyandexcitement,wefoundJoeywasbornwithclubfeet(畸形足).Thedoctorsassuredusthatwithtreatmenthewouldbeabletowalknormally—butwouldneverrunverywell.Consequently,thefirstthreeyearsofhislifewerespentinsurgery,castsandbraces.Littleashewas,hedisplayedgreatbraveryandcourageinthefaceofthepainfultreatment.Withthemedicalprocessdone,Joeywaspickingupdaybydayandfinallyhecouldwalkwithoutanyaid.Bythetimehewaseightyearsold,peoplewouldn’tknowhehadaproblemwhenseeinghimwalk,whichgreatlyrelievedus.Thechildreninourneighborhoodranaroundasmostchildrendoduringplay,andJoeywouldjumprightinandrunandplay,too.Hopinghimtohaveahappyandnormalchildhoodasotherkids,wedidn’tdiscouragehimfromrunningorplayingwithpeersdespitethefactthatwewerepackedwithconcerns.Wenevertoldhimthatheprobablywouldn’tbeabletorunaswellasotherchildren.Sohedidn’tknow.Inseventhgradehedecidedtogooutforthecross-countryteam.Everydayhetrainedwiththeteam.Heworkedharderandranmorethananyoftheothers—perhapshesensedtheabilitiesthatseemedtocomenaturallytosomanyothersdidnotcometohim.Althoughtheentireteamran,onlythetopsevenrunnershadthepotentialtoscorepointsfortheschool.Wedidn’ttellhimheprobablywouldnevermaketheteam,sohedidn’tknow.Para.1:Hecontinuedtorunfourtofivemilesaday,everyday—eventhedayhehada39°Cfever.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para.2:Thenamesoftheteamrunnerswouldbeannouncedintwoweeks.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________文章大意：本文講述了一對(duì)年輕夫婦迎來(lái)天生畸形足的兒子Joey，雖歷經(jīng)手術(shù)、矯正等痛苦治療，Joey勇敢面對(duì)，到八歲時(shí)行走已無(wú)異樣。他熱愛(ài)奔跑玩耍，和鄰里孩子無(wú)異，父母也未告知他身體的局限。七年級(jí)時(shí)，他決心加入越野隊(duì)，每天刻苦訓(xùn)練，甚至發(fā)燒39°C都不休息。兩周后，越野隊(duì)隊(duì)員名單將公布，他滿心期待，最終成功入選，用堅(jiān)持和勇氣證明了自己，實(shí)現(xiàn)夢(mèng)想。伏筆及續(xù)寫回應(yīng)：伏筆：醫(yī)生斷言Joey雖能正常走路但跑不好，為故事埋下懸念，他的跑步之路似乎注定艱難?；貞?yīng)：Joey全然不知這一斷言，憑借自身努力打破限制，成功入選越野隊(duì)，證明醫(yī)生判斷有誤。伏筆：父母明知Joey身體狀況特殊，卻未阻止他和同齡人奔跑玩耍，還隱瞞他跑不過(guò)別人的可能。回應(yīng)：這份隱瞞給予Joey自信，讓他毫無(wú)顧忌地追求跑步夢(mèng)想，在訓(xùn)練中勇往直前。伏筆：Joey訓(xùn)練格外刻苦，比其他人跑得更多更努力，暗示他內(nèi)心或許意識(shí)到自身不足，想要加倍彌補(bǔ)?；貞?yīng)：發(fā)燒仍堅(jiān)持訓(xùn)練，這種超出常人的毅力使他在競(jìng)爭(zhēng)中脫穎而出，最終入選。伏筆：只有前七名選手能為學(xué)校得分，而加入越野隊(duì)的競(jìng)爭(zhēng)激烈，Joey面臨巨大挑戰(zhàn)?；貞?yīng)：他憑借不懈努力成功躋身前七，達(dá)成目標(biāo)，讓眾人看到他的無(wú)限潛力。伏筆：Joey發(fā)燒仍不放棄訓(xùn)練，展現(xiàn)出非凡的執(zhí)著。回應(yīng)：這份執(zhí)著延續(xù)到名單公布前，他始終刻苦訓(xùn)練，最終贏得入選機(jī)會(huì)，達(dá)成夢(mèng)想。續(xù)寫要點(diǎn)：第一段：情感線：突出Joey的堅(jiān)韌執(zhí)著，即便身體不適也絕不退縮，對(duì)跑步的熱愛(ài)和渴望愈發(fā)熾熱。故事線：繼續(xù)描述Joey在發(fā)燒后的訓(xùn)練日常，他克服身體的疲憊與不適，如何調(diào)整訓(xùn)練方式，可能會(huì)向教練或隊(duì)友請(qǐng)教提升速度的技巧，每一次奔跑都離夢(mèng)想更近一步。例如：Inthefollowingdaysafterthefever,Joey'sbodywasstillweak,buthisspiritremainedunbroken.Headjustedhistrainingplanslightly,focusingmoreonenduranceandtechnique.Earlyinthemorning,whentheworldwasstillasleep,hewouldbeoutonthetrack,practicinghisbreathingandstridelength.Hiscoach,noticinghisdetermination,offeredextraguidance,andJoeysoakedupeverypieceofadvicelikeasponge.第二段：情感線：展現(xiàn)Joey得知入選后的喜悅、自豪與感恩，同時(shí)也體現(xiàn)家人、隊(duì)友的欣慰與驕傲。故事線：描繪名單宣布那一刻的場(chǎng)景細(xì)節(jié)，Joey的反應(yīng)、周圍人的歡呼，以及后續(xù)他在隊(duì)里的表現(xiàn)，如何激勵(lì)隊(duì)友，為學(xué)校贏得榮譽(yù)。例如：WhenJoey'snamewascalled,theairseemedtofreezeforasecond,andtheneruptedintodeafeningcheers.Joey'seyeswidenedindisbeliefbeforefillingwithtearsofjoy.Hehuggedhiscoachandteammatestightly,feelinganoverwhelmingsenseofgratitude.Fromthenon,hebecametheteam'sinspiration,leadingbyexampleandhelpingtheschoolachieveremarkableresultsincompetitions.情感線：整個(gè)故事的情感基調(diào)從Joey出生時(shí)父母的擔(dān)憂，到成長(zhǎng)過(guò)程中對(duì)他勇敢面對(duì)治療的欣慰，再到他追求跑步夢(mèng)想時(shí)家人的揪心與期待，最終在他入選越野隊(duì)時(shí)化為喜悅、自豪與感動(dòng)。情感層層遞進(jìn)，緊扣讀者心弦。主旨升華句：Obstaclesaremeanttobeovercome,andJoey'sjourneyisalivingproofthatwithunwaveringdetermination,onecanshatteranylimitations.（障礙就是用來(lái)被克服的，Joey的歷程就是鮮活的例證，憑借堅(jiān)定決心，一個(gè)人能夠打破任何限制。）Inthefaceofadversity,it'snotthephysicalstrengthbutthestrengthofthewillthatpavesthewaytosuccess.Joeyhasshownusjustthat.（在逆境面前，鋪就成功之路的并非身體力量，而是意志力。Joey向我們展現(xiàn)的正是如此。）Joey'sstoryteachesusthatdreamsdon'tdiscriminate.Nomatterwhatchallengesweface,aslongasweholdontighttoouraspirations,wecanmakethemcometrue.（Joey的故事教導(dǎo)我們，夢(mèng)想一視同仁。無(wú)論我們面臨何種挑戰(zhàn)，只要緊緊抓住自己的抱負(fù)，就能讓夢(mèng)想成真。）Thepowerofbeliefandhardworkcombinedisunstoppable.Joey,withhisdisabledfeet,ranhiswayintoabrightfuture,inspiringusall.（信念與努力相結(jié)合的力量勢(shì)不可擋。雙腳殘疾的Joey奔跑著邁向光明未來(lái)，激勵(lì)著我們所有人。）Whenlifegivesyoualess-than-perfectstart,don'tdespair.LikeJoey,turnitintofuelforyourdreamsandprovethatyouarethemasterofyourdestiny.（當(dāng)生活給了你一個(gè)不太完美的開(kāi)端，不要絕望。像Joey一樣，將其轉(zhuǎn)化為夢(mèng)想的動(dòng)力，證明你是自己命運(yùn)的主宰。）寫作示范一：Para.1:Hecontinuedtorunfourtofivemilesaday,everyday—eventhedayhehada39°Cfever.Thenextmorning,hislegsfeltlikelead,andeverystepwasastruggle,butJoeygrittedhisteeth.Heknewhecouldn'taffordtoslackoff.Insteadofhisusualroute,hechoseaflatterpathtoreducethestrainonhisweakbody.Healsostartedtiminghimselfmoremeticulously,analyzingeachruntofindareasforimprovement.Hiscoach,seeinghisdedication,lenthimatrainingmanualfilledwithadvancedtechniques.Joeydevouredit,stayinguplatetostudyandthenapplyingwhathelearnedthenextday.Thefatiguewasalmostoverwhelming,buthisdreamofmakingtheteamkepthimgoing.Para.2:Thenamesoftheteamrunnerswouldbeannouncedintwoweeks.Asthedaystickedby,Joey'sanxietygrew,butsodidhisconfidence.Hehadputinthework,andhebelievedinhimself.Whenthebigdayarrived,thesunwasshiningbrightly,asifblessingtheoccasion.Joeystoodinthefrontrow,hisheartpoundingsohardhecouldhearitinhisears.Thecoachbegantoannouncethenames,andwitheachone,Joey'shopesoaredhigher.Finally,whenhisnamerangout,theworldseemedtostandstillforamoment.Then,atidalwaveofcheerscrashedoverhim.Joey'seyesfilledwithtearsashehuggedhisparentsandthankedhiscoachandteammates.Fromthatdayon,hebecameasymbolofperseveranceontheteam,leadingthemtovictoryaftervictoryandprovingthatnothingcanholdbackadeterminedheart.寫作示范二：Para.1:Hecontinuedtorunfourtofivemilesaday,everyday—eventhedayhehada39°Cfever.Afterthatfeverishday,Joey'sbodyprotested,buthismindwasset.Hestartedrunningearlierinthemorningtoavoidthemiddayheatthatdrainedhisenergy.Healsobefriendedaseniorrunnerontheteamwhosharedsomesecretsofpacingandendurance.Joeytookthesetipstoheartandpracticedthemreligiously.Hisparents,worriedsick,triedtoconvincehimtotakeiteasy,buthejustsmiledandsaid,"I'mfine,I'mgettingclosertomydream."Andindeed,hewas.Hisspeedgraduallyimproved,andhisformbecamemoreconsistent,despitethelingeringweaknessinhisle