2025屆高三一輪復習公開課讀后續(xù)寫之動作鏈與動作面 課件

ContinuousWriting——Actionchain&ActionsceneLeadinHowcanyouputtheelephantintherefrigerator?Youjustneedtoopenthedoor,puttheelephantinthefridge,andclosethedoor.Youputtheelephantintherefrigerator.Youopenthedoor,puttheelephantinthefridge,andclosethedoor.Actionchain動作鏈Whichsentenceismorevivid?ResultingactionMoredetailedandcoherentmicro-actionsHowtobuildactionchains?Breakdowntheresultingactionsintoachainof

moredetailedandcoherentmicro-actions

intimeorder.Part1ActionchainResultingactionachainofmicro-actions①openthedoor②puttheelephantinthefridge③closethedoorPresentationThegirlhuggedtheboy._____,_______andhuggedhimtightly.Thegirldashedtowardshim,jumpedupandhuggedhimtightly.Part1ActionchainThegirldashedtowardshim,jumpedupandhuggedhimtightly.Strategy1：A,BandCPart1ActionchainSuject+actionA,

actionBand

actionCStrategy1：A,BandCPart1ActionchainPracticeMr.Beanattemptedtoglanceathisdeskmate’sanswer.Duringtheexam,Mr.bean

___________________,

____________________hisdeskmate,andattemptedtoglanceathisdeskmate’sanswers.Thinking:Whataretheactionsbeforecheating?lookedaroundslowlymovedtowardsPart1ActionchainPractice1.Keywords:giveanawardspeechHe_____________,_____________andsaid,“Thankyou,mymom.”2.Keywords:reunionofoldfriends

She_______________and_______________.3.Keywords:encouragementTheteacher_______________,_______________,andsaidsoftly,"_______________."4.WhatwouldDaviddowhenhesawabeggarontheroadside?Strategy1：A,BandCPart1ActionchainPracticeHe____________________,_________________andsaid,“Thankyou,mymom.”1.Keywords:giveanawardspeechglancedatthetrophytookadeepbreathStrategy1：A,BandCPart1ActionchainPracticeShe______________and_____________________________.2.Keywords:reunionofoldfriendsrantoherfriendthrewherselfintoherfriend'sarmsStrategy1：A,BandCPart1ActionchainPracticeTheteacher____________,_______________________,andencouragedmesoftly,"_____________________________."3.Keywords:encouragementsitnexttomepattedmeontheshoulderWherethereisawill,thereisawayStrategy1：A,BandC4.WhatwouldDaviddowhenhesawabeggarontheroadside?Hereacheddeepintothepocket,

pulledout

ahandfulofchangeand

gave

ittothepoorbeggar.Part1ActionchainPracticeStrategy1：A,BandCPart1ActionchainPolish:usenon-finiteverb1.Marysawtheringonthetableandfeltalittlebitshock.2.Myfatherpattedmeontheshoulderandencouragedmeneverto

giveupmydreams.3.Thechildwasmovedbythestoryandbegantocry.Myfather

patted

meontheshoulder,encouragingmenevertogiveupmydreams.Seeing

theringonthetable,Maryfeltalittlebitshock.Movedbythestory,thechildbegantocry.Strategy2：non-finiteverbHewasdancingintherain.Heheldhisumbrellaandwasoverwhelmedwithjoy,singinganddancingintherain.ExampleOverwhelmed

with

joy,

he

held

his

umbrella,

singing

and

dancing

in

the

rain.

Part2ActionscenebodymovementfacialmovementExampleemotionbodymovementHeheldhisumbrellaandwasoverwhelmedwithjoy,singinganddancingintherain.Part2ActionscenePsychologicaldescription(Emotion)Linguisticdescription(Dialogue)BodymovementsActionsceneFacialexpressionormovementHowtobuildactionscenes?Describethespecificactionswithpsychology,language,expressions,etc.,toconstructacompletepictureandincreasethevividnessandrichnessofthestory.Part2ActionscenePractice被老師的話所鼓舞，Lucy舉起了手，小聲說，“我來?！眅motionbodymovementDialogueEncouragedbytheteacher’swords,Lucyraisedherhand,whispering,“I’lldoit.”Part2ActionscenePracticeWhatwouldthemother'sreactionbeifthetwinsmadebreakfastforher?bodymovementemotionDialoguesDeeplymoved,Motherhuggedthetwins,saying,“itwasthe

bestbreakfastIhadhad.”huggedmovedPart2ActionscenePracticeDescribe:Maryscreamedandfledaway.bodymovementemotionDialoguesWideninghereyesinextreme

terror,Maryfledaway,screaming,“Help!”HELP!facialmovementwidenhereyesterrorfledawayPart2ActionscenePracticebodymovementemotionStanding

on

the

empty

grassland,

she

looked

up

into

the

sky，feeling

the

precious

peace

from

within.

facialmovementlookedupintotheskystandingpeaceWhatwouldacoupledowhentheygotlostintheforestandsawarescuehelicopter?Feelingthrilled,she

flagged

heryellowblouse,

yelling“Iamhere”,tryingtoattractothers’attention.Part2ActionscenePracticePleaseuseactionchainandactionscenetomakeastory.Whatwouldamotherdowhenshesawherlostchildbeingbroughttoherbyapoliceofficer?Part3Createandwrite

Whenthepolicemangentlyhandedthelostchildbacktothemother,herreactionwasamixtureofoverwhelmingjoyandprofoundrelief.___________________________________________________________________________________Part3CreateandwriteWhenthepolicemangentlyhandedthelostchildbacktothemother,herreactionwasamixtureofoverwhelmingjoyandprofoundrelief.

Shedashedtoherchild,kneltdownandclaspedherchildtightlyinherarms,worryinglosingherchildagain.Herheartpoundingwithasenseofgratitudethatwasalmosttoomuchtobear.“Oh,mybaby!”shecried,hervoicechokedwithemotion.Thepolicemansmiledkindlyandnodded,showingasenseofunderstandingandcompassion.Themothernoddedfervently,hergazeneverleavingherchild'sface.Shewipedawayhertearsandbowedlowtothepoliceman,sayingingratitude“You'reahero,I'llneverforgetthiskindness.”SamplePart3CreateandwriteHowtowriteavividstory?Part4SummaryActionchainStrategy1：A,BandCStrategy2：non-finiteverbActionsceneEmotionDialogueBodymovementsFacialexpressionormovementPart5HomeworkInthemorning,asscheduled,

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