專題08 環(huán)保、科技與自然-備戰(zhàn)2022年上海中考英語書面表達滿分攻略（解析版）

（一）（2021年徐匯區(qū)一模）Writeatleast60wordstotalkabout“Howtechnologyaffectsme”.Doesthedevelopmentoftechnologyaffectyouinapositivewayorinanegativeway?Whatdoyouthinkoftheinfluence?Howdoyoudealwithit?請以“Howtechnologyaffectsme”為題，寫一篇不少于60個詞的短文，談論科技發(fā)展對你帶來了正面的影響還是負面的影響。你怎樣看待科技對你的影響嗎?你怎樣面對這些影響呢?（注意：短文中不得出現考生姓名、校名及其他相關信息，否則不予評分。標點符號不占格）____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】例文：HowtechnologyaffectsmeWeliveinaninformationtime.Almosteverypersonhasonemobilephone.It'sveryconvenientformetolearntheworldusingourtelephones.Icansendmygreetingstomyfriendsbyphones.Icanalsocommunicatewithmyfriends.Icangettoomuchinformationbymyphones.Ican'timaginewhatourlifewillbelikewithouttelephones.Telephonesareourgoodfriends,butsomechildrenareaddictedtomobilegames,whichaffectstheirstudy.Soweshouldusemobilephonesproperly.【解析】【分析】【詳解】1.題干解讀：該題目屬于說明文寫作，在寫作時根據漢語提示，談論科技發(fā)展帶來了正面的影響還是負面的影響；怎樣看待科技的影響；如何面對這些影響等。2.寫作指導：本文應該用第一人稱來介紹內容；時態(tài)采用一般現在時；在介紹內容時，力求語言準確，內容完整，行文連貫，保證條理清晰。（二）（2021年松江區(qū)一模）89.Writeatleast60wordsaccordingtothefollowinginformation.雖然寫給地球人的一封信中所提及到的問題確實存在,

但是我們人類正在努力改變現狀。相信你也看到身邊的變化或感受到自己的變化了。請選取其中的一個題目Achangearoundme(我身邊的變化)或Achangeaboutme(我的變化),

寫一篇不少于60詞的短文,

標點符號不占格。注意∶1、短文中不得出現真實姓名和校名及其它相關信息,

否則不予評分。2、照抄閱讀語篇不得分。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】高分范文AchangearoundmeEnvironmentalpollutionhasbeenaroundforalongtime.Peoplehavetakenactiontoimprovethesituation.Inmytown,weusedtoleaverubbisheverywhere.Itwasaheavyjobforstreetcleanerstoclearandseparateallkindsofrubbish.Activitieshavebeenorganizedtoarousepeople'sawarenessofrubbishseparationintheneighborhoods,atschoolsandeveninpublicplaces.Noweveryoneinmytownbeginstoputdifferentkindsofrubbishintodifferentbins.Asaresult,ourtownisgettingcleanerandmorebeautiful.Ibelievethischangewillhelpusliveahappierlife.【解析】【分析】【詳解】1.題干解讀：該題目屬于記敘文寫作，首先要陳述提及的問題：環(huán)境污染確實存在，然后指出人們正在努力改變現狀的措施，最后寫身邊的變化以及自己的感受。2.寫作指導：本文應該用第三人稱闡述存在的問題以及具體的措施；時態(tài)采用一般過去時、現在完成時、一般現在時以及一般將來時的結合。注意將存在問題、改變現狀的措施以及看到的身邊變化按照順序陳述清楚，保證條理清晰。（三）（2021年靜安一模）69.Writeatleast60wordsonthegivensituation.（根據以下情境寫一篇不少于60個詞的短文，標點符號不占格）在美國新澤西這一走丟孩子的眼中，馬是世界上最美好的事物。你眼中最美好的事物是什么呢？請以“Thegreatestthingintheworld”為題，結合自身經歷談談你的看法。注意：短文中不得出現考生姓名、校名等個人信息，否則不予評分。照抄閱讀語篇不得分。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】例文：ThegreatestthingintheworldWhatisthegreatestthingintheworld?Itisasmile.Asmilecanstartafriendshipandmakeusfeelwarmandjoyful.LastyearwhenI

enteredthenewschool,Ihadnofriendsandfelt

lonely.Thenaboywithabigsmilecameuptome.Ifeltwarmandcheerfulbecauseofhissmileandwesoonbecamegoodfriends.Howgreatthepowerofasmileis!【解析】【分析】【詳解】1.

題干解讀：該題屬于話題作文，作文標題是“Thegreatestthingintheworld”。題目要求結合自身經歷談談你眼中最美好的事物。注意文章字數不少于60詞。2.

寫作指導：由于作文是夾敘夾議的議論文，表達觀點時用一般現在時，描寫經歷時用一般過去時，人稱為第一人稱。作文可以采用“三段式”結構，第一段表明觀點，第二段敘述經歷，第三段再次強調自己的觀點。作文完成后注意檢查語法、單詞拼寫和標點。（四）（2021年徐匯區(qū)二模）84.SupposeyouareinterestedindearMarsProject,andyousendane-mailtodearMarsproject@****.combasedononeofthegivensituations.Situation1:YouwanttobeoneofthecrewmemberstotheMars.Youwritetoapplyforaseatintherocket.Situation2:Youwanttoknowmoreabouttheproject,hopingtogetmoredetailedinformation.假設你對dearMars的項目感興趣，你選擇所給情景之一完成一封發(fā)送給dearMarsproject@****.com的電子郵件（不少于60詞）(注意：郵件中不得出現考生的姓名、校名及其他相關信息，否則不予評分。標點符號不占格）____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【參考范文】DeardearMarsproject,WhenIwasyoung,Ialwayswonderedwhatwasinthesky.IwishedthatonedayIcouldflyintospacetofindthesecretsoftheuniverse.NowIammoreinterestedinspace.YangLiweibecamethefirstChineseastronauttogetintospaceandZhaiZhigangbecamethefirstChinesetowalkinspace.AlltheChinesepeopleareveryproudofthemandsoamI.WhenIreadthedearMarsProjectplan,Iwasveryexcited.Asacommonyouth,IwanttogetachancetoflytotheMars.IfIbecomeamemberofdearMarsproject,Iwilldomybesttosupportothercrewmember.Bestwishesforyou!（五）（2020年奉賢區(qū)二模）Writeatleast60wordsonthetopic"GivealiketoSchoolIntheAir"(請以“為空中課堂點贊”為題，寫一篇不少于60個詞的短文,標點符號不占格)。提示：空中課堂一個無墻的課堂；空中課堂一個別樣的課堂；空中課堂一個難忘的課堂......經歷了將近2個月空中課堂的你們，請從自身的感受給空中課堂點贊并給出理由。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________范文：GivealiketoSchoolIntheAirBecauseofthewideandquickspreadofNovelCoronavirus,allthestudentsfromShanghaihavetostayathometostudyfromSchoolIntheAirinsteadofgoingtoarealschool.Frommypointofview,Ilikeitverymuchforthefollowingreasons.Firstofall,SchoolIntheAirisaflexiblewayforourstudents.Thetraditionalwayofstudyistositintheclassroom,butnow,wecansitathometohaveaccesstotheknowledge.Itisconvenientandefficient,wecanlearnifwewant,thereisnolimitofthelocation.What’smore,basedontheserioussituation,SchoolIntheAiriscertainlythebestchoicetoensurethatallthestudentscancatchupwiththelearningschedule,especiallyforthegraduates.Thankstotheseexcellentteachers,learningonlineissohelpfulthatweneedn’tworrytoomuchaboutourclasses.Tosumup,SchoolIntheAirisanewwayforgainingknowledge,onlinecoursesareflexibleanduseful.Weallbenefitalot.

（六）（2020年長寧區(qū)二模）Writeatleast60wordsaboutthetopic“Onlinestudymakesme”(請以“網上學習使我”為題寫一篇不少于60字的短文，標點符號不占格）抗疫期間(duringtheanti-epidemicperiod)，你不得不在家上網課(haveonlineclasses),這個特殊的經歷使你在培養(yǎng)獨立性、自信心……等方面也有所收獲,請你結合具體事例談談自己某一方面的收獲。（注意：短文中不得出現考生的姓名，校名及其他相關信息，否則不予評分）____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________范文：OnlinestudymakesmestudybetterWehavetostudyonlineduringtheanti-epidemicperiod.Onlinestudyisgoodforme.ItnotonlycansavetimethatIcandomoreotherthings,butalsocanbeconvenientformydailylifeandstudy.Moreover,afterclassIcanfindthevideoswhichIdidnotunderstandandthenstudyagain.Itcanhelpmestudybetter.Onlinestudyismoreinteresting.SoIammoreconfidentinmystudy.Althougheverythinghastwosides.Onlinestudyisharmfultooureyes.Ifwekeepdoingexerciseforourhealth,theharmisless.Ipreferonlinestudy.Itmakesmestudybetter.（七）（2020年金山區(qū)二模）at60about”寫一篇不少于60疫情期間我們開啟了一種全新的學習模式--遠程課堂（remotelessons）。在此期間你是如何學習的？請結合你自身經歷，談談對遠程課堂的看法。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________范文：（八）暑假將近，很多人已經開始計劃外出旅游了。假定你是李華，請根據以下圖示，以“ToBeaGoodTraveler”為題，給校報專欄寫一篇英語短文，倡導“綠色旅游”和“公益旅游”，呼吁同學們做有環(huán)保意識和社會責任感的旅行者。要求