高考英語(yǔ)復(fù)習(xí)讀后續(xù)寫練習(xí)：南瓜燈的奇幻修復(fù)：Ramona與Mr.+Quimby的故事+課件

高考英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫語(yǔ)篇練習(xí)南瓜燈的奇幻修復(fù)：Ramona與Mr.Quimby的故事1題目分析讀后續(xù)寫題目再現(xiàn)范文呈現(xiàn)努力方向2Part1題目呈現(xiàn)3續(xù)寫原文Afterdinner,Mrs.QuimbytoldthefamilythatGrandma,wholivedonafarm,hadsentinalotofpumpkinsforjack-o’-lanterns(空心南瓜燈)fortheneighborhoodchildren.Therewasoneinthebasementwaitingtobecarved,sheadded.Ramona

sprangtoherfeetanddasheddowntobringitup,butitwastooheavyforasecond-grader.FinallyMr.Quimbygaveahand.“Let’smakeitsmilelikelastyear,”exclaimedRamona.“Hmm.Let’ssee.”Mr.Quimbystudiedthepumpkin,turningittofindthebestsidefortheface.Withapencilhesketched(素描)anose-shapednose,notatriangle.Thenthemouthturneduponbothsides.“smiling!”Ramonaclappedherhands.4續(xù)寫原文Mr.Quimbynoddedwithasmile,cutacirclearoundthetopofthepumpkinandlifteditoffforalid.Withoutbeingasked,Ramonafoundabigspoonforscoopingouttheseeds.Picky-picky,theQuimbys'shabbyoldcat,cameintothekitchen

toseeifsomethinghadbeenputinhisdish.Whenhefoundthatithadnot,hepaused,sniffedthepumpkinsmellandangrily

walkedoutwithhistailtwitching.5續(xù)寫原文Mr.Quimbybegantowhistleashecarved

withskillandcare,firstamouthfulofteeth,eachoneneatandsquare,theneyesandeyebrows.HewasworkingontwoearsshapedlikequestionmarkswhenMrs.QuimbyannounceditwasbedtimeforRamona.UnwillinglyRamonaran,tookashowerandquicklyreturned.Now,Mr.QuimbyhadjustcarvedafewC-shapedcurls(卷發(fā))aroundtheholeinthetopofthepumpkin.Hereachedinsideanddugacandle

holderinthebottom.6段首句Para1:InthemiddleofthenightRamonaawoketoanoise.

Para2：Onthetabletheirjack-o’-lanternnolongerhadawholeface.7Part2題目分析8續(xù)寫原文分析9本文以南瓜燈為線索展開(kāi)，講述了住在農(nóng)場(chǎng)的奶奶送來(lái)南瓜可以做南瓜燈，爸爸Mr.Quimby幫助女兒，精心雕刻南瓜燈，女兒Ramona非常滿意。結(jié)果晚上半夜南瓜燈被貓撞到地板上，Ramona非常傷心。爸爸重塑南瓜燈，讓女兒重新歡樂(lè)起來(lái)的故事。點(diǎn)1：位于續(xù)寫第一段段首，流暢銜接前面的記敘文和第一段段首語(yǔ)；點(diǎn)2：位于續(xù)寫第一段段尾，流暢銜接第二段段首句；點(diǎn)3：位于續(xù)寫第二段段首，續(xù)寫銜接第二段段首語(yǔ)；點(diǎn)4：文章結(jié)尾升華，給予讀者正能量，揭示和強(qiáng)調(diào)主題。情節(jié)構(gòu)建的重點(diǎn)10續(xù)寫思路分析Para1：InthemiddleofthenightRamonaawoketoanoise.由第一段首句內(nèi)容“半夜里，Ramona被一聲吵醒了?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫貓把南瓜燈撞到地上，南瓜燈壞了，Ramona很傷心。11續(xù)寫思路分析Para2：Onthetabletheirjack-o’-lanternnolongerhadawholeface.由第二段首句內(nèi)容“在桌子上，他們的南瓜燈不再是一張完整的臉了。”可知，第二段可描寫爸爸重塑南瓜燈，Ramona重新歡樂(lè)起來(lái)。12續(xù)寫思路分析續(xù)寫線索摔壞——傷心——重塑——?dú)g樂(lè)13續(xù)寫素材可用詞匯：行為類①摔壞：bumpsthtothefloorbroken/fall/droptothegroundandbecomedamaged②重塑：remodel/carveagain情緒類①傷心：sad/upset/heart-broken②歡樂(lè)：behappy/feelpleased/withgreatersatisfaction14續(xù)寫素材

[高分句型1].

Itturnedoutthatthecataccidentallybumpedthejack-o’-lanterntothefloorwhilecatchingmice.(that引導(dǎo)的名詞性從句、while引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句的省略)[高分句型2].

Lookingatherbelovedjack-o-lanternlyingonthefloor,thecandleinitwentout,Ramonabegantocry.(現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語(yǔ))15Part3范文呈現(xiàn)16范文呈現(xiàn)Inthemiddleofthenight,Ramonaawoketoanoise.Ramona

turnedonthelightandjumpedoutofbedangrily.Itturnedoutthatthecataccidentallybumpedthejack-o’-lanterntothefloorwhilecatchingmice.Itwasbroken.Lookingatherbelovedjack-o-lanternlyingonthefloor,thecandleinitwentout,Ramonabegantocry.Mr.Quimby

wasalsowokenup,gotuptocomfortRamonaandhelpedhertakethejack-o’-lanterntothetable.17范文呈現(xiàn)Onthetabletheirjack-o’-lanternnolongerhadawholeface.Ramonacontinuedtocry,anddaddecidedtocarvethepumpkin

again.Hepickeduptheknifeandcarved

alongtheincompletefaceofthepumpkin.Theincompletefacebecamefunnier,andthelanternlaughedmorebrightly.Dadsaid,“Ramona,don'tcry.Lookatyourpumpkinlantern.It’saliveagain.”Ramonadriedhertearsandsmiledwithgreatersatisfaction.18范文譯文半夜，雷蒙娜在一聲噪音中醒來(lái)。拉蒙娜打開(kāi)燈，憤怒地跳下床。原來(lái)，貓抓老鼠的時(shí)候不小心把南瓜燈撞到了地板上。它壞了?？粗膼?ài)的南瓜燈躺在地板上，里面的蠟燭熄滅了，拉蒙娜開(kāi)始哭了起來(lái)。昆比也被吵醒了，他起身安慰拉蒙娜，幫她把南瓜燈拿到桌子上。桌子上的南瓜燈已經(jīng)沒(méi)有整張臉了。拉蒙娜繼續(xù)