2024年新課標(biāo)I、II卷讀后續(xù)寫講評(píng)-2025屆高三英語一輪復(fù)習(xí)

2024年新課標(biāo)II卷讀后續(xù)寫一個(gè)好心的出租車司機(jī)原文傳遞閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。ImetGunteronacold,wetandunforgettableeveninginSeptember.IhadplannedtoflytoViennaandtakeabustoPragueforaconference.Duetoabigstorm,myflighthadbeendelayedbyanhourandahalf.ItoucheddowninViennajust30minutesbeforethedepartureofthelastbustoPrague.ThemomentIgotofftheplane,Iranlikecrazythroughtheairportbuildingandjumpedintothefirsttaxiontherankwithoutasecondthought.ThatwaswhenImetGunter.ItoldhimwhereIwasgoing,buthesaidhehadn'theardofthebusstation.Ithoughtmypronunciationwastheproblem,solexplainedagainmoreslowly,buthestilllookedconfused.WhenIwasabouttogiveup,Gunterfishedouthislittlephoneandrangupafriend.Afteraheateddiscussionthatlastedforwhatseemedlikeacentury,Gunterputhisphonedownandstartedthecar.Finally,withjusttwominutestosparewerolledintothebusstation.Thankfully,therewasalongqueue(隊(duì)列)stillwaitingtoboardthebus.Gunterparkedthetaxibehindthebus,turnedaround,andlookedatmewithabigsmileonhisface."Wemadeit,"hesaid.JustthenIrealisedthatIhadzerocashinmywallet.IflashedhimanapologeticsmileasIpulledoutmyPortuguesebankcard.Hetrieditseveraltimes,butthecardmachinejustdidnotplayalong.AfeelingofhelplessnesswashedovermeasIsawthebusqueuethinningout.Atthismoment,Gunterpointedtowardsthewaitinghallofthebusstation.There,attheentrance,wasacashmachine.Ijumpedoutofthecar,madeamadrunforthemachine,andpoppedmycardin,onlytoreadthemessage:“Outoforder.Sorry.”注意：(1)續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個(gè)左右；(2)請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題紙的相應(yīng)位置作答。IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.Fourdayslater,WhenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised.閱讀文章，找出主要情節(jié)的句子閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。ImetGunteronacold,wetandunforgettableeveninginSeptember.IhadplannedtoflytoViennaandtakeabustoPragueforaconference.Duetoabigstorm,myflighthadbeendelayedbyanhourandahalf.ItoucheddowninViennajust30minutesbeforethedepartureofthelastbustoPrague.ThemomentIgotofftheplane,Iranlikecrazythroughtheairportbuildingandjumpedintothefirsttaxiontherankwithoutasecondthought.ThatwaswhenImetGunter.ItoldhimwhereIwasgoing,buthesaidhehadn'theardofthebusstation.Ithoughtmypronunciationwastheproblem,solexplainedagainmoreslowly,buthestilllookedconfused.WhenIwasabouttogiveup,Gunterfishedouthislittlephoneandrangupafriend.Afteraheateddiscussionthatlastedforwhatseemedlikeacentury,Gunterputhisphonedownandstartedthecar.Finally,withjusttwominutestosparewerolledintothebusstation.Thankfully,therewasalongqueue(隊(duì)列)stillwaitingtoboardthebus.Gunterparkedthetaxibehindthebus,turnedaround,andlookedatmewithabigsmileonhisface."Wemadeit,"hesaid.JustthenIrealisedthatIhadzerocashinmywallet.IflashedhimanapologeticsmileasIpulledoutmyPortuguesebankcard.Hetrieditseveraltimes,butthecardmachinejustdidnotplayalong.AfeelingofhelplessnesswashedovermeasIsawthebusqueuethinningout.Atthismoment,Gunterpointedtowardsthewaitinghallofthebusstation.There,attheentrance,wasacashmachine.Ijumpedoutofthecar,madeamadrunforthemachine,andpoppedmycardin,onlytoreadthemessage:“Outoforder.Sorry.”注意：(1)續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個(gè)左右；(2)請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題紙的相應(yīng)位置作答。IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.Fourdayslater,WhenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised.WhenWhat按照角色梳理信息I:ArrivingattheairportofVienna,withonlyalittletimetospare,IjumpedintoataxitocatchthelastbustoPragueforaconference.Ittookthedriver,Gunter,greateffortstounderstandwhereIwantedtogoanddrovemethereintime.However,Ihadnocashtopayhimandnocashmachinecouldwork.Butmybuswasreadytogoanditwouldnotwaitforme.（我所面臨的問題）Gunter:Hetriedhisbesttodrovemetothebusstationintime.（他是個(gè)善良的人，為下文幫助我埋下了伏筆）根據(jù)立德樹人的正能量原則，這篇文章所傳達(dá)的點(diǎn)有兩個(gè)：1.Gunter一定會(huì)幫了我，讓我及時(shí)上車去參加了我的會(huì)議2.我也遵守諾言，4天后回到維也納，找到司機(jī)把車錢付給了他。續(xù)寫思路（鏡頭感）Paragraph1:IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.

假如你是導(dǎo)演，你的文字要有畫面感，根據(jù)你的文字，演員可以演出來設(shè)定第一個(gè)鏡頭：Gunter聽到壞消息的反應(yīng)用“I”的視角去描述，可以有Gunter面部表情，心里活動(dòng)，甚至還會(huì)有簡短的對(duì)話.

Gunter沒有生氣或失望，相反，他催促我趕緊上車，并且安慰我說不用給錢了。Muchtomysurprise,heurgedmetogetonthebusinsteadofgettingangryordisappointed,addingthatIdidn’thavetopayhimfortherideforitwasthemachines’faultbutnotmine,withabroadsmileonhisface.(模仿原文語言特色，但不能抄襲，稍微做一下改動(dòng)）續(xù)寫思路（鏡頭感）設(shè)定第二個(gè)鏡頭：我的心理活動(dòng)及動(dòng)作描寫。Muchtomysurprise,heurgedmetogetonthebusinsteadofgettingangryordisappointed,addingthatIdidn’thavetopayhimfortherideforitwasthemachines’faultbutnotmine,withabroadsmileonhisface.第二段的首句提醒我們還要寫問出租車司機(jī)要電話號(hào)碼并承諾返回維也納后聯(lián)系他。我肯定感到如釋重負(fù)，趕緊上車。Afeelingofreliefsurgedthroughmywholebody.(模仿原文語言特色，但不能抄襲，稍微做一下改動(dòng)）Beforeboardingthebus,IaskedGunterforhisphonenumber,ensuringthatIwasboundtopayhimafterreturningtoVienna.續(xù)寫思路（鏡頭感）Afeelingofreliefsurgedthroughmywholebody.Beforeboardingthebus,IaskedGunterforhisphonenumber,ensuringthatIwasboundtopayhimafterreturningtoVienna.設(shè)定第三個(gè)鏡頭：可以寫我坐在車上心情，如果還有空間，可以順便提一下你的會(huì)議情況回顧第一段的環(huán)境描寫，這是一個(gè)又冷又下雨的旁晚，那么襯托出你此時(shí)此刻感受到的溫暖以及你很感激這個(gè)司機(jī)的幫助。HardlyhadIsatonthebuswhenitstartedtomove.Instantly,anintensewaveofreliefandgratitudesurroundedmelikeabeamofsunlight,throwingmeintoasenseofkindnessandwarmth.續(xù)寫思路（鏡頭感）續(xù)寫第一段參考范文：IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.Muchtomysurprise,however,heurgedmetogetonthebusinnotimeinsteadofgettingangryordisappointed,addingthatIdidn’thavetopayhimfortherideforitwasthemachines’faultbutnotmine,withabroadsmileonhisface.Afeelingofreliefsurgedthroughmywholebodyandbeforeboardingthebus,

IaskedGunterforhisphonenumber,ensuringthatIwasboundtopay

himafterreturningtoVienna.Hejustwavedgood-byetomeandwishedmeasmoothjourney.HardlyhadIsatonthebuswhenitstartedtomove.Instantly,anintensewaveofreliefandgratitudesurroundedmelikeabeamofsunlight,throwingmeintoasenseofkindnessandwarmth.把三個(gè)鏡頭連成段落，中間還可以加上一些承上啟下的詞或句子。續(xù)寫思路（鏡頭感）Paragraph2:Fourdayslater,WhenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised.設(shè)定第四個(gè)鏡頭：Gunter答應(yīng)和我見面，當(dāng)Gunter出現(xiàn)在我眼前時(shí)，我心存感激地?fù)肀Я怂?Heagreedtomeetmeinadelightedvoice.Afewminuteslater,whenGuntergotoutofhiscarandapproachedme,Irushedtohimandgavehimabearhug,conveyingmysincereappreciationtohim,withtearsofgratitudeinmyeyes.續(xù)寫思路（鏡頭感）Heagreedtomeetmeinadelightedvoice.Afewminuteslater,whenGuntergotoutofhiscarandapproachedme,Irushedtohimandgavehimabearhug,conveyingmysincereappreciationtohim,withtearsofgratitudeinmyeyes.設(shè)定第五個(gè)鏡頭：然后我把車錢付給了他,還送了他一個(gè)小禮物。告訴他正是他的幫助，我才沒有錯(cuò)過人生中這么重要的會(huì)議。ThenIgavehimthemoneyalongwithasmallgift,whichmadehimextremelysurprisedanddelightedwhenhereceivedtheunexpectedgift.IgratefullyinformedhimthatitwaswithhisassistancethatIdidn’tmissmyimportantconference.Itturnedouttobeaturningpointinmysuccessfulcareerlife.續(xù)寫思路（鏡頭感）ThenIgavehimthemoneyalongwithasmallgift,whichmadehimextremelysurprisedanddelightedwhenhereceivedtheunexpectedgift.IgratefullyinformedhimthatitwaswithhisassistancethatIdidn’tmissmyimportantconference.Itturnedouttobeaturningpointinmysuccessfulcareerlife.設(shè)定第六個(gè)鏡頭：Gunter的回應(yīng)及肢體語言。HearingwhatIsaid,Guterrespondedtomebyflashingmeacelebratingsmile.(模仿原文語言特色，稍微做一下改動(dòng)）續(xù)寫思路（鏡頭感）主題升華：NeverbeforehadIgotsuchauniqueexperience,whichwasdeeplyengraved（雕刻）inmymindandhadaprofoundinfluenceonmeintherestofmylife.Whatmatteredmostwaskindness,withwhichwecouldbringlightandhopetoothersandourselvesaswell