(幻燈片)2017年上海中考英語(yǔ)作文講評(píng)課

Writing1中考英語(yǔ)備考必知的復(fù)習(xí)策略英語(yǔ)是一門工具性的學(xué)科，注重考查學(xué)生的聽(tīng)、說(shuō)、讀、寫能力。報(bào)告會(huì)上，面對(duì)中考，英語(yǔ)的復(fù)習(xí)方法都是唯一的，即多聽(tīng)、多看、多讀，關(guān)鍵在于堅(jiān)持。2從學(xué)生們的實(shí)際情況來(lái)看，聽(tīng)力理解和閱讀往往是失分比較集中的題型。影響英語(yǔ)聽(tīng)力得分的原因主要有三個(gè)：一是學(xué)生語(yǔ)言基礎(chǔ)知識(shí)不扎實(shí)成理解困難。如單詞、詞組、動(dòng)詞的過(guò)去式掌握不牢固。學(xué)生所掌握的詞匯量的大小、詞匯的類別直接影響著學(xué)生的聽(tīng)力理解；二是自身存在語(yǔ)音問(wèn)題，造成理解障礙。如長(zhǎng)期讀不準(zhǔn)單詞發(fā)音，特別是發(fā)音相近的詞；三是語(yǔ)速的變化所引起的一系列問(wèn)題。要解決上述的問(wèn)題，方法便是堅(jiān)持每天聽(tīng)讀，起床時(shí)聽(tīng)、睡覺(jué)前聽(tīng)，聽(tīng)得多了自然就有了感覺(jué)。3

在閱讀速度方面，要以較快的速度從大量材料中捕捉有關(guān)信息，必須養(yǎng)成良好的將遇良才習(xí)慣。方法不是逐詞閱讀，而是按意群掃視、連貫閱讀，閱讀速度加快，理解的準(zhǔn)確率才會(huì)提高。4Leavingschool（畢業(yè)時(shí)分）Growingpainsandgains（成長(zhǎng)的煩惱與歡樂(lè)）Ihaveadream（我有一個(gè)夢(mèng)想）ThingsIhatetodo（我不喜歡。。。）Lovearoundme（我身邊的愛(ài))Iwanttodosomethingformyschool(我為學(xué)校做件事）I’mproudofmyself（我為自己感到自豪）與生活相關(guān)與“我”相關(guān)5另外，在英語(yǔ)復(fù)習(xí)中突破詞匯關(guān)是很重要的。學(xué)生不管做什么題目，詞匯都是基礎(chǔ)，詞匯關(guān)不過(guò)是無(wú)法取得好成績(jī)的。但是學(xué)習(xí)詞匯的過(guò)程也是很枯燥的，如何讓這個(gè)過(guò)程變得生動(dòng)、高效？建議在復(fù)習(xí)過(guò)程中根據(jù)讀音規(guī)則來(lái)記詞匯，也可以用串連、對(duì)比、轉(zhuǎn)換、聯(lián)想記憶的方法來(lái)記詞匯。6英語(yǔ)是一門語(yǔ)言，語(yǔ)言就要進(jìn)行交流。學(xué)生們可以互相交談，進(jìn)行對(duì)話、單詞的復(fù)習(xí)，還可以從交談中看出對(duì)方的問(wèn)題，也提醒自己要注意。如學(xué)生們兩兩一組，默寫首字母相同、尾字母相同、字母數(shù)量相同的單詞，通過(guò)競(jìng)爭(zhēng)的游戲來(lái)記憶單詞。在記憶中循環(huán)記憶法也是很重要的，如果一個(gè)階段不使用單詞就會(huì)遺忘，所以要不斷地記憶單詞。學(xué)生們每一次背單詞的時(shí)候不要從頭開(kāi)始背，而要找出自己不太熟悉的，經(jīng)常看看。7在做題方面，并不是越多越好，做50道題目和做30道題目沒(méi)有多大的區(qū)別，關(guān)鍵在于做了題目后學(xué)會(huì)分析、總結(jié)，因此希望學(xué)生們?cè)谕瓿衫蠋煵贾玫淖鳂I(yè)后不要再盲目地大量做題，將做過(guò)的題目進(jìn)行重溫、總結(jié)，避免再犯相同的錯(cuò)，這樣更有意義。8Writeatleast60wordsaboutthetopic"Thebestwaytomakemehappy".(以“最能使我快樂(lè)的方法”為題，寫一篇不少于60個(gè)詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格)Thefollowingpointsareforyourreference:(所給提示僅供參考)1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons)9內(nèi)容（8分）+語(yǔ)言（8分）+文采（4分）一、認(rèn)真審題，結(jié)構(gòu)合理*寫什么(題目，參考問(wèn)題）10Whatshouldwewriteabout?Whatshouldn’twe(only)writeabout?Freetalk1.Myschoollife2.Mydreamteacher3.ThethingIhatetodo4.Myopinionsofkeepingpetdogs5.Thebestwaytomakemehappy11內(nèi)容（8分）+語(yǔ)言（8分）+文采（4分）一、認(rèn)真審題，結(jié)構(gòu)合理*寫什么(題目，參考問(wèn)題）12Writeatleast60wordsaboutthetopic"Thebestwaytomakemehappy".Thefollowingpointsareforyourreference:(所給提示僅供參考)1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons)13

Thebestwaytomakemehappyisachievinggoodmarks.IthinkthiswayisthebestonetomakemehappybecauseitistheeasiestwaysanditcanimprovemyabilitysoIthinkitisthebestway.Inthisway,Icangetsomeprizes,soIwillfeelhappy,what’smoreitcanalsomakemyparentshappy.Thefollowingpointsareforyourreference:(所給提示僅供參考)1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons)內(nèi)容不全14therearealotofwaystomakemehappy.Thebestwaytomakemehappyistoplaybasketball.Toplaycomputergamesisalsoawaytomakemehappy.EverydaywehavePElesson.Thesearealotofinterestsinit.SoIfeelhappyinthisway.Thefollowingpointsareforyourreference:(所給提示僅供參考)1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons)內(nèi)容不全15

thebestwaytomakemehappyistohelpanother.WhenIfeelsad,Icanhelpanother,becauseIhopetheothershappy.Icanhelpoldpeoplecrosstheroadandplaywithsmallchildren.InthiswayIfeelanotherhappy,thenIalsowillhappy.Helpothersnotonlymakemehappy,butalsomakeothershappy.Thefollowingpointsareforyourreference:(所給提示僅供參考)1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons)內(nèi)容不全16ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidays.Whatdoyouthinkofthisarticle?內(nèi)容不全1.Whatwasthethingyoudidinthewinterholidays?(1’)2.Givesomedescriptionsaboutit,suchaswhere/when/how/who,etc.(4’)3.Whydoyouthinkit’sthemostunforgettablethingyoudid?(2’)Thewinterholidaysareoneofthemostexcitingholidaysintheyear.ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidaysismakingabirthdaycakewithmymotheronmybirthday.Mymotherboughtthethingsweneededfromthesupermarket.Wemixedtheflourandeggs,thenaddedsomespecialthingstomakethecakesoft.Finally,weputitintotheoven.Isharedthecakewithmyfamilymembers.Itwasreallydelicious.Iwillneverforgetthatday.內(nèi)容得分5’17MyspokenEnglishusedtobeverypoor.Itriedtoimproveit,butfailed.SoItoldittomyEnglishteacherandwishedhimtogivemesomeadvice.HetoldmethatIcouldimprovemyspokenEnglishbyspeakingmoreEnglish.Hesaid,‘ThemoreyoupracticespeakingEnglish,themoreprogressyouwillmake.’ThenIfollowedhisadviceandspokeasmuchEnglishaspossible.Atlast,myspokenEnglishimproved.MytroubleWhatismissedinthisarticle?Whatwasyourtroubleinyourstudy?(2’)Howdidyoufacethetrouble?(3’)Howdidyoufeelaftersolvingit?(2’)內(nèi)容得分5’18Theenvironmentisimportanttousall.Weneedfreshair,cleanwaterandsoon.Thereusedtobemanytreesaroundus,theairwasfreshandtheriverwasclean,butnowtheydisappearedforonereasonoranotherandwerereplacedbydirtywaterandpollutedair.Becauseoftheterriblepollution,people’shealthisgettingworseandworse.What’smore,thegreenhouseeffectischangingourclimate,whichmayleadtoevenmoreserioussituation.EnvironmentaroundusWhatismissedinthisarticle?1.Whatdoyouthinkoftheenvironmentaroundus?（4’）2.Asstudents,whatshouldwedo?（3’）內(nèi)容得分4’19ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidays.Whatdoyouthinkofthisarticle?內(nèi)容不全1.Whatwasthethingyoudidinthewinterholidays?(1’)2.Givesomedescriptionsaboutit,suchaswhere/when/how/who,etc.(4’)3.Whydoyouthinkit’sthemostunforgettablethingyoudid?(2’)Thewinterholidaysareoneofthemostexcitingholidaysintheyear.ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidaysismakingabirthdaycakewithmymotheronmybirthday.Mymotherboughtthethingsweneededfromthesupermarket.Wemixedtheflourandeggs,thenaddedsomespecialthingstomakethecakesoft.Finally,weputitintotheoven.Isharedthecakewithmyfamilymembers.Itwasreallydelicious.Iwillneverforgetthatday.內(nèi)容得分5’20MyspokenEnglishusedtobeverypoor.Itriedtoimproveit,butfailed.SoItoldittomyEnglishteacherandwishedhimtogivemesomeadvice.HetoldmethatIcouldimprovemyspokenEnglishbyspeakingmoreEnglish.Hesaid,‘ThemoreyoupracticespeakingEnglish,themoreprogressyouwillmake.’ThenIfollowedhisadviceandspokeasmuchEnglishaspossible.Atlast,myspokenEnglishimproved.MytroubleWhatismissedinthisarticle?Whatwasyourtroubleinyourstudy?(2’)Howdidyoufacethetrouble?(3’)Howdidyoufeelaftersolvingit?(2’)內(nèi)容得分5’21Theenvironmentisimportanttousall.Weneedfreshair,cleanwaterandsoon.Thereusedtobemanytreesaroundus,theairwasfreshandtheriverwasclean,butnowtheydisappearedforonereasonoranotherandwerereplacedbydirtywaterandpollutedair.Becauseoftheterriblepollution,people’shealthisgettingworseandworse.What’smore,thegreenhouseeffectischangingourclimate,whichmayleadtoevenmoreserioussituation.EnvironmentaroundusWhatismissedinthisarticle?1.Whatdoyouthinkoftheenvironmentaroundus?（4’）2.Asstudents,whatshouldwedo?（3’）內(nèi)容得分4’22Nowadays,ourenvironmentisbecomingworseandworse.Ourbadhabitscausemanyproblemslikeairpollution,landpollutionandwaterpollution.Tomakeourenvironmentbetter,Iwanttobeanenvironmentprotector.WecanplanttreestomaketheaircleanbecausetreescantakeinCO2andreleaseO2intotheair.Weshouldbuyanduseenvironmentallyfriendlygoods.Finally,wemustn’tleavealotofrubbishintotheriver,pondorsea.Solet’sbeenvironmentprotectorsandenjoylivingabetterlifeontheearth.Iwanttobeanenvironmentprotector23內(nèi)容（8分）+語(yǔ)言（8分）+文采（4分）一、認(rèn)真審題，結(jié)構(gòu)合理*寫什么(題目，參考問(wèn)題）*重點(diǎn)寫什么(提示問(wèn)題）24

Nowadays,therearemanyproblemsofourenvironmentsuchasairpollution,waterpollutionandlandpollution.Peoplecutdownandburntheforest.Peopleusethingsonceandthrowthemaway.Peopleusechemicalstoproducemanythings.Becauseofthesereasons,ourearthisingreatdanger.Weliveontheearth,it’sourdutytoprotectit.IwilldoalotofthingssothatIcanprotecttheearth.Forexample,Iwillreusetheplasticbags.Therearealotofwaystobegreenconsumers.IwanttobeanenvironmentprotectorUsethefollowingpointsasaguide.(下列要點(diǎn)僅供參考）

Whataretheproblemsofourenvironment?Whydoyouwanttobeanenvironmentprotector?Whatwillyoudotoprotecttheenvironment?25

Everybodyhasmanywaystomakehappy.SodoI.First,Ilistensomefavoritemusic.Second,Ireadsomebooksandmakesomenotes.Ithinkitisgood.Third,Iplaybasketballwithmyfriends.Inmyopinion,playingbasketballisthebestwaytomakemehappy,becauseIfondofit.Becauseofthose,Ibecomehappyandstrong.1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons)26內(nèi)容（8分）+語(yǔ)言（8分）+文采（4分）一、認(rèn)真審題，結(jié)構(gòu)合理*寫什么(題目，參考問(wèn)題）*重點(diǎn)寫什么(提示問(wèn)題）*時(shí)態(tài)(參考問(wèn)題）”Iwanttobeanenvironmentprotector(保護(hù)者)”Usethefollowingpointsasaguide.(下列要點(diǎn)僅供參考）

Whataretheproblemsofourenvironment?Whydoyouwanttobeanenvironmentprotector?Whatwillyoudotoprotecttheenvironment?27MytroubleWhatwasyourtroubleinyourstudy?(2’)Howdidyoufacethetrouble?(3’)Howdidyoufeelaftersolvingit?(2’)ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidays.1.Whatwasthethingyoudidinthewinterholidays?(1’)2.Givesomedescriptionsaboutit,suchaswhere/when/how/who,etc.(4’)3.Whydoyouthinkit’sthemostunforgettablethingyoudid?(2’)Environmentaroundus1.Whatdoyouthinkoftheenvironmentaroundus?（4’）2.Asstudents,whatshouldwedo?（3’）28二、理清思路，列出提綱Writeapassageofatleast60wordsonthetopic”Iwanttobeanenvironmentprotector(保護(hù)者)”(以”Iwanttobeanenvironmentprotector”為題寫一篇不少于60個(gè)詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格。)Usethefollowingpointsasaguide.(下列要點(diǎn)僅供參考）1.Whataretheproblemsofourenvironment?2.Whydoyouwanttobeanenvironmentprotector?3.Whatwillyoudotoprotecttheenvironment?29Writeatleast60wordsaboutthetopic"Thebestwaytomakemehappy".(以“最能使我快樂(lè)的方法”為題，寫一篇不少于60個(gè)詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格)Thefollowingpointsareforyourreference:(所給提示僅供參考)1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons)30三、連詞成句，初步成形四、檢查修改，內(nèi)容無(wú)誤Environmentisveryimportantforus.Inourlife,theproblemsofourenvironmentareveryimportant.Wehavehurtittoomuchbycuttingdowntreesandpollutewaterandland.Iwanttobeaenvironmentprotectorsothatsaveit.I’dsuggestmyparentstotakebusinsteadofdrivecar.Iwillprogressmyhabbitssuchasuseabasketorapaperbag.Iwillpreventpeoplethrowrubbisheverywhere.Ifeverybodycandosomethingstoprotecttheearth,ourenvironmentwillbemuchbeautiful.Iwanttobeanenvironmentprotector31Thewinterholidaysareoneofthemostexcitingdaysintheyear.Ididalotofthingsthiswinterholidays.themostunforgetablethingistomakemybirthdaycakewithmymotheronmybirthday.Mymotherbuythethingsweneedfromthesupermarket.Wemixedthefloorandeggs.Thenaddsomespecialthingstomakethecakesoft.Finally,weputitintotheiron.Isharedthecakewithmyfamilynumbers.Itwasreallydelicions.IwillneverforgetthatdaybecauseIlearnedtomakecakesaswellassharemyhappinesswithothers.ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidays.Whatdoyouthinkofthisarticle?錯(cuò)誤太多10’32Findoutthemistakesinthefollowingsentencesandcorrectthem.1.Iclimedslowlyandwasverytried.2.IthinkitisanunforgetablethingbecauseIhelpedsb.climbedtiredunforgettablesomebody3.Onafridayafternoon,

Iwentshoppingwithmymother.Spelling（拼寫）（others)Friday4.Ican’tforgetthatday.Becauseitisthelasttimewecancelebrateherbirthdaytogether.Ican’tforgetthatdaybecause5.Whatacrazydayitwas,Iwillrememberitforever.!Capitalletter（大小寫）Punctuation（標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)）336.Iwillrememberedthatdayforever.remember7.Ithoughtitishungry.was8.Mygrandmotheralwaystidyupmyroom.tidies9.Howunforgettablethisthingsis!thingFindoutthemistakesinthefollowingsentencesandcorrectthem.Tense（時(shí)態(tài)）Verbagreement(主謂一致)Wordform(詞形）3410.Inmyfather’shelp,Ibecamemorepatientthanbefore.Withmyfather’shelp,11.Tocutalongstorytoshort,….Tocutalongstoryshort,…12.IwenttoShihuabyabuswithmymother.bybus13.Mymothertoldmedon’tgiveitup.toldmenottogiveitupFindoutthemistakesinthefollowingsentencesandcorrectthem.Phrases(短語(yǔ)和固定搭配）14.Isawanoldladylayinthemiddleoftheroad.sawanoldladylying…3516.Weplayedsnowinfrontofhouse.playedwith15.Isatonaseat,listeningmusic.listeningto17.Thenaladyaskedwhohadbrokenherwindow.Weallwereafraid.wereallFindoutthemistakesinthefollowingsentencesandcorrectthem.Missingwords（漏詞）18.Weshoulddothingsbyourownhands.withthehouse19.Itistiredwork.tiringWords’order（詞序）Usingwrongword（選詞錯(cuò)誤）3622.Heencouragedmetolookforthewatchbyheart.carefully21.OneSundaymorning,IwenttoShihuabybusandsatbesidemewasagirl.IwenttoShihuaonabusandtherewasagirlsittingbesideme.Findoutthemistakesinthefollowingsentencesandcorrectthem.ChineseEnglish（中式英語(yǔ)）Inmylife,manythingshappened.20.Inmylifehavemanythingshappened.371.Environmentisveryimportantforus.2.Inourlife,theproblemsofourenvironmentareveryimportant.3.Wehavehurtittoomuchbycuttingdowntreesandpollutewaterandland.4.Iwanttobeaenvironmentprotectorsothatsaveit.5.I’dsuggestmyparentstotakebusinsteadofdrivecar.7.Iwillprogressmyhabbitssuchasuseabasketorapaperbag.8.Ifeverybodycandosomethingstoprotecttheearth,ourenvironmentwillbemuchbeautiful.6.Iwillpreventpeoplethrowrubbisheverywhere.topollutinginordertosaveit/sothatIcansaveittakeabusinsteadofdrivingacarfromthrowingdevelopgoodhabitsusingsomethingmuchmorebeautifulserious

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…CommonErrorsinEnglishwriting39Duringthewinterholidays,Ithappenedalotofthings.Oneofthethingswashelptasmallgirltofindhermother.Whenmyfriendsandmeshoppinginashoppingmall,wesawasmallgirlcriedinacorner.Weaskedwhathappenedonher.Shesaidshecuond’tfoundhermother.Sowestartedtohelptshetofoundhermother.Luckily,wefoundhermother,theywereveryhappyandwewerehappy,too.IthinkitwasthemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidaysbecauseIfoundIalsocanhelpothers.ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidays.Checkandcorrectthisarticle.alotofthingshappened.helpingIwereshoppingcryinghappenedtocouldn’tfindhelpherfind.Theycouldalso,so40Duringthewinterholidays,Ithappenedalotofthings.Oneofthethingswashelptasmallgirltofindhermother.Whenmyfriendsandmeshoppinginashoppingmall,wesawasmallgirlcriedinacorner.Weaskedwhathappenedonher.Shesaidshecuond’tfoundhermother.Sowestartedtohelptshetofoundhermother.Luckily,wefoundhermother,theywereveryhappyandwewerehappy,too.IthinkitwasthemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidaysbecauseIfoundIalsocanhelpothers.ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidays.alotofthingshappened.helpingIwereshoppingcryinghappenedtocouldn’tfindhelpherfind.Theycouldalso,so=9’7’+2’+0’Commentonthisarticle.1.What?(1’)

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(2’)41Howshouldwecheckthepassage?1.查主題，文章是否符合題目要求，內(nèi)容是否完整。(checkthetheme)

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查語(yǔ)法，是否有時(shí)態(tài)錯(cuò)誤，是否有主謂不一致，是否