讀后續(xù)寫之動作描寫技巧課件高三英語作文專項

action讀后續(xù)寫之-byleonTeachingAims：bystudyingtheexamples,wecanhelpstudentslearntheactionpattern.bypracticingexercise,wetrytohelpstudentsputtheskillsintousecorrectly.lookattheparagraphyandthinkhowitiswritten(3.8周練PassageB)

Rushing,heloweredhisshoulderandcrashedintothebear.ButitonlyseizedBuddytightly.Benham’sheartjumped.Heshoutedandthrewastoneatthebear.Nothing.Hefoundouthiscanofhairspray(噴霧).Hetriedfiringitimmediatelyatthebear.Abrightredcloudenvelopedit,andthebeardroppedthedogandranoffintothewoods.讀后續(xù)寫作為記敘文，其核心只有一個，那就是“人”。因此一切的筆墨，都是為了塑造人物形象，使人物更加飽滿。Howtomakeyourwritingvividandattractive?最為重要的描寫有五類：環(huán)境、動作、心理、情緒、語言ACT?A之句式①

S+V1.andV2.

老師表揚了我們。Theteacherpaisedus.CombineachainofactionstogethernoddedwithsatisfactionthumbedupatusDividetheactionintoseveralsteps他掏錢給乞丐。Hepulledoutmoneytothebeggar.reachedintothepocketpulledoutahandfulofchangegaveittothepoorbeggarA之句式②

S+v1.,v2.andv3.CombineachainofactionstogetherDividetheactionintoseveralstepsA之句式②

S+V1.,V2.andV3.

Followtimeorder他擁抱父母。Hehuggedhisparents.stooduphuggedhisparentssmiledDividetheactionintoseveralstepsCombineachainofactionstogetherHestoodup,huggedhisparentsandsmiled.2.歌手唱歌(thesingersang.)3.我匆忙上學(xué)。(Ihurriedtotheschool.)1.父親做蛋炒飯。(Hemadefriedrice）Iputon

mycoathurriedly,grabbedmybagandrushedtoschoolthismorning.Thesingerglancedattheaudience,tookadeepbreathandbegantosing.Hetookouteggsfromthefridge,crackedthemintoabowl,andwhiskedthemwithaforktohelpthesisterstomakefriedrice.

ExerciseC之句式

①

S+v.,doinganddoing

凸顯同一對象同時發(fā)生不同的動作女孩靜坐

。ThegirlsatunderthesunsetThegirlsatunderthesunsetreadthenewspaperlistenedtomusicThegirlsatunderthesunset,

reading

thenewspaperand

listening

tomusic.

ExerciseC之句式

①

S+v,doinganddoing

凸顯同一對象同時發(fā)生不同的動作孩子們讀英語孩子們站在操場上，讀著英語，期待著美味的早餐。Thechildrenstandontheplayground,readingEnglishandlookingforwardtothedeliciousbreakfast.

ExerciseC之句式②

HavingdoneA,S+V.表現(xiàn)動作先后關(guān)系瑪麗期待即將到來的考試復(fù)習(xí)了一個星期，瑪麗期待著即將到來的考試。Havingstudiedforaweek,Marylookedforwardtothecomingexam.C之句式

③

Doneby..., S+V...

非謂語結(jié)構(gòu)之done凸顯被動孩子們哭了被感動+開始哭movedbythestorybegantocryMovedbythestory,thechildrenbegantocry.李明舉起了手被鼓舞+舉起了手。Encouraged

bytheteacher'swords,Liming

raised

hishand.

Exercise1.被狗咬過，他不敢靠近那只狗。Havingbeenbeatenbyadog,hedarednotapproachthedog.2.被現(xiàn)場嚇壞了，他站在那里一動不動。Terrifiedbythesceneinfrontofhim,hestoodtherestill.3.他們享受著美好的時光，聊著天，吃著東西，開著玩笑。Theywerehavingawonderfultime,talking,eatingandjoking.

Exercise李煜T之句式①.

Prep,S+V(介詞短語，主語+謂語...)1.Hewasrunning

witheaseandatcomfortablespeed.

他跑得很輕松，速度也很舒服2.Muchtomysurprise,hisanklewassprainedbadly.

令我吃驚的是，他的腳踝扭傷得很厲害。3.我不假思索地跪在他身邊，支持他。______________,Ikneltdownbesidehimandofferedmysupport.4.他羞愧內(nèi)疚地點頭。(2022年新高考I卷)

Henodded___________________.5.在我的支持和鼓勵下，約翰設(shè)法站起來，繼續(xù)一瘸一拐地向終點線走去。___________________________,Johnmanagedtostandupandcontinuedhobblingtowardsthefinishline.Withoutthinkingwithshameandguilt常見介詞：1.toone’ssurprise等表情感的名詞2.in/with+ease/fear等表情感的名詞Withmysupportandencouragement李煜

T之句式②

1.Obviously,theywerefamiliarwitheachother,

becausethey

exchangedsomewords.

顯然，他們彼此很熟悉，因為他們交換了一些話。2.這張照片立刻火了起來，無數(shù)的人都點贊了。

___________,suchabighitdidthephotobecomethatcountlesslikeswerefloodingin.3.幸運的是，除了腳踝扭傷外，情況并不嚴重。______,nothingwasseriousexceptasprainedankle.4.我鼓勵他慢慢深呼吸，提醒他我們已經(jīng)接近終點線了。Iencouragedhimtobreathe______________,remindinghimthatwewereclosetothefinishline.5.伯納有禮貌而興奮地請他們教他如何做爆米花。(2020年新高考I卷)________________,Bernardaskedthemtoteachhimhowtomakepopcorn.Adv.,S+V(副詞短語,主語+謂語.......)添加狀語，動作描寫更生動具體。ImmediatelyPolitelyandexcitedlyLuckilydeeplyandslowly副詞(短語)可放在整句話，

形容詞或動詞的前或后。李煜常用的高頻副詞有：cheerfully/joyfully,curiously,eagerly,excitedly,fiercely,firmly,immediately,impatiently,luckily/fortunately,obviously,swiftly,suddenly等.如在體現(xiàn)動作的迅速時，可以添加以下修飾語：immediately,suddenly,withoutpausing,withoutdelay,withouthesitation等。李煜

T之句式③

1.Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.簡天剛亮就起床了，又餓又渴。2.Fortunately,wegotinthehelicopter,___________.

幸運的是，安然無恙地登上直升飛機。(2020浙江卷)3.他繼續(xù)跑，汗流浹背，精疲力竭。(2022新高考卷1)Hekeptrunning,_________________.S+v,adj(主語+謂語......,形容詞短語。）形容詞短語在句中作狀語，表達人物做某個動作的原因、結(jié)果或狀態(tài)，可放在句首或句末，增強感染力，使描述更生動形象。sweatyandexhaustedsafeandsoundconsolidation李煜Suddenly,Johnsloweddownandsatontothegroundwithasharppain.Onspottinghispainfullook,Iranuptohimasfastasaboltoflightning.Muchtomysurprise,hisanklewassprainedbadly.Inthatsplitsecond,Itriedtohelphimstandupandmoveforward,butheshookheadtosayno.Inthemeanwhile,hesignedtometorunaftertheotherssothatIcouldwinthefirstplace.Suddenly,Iwastrappedinaninstantdilemma.MystrongdesiretoovertakeJohnwasflashinginmymind.Butinaninstant,Idecidedwithouthesitationtoaccompanyhimtotakearest.Thenweranslowlyforwardtogether.Althoughwewereovertakenbyothers,asenseofrelaxationwassurginginmymind.Themomentwefinallycrossedthefinishlinetogether,Johncastagratefullookatme.范文：李煜Areporterphotographedthistouchingsceneandposteditonline.Immediately,suchabighitdidthephotobecomethatcountlesslikeswerefloodingin.Numerousstrangerssentemailstopraiseme,leavingmelostinthought.Infact,Iwasindecisivelytorninthebeginning,butthemomentIdecidedtohelpJohn,Ifeltrelaxedwithbirdswarblinginthetreesandthegentlewindstrokingmyface.Happily,Imadetherightchoiceanddidtherightthing.Surely,friendlinesscomesbeforecompetition.Howtomakeyourcontinuationwritingvivid?題材題材動作鏈:一連串的動作構(gòu)成畫面Skill1:描述一系列的動作。如果是同一個主語做了兩個以上動作，可用:主+謂1,謂2and

(then)謂3，Skill2:當出現(xiàn)兩個動作，而前后兩個動作邏輯主語一致時，可用:非謂語,主+謂主+謂,非謂語非謂語:①動作有明顯先后:Havingdonesth

②主動:doing

③被動donehomewok1.好奇而興奮，這個女孩打開了她的禮物盒。(adj,主語+謂語）2.老人坐在夕陽下，看報紙，聽著音樂。(主語+謂語，doingand

doing)3.被這個故事深深地感動，孩子們留下了淚水，彼此擁抱著。(done，主+謂)4.男孩們興奮地沖向游泳池邊，脫下衣服，跳進了水里。(V1+V2+V3)5.他把梯子靠在墻邊，爬上去，向四周看。Doing,主+謂+賓,doing6.耷拉(droop)著腦袋，Lucy坐在河岸邊，若有所思。(介詞，主+謂)Thankyouforyourlistening!homework1.好奇而興奮，這個女孩打開了她的禮物盒。(adj,主語+謂語+賓語）

,thegirlopenedthegiftbox.Curiousandexcited2.老人坐在夕陽下，看報紙，聽著音樂。(主語+謂語(+賓語)，doingand

doing)Theoldmansatunderthesunset，___________________________

readingthenewspaperand

listeningtomus