新高考英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫突破：成長(zhǎng)故事

專題01高考英語(yǔ)專項(xiàng)突破“讀后續(xù)寫”-成長(zhǎng)故事

讀后續(xù)寫“一波三折”：

1.情緒---情緒描寫。從原材料中體會(huì)作者相應(yīng)情緒，借助情緒的延續(xù)，以此

為銜接，續(xù)寫。

2.細(xì)節(jié)--進(jìn)一步描述。

3.轉(zhuǎn)折--個(gè)人的努力或者借助外界的力量，使事情發(fā)生轉(zhuǎn)折。

4.轉(zhuǎn)機(jī)--事情似乎有了轉(zhuǎn)機(jī)，讓人抱有希望，心理能感到安慰。

5.失望-一問題仍然沒有解決或者又出現(xiàn)了新的問題。

6.想法--面對(duì)沒有解決的問題或者新問題，突然有了想法或感觸。

7.結(jié)局--在想法或感觸的影響下，事情有了最后的轉(zhuǎn)折/轉(zhuǎn)機(jī)。

8.點(diǎn)題——呼應(yīng)前文

備注：這八步不是固定的，考生可以根據(jù)自己的想法打亂部分順序，也

可以略寫個(gè)別環(huán)節(jié)。此步驟，可讓續(xù)寫有話可說，讓情節(jié)續(xù)寫跌宕起伏，前

提是要讀懂原材料的中心，抓住文章脈絡(luò)。

每個(gè)人都會(huì)成長(zhǎng)。在點(diǎn)點(diǎn)滴滴中，在大風(fēng)大浪中，在自我掙扎

中……

01

閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Here'sthestoryofmygrowthoverthepastyear.It'sastoryofhowIfoundthestrengthto

changemyselfforbetterandthenhowIgetridofmyfearstobeevenbetter.Ifanyoneisinspired

bythis,thafswonderful.

I'dbeenstuckasthisincrediblyinsecure,under-confidentandjustscaredindividualforyears

andyears.SincechildhoodI'dbeenstucklikethis.KidsImetforthefirsttimelookedatme

rudelyandunkindly.Evenmyfriends-actually,IhadveryfewfriendsbecauseIjustfelttoo

ashamedandfrightenedtomakesome,thoughIwaseagertoandfeltextremelylonelyinthe

depthofmyheart-laughedatmeandgavemebadnicknames.Ifeltterrible,butrdjustresigned

toalifewhereI'dbeafraidofeverythingandbethis“introvert”（內(nèi)向的人）orwhatever.I

thoughtIwouldneverbeabletochange,never,formywholelife.

Butthenitallstartedchanging.Somethingclicked.Isuddenlydeterminedtogoonadiet,

andlostsomeweight.Itwastough.Ifelthungryallthetime.Iwasalwaystemptedbythesmellof

breadandhamburger,evenwhenIdidn'tseethem.ButthetoughestthingwasthatevenifIhad

justhadmymeals,Ifelthungermentally.However,Iheldon.Inoveraperiodof6monthsI

finallymanagedtosticktooneofmydiets.Ididn'tknowhow.ButIdidmakeit.

Thelossof90lbsbroughtmefromoverweightstraightdowntounderweight.Thisisn'tthe

bestpart.Moreimportantlyandinspiringly,Isuddenlyfoundstrengthinme.IrealizedIcouldbe

totallydifferent.Andmaybe,IcouldevenbewhateverIwantedtobe.ThistaughtmethatIcould

changemyself.

ThenIwondered,perhaps,Icouldalsogetridofthoseofmyfears,justlikeIsucceededin

losingmyextrapounds.Itmightnotbeeasy,butitmightnotbethatdifficult.

注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右：

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Chancepresenteditselfsoon.

ItwasfromthatpointonthatIstartedchangingrapidly.

【答案】Chancepresenteditselfsoon.Onesingletime,Iheardaboutapublicspeakingthing

goingonatmyuniversity,andforthefirsttime,Iactuallymanagedtobuildupthecouragetogo

there.Itwasliberating.ForthefirsttimeIwasabletosharemystory,andabletodoitinfrontof

dozensofpeoplepotentiallyjudgingme,andsuddenlyalltherandomfearsaboutspeaking

publiclystarteddisappearing.ThistaughtmeIcouldgetridofmyfears.

ItwasfromthatpointonthatIstartedchangingrapidly.UsingthefactthatIcouldchange,

andthatIcouldgetridofmyfears,Istartedworkingonthemonebyone.Myfearofgreeting

strangers,myfearoftalkingtostrangers,myfearofaskingsimplequestionsIshould'already

know',myfearofhangingoutwithpeople,myfearofnotknowingthings,myfearofmaking

newfriends,classmatesandteachers,myfearofbeingmyself,allofwhichhelpmakemeabetter

one.

【解析】

本文以人物為線索展開,講述了作者在成長(zhǎng)的過程中如何找到力量去改變自己——減輕體重

和克服恐懼使自己變得更好的故事。

【詳解】

1.段落續(xù)寫：

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“機(jī)會(huì)很快就出現(xiàn)了。“可知，第一段可描寫作者利用公開演講如何擺脫

內(nèi)心恐懼的經(jīng)過。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“從那時(shí)起，我就開始迅速地改變了。”可知，第二段可描寫作者在成功

減重和擺脫恐懼之后，很快地進(jìn)行了其他方面的自身改變。

2.續(xù)寫線索：公開演講——擺脫恐懼——其他改變——感悟

3.詞匯激活

行為類

①消失：disappear/vanish

②擺脫：getridof7extricateoneselffrom

③開始：start/begin

情緒類

害怕:fear/dread

【點(diǎn)睛】

[高分句型1].UsingthefactthatIcouldchange,andthatIcouldgetridofmyfears,Istarted

workingonthemonebyone.（由第一個(gè)that引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句和第二個(gè)that引導(dǎo)的同位語(yǔ)從句，

現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語(yǔ)）

[高分句型2]Myfearofgreetingstrangers,myfearoftalkingtostrangers,myfearofasking

simplequestionsIshould'alreadyknow',myfearofhangingoutwithpeople,myfearofnot

knowingthings,myfearofmakingnewfriends,classmatesandteachers,myfearofbeingmyself,

allofwhichhelpmakemeabetterone.（“代詞+o計(jì)which”結(jié)構(gòu)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句）

02Beatruerunner

Forme,itwasnormaltofeellostattheinter-camptrack.Fourcampsofkidswerereadyto

leadtheirteamstoablueribbonandwintheday.Notme.Iwastoolittletobetheleaderandtoo

skinnytobeanathlete.IknewthisbythetimeIwastwelve,becausemycampcounselors（輔導(dǎo)

員）andtheotherkidsremindedmeofiteverychancetheygot.Sowhenourcampneededafourth

runnerinthetwo-mileracearoundthelake,IknewIwasnoone'sfirstchoice.

Ihidintheshadeofamapletreeastheycalledthenamesoftherunners,mybodytensedasI

heardacounselorcall,"Fred!WhereisFred!Heisinthisrace!”ItwasBarry.Hespottedme

underthetree."Fred!Weneeda12-year-oldwhohasn'tbeeninothereventstorunthetwo-mile!”

Hegavemeapushtowardsthestartingline.Havingnoconfidenceandtryingtosavemyself

fromtheshameoftakingthelastplaceasfourcampswatched,Ipleadedwithhim.

“ButIdon'tknowthewayaroundthelake!^^

“You'rein.JustfollowBill!,,Barrysmiled.

Billwasmyfriendandthefastestrunnerinourcamp.AndthenBarrysaid,“Whenyoumake

ittothelaststretch（最后——程）onthefield,justthrowyourheadbackandrun.”

Atthestartingline,IstoodnexttoBillandtrembled.

“Onyourmark...Getset...”Theguncrackedandsixteenofustookoff.Istayedcloseon

BilPsheels,alittletoocloseforBill,Iguess.Heshoutedatme,"Backoff!”

Idid.Twoguyspassedme,butIkeptmyeyesonBill.

Itwastiring.ThedistancewaswideningbetweenBillandme.Wemadetheturnfromthe

dustyroadontothemuddy,woodedtrailthatwouldgoaroundthelakebacktothefield.Through

thetrees,IsawBilltripoveratreerootandfall.Arunnerfromanothercamppassedhim.

注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置。

Inamoment,Billwasupagainandrunning.

Ididn'tknowwhenIcrossedthefinishline.

【答案】

Inamoment,Billwasupandrunning.Icouldn'tthinkofanythingbuttofollowhim

closely.IcouldevenfeeltheairhittingmyfaceandIwastotallywornout.Naturally,mypace

sloweddown.Justatthemoment,Barry'swords“JustfollowBill“calledmeback.Convinced

thatIwasnolongeraloser,IrefreshedupagainandacceleratedandsoonIwasquiteclosetoBill

again.Injectedwithconfidence,Iheadedforthefinishingline.Theguncrackedagain,

announcingthelast200meters.Iclosedmyeyes,threwmyheadbackandranwithmylastounce

ofstrength,inthedirectionofthedreamline.

Ididn'tknowwhenIcrossedtheline.Istillkeptrunningonwhenathunderousapplause

burst,whichsignaledthebirthofthechampion.Istoppedandopenedmyeyesandsawmycamp

ofkidsandthecampcounsellorgatheringaroundme."Wehavewontherace!Wearethe

champion!^^theyshoutedandcheered,throwingmeintheair.Showeredwithhugsandapplause

andwhistles,Ifeltasurgeofgaietysweepingoverme.lbme,theracemeantmorethana

champion;itwellprovedthatIwasnotaloserasanathleteandthatIcouldfurtherexploremy

potential.JustasHemingwayputit「Thetruenobilityissuperiortoyourfbnnerself.^^

【解析】

本文以人物和時(shí)間為線索展開，講述了Fred因個(gè)兒小人瘦弱而一直沒有機(jī)會(huì)在賽道上為自

己隊(duì)爭(zhēng)得榮譽(yù)，心生自卑，但是一次環(huán)湖2英里的比賽中，輔導(dǎo)員Barry選他當(dāng)?shù)谒膫€(gè)參賽

運(yùn)動(dòng)員，并指點(diǎn)他只要跟著他的朋友，跑得最快的Bill就行了：Fred照做了，盡管心里忐

忑，疲憊不堪，但最終獲得了團(tuán)體冠軍，也使他對(duì)自己充滿了自信。

【詳解】

1.段落續(xù)寫：

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“不一會(huì)兒，比爾爬了起來，又開始跑”可知，第一段可描寫Fred跟在

Bill后面的狀況，Barry的話鼓舞了Fred,在最后200處他全力沖向終點(diǎn)線。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“我不知道我什么時(shí)候越過了終點(diǎn)線?！笨芍诙慰擅鑼慒red的努

力使小組贏得冠軍，看著歡呼的老師和同學(xué)時(shí)Fred的心理變化。

2.續(xù)寫線索：Bill爬起來后——Fred筋疲力盡時(shí)——最后200米時(shí)——越過終點(diǎn)線后——得

知比賽結(jié)果后

3.詞匯激活

行為類

①.疲憊不堪：bewornout/betiredout/becompletelyexhausted

②.加速：accelerate/speedup

③.發(fā)掘我的潛力：exploremypotential/exploitmypotential

情緒類

①?充;蔭自信：beinjectedwithconfidence/befilledwithconfidence

②.喝彩：cheer/applaud

【點(diǎn)睛】

[高分句型1].Injectedwithconfidence,Iheadedforthefinishingline.（運(yùn)用了過去分詞作狀

語(yǔ)）

[高分句型2].itwellprovedthatIwasnotaloserasanathleteandthatIcouldfurtherexploremy

potential.（運(yùn)用了that引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句）

03

Oneafternoonafterschool,Maryandhisbrother,Keith,wereeatingatacafeneartheirhome.

Thatafternoon,theyhadtosharetheirtablewithanotherperson.Thatpersonwasayoungladyin

hertwenties.Aftereating,shewenttotherestroom.Withoutrealizing,shehadleftherhandphone

onthetable.Fiveminuteslater,shecameoutandwalkedoutofthecafewithoutlookingback.

Marysawthehandphoneonthetable.ShequicklytoldKeith,“Keith,thegirlleftbehindher

handphone.^^Keithlookedatthehandphone.Itwasoneofthelatestmodelsonthemarket.

Lookingverysleek,itwasredincolorwithablackcover.Thehandphonemustbeexpensive.

Keithhadalwayswantedahandphone,Buthisparentsrefused.Hestaredatitforsome

minutes.Thenhesaidslowly,pausingonveryword,441wanttotakethehandphone,Marycould

notbelievehereyes.Shemerelystaredatherbrother,youcan't!Whatiftheownercomesto

lookforit?”

Havingmadethedecision,Keithquicklygrabbedthehandphoneandputitinhisschoolbag.

Then,hetookMary'shandandledheroutofthecafequickly.Outsidethecafe,herantohis

bicycle.Maryhadtorunafterhim.

Oncebackhome,Keithlockedhishousedoorwithtremblinghands.Lookingatthe

handphone,helikeditsomuch.Nowhehadhisownhandphone.ButMarytoldhim,“Keith,you

cannotkeepthehandphone.Whatwillyoutellfatheraboutthishandphone?”

Keithsaidquickly,“Iwillsayafriendlentittome.^^

Marysaid,uNowyouarelying,too.''Ohdear!WhenhadKeithturnedsodishonest?

ThenMarysawahousephonenumberontheplasticcoverofthehandphone,"Thisphone

numberisthegirfsphonenumber.Whydon'twejustcallthisnumber?Wewilltalktoherand

askhertocomeandtakebackherhandphone.^^Shewastryingherbesttotalksomesenseinto

him.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Thatnight,Keithcouldn'tgotosleep,reflectinginbed.

Backhomefromschool,theyphonedtheowner'shousephone.

【答案】Paragraph1:

Thatnight,Keithcouldn'tgotosleep、reflectinginbed.Hehaddifficultysleeping.Ofcourse,

helikedthenewhandphone.However,hewasfeelingsorryfortheowner.Theladylookedyoung.

Shewouldbeverysadatthelossofherhandphone.Inthemorning,hedecidedtoreturnthe

handphonetotheowner.Afterschool,hetoldMary,uI'mgoingtophonetheowner."Marywas

gladtohearthat.

Paragraph2:

Backhomefromschool,theyphonedtheowner'shousephone.Agirlansweredthephone.

Keithasked,“Areyoutheownerofthehandphone?I'mKeith.Ihaveyourhandphone.Canyou

comeandgetit?”Thegirlrepliedexcitedly,44Yes,yes!I'mtheowner.Thankyou!Thankyou!1

willcomenow."Tenminuteslater,shewasatthesamecafetomeetKeith.Handingbackthe

handphonetoherandseeinghersmilehappily,Keithrealizedthathonestywasindeedthebest

virtue.

【解析】

本文以人物為線索展開，講述了一天下午放學(xué)后，Mary和他的弟弟Keith在他們家附近的

一家咖啡館吃飯時(shí)，另一個(gè)女孩把手機(jī)遺落在了桌子上，Keith于是拿了手機(jī)回家，最后出

于愧疚還是歸還了手機(jī)。

【詳解】

1.段落續(xù)寫：

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“那天晚上，Keith睡不著，躺在床上想著心事?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫

Keith內(nèi)心的掙扎以及做出了歸還手機(jī)的決定。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“他們從學(xué)?；氐郊?，打電話給房主?！笨芍诙慰擅鑼慘eilh歸還

手機(jī)的經(jīng)過和感悟。

2.續(xù)寫線索：Keith無法入睡——Keith內(nèi)心掙扎——決定歸還手機(jī)——?dú)w還手機(jī)——感悟

3.詞匯激活

行為類

做某事有困難：havedifficultydoingsth./havetroubledoingsth.

決定：decide/determine

打電話：phone/call

情緒類

高興：glad/pleased

悲傷：sad/sorrowful

【點(diǎn)睛】

[高分句型1]Hehaddifficultysleeping.（運(yùn)用了動(dòng)名詞作賓語(yǔ)）

[高分句型2]Handingbackthehandphonetoherandseeinghersmilehappily,Keithrealizedthat

honestywasindeedthebestvirtue.（運(yùn)用了that引導(dǎo)賓語(yǔ)從句）

04

Mykneesstartedshaking,yetmybodyfroze.Itfeltasthoughmysouldepartedmybodyand

Ihadnocontroloverit.Anxiously,Ilookedthroughtheroster（名單）postedonthewallofthe

lockerroom.MyheartwasbeatingharderandharderasIslowlysawallmyfriends'namesonthat

listbutcouldnotfindmine.Atthatmoment,Ifroze.Ijustcouldnotacceptthatallmyfriends

wereonthebasketballteamwhileIwasnot.

IwassoconvincedtherewasamistakethatIwentandfoundthecoach."Heycoach,areyou

surethattherosteryoupostediscorrect?,,Iaskedanxiously,dreading（擔(dān)心）hisanswer.

“Yes,thenamesonthelistarefinalized.Sorryifyoudidnotmakeitthisyear,thereisalways

nextyear,“thecoachreplied.

Icouldfeelthehot,bittertearsfillingmyeyes,andIranoutoftheroomasfastasIcould.

Tryingtoforgetaboutthesituation,Iheadedovertothecafeteriatobuysomefood.Ifeltdead

inside,likenothingmattered.WalkingwassuchaburdenthatitfeltasifIhada100-poundweight

tiedtomybackpack.Mymindwasalsoblankfortherestoftheschoolday.Everythingmy

teacherssaidwentinoneearandouttheother.

Afterschool,asIwalkedtotheparkinglottogetpickedup,Isawallmyfriendsgathered

neartherearofthelot,celebratingandjokingaround.Idetoured（繞道）aroundthesideofthe

schooltoavoidthem,tryingnottothinkaboutbeingtheonlyoneinourfriendgroupfailingto

maketheteam.

Isawmyfather^carpullupneartheschoollot,andIwalkeduptothecarandgotin.He

smiledatme,playedtheradio,andstarteddrivinghome.

注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Noticingmybadmood,heaskedmewhatwaswrong.

Inspiredbywhatmyfathersaid,Idecidedtoworktowardmygoal.

【答案】Noticingmybadmood,heaskedmewhatwaswrong.Fullofsorrow,Itoldhimtearfully,

“IwantedtojoinourschoolbasketballteamsomuchandIpracticedhard.ButIdidn'tmake

HearingwhatIsaid,myfathercomfortedme,“Ihopethattheunexpectedfailurewillnotletyou

down.Successisneveraneasytask,butneedspainstakingeffortsandpatience.Ibelieveyoucan

makeit.”

Inspiredbywhatmyfathersaid,Idecidedtoworktowardmygoal.Imadeamuchtighter

schedulefromthenon.Ipracticedhardfbranhoureverydaytoimprovethebasicskillsand

strength.Tomydelight,Iwasfinallyrecognizedbythecoach,whosaidthatIshowedgreattalent

insports.

【解析】

本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者滿懷信心卻沒能進(jìn)入校籃球隊(duì)，作者感覺非常難過，心

不在焉地熬到放學(xué)后爸爸開車來接作者的故事。

【詳解】

1.段落續(xù)寫：

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“注意到我情緒不好，他問我怎么了。”可知，第一段可描寫作者向爸爸

講述事情的經(jīng)過及爸爸鼓勵(lì)作者。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“我被爸爸說的話所鼓舞，決定朝著我的目標(biāo)努力?！笨芍?，第二段可描

寫作者努力訓(xùn)練最終入選球隊(duì)。

2.續(xù)寫線索：

告訴爸爸為什么難過——爸爸安慰鼓勵(lì)——努力訓(xùn)練一被教練認(rèn)可

3.詞匯激活

行為類

①告訴：tell/informsb.ofsth.

②訓(xùn)練：practice/train

③認(rèn)可：recognize/accept

情緒類

①悲傷：sorrow/grief

②高興：delight/happiness

【點(diǎn)睛】

[高分句型1].Hearingwhat1said,myfathercomfortedme,“Ihopethattheunexpectedfailure

willnotletyoudown.（由連接詞what和that引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句）

[高分句型2].Tomydelight,Iwasfinallyrecognizedbythecoach,whosaidthatIshowedgreat

talentinsports.（由關(guān)系代詞who引導(dǎo)非限制性定語(yǔ)從句）

05

6-year-oldJessewasplayinginthefieldwhenhesufferedanelectricshock,leavinghim

unconscious.Hewasrushedtothehospital.Whenheopenedhiseyes,hefoundbothhisarms

gone.

Hismotherwasindeepconcern.ShewasawarethatJessecouldn'tdependonhisparentsall

hislife.SosheguidedJessetolearntousehisfeet.Toherdelight,withinthreemonths,Jesse

coulddomanythingswithhisfeet,evenwrite.

ItwastimeforJessetostartschool.Onthefirstday,hewaslaughedatbyotherkids.Then

Jessesuiprisedeveryonethathewrotemuchmorebeautifullythanthenormalkids.

Whilewalking,Jesseoftenfellbecauseitwashardforhimtokeepbalancewithoutarms.He

practicedagainandagainuntilhemadeittowalksteadily.Thenhecouldevenrunfast.

Attheageof10,Jessebecameanathleteofthedisabledtrackandfieldteamofhiscity.He

practicedveryhard.Attheageof14,hewasabletorun400metersin56seconds.Anditwas

hopedthathecouldcompeteforthenationalchampion.However,theinternationaltrackandfield

rulessuddenlychangedandhiseventwascancelled.

Noone'slifeiseasy,especiallyforthedisabled.ButJessedidn'tloseheart.Hechangedto

swimming.Hewastalentedandbecameaprofessionalmemberattheageof17withthehopeof

winningthequalificationofenteringtheOlympicGames.Butjustbeforethecompetition,hisold

injuryreturnedandheonlygotthesixthplace,whichmeanthecouldgonofurtherinsports.He

wasatagreatloss,wonderingwherehisfuturewas.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Hisfatherencouragedhimtogobacktohighschoolforacademicstudyaftersomanyyears

ofsportslife.

Oncemakinguphismind,Jessethrewhimselfintowhathewasseeking.

【答案】Hisfatherencouragedhimtogobacktohighschoolforacademicstudyaftersomany

yearsofsportslife.Itcanbeimaginedthathehadlosttoomuchtimeonstudies.Inthefirst

Englishtest,heonlygot20points,Hewaslostinthought.Ifhewantedtoliveagoodlife,hehad

nootherchoicebuttogotocollege.Thankstohisyearsofsportstraining,hedevelopedthespirit

ofnevergivingup.Heregainedhisconfidenceanddecidedtomeetthechallengebravely.

Oncemakinguphismind,Jessethrewhimselfintowhathewasseeking.Hisfathersetagoal

forhimtorank200attheendofthefirstyear.Buthemanagedtorank17inthefollowing

examination,whichstrengthenedhisconfidenceofachievinghisfinalgoal.Thenhegotthefirst

placeinallthefollowingexamsuntilthecollegeentranceexamination.Hewasadmittedintoa

famousuniversity.He'snotonlyusedhisownstruggletoopenupabroadvoyageinlife,butalso

isusinghisstrengthtohelpmoreyoungpeoplerealizetheirdreams.

【解析】

本文以人物為線索展開，講述了兒時(shí)因意外事故失去雙臂的杰西幾經(jīng)周折，克服重重困難，

最終在學(xué)習(xí)上取得成功的故事。

【詳解】

1.段落續(xù)寫：

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“經(jīng)過這么多年的體育生涯，他的父親鼓勵(lì)他回到高中學(xué)習(xí)?！笨芍?/p>

一段可描寫杰西在學(xué)習(xí)上遇到的困難以及直面挑戰(zhàn)的決心。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“一旦下定決心，杰西就投身于他所追求的事業(yè)?！笨芍诙慰擅鑼?/p>

憑借非凡的決心和努力，杰西終于在學(xué)業(yè)上取得成功并鼓舞了他人。

2.續(xù)寫線索：返回學(xué)業(yè)——遇到困難——直面挑戰(zhàn)——增強(qiáng)信心——取得成功——鼓舞他人

3.詞匯激活

行為類

①養(yǎng)成：develop/form

②.實(shí)現(xiàn)：realize/achieve

③.面對(duì)：meet/face

情緒類

①.勇敢地：bravely/fearlessly

②.美好的：good/wonderful

【點(diǎn)睛】

[高分句型1].Ifhewantedtoliveagoodlife,hehadnootherchoicebuttogotocollege.（運(yùn)用了

if引導(dǎo)的條件狀語(yǔ)從句）

[高分句型2].Buthemanagedtorank17inthefollowingexamination,whichstrengthenedhis

confidenceofachievinghisfinalgoal.（運(yùn)用了which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句）

06

IcouldfeeltheexcitementrisinginmeasIheldthebeautifullywrappedpresentinmyhands.

Ifeltthestringofthepackagesoftlyandthen,unabletocontainmycuriosityanylonger,Itoreit

open.Itwasabright,brandnewlaptop.IhadscoredstraightasformyOlevelexaminationand

thiswasmyreward.Ihadalwaysenviedmyfriendswhowereexchangingnewsabout'chat

rooms\'instantmessaging'and'e-mailing',allofwhichIknewnothingabout.NowIwasgoing

tofindout.

Itstartedoutsimplyenough.IwassearchingforsomeinformationonlinewhenIcameacross

asocialnetworkingsite.SoonIbecameattractedtomynew-foundelectronicfriend.Ibeganto

spendmoreandmoretimeonYouTubeandbecameaddictedtoFacebookandTwitter.Ihadnever

imaginedthatthedaywouldcomewhenIwouldbecontrolledentirelybytheglowingscreen

beforeme.WheneverIwasnotgluedtothesesocialnetworkingsites,Iwouldbegoingthrough

gossiporfashionwebsites.

Astimepassed,IrealizedthatIwasaddictedtotheInternet.Duringweekends,whenIhad

moretimeonmyhands,Icouldeasilyspendafewhoursonmylaptop.ItcametoapointwhereI

chosetolockmyselfinmyroom,refusingtocomeoutandtakepartinfamilydiscussions.I

preferredtostayconnectedtothepeopleImadefriendswithontheInternetalthoughIhadnever

metthem.SoonIwasspendingthewholehoursofthemorningsurfingontheInternet.Sleepwas

reducedtosmallnapsandmygradesatschoolalsobegangettingfrombadtoworse.

注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Itwasaboutthistimethatmyparentsnoticedmychange.

Thenoneday,myfathertookawaymylaptop.

【答案】Itwasaboutthistimethatmyparentsnoticedmychange.Theyvoicedtheir

disapproval.ItbecameobvioustothemthatIwasspendingtoomuchtimeontheInternet.Iwas

askedtoslowdownmyusageoftheInternet.Yet,howeverhardItried,Iwasunabletopull

myselfaway,unabletoendmychatsessions,andunabletoconcentrateonmylessons.Iwas

desperateforjustanotherclick,justanotherlookatmye-mailormessageboard.

Thenoneday,myfathertookawaymylaptop.Icriedandobjectedbutinvain.Dadhad

madeuphismind.Overtime,IrealizedthatDadandMumhadalwayswantedthebestforme.

ThatwaswhenIdecidedtotakethebigstep-toconquermyinternetaddiction.Quittingwas

harderthanIhadexpected.Butwithdoggeddetermination,IknewthatIwouldbeabletodoit.I

promisedmyparentsthatIwouldturnoveranewleaf.

【解析】

本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者因?yàn)榭荚嚦煽?jī)獲得全優(yōu)，父母給他買了一臺(tái)全新筆記本

電腦作為獎(jiǎng)勵(lì)。漸漸地，作者開始沉迷于網(wǎng)絡(luò)，不再與父母交流，學(xué)習(xí)成績(jī)也在惡化的故事。

【詳解】

1.段落續(xù)寫：

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“就在這個(gè)時(shí)候，我的父母注意到了我的變化?！笨芍谝欢慰擅鑼懜?/p>

母對(duì)作者的要求和作者的表現(xiàn)。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“然后有一天，我父親拿走了我的筆記本電腦?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫作

者失去電腦的感受和感悟。

2.續(xù)寫線索：獲得電腦——沉迷網(wǎng)絡(luò)——父母不滿——沒收電腦——改過自新

3.詞匯激活

行為類

①.集中：concentrateon/focuson

②.意識(shí)到：realize/recognize

③.決定：decideto/determineto

情緒類

①.絕望的：desperate/hopeless/indespair

②.頑固的：dogged/stubborn

【點(diǎn)睛】

[高分句型1].ItbecameobvioustothemthatIwasspendingtoomuchtimeontheInternet.（由

連接詞that引導(dǎo)的主語(yǔ)從句）

[高分句型2],Ipromisedmyparentsthat1wouldturnoveranewleaf.（由連接詞that引導(dǎo)的賓

語(yǔ)從句）

07

Afterfillingoutfiftyapplications,goingthroughfourinterviews,andwinningoneoffer.I

tookwhatIcouldgetateachingjobinwhatIconsideredadistantwildarea;westernNewJersey.

Mycharacteristicoptimismwasaliveonlywhen1remindedmyselfthatIwouldbedoingwhatI

hadwantedtodosinceIwasfourteen-teachingEnglish.

SchoolstartedIwasteachingEnglish.Iworkedhard,takingtimeoffonlytoeatandsleep.

Andthentherewasmysixthgradeclass-seventeenboysandfivegirlswhowereonlysixyears

youngerthanme.IhadaproblemlongbeforeIknewit.Iwasstrugglinginmyworkasayoung

idealisticteacher.Iwantedtomakeliteraturecomealiveandtopromotealoveforthewritten

word.Thestudentswantedtothrowspitballs（紙I才]）andwhisperdirtywordsinthebackofthe

room.

IncollegeIhadbeentaughtthatasuccessfuleducatorshouldignorebadbehavior.SoIdid,

confidentthat,asthetextbookhadsaid,thebadbehaviorwoulddisappearasIgavemystudents

positiveattention.Itsoundsreasonable,butthetextevidentlyignoredthefactthathumans,

particularlyteenagers,rarelyseemreasonable.Bythetimemyboss,whowasalsomytaskmaster

（監(jiān)工），knowntobethestrictest,mostdemanding,mostquicktofireinexperiencedteachers,

cameintotheclassroomtoobserveme,thestudentsexhibitedverylittlegoodbehaviortopraise.

Mybosssatinthebackoftheroom.Theboysintheclassweremakinganimalnoises,hitting

eachotherwhilethegirlsfiled（鏗）theirnailsorreadmagazines.Ijustpretendeditallwasn't

happening,andwentonlecturingandtriedtoasksomeinspiringquestions.Myboss,sittinginthe

backoftheroom,seemedtobegrowingbiggerandbigger.Aftertwentyminutesheleft,silently.

Visionsofunemploymentmarchedbeforemyeyes.IfeltmildlyvictoriousthatIgotthr