讀后續(xù)寫個(gè)人自由成長(zhǎng)類Amar和他的鸚鵡Metto的互動(dòng)講義高考英語(yǔ)作文復(fù)習(xí)專項(xiàng)

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Born

into

a

medical

family,Amar,a

15yearold

boy,was

expected

to

be

a

doctor,butdeepdowninhisheart,hewaseagertotakeupwritingashisfuturecareer.Hewasin

a

great

dilemma

whether

to

pursue

his

dream

or

live

up

to

his

parents'

expectation

untilonedaywhenhisfathergiftedhimaparrot.Theparrothadtwohazylinesinherneck:

blackandred.阿瑪出生于一個(gè)醫(yī)學(xué)家庭，15歲的男孩，本應(yīng)成為一名醫(yī)生，但在內(nèi)心深處，他渴望將寫作作為自己未來(lái)的職業(yè)。他陷入了一個(gè)巨大的困境，是追求自己的夢(mèng)想，還是不辜負(fù)父母的期望，直到有一天，他的父親送給他一只鸚鵡。鸚鵡的脖子上有兩條模糊的線：黑色和紅色。Amarknewthehazylinesmarkthestageoflearning.“Whenthereisagoodteacher,howcanhisstudentbestupid”,heusedtobelieve.Itwasabsolutelytrue.阿瑪知道模糊的線條標(biāo)志著學(xué)習(xí)的階段?！坝幸粋€(gè)好老師，他的學(xué)生怎么會(huì)愚蠢”，他曾經(jīng)相信。這絕對(duì)是真的。Metto'scagewasyellowwithabigdoorandashinysilverrod(桿)

running

throughthecentre.Metto'sworldwasfantastic,surroundedbyeightfootwhitewallswith

someplumtrees.Andalawn,withapalmtreeinthemiddle,wasdottedwithmultiplecolor

roses.Metto的籠子是黃色的，有一扇大門和一根閃閃發(fā)光的銀棒(桿)穿過中心。梅托的世界是夢(mèng)幻般的，周圍是八英尺高的白墻和一些李子樹。還有一片草坪，中間是一棵棕櫚樹，上面點(diǎn)綴著多色的玫瑰。Backhomefromschooleveryafternoon,AmaralwaysslidthedoorofthecageupforMettotosetherfreenearbythepalmtree.Mettocouldsetherselffreebecauseshelearnedhowtoslideupthedoorbutshehadnevertriedtodoso.ItwaseitherlovewithAmaror,mightbe,shehadnevertastedthetasteofabiggerworld.每天下午放學(xué)回家后，阿瑪總是把籠子的門推給梅托，讓她在棕櫚樹旁自由活動(dòng)。Metto可以讓自己自由，因?yàn)樗龑W(xué)會(huì)了如何滑上門，但她從未嘗試過這樣做。這要么是對(duì)Amar的愛，要么可能是她從未嘗到更大世界的味道。AmaralwaystalkedwithMettoinPashto

(普什圖語(yǔ)).WheneverAmarfishedoutpeanuts

from

his

pocket,Metto

talked

frequently

"Toti

choori

khore"—parrot!

Wanna

eatchoori.Shehadlearnedonemoresentenceaftermeetingwithafriendbelongingto

jungleoutsidethewhitewalls.Shealwayssaidthatattheendofmeal"Dawakhtbam

teershe"—thisshalltobepassed,whichAmarhadnevertaughther.阿瑪總是用普什圖語(yǔ)和梅托交談(普什圖語(yǔ)).每當(dāng)阿瑪從口袋里掏出花生時(shí)，梅托就經(jīng)常說(shuō)“托蒂·喬里·霍爾”——鸚鵡！想吃辣椒。她在白墻外與一位叢林中的朋友見面后又學(xué)會(huì)了一句話。她總是在用餐結(jié)束時(shí)說(shuō)“DawakhtbamteerShe”——這是阿瑪從未教過她的。AmarsawherfriendingdailyandsittingintheplumtreenearbyMetto'scage.Heletthemanddidnothing.“Thenewonecanneversucceedinwinningher.Afterall,Ifeedherwell.Shewillneverleaveme",Amarmurmured.Buthedidn'tknowthenewteacher

had

taught

her

something

the

old

one

hadn't.It

was

the

outer

world

with

untouchablehorizon.阿瑪看到她的朋友每天都來(lái)，坐在梅托籠子附近的李子樹上。他聽之任之，什么也沒做。阿瑪喃喃自語(yǔ)地說(shuō)：“新老師永遠(yuǎn)贏不了她。畢竟，我養(yǎng)得很好。她永遠(yuǎn)不會(huì)離開我?！钡恢佬吕蠋熃塘怂恍├侠蠋煕]有教過的東西。那是一個(gè)地平線無(wú)法觸及的外部世界。注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個(gè)左右；Oneday,onthewaytofeedher,AmarwasshockedatwhatMettowasdoing.Hisheadhangingdown,Amarcamebackhomeafterlongrunning.

故事大意：故事通過Amar和他的鸚鵡Metto的互動(dòng)來(lái)探討這些主題。Amar雖然被期望成為一名醫(yī)生，但他內(nèi)心深處渴望成為一名作家。同樣，Metto有能力自由地離開她的籠子，但她選擇留在Amar身邊，直到遇到了能教會(huì)她外面世界的新朋友。文章的主旨：關(guān)于追隨夢(mèng)想與滿足家庭期望之間的矛盾，以及自由和成長(zhǎng)的重要性。文章設(shè)置了兩條線索：明線,同時(shí)也是本文核心矛盾點(diǎn)：Amar選擇追求自己的夢(mèng)想VS聽從父母的職業(yè)安排；暗線：Metto作為鸚鵡，在籠子里安逸VS離開籠子，追求外面theouterworldwithuntouchablehorizon。協(xié)同點(diǎn)：關(guān)鍵位置的細(xì)節(jié)，包含重點(diǎn)伏筆；從文章最后兩句話判斷，Metto一定會(huì)離開；從給定的第二句afteralongrunning,可以看出，Amar追趕了好久，但是Hisheadhangingdown，說(shuō)明，Metto真正離開不回來(lái)了。覺醒時(shí)刻、促發(fā)因素：續(xù)寫文章里，每一被作者用心塑造的角色，都有其特別作用；寵物不是僅僅是寵物，而是意象，是會(huì)給人啟發(fā)和思考的角色；人物領(lǐng)悟到一個(gè)道理，往往會(huì)有一個(gè)覺醒時(shí)刻；主人公發(fā)生改變，往往會(huì)有一個(gè)具體的促發(fā)因素，否則會(huì)顯得突兀。大的矛盾點(diǎn)，一般容易挖掘出來(lái)；但是，讓主人公順理成章、合乎情理地、邏輯自洽地解決矛盾，重點(diǎn)在于把覺醒時(shí)刻、促發(fā)因素描寫清楚；本文的Amar，面對(duì)greatdilemma的覺醒來(lái)自于Metto離開之后，并想起"Dawakhtbamteershe"thistooshallpass。于是鼓起勇氣去，做出選擇。參考范文：One

day,onthewaytofeedher,AmarwasshockedtoseewhatMettowasdoing.Shehadmanagedtoslideupthedoorofhercageandwasnowseatedonapalmtree,engagedinalivelyconversationwithherjunglefriend.Amar'sheartsankashewitnessedthisunexpectedscene.Inadesperateattempttobringherback,hereachedouthisarmsandpleaded,"Getback!Mettogetback!"ButMetto,withaquickglanceatAmar,spreadherwingsandflewawaywithhermate,embracingthevastunknown.Amarranafterthem,hopefadingwitheverystep,untiltheydisappearedintothedenseforest.Standingalone,hegazedintothesky,adeepsenseoflossenvelopinghim.Withhisheadhangingdown,Amarreturnedhomeafteralongrunning.The

thought,"IfonlyIhadlockedthecage,"replayedinhismind.ButthenMetto'swords,"Dawakhtbamteershe"thistooshallpass,echoedinhismind,bringingunexpectedrelief.ItdawnedonAmarthatMetto'sdeparture/leaving

wasmorethanaloss;itwasalessoninfreedomandthecouragetopursuewhattrulymatters.Reflectingonhisownlife,Amarrealis