備考2024屆高考英語一輪復(fù)習(xí)第二部分讀后續(xù)寫專題二熱考話題素材2個人成長

熱考話題2個人成長[2021浙江改編]Mydad，George，onlyhadaneighthgradeeducation.Aquietman，hedidn’tunderstandmyworldofschoolactivities.Fromage14，heworked.Andhisdad，Albert，tookthemoneymydadearnedandusedittopayfamilyexpenses.Ididn’treallyunderstandhisworldeither：Hewasalivestocktrucker，andIthoughtthatIwouldsurpass（超過）anythinghehadaccomplishedbythetimeIwalkedacrossthestageathighschoolgraduation.Summersinthemid-70swerespentathomeshootingbaskets，hittingabaseball，orthrowingafootball，preparingformyfutureasaquarterbackonafootballteam.Inpoorweather，Ireadaboutsportsorpracticedmytrombone（長號）.ThesummerbeforemyeighthgradeIwasoneofagroupofboysthataneighboringfarmerhiredtoworkinhisfield.Heexplainedourbasictask，thetractorfiredupandwewereoff，ridingdownthefieldlookingforweedstospraywithchemicals.Afterashortway，thefarmerstoppedandpointedataweedwhichwemissed.Thenwebeganagain.Thishappenedoverandover，butwesoonlearnedtoidentifydifferentgrasseslikecockleburs，lamb’s-quarters，foxtails，andthekingofweeds，theprettypurplethistle.Itwastiringwork，butIlookedforwardtothepay，eventhoughIwasn’tsurehowmuchitwouldamountto.Athome，mydadsaid，"Ajob’sabigsteptogrowingup.I’mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold."Mydad’swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmightnotbeminetodowithasIwished.Mylaborslastedabouttwoweeks，andthefarmersaidtheremightbemorework，butIwasn’tinterested.IdecideditwasnotfairthatIhadtocontributemymoney.WhenIbroughtmypaycheckhome—itwas$119—mydadwantedtotalktome.IwassurprisedthatmydadallowedmetousethemoneyasIwished.人物主要人物George（mydad）：從文中的描述"Aquietman...Fromage14，heworked.Andhisdad，Albert，tookthemoneymydadearnedandusedittopayfamilyexpenses"和"I’mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold"可以看出，父親George是一個沉默寡言、能吃苦、有家庭責(zé)任感的人，他認(rèn)為"我"的打工所得也應(yīng)該貼補家用。主要人物"I"：從文中的描述"Iwouldsurpass（超過）anythinghehadaccomplished"和"IdecideditwasnotfairthatIhadtocontributemymoney"可以看出，"我"志存高遠(yuǎn)、不理解父親，并不認(rèn)可父親將"我"的打工所得"征收"的想法，這也是文章的沖突所在。根據(jù)文中的"hedidn’tunderstandmyworldofschoolactivities"和"Ididn’treallyunderstandhisworldeither"可知，父子二人相互缺乏了解，這為下文的發(fā)展埋下了伏筆。情節(jié)及情感線"我"與父親相互不理解（"我"想超越他）→"我"到隔壁農(nóng)場打工掙錢（期待能擁有這筆錢）→父親想用這筆錢貼補家用（"我"感到不公，對繼續(xù)在農(nóng)場打工失去興趣）→續(xù)寫第二段提示語，父親讓"我"自己支配薪水（感到驚喜）。主題父親本來要讓"我"把打工的收入用來貼補家用，最后卻改變了主意，這應(yīng)該會給"我"帶來觸動，因此，文章最終的主題應(yīng)該展現(xiàn)"我"的成長、對父親的理解以及對家庭責(zé)任的認(rèn)可。續(xù)寫第一段根據(jù)原文及續(xù)寫第一段的提示語可知，本段主要描述父親與"我"談話的內(nèi)容、過程以及"我"的反應(yīng)，可以從動作、神態(tài)描寫體現(xiàn)"我"不情愿和不甘的心理狀態(tài)，以及父親在與"我"談話過程中對"我"的理解。尾句銜接第二段的提示語：父親讓"我"留錢自用。續(xù)寫第二段結(jié)合原文和本段的提示語可知，本段應(yīng)該描寫"我"聽到父親的決定后驚訝、興奮的心理狀態(tài)；與此同時，在續(xù)寫本段時還應(yīng)呼應(yīng)原文中的描述并凸顯主題，將"我"的反思和成長感悟展現(xiàn)出來。1.Iwantedtoarguewithmydad.①用具體的動作描寫代替want，體現(xiàn)"我"想留著錢的決心。Isearchedmymindforwordstoarguewithmydad.②為句①增加條件狀語從句，使文章邏輯更嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)，前后銜接更連貫。Isearchedmymindforwordstoarguewithmydad，ifheannouncedthemoneywasn’tmine.③為句②增加具體神態(tài)描寫，凸顯"我"想留著錢的渴望。Withmyeyesgluedtothepaycheck，Isearchedmymindforwordstoarguewithmydad，ifheannouncedthemoneywasn’tmine.2.Iwasunwillingtohandinthemoney.用具體手部動作和心理活動描寫改寫優(yōu)化句子，體現(xiàn)"我"的不情愿。Igrippedthepaycheckmorefirmly，readytoargue.3.Ifeltashamed.①用面部表情代替feelashamed，使表達(dá)更生動。Iflushedwithshame.②為句①增加原因狀語，并運用現(xiàn)在分詞短語作狀語，使感情轉(zhuǎn)變更加順暢自然。Recallingmyambitionofsurpassinghim，Iflushedwithshame.WhenIbroughtmypaycheckhome—itwas$119—mydadwantedtotalktome.Hetoldmetowaitinthelivingroomforawhile.Isatonthesofa，withmyeyesgluedtothepaycheck（眼睛盯著薪水），searchingmymindfor（腦海里搜索著）wordstoarguewithmydadifheannouncedthemoneywasn’tmine.Justthen，thedooropenedandincamemydad.Themomenthesatdownbesideme，Igrippedthepaycheckmorefirmly（更加牢牢地握住薪水），readytoargue.However，hegentlyplacedhisrighthandonmyshoulder（輕輕地把他的右手放在我的肩上）andsaid，"Iknowyouhavegrownupalotthroughyourwork..."Thentherewasalongpause.Hewithdrewhishand（收回他的手）andslowlycontinued，"Youdeservethemoneyandthemoneyisyoursnow."IwassurprisedthatmydadallowedmetousethemoneyasIwished.Inamoment，Ididn’tknowwhattosay.Withthismoney，Icouldbuyanewfootball，oranewbike.Ilookedatmydadwithgratitude，andhesmiledawkwardly，"Useitwisely，son."Recal