2024屆高三英語二輪復(fù)習(xí)：讀后續(xù)寫個人成長類奪冠還是救火

01讀后續(xù)寫原題

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Davidwasawindsurfer,whowasseriousandhardworking.HedreamedofbecomingacitychampionoftheannualTeenagerWindsurfingRace.Toachieveit,hebarelymissedasinglegameorpracticewhatevertheweather.Aftermonthsofintensetraining,thebigdayfinallyarrived!

Thebeachwascrowdedwiththeexcitedaudience,includingreportersandphotographers.Thespeakersystemwasannouncingthenamesofthewindsurfers,callingthemtogetreadyfortherace.AndtherewasDavid,inalinewithotherwindsurfers,allofthemmovingnervouslyupanddownonthewavesbehindanimaginarystartingline.Theywereallfightingforthebestpositiontostartandweretenseasaresult,ignoringthevastseatheywereon.

Themomentthestarter'ssignalsounded,Davidwasoff,sonaturalandquick.Hepulledhardathissailtoracejustaheadofthegroup.Ashepickedupspeed,gliding(滑行)overthewaves,hefeltthefamiliarjoyandfreedomthatwindsurfingalwaysgavehim.Whathelovedwassimplybeingoutatsea.Hecouldhardlystophimselffromshoutingoutinexcitement,rushingtothefinishinglineforthefirst.

"Go!David!"Thewindcarriedoverafamiliarvoice.Helookedaroundandspottedhis

eldersisterJessicaonherspeedboatupwindofhimcheeringforhim.ShewavedatDavidandhenoddedhisheadinacknowledgement,eventhoughheknewshewastoofarawaytoseehim.Justasheturnedaway,however,outofthecornerofhiseye,hesawsmokebehindthespeedboatontheshore.Knowingthatthesmokecouldtellhimthedirectionthewindwasblowing,hedecidedtostudyitforamomentoutofhabit.Justashewasgettingabettersenseofhowtousethewindtohisadvantage,hesawit.

注意：續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；P1:Notjustthesmokebutabigfire!P2:Theotherwindsurferswerefaraheadofhimatthattime.

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寫作思路分析

這是一篇故事類續(xù)寫。從所給前文可知，文章主要圍繞有實力爭奪年度青少年帆板比賽冠軍的David在比賽過程中發(fā)現(xiàn)火情后是如何抉擇的來展開故事情節(jié)。

文章第一段主要介紹了帆板運動員David認(rèn)真努力地訓(xùn)練，渴望奪得冠軍，為續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容埋下伏筆。根據(jù)續(xù)寫第一段首句“Notjustthesmokebutabigfire!”和續(xù)寫第二段首句“Theotherwindsurferswerefaraheadofhimatthattime.”可以判斷，雖然David很想拿冠軍，但發(fā)現(xiàn)火情后并沒有因為急著爭奪冠軍而置之不理，需側(cè)重他面臨抉擇時的心理活動描寫及如何示意Jessica的動作描寫。

根據(jù)續(xù)寫第二段首句“Theotherwindsurferswerefaraheadofhimatthattime.”可知，David想要贏得比賽已是不可能的，第二段需側(cè)重描寫David雖然沒能獲得冠軍但卻做出正確抉擇的心理感受及觀眾的反應(yīng)。主題思想一定要體現(xiàn)積極向上的正確價值觀導(dǎo)向。

注意：續(xù)寫第一段最為合理的情節(jié)應(yīng)該是正在參加比賽的David第一時間發(fā)出警示，示意姐姐Jessica撥打火警電話，但學(xué)生如果寫David親自參與救火也是合理的。

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參考范文Notjustthesmokebutabigfire!

Itseemedtohavejuststartedfromabuildingandtospreadoutofcontrolverysoon.Desperateashewasforthechampionship,hefeltheshoulddotherightthingatthiscriticalmoment.Thinkingofthis,DaviddecisivelywentoffcourseandswunghissailtowardsJessica’sspeedboat.“Fire!”Davidyelled,pointinginthedirectionofthefireandsigninghertomakethefirecall.Jessicalookedaway,gotDavid’smessageandreachedoutforhercellphone.Davidbreathedasighofreliefandtunedhisattentiontotherace.

Theotherwindsurferswerefaraheadofhimatthattime.

Howeverhardhetried,itwasimpossibletocatchupwiththem.Despitethis,Daviddidn’tregrethelpingwiththefire.Backonlandafterthesail,Davidwasimmediatelysurroundedbytheenthusiasticreportersandphotographers.Thencametheannouncementfromthespeakersystem,“Thoughinthelastplace,Davidisourhero,whomadethedetourtoraisethewarningaboutthefire!”Prolongedapplausesburstout.SomefansevenpushedtheirwaytopresentDavidwithflowers,whichlituphisfacelikerosyclouds.默寫版：Notjustthesmokebutabigfire!

_______________________________它似乎剛從一棟樓開始，很快就失控了.Desperateashewasforthechampionship,hefeltheshoulddotherightthingatthiscriticalmoment.________________________________________________________考慮到這一點，大衛(wèi)果斷地偏離了航向，向杰西卡的快艇揚帆而去.“Fire!”Davidyelled,pointinginthedirectionofthefireandsigninghertomakethefirecall._______________________________________________________________________杰西卡看向別處，收到大衛(wèi)的短信，伸手去拿手機.Davidbreathedasighofreliefandtunedhisattentiontotherace.

Theotherwindsurferswerefaraheadofhimatthattime.

_____________________________________________無論他多么努力，都不可能趕上他們.Despitethis,Daviddidn’tregrethelpingwiththefire.___________________________________________________________________________啟航后回到陸地，大衛(wèi)立即被熱情的記者和攝影師包圍.Thencametheannouncementfromthespeaker