讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)遇險(xiǎn)類-電梯驚魂講義-高三英語(yǔ)復(fù)習(xí)寫(xiě)作專項(xiàng)

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(xiě)，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的故事。Ifeltsonervous.Itwasthedayofmyinterview.IwokeupearlyjusttomakesureIwouldhavetimetogetprepared.ItfeltlikeanormalMonday,butforme,thisdaywasveryimportant.Therewasalotofpressure.Aftershowering,IputontheoutfitIhadcarefullychosenandlaidoutthenightbefore.Ilookedatmyreflectioninthemirror.“Youcandothis,”Iencouragedmyself.Iatebreakfastandfedmycat.Imademywaytothebusstopandwaitedpatiently.Asidefromtherapidtappingofmyrightfoot,noonecouldtellthatIwassonervous.WhenIarrivedatmystop,Iwalkedtotheoffice.ThebuildingwassotallandIfeltsmallinitsshadow.ButIalsofelthopeful.Thiswillbeagreatopportunity,Ithought.Andwhatistheretolose?Lookingdownatmywatch,InoticedthatIwasearly.Thisallowedplentyoftimetoreviewmyresume(簡(jiǎn)歷)andfurtherpreparemyselffortheinterview.Thedoorsofthebuildingwereimpressive,allsteelandglassandverymodern.WhenIwalkedin,someoneshowedmethewaitingareaandofferedmeacupofcoffee.Afterafewmoments,amaninanicesuittoldmetojoinhim.Aswewalkedtowardtheelevators,Ibegantofeelanxious.Thepalmsofmyhandsbegantosweat.ItseemedlikeanhourhadpassedbeforeIheardthe“ding”oftheelevatorsopening.Wegotintotheelevator,fullofmenandwomendressedtothenines（完美地）.“It’squitealargeoffice,”themansaidtome.Ichucklednervously.Icouldfeelmyselfgettingwarmer.Icouldn’twaittohearthatcomforting“ding”thatsignaledanescape.Astheelevatorclimbed,Iagainnervouslycheckedmywatch.JustasIlookeddown,ithappened.

這篇文章有很多情節(jié)構(gòu)思，而主題如何在結(jié)尾呈現(xiàn)需要下點(diǎn)功夫。本文需要圍繞兩個(gè)問(wèn)題：1.我緊張地去面試，結(jié)果如何？2.我被困在電梯里，如何脫困？主題：既要體現(xiàn)我如何脫困（體現(xiàn)某種品質(zhì)），又要說(shuō)明面試結(jié)果（讓我開(kāi)心的結(jié)果）。這種結(jié)尾以突出開(kāi)心的結(jié)果為主，即：事情辦成了。我們可以說(shuō)是自然結(jié)尾。因此有兩種方法：方法一：某人的對(duì)話（說(shuō)明主旨），事情成功了。(例如version1,2)

方法二：個(gè)人感悟，事情辦成了。（例如version1,3)寫(xiě)作中突出的問(wèn)題是：脫離文章中的問(wèn)題設(shè)計(jì)談主題（譬如有寫(xiě)對(duì)待職業(yè)的態(tài)度，生活中充滿信心等）；把第一個(gè)提示句完全理解錯(cuò)了，導(dǎo)致情節(jié)離題。

請(qǐng)認(rèn)真體會(huì)三篇范文：Version1:Paragraph1:Theelevatorcametoastopbetweenfloors.1.我和大家都很緊張（如何表達(dá)緊張？圍繞mind，eyes,voice,air)Mymind

raced

forsecondsasI

cast

anervousglaceatthepeoplearound,

onlyto

findthemlookingatmein

horror.“Arewegoingtodie?”someonecried,hisvoice

trembling

withtears.Thenadeadsilence

fell.2.我的行動(dòng)：按下急救鍵，安慰眾人Itwastimeformetotakeaction.Iimmediatelypressedthe“Emergency”buttonandtriedto

calm

themdownwithjokes.Itworked;theirface

litup

withsmiles.3.門(mén)開(kāi)，大家出來(lái)，我看表（和第二段提示句銜接）Luckily,itdidn’ttakelong

before

thedooropenedagainwiththatcomforting“ding”.

Out

theyrushedlikeacagedbirdhadbeenreleasedsuddenly.ButIcheckedmywatch,feeling

worried

and

nervous.Paragraph2:IthoughtthatIwouldbelate.4.我的行動(dòng)：抓住我的簡(jiǎn)歷，跑過(guò)去（這里如何凸顯我的忐忑？）I

clutched

myresumetomychest,firstjoggingquicklyandthenwalkingslowly.Mypalmswere

sweating

andevenmylegscouldn’tstop

shaking.5.被告知：面試官專門(mén)等我，原來(lái)面試官是他！Someonetoldmetheinterviewhadendedbuttheinterviewerwasspeciallywaitingforme.Really?Curiously,Ienteredtheroom.Tomy

surprise,theinterviewerwasthe

same

manfromtheelevator.“I

appreciate

yourcoolheadandwisdomsomuch.Congratulations!Welcometojoinus!”hecameuptome,givingmeawarm

hug.6.主題呈現(xiàn)：生活中無(wú)處沒(méi)有測(cè)試，而我用的冷靜和智慧通過(guò)了測(cè)試。（面試官的話暗示主題）It

dawned

onmethattests,whetherplannedorunplanned,existeverywhereandIwassoluckytohavepassedthisone.

Version2Theelevatorcametoastopbetweenfloors.

Mynervousnessturnedinto/gavewaytofearatonce.Butavoicetoldmeitwasbettertoactthantojustwaithelplessly.So,Ipressedtheemergencybuttonimmediately.ThenIinstructedthepeopleto

leantheirbacksagainstthewall

andadjusttheirbreathing.Butsuddenly,amancomplainedirritably(性急地；暴躁地),“Whataterribleelevator!”

Hiseyesblazedwithfury.

“We’dbettercalmdownandwaitforhelp!”

Icomfortedhim,thoughnervousmyself.

Fortunately,

everyonecomposedthemselves.

Thenfelladeadsilence.

IthoughtthatIwouldbelate.Obviously,theinterviewerscouldn’tbeinagoodmoodaboutmycominglate.

Afterwhatseemedanendlesswaiting,therescuersarrived,andthedooropened.Resumeinhand,

Iwasabouttorushoutwhenahandrestedonmyshoulder.Turningaround,I

sawthemansmilingbroadlyatme,“Don’trush,youngman.You’vedoneagoodjob.Congratulationsonpassingtheinterview.”

Whatacoincidence

thatheturnedouttobetheboss!Goodness!Theunluckydayprovedtobemyluckiestday!

Version3Theelevatorcametoastopbetweenfloors.Notknowingwhatwaswrong,everyoneinitgotnervousquickly.Someonepressedtheemergencybutton,andweweretoldthatitwouldtaketherescueteamatleastanhourtocompletetherepairwork,whichmeantwehadtobetrappedinthisnarrowandhotspace,

waitingrestlessly.Hangingovertheelevatorwasadepressingair,evenmakingsomepeoplebegintosobhelplessly.

Withtheclockticking,Ifellintodesperation,too.IthoughtthatIwouldbelate.Iwasso

frustrated

thatmywell-preparedresumewouldn’twork.JustwhenIgaveuphope,thebeautiful“ding”sound

setmefreefromthosemessythoughts.Outsidetheoffice,however,areceptioniststoppedme,informingmeofanotherinterviewopportunitybecauseoftheincident.

Inaflash,arippleofexcitementsurgedthroughmybody.

Atthatverymoment,

somethingwasechoinginmyears,“Lifeisjustlikeaboxofchocolates,andweneverknowwhatwewillget.”

讀后小測(cè)：1.我的思緒飛速轉(zhuǎn)動(dòng)

2.緊張地掃視周圍的人

3.他們驚恐地看著我

4.他的聲音顫抖著含著淚

5.他們的臉上露出笑容

6.緊緊抓著我的簡(jiǎn)歷

7.給了我一個(gè)熱情的擁抱

8.我的緊張立刻變成了恐懼

9.他們靠在墻上

10.他的眼睛充滿了憤怒

11.我安慰他，盡管自己很緊張

12.每個(gè)人都使自己鎮(zhèn)定下來(lái)

13.然后陷入了死一般的寂靜

14.在似乎無(wú)盡的等待之后

15.我正要沖出去時(shí)，有一只手搭在我的肩上

16.看到那個(gè)人朝我微笑

17.真是巧合

18.焦急地等待

19.隨著時(shí)鐘滴答作響，我也陷入了絕望

20.沮喪

21.讓我擺脫那些混亂的思緒

22.一瞬間

23.一陣興奮涌上我的身體

24.就在那一刻

25.有什么東西在我的耳邊回響1.Mymindracedforseconds2.castanervousglaceatthepeoplearound3.lookingatmeinhorror4.hisvoicetremblingwithtears5.theirfacelitupwithsmile