讀后續(xù)寫之動(dòng)作描寫高中英語人教版（2019）選擇性必修第一冊

ContinuationWriting

——VividWriting讀后續(xù)寫三原則01原文一致原則內(nèi)容要前后銜接，上下連貫語言表達(dá)風(fēng)格一致。03曲折性原則故事情節(jié)應(yīng)跌宕起伏，其中人物會(huì)遇到困難或問題，但最終能解決。02正能量原則故事內(nèi)容一定要正能量，弘揚(yáng)社會(huì)主義核心價(jià)值觀。如迷路了但最終一定回到了家；失敗了或遇到困難了，但最終一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定是言歸于好,和睦相處；犯錯(cuò)了，最后一定會(huì)改過自新，重新做人；賊逃了，最后一定是繩之以法等等。讀后續(xù)寫的四個(gè)步驟2.細(xì)讀首句，構(gòu)思框架仔細(xì)閱讀所給兩段的首句，結(jié)合正能量結(jié)尾，思考大致框架。1.讀懂大意，理清脈絡(luò)讀所給的不完整故事，弄清大意和主題，理清故事的主要人物和事件。4.修改潤色，整潔謄寫思考再三，把修正潤色后的續(xù)寫整潔地寫入答卷。3.增加細(xì)節(jié)，開始寫作依據(jù)情節(jié)發(fā)展和常識(shí)，在確定的框架內(nèi)，可按“所見/遇所想，所為所感”等構(gòu)思具體細(xì)節(jié)。Characters:

Who,Events:what,when,where,how,why環(huán)境描寫,語言描寫,動(dòng)作描寫,情緒描寫,Pleasedescribethefollowingpictures.Thegirlhuggedtheboy.Thegirldashedforward,jumpedupandhuggedtheboytightly.gatheredtheboyintoherarmsHestoppedthetaxi,jumpedinwiththesuitcaseandtoldthedriver,“Gotothepolicestation,please.”Hetookataxitothepolicestation.part1:A,BandC→動(dòng)作三連結(jié)構(gòu)如何拆解動(dòng)作？將結(jié)果性的動(dòng)作，分解成更細(xì)致的連貫性的微動(dòng)作，使動(dòng)作結(jié)果過程化part1:A,BandC→動(dòng)作三連結(jié)構(gòu)thestepsweshouldtaketoeatspicystripsstep1step2step3撕開包裝tearupthepackage擠出一根squeezeoutonestrip大咬一口takeabigbiteItearupthepackage,squeezeoutonestrip,andtakeabigbite.2017年浙江高考：被狼圍堵，身處險(xiǎn)境Howtogetoutofthisdangeroussituation?threwthemeattothewolf掏出肉瞄準(zhǔn)狼扔向狼Hepulledoutthemeat,aimedatthewolfand

threwitstraighttothefierceanimal.part1:A,BandC→動(dòng)作三連結(jié)構(gòu)part1:A,BandC→動(dòng)作三連結(jié)構(gòu)“歌手上臺(tái)唱歌”如何拆解？看看觀眾深吸一口氣開始演唱Thesingerglancedattheaudience,tookadeepbreathandbegantosing.Iwenttoschoolthismorning.part1:A,BandC→動(dòng)作三連結(jié)構(gòu)PracticeIputonmyclotheshurriedly,grabbedmybagandrushedtoschoolthismorning.匆忙hurriedly抓起grabPleasedescribethefollowingpicture.satonthesubwaystaredathisphoneknit(皺眉)hisbrows/frownedTheoldmansatonthesubway,staringathisphoneandknittinghisbrows.Sittingonthesubway,theoldmanstaredathisphone,knittinghisbrows.part2:非謂語結(jié)構(gòu)①

同一對象同時(shí)發(fā)生不同動(dòng)作，且表主動(dòng)

——主+謂,doingsth./doingsth.,主＋謂part2:非謂語結(jié)構(gòu)PracticeSherushedhappilyintotherain,singinganddancing.rushedhappilyintotherain.sanganddanced.主+謂,doingsth./doingsth.,主＋謂part2:非謂語結(jié)構(gòu)排了三個(gè)小時(shí)的隊(duì)伍,他被告知票被賣完了。動(dòng)作1動(dòng)作2主要?jiǎng)幼?用謂語動(dòng)詞表示次要?jiǎng)幼?用非謂語動(dòng)詞表示（主動(dòng)且先發(fā)生,用__________）havingdoneHavingqueued

for3hours,he

wastold

thattheticketshadbeensoldout.②

動(dòng)作有先后關(guān)系時(shí)

——Havingdonesth,主+謂queueHavingdonesth,主+謂part2:非謂語結(jié)構(gòu)PracticeHavingwalkedforquitealongtime,hefoundhimselflost.走了很長一段時(shí)間，他發(fā)現(xiàn)自己迷路了。part2:非謂語結(jié)構(gòu)孩子感動(dòng)哭了。孩子被感動(dòng)＋孩子哭了Thechildwasdeeplymovedbythestory.Thechildbegantoweep.________________bythestory,thechildbegantoweep.③

動(dòng)作與主語邏輯關(guān)系為被動(dòng)時(shí)

——Donesth.,主+謂Deeplymovedpart2:非謂語結(jié)構(gòu)有技術(shù)的支持，我們的活動(dòng)成功了。withthehelpofwiththesupportofbeequippedwiththetechnicalsupportbearmedwiththetechnicalsupportEquipped/Armedwiththetechnicalsupport,ourcontestmadeahit.part2:非謂語結(jié)構(gòu)——Donesth.,主+謂Practice真相大白后，我緊緊地?fù)肀Я税职?。Exposedtothetruth,Ihuggedmydadinmyarmstightly.part2:非謂語結(jié)構(gòu)Thebellwasringing.Thestudentsenteredtheclassroom.Thebellringing,allthestudentsenteredtheclassroom.④

動(dòng)作的邏輯主語不一致時(shí)

——獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)（主1+非謂語，主語2+謂語）part2:非謂語結(jié)構(gòu)④

動(dòng)作的邏輯主語不一致時(shí)

——獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)（主1+非謂語，主語2+謂語）她顫抖著手，緩緩打開了包裹。Sheopenedtheparcelslowly.Herhandswastrembling.Herhandstrembling,sheopenedtheparcel.part2:非謂語結(jié)構(gòu)part2:非謂語結(jié)構(gòu)獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)（主1+非謂語，主語2+謂語）Practice夜幕降臨，他們支起帳篷，開心地一起唱歌聊天。Thenightfalling,theyputupatent,singingandchattingtogetherhappily.Sheldon驚恐大叫面部肢體語言/心理睜大眼睛驚恐萬分逃走大喊媽媽part3:混合結(jié)構(gòu)：動(dòng)作+情感Wideninghiseyesinextremehorror,Sheldonfledaway,screaming,“Mom,help!”1.非謂語（doingsth.,主謂,doing)part3:混合結(jié)構(gòu)：動(dòng)作+情感

Withabunchofflowersinherhands

,Mindystoodbesidetheseaandlookeddownattheflowers

withasmile，wonderingifthephotowasdone.面部肢體語言/心理面帶微笑手捧鮮花，站在海邊想知道照片拍好了沒有2.With的復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)（withsth.+介詞短語/todo/done,主謂/主謂賓vividwritingA,BandC→動(dòng)作三連結(jié)構(gòu)非謂語結(jié)構(gòu)混合結(jié)構(gòu)：動(dòng)作+情感（非謂語/with的復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)）①

同一對象同時(shí)發(fā)生不同動(dòng)作，且表主動(dòng)——主+謂,doingsth./doingsth.,主＋謂②

動(dòng)作有先后關(guān)系時(shí)

——Havingdonesth,主+謂③

動(dòng)作與主語邏輯關(guān)系為被動(dòng)時(shí)

——Donesth.,主+謂④

動(dòng)作的邏輯主語不一致時(shí)——獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)

（主1+非謂語，主語2+謂語）SummaryPractice1.她登上(board)飛機(jī)，坐在座位上，尋找她的書。________________________________________________________________2.意識(shí)到我負(fù)擔(dān)不起繼續(xù)深造學(xué)習(xí)，我不得不停止追逐我的夢想。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.看沒有人注意到我們，我就把圣誕禮物放下，敲了敲他的門鈴。_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4.受到老師的鼓舞，他舉起手，小聲說道：“我來(volunteer)”。______________________________________________________________Sheboardedtheplane,satonherseatandthenlookedforherbook.RealizingthatIcan'taffordtocontinuemyfurtherstudy,Ihadtostopchasingmydream.Seeingnootherpeoplenoticeus,IplacedtheChristmaspresentdownandpoundedhisdoorbell.Encouragedbytheteacher'swords,heraisedhishand,whispering“Ivolunteer.”Practice5.已經(jīng)失敗了三次，他不想再嘗試了。________________________________________________________________6.晚飯準(zhǔn)備好了，女主人請客人就坐。_______________________________________________________________7.吃完飯，我們擁抱著說再見。_________________________________________________________________8.簡感到害怕和無助，坐在一棵樹旁，用胳膊抱著自己的肩膀取暖。______________________________________________________________Havingfailedthreetimes,hedidn’twanttotryagain.Dinner(being)ready,thehostessaskedhergueststobeseated.Withthemealover,wehuggedeachotherandsaidgoodbye.Feelingscaredandhelpless,Janesatbesideatreeandheldhershoulderinherarmstomakeherselfwarm.AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISE

2021新高考Ⅰ卷:ThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff’shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.themainplot:theconflict:thetwinsmadebreakfasttomotherforMother’sDaythetwinsmessedupthebreakfastPara1:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.

Para2:Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Whatwouldhappennext?父親要發(fā)火父親了解情況后,沒有發(fā)火父親和他們一起做早餐4.在父親的助攻下,早餐順利做好了5.他們都非常開心和自豪父親了解情況后,沒有發(fā)火父親和他們一起做早餐在父親的助攻下,早餐順利做好了了解情況后,蹲下來,給擁抱/拍肩膀,說…Havinglearnedtheirplan,hekneltdown,pattedthemontheirshoulder/gavethemabighugandcomforted,“Timeisonourside.Let’sdoittogether”.清洗了鍋,重新煮上了粥,并且烤上了面包Theycleanedupthemess,cookedtheporridgeand

toastedthebreadonceagain.有了經(jīng)驗(yàn)和父親的幫助,早餐做好了,散發(fā)出宜人的香味.Armed/equippedwiththeexperienceoffailureandanextrahelpinghand,thebreakfastwasready,givingoffpleasantsmell.Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Hiseyebrowsnarrowedandhishandsrestedonhiships.Judgingfromhisexpression,itwasevidentthathewasabouttoexplodedafterseeingthemess.Totheirrelief,havinglearnedtheirplan,hekneltdown,pattedthemontheirshoulderandsaid,“Timeisonourside.Let’sdoittogether”.Withouttheslightesthesitation,theycleanedupthemess,cookedtheporridgeandtoastedthebreadonceagain.Beforelong,armedwiththeexperienceoffailureandanextrahelpinghand,thebreakfastwasready,givingoffpleasantsmell.Wornoutastheywere,theirheartswerefilledwithnothingelsebutjoyandpride.AppreciateModelEssayTestforgoals（2022新高考卷）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Itwasthedayofthebigcross-countryrun.Studentsfromsevendifferent

primaryschoolsinandaroundthesmalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingtheroute(路線)throughthickevergreenforest.IlookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid,whowasstandingbyhimselfoff

tothesidebyafence.Hewassmallfortenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmile

wasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn'twiththeother

children.Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.Whatwaswrong?Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent!Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfortheschool'scoachandaskedhimwhathad

happened."Iwasafraidthatkidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughathim,"he

explaineduncomfortably."Igavehimthechoicetorunornot,andlethimdecide."Ibitbackmyfrustration(懊惱).Iknewthecoachmeantwell--hethought

hewasdoingtherightthing.AftermakingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme,hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetoside

asheswunghisfeetforwardDavidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglike

otherchildren,butatschoolhisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.He

alwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.Thatwas

whynoneofthechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhe

cross-countryteam.Itjusttookhimlonger-that'sall.Davidhadnotmisseda

singlepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheother

children,hedidalwaysfinish.Asaspecialeducationteacherattheschool,Iwas

familiar

with

the

challengesDavidfaced

and

was

proud

of

his

strongdetermination.Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.

IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.

TaskSentencepatternpractice1.他低著頭，試圖避免和我眼神接觸。________________________________________________________________2.經(jīng)過深思熟慮，我提到了一些事件，一些他贏得過人們對他的決心和毅力的贊揚(yáng)的事件。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.哨聲響起，選手們各就各位。______________________________________________________________4.令我高興的是，大衛(wèi)微微一笑，慢慢地站了起來并且堅(jiān)定地向前走去。___________