高中英語讀后續(xù)寫公開課課件

ContinuationWriting

WhoWhenWhereWhatWhyHowThestoryisabout…I,mydad,

UnclePaul,Tina,RyanandKyleasummerafternoontheWildWest,UnclePaul’sfarminPecoswentonavacationStep1Readforthebasicinformationtense(時態(tài))?thesimplepasttenseIwantedtotakeahorseride.....climaxstorymountainbeginningdevelopmentendingTip1Useastorymountaintounderstandthestorybetter.Step2Readfortheplot

BeginningEndingClimaxexcitedimpressedTheplot&thefeelingsseeing…traveling…Intheafternoon,IaskedUnclePaulifIcouldtakeahorseride,andhesaidyes,aslongasmydadwentwithme.Iwasn’tgoingtotakeahorseridebymyselfanyway.So,mydadandIputonournewcowboyhats,gotonourhorses,andheadedslowlytowardsthemountains.“Don’tbelateforsupper,”UnclePaulcried,“andkeeptothetracksothatyoudon’tgetlost!”“OK!”mydadcriedback.AfterawhileUnclePaulandhisfarmhousewereoutofsight.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.Itlookedlikeabeautifulwoven(編織的)blanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustforus.Readfortheplot

BeginningEndingClimaxriding…excitedimpressedTip2Feelingschangeasthestorydevelops.relaxedjoyfulFeelings??seeing…traveling…jumpingoutgettinglostTheplot&thefeelingsPredict

thedevelopmentoftheplotwith

thecluesofthegiventextthe2firstsentences10keywords.Step3PredictthedevelopmentPara.1Itwassummer,andmydadwantedtotreatmetoavacationlikeneverbefore.Para3Hiswife...MydadandIspentthenight...ofthefarmhouselisteningtothefrogsandwaterrollingdowntherivernearby..Para.4...“Don'tbelateforsupper,”UnclePaulcried,“andkeeptothetracksothatyoudon'tgetlost!”...Clue1:Wehadan__________________vacationIhaveneverhadbefore.thecluesofthegiventext

exciting/unforgettable

Clue2:Asuggestivemethod：toreturnhome_____________________byridingalongtheriverClue3:Wegotlostbecause_____________________theyrodeoffthetrackPara.1Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.

wherewhat①Whatwastherabbitlike?②Whatwasmyreactiontotherabbit?③Whatwouldweseewhilechasingtherabbit?④Whathappenednext?Step3Predictthedevelopment

Para.2Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.Wegotlost.Howdidwegetlost?①HowdidIfeelandwhatdidDadreact?②Didwefindthewayout?How?③Whomaycometoourrescue?④Howaboutthesurroundingsinthedarkness?Tip3:Byraisingquestionsonyourown,youcanproducemoredetailsofthedevelopmentofthestory.Step3PredictthedevelopmentdadUnclePaulfarmhouseriverfeedsheeplatetrackgotlostsightWho（人物）

When（時間）Where（地點）What（行為）

10keywords

dad;UnclePaul;sheepfeed;gotlost;sightfarmhouse;river;tracklateStep3Predictthedevelopment第五檔

(21-25)與所給短文融洽度高，與所提供各段落開頭語銜接合理。

內(nèi)容豐富，應用了5個以上短文中標出的關鍵詞語。

所使用語法結構和詞匯豐富、準確，可能有些錯誤，但完全不影響意義表達。有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使所續(xù)寫短文結構緊湊。keywords

logicalplotrich,accurate,coherent(連貫的)languageRequirementsforwritingStep4FinishthestoryThelanguageofthegiventextisA.plainandsimpleB.complicatedC.beautifulD.detailedPossibleversionParagraph1Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.“Whatalovelyrabbit!”Ishoutedwitheyesglitteringwithterrificexcitement.ItwasquitedifferentfromthoseIsawinourcity,thusimmediatelystimulatingmyinterest.

Dad

wasalsostunnedbythisspecialrabbit,gawkingatitmotionlessly.“Dad,let’scatchitasourpet!”Isuggested,unexpectedlyreceivinghispromptagreement.Entirelyforgettingwhat

UnclePaul

hadtoldus,wechasedafterthatprettyrabbit,franticwithrapture.Unfortunately,socleverandswiftwasitthatitdisappearedintheforestbeforelong.Notuntilthendidwerealizethatthelastrayoftwilightwasquicklydisappearingamongthenumeroustreesandwecouldn’tfindour

track

atall!Wedid

getlost.

PossibleversionParagraph2Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.Thebone-chillingwindhowledfiercelylikeawolf,makingthedarknessevenmoresuffocating.“Dad,whatcanwedo?”Ithrewmyarmsaroundhimtightly,quiveringandseizedbystarkhorror.“Allisgoingwell!”Dadansweredinagentlevoice,calmandmollified.Wewanderedinthescaryforestanddidn’tknowwhathorriblethingswouldhappentous,hopingtofindthewayback.Suddenly,weheardthesoundofwaterrollingdownthe

river.Wewereoverthemoonanddecidedtofollowtheriver.Afterawhile,weheardthefamiliarsoundof

sheep

andthencaught

sight

ofthe

farmhouse.Thefamilywerewaitingforusinthedistance.Seeingthis,aradiantsmilelitupbothofourfaces.評點：光線的消退暗示了時間的流逝和黑夜的到來，推動了故事情節(jié)的發(fā)展，與下文的gettingdark銜接；bone-chilling,scary,horrible詞的運用以及比喻修辭的運用，渲染了陰森恐怖的氣氛，也烘托了主人公內(nèi)心的害怕、恐懼；同時，河流和羊的聲音也為故事的結局提供了線索和出路，給故事畫上了圓滿的句號。語言：準確、豐富語言風格要與原文的風格相一致通過細節(jié)描寫使續(xù)寫具有畫面感Howtoenlivenyourwritingandenvisionyoursituation?如何添加細節(jié)描寫（情緒表達）讀后續(xù)寫微技能指導他很高興。Hewasveryhappy/excited/ecstatic...Show,Don'tTellDiscussion一個人高興（興奮）會體現(xiàn)在哪些方面呢？從自身到周圍環(huán)境進行思考。他很高興。Hissmilebroadenedfromeartoear.(表情之面部)Heclappedhishandstogetherandjumpedupanddownwithjoy.（動作）Hegiggledandsquealedwithexcitement.（語言聲音）(1)看到眼前可愛的小兔子，我興奮極了。Seeingthelovelyrabbit,Ifelt______________.

眼睛因興奮而閃爍。Seeingthelovelyrabbit,myeyes___________________withexcitement.

激動得心砰砰跳Seeingthelovelyrabbit,myheartwas_______________withexcitement.激動得大喊

“Whatalovelyrabbit!”Ishoutedwitheyesglitteringwithterrificexcitement.表示興奮的心理excited/thrilledshone/twinkled/sparkled/gleamedthumping/pounding（2）當Tom緊緊擁抱Jane時，她開心極了。WhenTomheldhertightly,Janewas____________________.非常幸福;心滿意足WhenTomheldhertightly,itseemedasifJanewereon________oftheworld.眉開眼笑；笑容照亮天空WhenTomheldhertightly,herface________andherbrightsmile__________thesky.歡欣雀躍WhenTomheldhertightly,hereyes__________withjoyandsweetness.表示開心的心理happy/delighted/fullofjoytoplitup

beameddanced(3)當看到那只兇惡的狼逼近時，Mac感到很害怕。Atthesightofthefiercewolfapproaching,Macfeltvery________________....,Mac感到很害怕，嗓子發(fā)緊，膝蓋發(fā)軟。Atthesightofthefiercewolfapproaching,Macfeltsoscaredthathisthroatwas_______________andhiskneesfelt_____________....,Mac嚇呆了，不敢動彈。Atthesightofthefiercewolfapproaching,Mac_________withterror,tooscaredto___________aninch....,Mac被深深地恐懼感所控制，手心出汗Atthesightofthefiercewolf,Macwas_________byastrongsenseofhorrorandmypalmswere________________表示害怕的心理scared/frightenedtightenedweakfrozemoveseizedsweating(4)意識到不得不再過一夜，Jane悲傷不已。

Realizingshehadtostayaloneforanothernight,shefeltextremely_________.心痛，眼淚直流。Realizingshehadtostayaloneforanothernight,herheart_________,tears___________downhercheeks.悲傷到失去知覺，不能開口說話Realizingshehadtostayaloneforanothernight,she,numbwith________,hadtroublespeaking.被一股悲傷之感控制，忍不住哭泣Realizingshehadtostayaloneforanothernight,shefeltseizedbyaburstof_________andcouldn’thelpcrying______.表示悲傷的心理achedstreamingsadnessgriefbitterlysadThe___________(甜蜜的)fragranceofflowers,thefaint___________(嗡嗡聲)ofinsectsaswellasthegentletouchofthe__________(微風)broughtbackmemoriesofthebygonedayssharedwithTom,hottearsalmost_________(涌出)upinher__________(變紅)eyes.sweetbuzzingbreezewellingreddened情景交融表示悲傷的心理Thewindwas__________dreadfullyandtherainwas_________fromtheheaven,__________againstthebranchesoflinedtrees.Theworldwas______________withaseaofdarkness.howlingpouringwhippingburdened/loaded表示悲傷、害怕的心理Thewindwashowlingdreadfullyandtherainwaspouringfromtheheaven,whippingagainstthebranchesoflinedtress.Theworldwasburdenedwithaseaofdrakness.A：Asenseofhorrorcreptuponme.B：Afloodoffearwashedoverme.Iimmediatelyturnedaroundtothrowmyarmsarounddadtightly景情過渡(5)看到學生們拙劣的書寫，Mr.Yang感到非常生氣。

Whenseeingpupils’poorhandwriting,Mr.Yangfeltvery___________.充滿憤怒,緊握拳頭，身體僵硬了一會，說不出話。然后慢慢向前走去，教室里的溫度似乎都降低了許多，沒有人敢抬頭。突然，他沖出了教室，狠狠摔門。Boiling/Filledwith_____________,Mr.Yangclenchedhisfists,__________forseconds,unabletoutterasingleword.Thenhe__________hisfeetforward.Thetemperatureintheclassroomseemedtohavedropped,andnobodydaredtolookathim.Suddenly,he__________outoftheclassroom,___________thedoorfuriouslybehindhim.表示生氣的心理angrystormedrage/furystiffeningshuffledslammingAngeladraggedherlegsandmovedoutofthetestcenter,herheaddropped.Anairofsorrowanddepressioncouldbesensedtenyardsaway.Soon,hereyesbegantowater.Shewouldfailthemathexam,definitely!Disappointmentcameinwavesandatlength,tearsstreameddownherface.Theonlythingshewaseagertodowasrushbackhomeanddropherselfontotheshabbylittlecouchandweep,wildly!How？1.夯實課本知識，做好積累2.關注練習，注重積累3.閱讀課外小說，豐富積累4.學習他人作品，補充積累PracticeChooseoneofthetopic

towriteashortpassagetodescribewhatyouwouldsee,hearorthinkandhowyouwouldfeelifyouwereinsuchasituation.1.Itwaspitchdarkonenightandyouhappenedtobeinaforestalone.Whenyouwerecontrolledbypanicyousawdimlightinthedistance.2.Oneafternoon,youstayedhomealone.Therewasasuddenpowerfailurewhenarainstormcame.Youfeltsoscaredthatyoudidn’tknowwhattodo.Onepossibleversion1.Itwaspitchdarkonenightandyouhappenedtobeinaforestalone.Whenyouwerecontrolledbypanicyousawdimlightinthedistance.Itwaspitchdarkintheforest.Hearingtheweirdnoises,Ifel