讀后續(xù)寫個(gè)人成長(zhǎng)類-我的演講講義-2023屆高三英語寫作專項(xiàng)

例題Ihadalwayspridedmyselfonmysharptongueandbrilliantresponsewhetherinclassdebatesorcasualarguments.Thus,whenIwasselectedtorepresenttheschoolinthenationaldebateseries,Iwasnaturallyextremelyconfidentofmyself.Allthemembersinmyteamweregoodspeakers.Wehadanexperiencedteacherwhotraineduswell.ButIwasundoubtedlythemostoutstandingspeaker.IneachoftheroundsthatIdebatedin,allthejudgesselectedmeasthebestone.Thismeantthatmyconfidencewasthehighestbythetimewefoundourselveswithoneweektotrainbeforethefinals.IhadeveryreasontobelievethatIwouldbevotedthebestspeakerforthedebateseries.Ibegantobeself-importantaboutthewholebusinessandstartedbehavingthatwaywithmyteam-mates.IwouldlaughatEton’spoordebatingstyle.IwouldcomplainofVivian’sslowresponse.Isawmyselfasthenaturaldebaterwhowouldbedisappointedbytheirbadperformance.Asthefinalsdrewnear,Ibecamemoreandmoredissatisfiedwithmyteam.Ibeganmissingpractices.Myteacherwasworried.Myteammateswerepanicked.However,theyhadnochoicebuttorelyonmetowinthefinals.Eveniftheywouldlovetoremovemefromtheteamtheycouldnotbecausetherewasnoreplacementgoodenough.Thedayofthefinalsfinallycame.IwasveryexcitedthatIwasabletofinallyshowoffmydebatingskills.Everyonewasexpectingmyperformance.TheyknewthatIwaspraisedtobetheonemostlikelytowinthebestspeakerforthedebateseries.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1:ButtherealitywasnotsomethingthatIhadeverimagined.___________________________________________________Paragraph2:Suddenly,acomfortinghandfrombehindheldmine.___________________________________________________分析01審題詞數(shù)為150左右，要寫夠詞數(shù)。認(rèn)真閱讀續(xù)寫給出的兩段開頭：第一段：ButtherealitywasnotsomethingthatIhadeverimagined.（但是現(xiàn)實(shí)不是我想象中的那樣。）說明這段應(yīng)該寫表現(xiàn)不佳（通過心理描寫、動(dòng)作描寫、神態(tài)描寫等），繼而可以寫比賽結(jié)果（比如：輸了比賽，心情糟糕）。第二段：Suddenly,acomfortinghandfrombehindheldmine.（突然，我身后伸過來一只手安慰我。）說明這段應(yīng)該寫主人公認(rèn)識(shí)到錯(cuò)誤，也可寫老師或隊(duì)友對(duì)我的安慰和包容。02讀文涉及人：主人公“我”，老師“anexperiencedteacher”，judges，teammates

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Eton，Vivian物（debateseries）分析人物性格：sharp-tongue伶牙俐齒brilliantresponse反應(yīng)迅速thebestdebater最佳辯手self-pride/self-important驕傲beconfidentofmyself過度自信抓住時(shí)空線索，勾畫時(shí)間詞（平時(shí)表現(xiàn)——比賽前一周——比賽臨近，缺席練習(xí)——比賽來臨）和空間詞（平時(shí)練習(xí)——決賽場(chǎng)地）03謀段大致思路按照主人公表現(xiàn)不好、心情失落——隊(duì)友、老師鼓勵(lì)——自我反思，意識(shí)到錯(cuò)誤。04成文按照思路行文，并注意時(shí)態(tài)（過去時(shí)態(tài)）、人稱（人稱要保持一致，主要人稱為“我”）等錯(cuò)誤。學(xué)生存在的問題01闡述Eton、Vivian通過自己努力超過了主人公“我”，從而強(qiáng)調(diào)“Diligencemakesupforinability（勤能補(bǔ)拙）”的主題。寫自己老師很優(yōu)秀（當(dāng)文章中出現(xiàn)了很多人的時(shí)候，要根據(jù)文章以及所給段落開頭句，抓住主要人物，不一定要覆蓋所有人物，本文的主人公就是“我”，因而要圍繞“我”去寫，不能喧賓奪主）。第二段強(qiáng)調(diào)老師、隊(duì)友等安慰主人公“我”，“我”便文思泉涌、口若懸河，發(fā)揮超常。評(píng)析：這樣寫違背文章邏輯和寫作意圖，本文想闡述的就是驕傲使人后退，強(qiáng)調(diào)主人公經(jīng)過這一事件，自己的思想得到升華，而非強(qiáng)調(diào)老師和隊(duì)友的作用。如果寫主人公贏得比賽，那要表達(dá)的意思變成了“即使沒有精心準(zhǔn)備，也可以贏得比賽”，這偏離了正確的價(jià)值觀，也不切合題意。很多學(xué)生包括網(wǎng)上給出的范文都沒有縷順?biāo)悸?。大家可以比?duì)一下思路，再體會(huì)一下正確的情感變化：努力——緊張——老師安慰——?jiǎng)倮?；不努力——緊張——失敗——老師安慰）。02運(yùn)用大量篇幅來描述主人公今后如何努力，在以后的比賽中如何獲得各種勝利。評(píng)析：這違背了讀后續(xù)寫七不原則之一——不增加旁支情節(jié)。關(guān)于以后的事情可以提也可以不提，如果提的話，只能一帶而過，不能喧賓奪主。讀后續(xù)寫七不原則：不增加人物；不增加旁支情節(jié)；不用過多對(duì)話；不給負(fù)能量結(jié)局；不文末設(shè)懸念；不偏離主題；不違背邏輯常理。03不了解辯論的流程。評(píng)析：辯論分為立論、攻辯、自由辯論、總結(jié)陳詞，很多同學(xué)認(rèn)為這是乒乓球等體育項(xiàng)目，兩隊(duì)一場(chǎng)比賽還存在有幾局幾勝之說。其實(shí)只有一場(chǎng)比賽，而且一辯二辯三辯四辯的分工不同，每場(chǎng)辯論賽都會(huì)在雙方產(chǎn)生最佳辯手。由于學(xué)生很少有這方面經(jīng)驗(yàn)，因此偏題較多。水作文ButtherealitywasnotsomethingthatIhadeverimagined.NosoonerhadthedebatebegundidIfindmyselffailingtoproduceproperargumentstodefendmypoint.NorcouldIcooperatecloselywithmyteammates,whohadmadegoodpreparationsandweredoingwell.ThesharptongueandbrilliantresponseIhadtakengreatprideinweregone.Witheveryonestaringatme,Ibecamemoreandmorenervous,whichmadethingsevenworse.Forseveralminutes,Ijuststoodthereclumsilytrippingoverwords.HowIwishedIcouldescapefromthedilemma!Needlesstosay,ourteamwasbeaten.Iwalkeddownthestagewithmyheaddropped.Suddenly,acomfortinghandfrombehindheldmine.Iturnedaroundandtherewasmyteachersmilingatme.Iblushedwithembarrassmentandstammered:"I---I’msorry",daringnottolookatherintheeye."Itdoesn'tmatter,butIhopeyouhavelearnedalessomfromit.",saidtheteacher."Ishouldhavepracticedmorewithmyteammates"Imurmuredoutmyregret.ItwasatthatmomentthatItrulyunderstoodthemeaningofthesaying"Pridegoesbeforeafall",whichisthelessonIhavekeptinmindtillthisday.范文ButtherealitywasnotsomethingthatIhadeverimagined.Atfirst,myteammatesperformedwell,butwhenIstatedpoints,mymindwentblank.Myillogicallecturemadetheaudienceandjudgesconfusedanddisappointed.Lackingpractices,IwasgrilledonceandonceagainbyouropponentswhoaskedaseriesofquestionsthatIdidn’tmakepreparationsfor.Ihadtostruggleonwithmyspeech,feelingalumpinmythroat.Myhandsweretremblingandmysweattracedapathdownmypaleface.Haditnotbeenforme,wewouldn’tlosethedebate.Suddenly,acomfortinghandfrombehindheldmine.Iturnedaroundandtherewasmyteachersmilingatme.Ithrewmyselfintoherarms,notdaringtolookatherintheeye.Shesaidinasoftvoice,“Thefailureisonlyasteppingstonetofinalsuccess”.Myteammateshelpedmewipethetearsoffmycheeks.ItwasatthatmomentthatItrulyunderstandtheimportanceofteamworkandmodestywhichIhavekeptinmindtilltoday.【相似文章拓展】閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Forthepasttwoyears,Ihaveheldthestorytellingchampionship.Iwastheshiningstarofmyschool.Whenitcametochoosingtherightcandidatetoparticipateinsuchcompetitions,Iwasalwaysthefirstchoice.Naturally,Iwasonceagainselectedtorepresentmyschoolintheapproachingcontestthisyear.UponhearingthefactthatIwaschosenagain，myclassmatesandfriendsacknowledgedthatlwouldundoubtedlyberegardedasthechampionagain.Consequently,IbecamesoproudthatIignoredtheimportanceofpracticingforthecontest.Aweekbeforethecontest,myteacherMs.Saraasked,"Selena,wouldyouliketostandinfrontoftheclasstopresentyourworkforthecontest?"Shehadtaughtmeinthepasttwocompetitionsandknewhowimportantpracticewas."justimagineyouareonthestageinthepresenceoftheaudience,"sheadded."I'msorry,Ms.Sara,"Ireplied."Ihaveabitofasorethroat."Thiswasusuallythelielwouldtellwhenevermyteacherrequestedmetopracticeinfrontoftheclass.lalwaysfoundexcusestoavoiddoingitbecauseIbelievedthatIwasthebestandthereforethepracticewasunnecessary.Ononeoccasion,IeventoldMs.SaranottoworrytoomuchasIwaswellpreparedforthecontest.Infact,Idideverythingbutpracticemylines.lonlymanagedtoglancebrieflythroughthestorythedaybeforethecontest.Asthebeststorytelleramongthestudentsofthelocalsecondaryschoolswastoovaintopracticeandexpectedeverythingtobefine.Thecontestwasbeingheldinthelocalcommunityhall.Onthedayofthecontest,thehallwaspacked.Myschoolteachersandprincipalweretherealongwithmanyofmyclassmatesandschoolmates.Iwastheeighthcontestantoutoftwentyintotal.Thosewhospokebeforemedidextremelywell.Onseeingtheirfascinatingandoutstandingperformance.Ibegantoloseconfidenceinmyself.MypalmssweatedheavilyandIstartedtofeelnervous.Soon,itwasmyturntotalk.注意:續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。Withbutterfliesinmystomach,Ibreatheddeeply.Theteacher'swordschangedmeandgavemetheconfidencetostepontothestageagain.【參考范文】Withbutterfliesinmystomach,Ibreatheddeeply.Steppingontothestageandfacingthecrowd,Ifoundmyselfsufferingfromstagefright.Allofasudden，Ifoundmymindwentblank.Icouldn'texpressmyselfwholly.Mylegsbegantremblingandmyvoicestut