2023高考英語專題復(fù)習(xí)與訓(xùn)練-訓(xùn)練02 讀后續(xù)寫示例與寫作訓(xùn)練2

讀后續(xù)寫示例與寫作訓(xùn)練2【寫作示例】【原文呈現(xiàn)】閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。Jennywasabright-eyed,prettyfive-year-oldgirl.

Onedaywhensheandhermotherwerecheckingoutatthegrocerystore(雜貨店),Jennysawaplastic

necklacewhichwaspricedat$2.50.Howshewantedthatnecklace,andwhensheaskedhermotherifshewouldbuyitforher,hermothersaid,"Well,itisaprettynecklace,butitcostsanawfullotofmoney.I'lltellyouwhat.I'llbuyyouthenecklace,andwhenwegethomewecanmakeupalistofchoresthatyoucandotopayforthenecklace.Anddon'tforgetthatforyourbirthdayGrandmajustmightgiveyouawholedollarbill,too.Okay?"Jennyagreedhappily,andhermotherboughtthepearlnecklaceforher.

Jennyworkedonherchoresveryhardeveryday,andsureenough,hergrandmagaveherabrand-newdollarbillforherbirthday.SoonJennyhadpaidoffthe

.HowJennylovedthosepearls!Sheworethemeverywheretokindergarten,bedandevenwhenshewentoutwithhermothertorun

.

Theonlytimeshedidn'twearthemwasintheshower,becausehermotherhadtoldherthattheywouldturnherneckgreen!

Jennyhadaverylovingdaddy.WhenJennywenttobed,hewouldgetupfromhisfavoritechaireverynightandreadJennyherfavoritestory.

Onenightwhenhefinishedthestory,heaskedJenny,"Hey,sweetie,doyouloveme?"

"Ohyes,Daddy,youknowIloveyou,"thelittlegirlsaidwithawarmsmile.

"Well,then,givemeyourpearls."

"Oh!Daddy,notmypearls!"Jennyrefused."Butyoucanhave

,myfavoritedoll.Rememberher?Yougavehertomelastyearformybirthday.Andyoucanhaveherteaparty

,too.Okay?"

"Ohno,darling,that'sokay."Herfatherbrushedhercheekwithakiss."Goodnight,littleone."注意：1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.應(yīng)使用5個(gè)以上短文標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4.續(xù)寫完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞。Paragraph1:Aweeklater,Jenny’sfatheronceagainaskedJennythesamequestionafterherstory..._______________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Anotherweeklater,whenherfathercameintoreadherastoryasusual..._______________________________________________________________________________【思維路徑】[核心內(nèi)容]文本主要內(nèi)容為：Jenny和她媽媽經(jīng)過一家雜貨店的時(shí)候看見一串塑料珍珠項(xiàng)鏈，她非常喜歡，于是就要求媽媽買給她并且答應(yīng)了幫媽媽做家務(wù)的方式來賺取項(xiàng)鏈錢的要求。Jenny很快就賺到了足夠的錢。Jenny的爸爸非常愛她，有一天晚上，爸爸問她愿不愿意將項(xiàng)鏈送給他，但是Jenny拒絕了。[寫作思路](1)明確故事人物關(guān)系(characters)。故事中主要人物為小女孩Jenny，Jenny的媽媽(mother)，Jenny的外婆(Grandma)和Jenny的爸爸(father,daddy)。(2)理清故事主要事件(events)。Jenny和媽媽路過一家雜貨店；Jenny看重一條塑料珍珠項(xiàng)鏈；Jenny答應(yīng)媽媽買項(xiàng)鏈而提出的要求；Jenny每天做家務(wù)很快賺到了足夠的錢；Jenny爸爸向她要這串項(xiàng)鏈，但是Jenny拒絕了。(3)根據(jù)已知人物、事件及續(xù)寫段落首句預(yù)測故事發(fā)展(development)。故事總體的發(fā)展應(yīng)該是Jenny通過再三考慮幾番抉擇，最后還是把珍珠項(xiàng)鏈給了爸爸，沒想到正因?yàn)槿绱藚s意外收獲了一份更加珍貴的禮物。續(xù)寫第一段：一周后，Jenny的爸爸再次問了Jenny相同的問題，可能是Jenny同意了將心愛的珍珠項(xiàng)鏈送給爸爸，也可能是Jenny還是不愿意將項(xiàng)鏈送給爸爸。但是根據(jù)續(xù)寫第二段開頭的提示，可能Jenny拒絕了爸爸這種可能性更符合邏輯一點(diǎn)。續(xù)寫第二段：有續(xù)寫第一段的內(nèi)容作為鋪墊，此段的發(fā)展可能是Jenny仍然不同意將項(xiàng)鏈給爸爸，也可能是她將項(xiàng)鏈送給了爸爸，若是這種可能，則還可以在此基礎(chǔ)上描寫一些爸爸的反應(yīng)，如禮尚往來，給了Jenny其他的禮物作為回報(bào)等。(4)結(jié)合下劃線詞羅列寫作要點(diǎn)(points)。結(jié)合下劃線詞和文本內(nèi)容，展開盡可能豐富的想象，羅列出盡可能多的故事發(fā)展情節(jié)。例如，第一段可以通過問以下問題來獲取寫作要點(diǎn)“WhatdidJennyresponsetofather’squestion?Didshegivethepearlstofatherorjustrefuseagain?WhatdidthefatherdoafterJenny’sanswer?等”第二段可以問以下問題來獲取寫作要點(diǎn)：“Whatdidthefatherdothistime?Didhestillaskthesamequestion?DidJennygivethepearlstoherfatheratlast?Ifso,whatdidherfatherdoandhowdidhefeel?等”。[參考范文]Aweeklater,Jenny’sfatheronceagainaskedJennythesamequestionafterherstory,"Doyouloveme?"Jennygaveadefiniteanswertothisquestionwithouthesitation.Butwhentheconversationcametowhethershecouldgiveherpearlstoherfather,sherefusedasecondtime.

Anotherweeklater,whenherfathercameintoreadherastoryasusual,Jennywassittingonherbedandherlipwastrembling."Here,Daddy,"shesaid,andheldoutherhand.Insideofherhandwasherbelovedplasticpearlnecklace.Sheletitslipintoherfather'shand.Atthistime,herfatherpulledoutofhispocketablue

box,andsomereal,genuine,beautifulpearlswerejustinside.Hehadhadthemallalong.HewaswaitingforJennytogiveupthecheapstuffsohecouldgivehertherealthing.Sometimes,lifeisjustlikethis:giveuponethingandgetanotherchancetoreceiveabetterthing.(除給定詞外，164words)[范文解析]范文圍繞文章的內(nèi)容進(jìn)行了合情合理的拓展。續(xù)寫兩個(gè)段落開頭給出句子中寫了兩次爸爸晚上給Jenny講故事，提示可能性最大的情景發(fā)展應(yīng)該是有兩次類似的針對(duì)愿不愿意給珍珠項(xiàng)鏈的交談。因此，第一段寫了爸爸再次問Jenny愿不愿意給項(xiàng)鏈，然而這次Jenny仍然不愿意給。第二段，如果再次寫Jenny不愿意給的話文章主題就很難得到升華，因此這段中，我們將主動(dòng)權(quán)轉(zhuǎn)交到Jenny身上，Jenny主動(dòng)將項(xiàng)鏈給了爸爸，并且父親相應(yīng)的給了她一條真的珍珠項(xiàng)鏈。最后一句話是根據(jù)這個(gè)小故事而得出的關(guān)于人生的一個(gè)小道理，從而在文章結(jié)尾處點(diǎn)出文章主題。[提煉歸納]1.合理拓展情節(jié)讀后續(xù)寫首先要讀通給定文本，把握故事的人物和事件。在此基礎(chǔ)上根據(jù)每段續(xù)寫開頭的提示對(duì)故事的發(fā)展作出合情合理又合乎邏輯的預(yù)測。為了將預(yù)測過程顯性化，可以通過設(shè)問的方式，將預(yù)測重點(diǎn)以問題的方式顯示出來，以利后續(xù)寫作時(shí)的信息整理和語言組織。在開始寫范文前，我們首先用7個(gè)問題來構(gòu)思整個(gè)文章的發(fā)展。通過對(duì)這7個(gè)問題的可能回答的排列組合，挑選出最符合邏輯的情節(jié)發(fā)展。同時(shí)，為了提升整個(gè)范文的情感目標(biāo)，可以使結(jié)局適當(dāng)出人意料及令人深思一點(diǎn)。本范文在第二段時(shí)轉(zhuǎn)換了與原文相反的基調(diào)，突出了小女孩在這件事情中的主動(dòng)性與轉(zhuǎn)變，使得范文更有層次感。2.緊密聯(lián)系原文內(nèi)容續(xù)寫是在原文內(nèi)容的基礎(chǔ)上進(jìn)一步對(duì)接下來發(fā)展情節(jié)的預(yù)測和描寫。因此，續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容必須與原文緊密相關(guān)?？梢栽谇楣?jié)上承接原文，也可以用特定的細(xì)節(jié)，如人物，地點(diǎn)，事件等來呼應(yīng)原文。如在本范文中用asecondtime來呼應(yīng)原文中Jenny第一次拒絕爸爸的要求。3.有效運(yùn)用連接手段在具體的寫作過程中我們要對(duì)羅列的要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行篩選和整合，還要考慮寫作要點(diǎn)之間連接手段(connectives)的有效運(yùn)用，例如范文中我們用了aweeklater和anotherweeklater來說明事件的時(shí)間順序，用but來表示轉(zhuǎn)折，用so來表因果關(guān)系。這些連接詞的使用可以使文本更加緊湊連貫?！緦懽餮菥殹?.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。Sallyhadanxietydisordertroublethatmadeherfailtospeakinsocialsituations.I’manurseanduseBellatohelpchildreninmycommunity,tobringthemcomfortandconfidencethewayonlyadogcan.IthoughtbacktothedaywhenI’dfirstbroughtBellatotheschool.ThatmorninginJanuary,herteacherledustoaroom.“Sallyhasn’tspokenoutsideherhomeintwoyears,”shetoldme.“Herparentshavetakenhertodoctors,butnothinghasworked.”Alittlegirlstoodshylyjustinsidethedoorway.Hereyesbrightenedwhenshenoticedmydog.“ThisisBella.”Isaid.“Shedoestricks.Wouldyouliketosee?”Sallynodded.Imotionedwithmyhand.Bellalaydownandthenrolledover.Sally’seyeslitup.IshowedSallythehandsignalsforvariouscommands.ShewasanaturalwithBella,maybebecauseshecouldn’trelyonthespokenwordherself.Bellasensedthatandresponded.SoonSallywasabletoputBellathroughherpacesallonherown.Icouldseeherstandingtaller,moresureofherselfeachtimewemet.OnemorninginMarchwhenshewasworkingwithBella,Iheardatinyvoice,barelyawhisper,“Gooddog."Sallydidn'ttakehereyesoffBella,butIwantedtojumpforjoy.Sallyspokealittlemoreeachweek,onlytoBellaatfirst,butthentome.Later,shestartedgivingvoicecommandswithherhandsignalsandherconfidencerose.Now,five-year-oldSallystoodnervouslyinfrontofherkindergartenclass,withBella,mytraineddog,sittingcalmlybyherside.AlltheeyesofherclassmateswerefocusedonSally.Theywerewaitingforhertospeak.ItwasJune—onlyoneweekofschoolleft—buttheyhadneverheardhervoice.Notonce.Paragraph1:Butnotawordcameout.Sallyhadbeensoexcitedaboutputtingonadogshowforherclass.Paragraph2:Thenextweek,shetoldmeshewantedtotryagain,lookingupatmewithdetermination.2.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。Adawningsunshapedthemassiveformofthetrain.Loadedwithfuel,water,andsandforpower,theleadtrainweighedinat410,000pounds.ConductorRobert,49,ranhiseyealongthe96carsbehindhim.Itwas7a.m.Roberthadalreadycheckedthelistofdangerousmaterialsaboardthetrain.''We'vegotsomegaswithus,''he'dreportedtohisengineer,Lindley,inthecab(駕駛室).Thepresenceofgaswouldmeantakingextracarewhenbrakingthe6,200-tontrain.Withexplosivegasonboard,anaccidentwouldbemoredangerous.Afterafinalexternalinspection,Robertjumpedaboard.Slowlythetrainpulledoutofthestation.RobertandLindleyhad50yearsofrailroadingexperiencebetweenthem.TheyapproachedLafayetteatabout1:45p.m.andslowedthetraintothespeedlimit.Lindleyturnedonhisflashinglightsandwarningbell.Thetwohadbeenthroughthecityhundredsoftimes,buttheygrewextracautiousroundingthefirstcurve(彎道).Ahead,overjustthreemilesoftrack,laynofewerthan24streetcrossings.Asthetraincameoutofthecurve,Lindleynoticedasmalldotontherightrailabout150yardsahead.Hethoughtitmightbeadog.Now,asthetrainapproachedwithin100yardsoftheobjectontherail,Robertlookedattentively.Thenshockcoursedthroughhim.''MyGod!''heyelledasatinyfaceturnedtowardhim.''It'sababy!''Lindleyhadaninstantdecisiontomake,applyingfullemergencybrakeswithhalfthetrainstillwrappedaroundacurve.Hehadtoriskanemergencystop.Robertopenedtheleftdooroftheenginecabquicklyandsteppedoutontoanarrowwalkway.Hehurriedtothefrontoftheengineandcrossedtotherightside.Hethensteppeddowntothelowerportionofthewalkwayjusttothebackofthetrain's''cowcatcher''.Paragraph1:Stretchingasfarashecould,Robertputhisrightlegoutinfrontofhim.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Tellinghimselfhestillhadajobtodo,Robertwentbacktocheckonthecars.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。MissusSommersonedayfoundherselftheunexpectedowneroffifteendollars.Itseemedtoheraverylargeamountofmoney.Foradayortwoshewalkedaroundinadreamystateasshethoughtaboutherchoices.HerdaughterJaniewaswearingwornshoesandneedednewones.Shewouldbuyclothfornewshirtsfortheboys.HerdaughterMagshouldhaveanotherdress.Andstilltherewouldbeenoughleftfornewstockingsforherchildren.Theideaabouthowtospendthedollarsmadeherrestlesswithexcitement.Onthedaysheplannedtogoshoppingwiththemoney,sheatealightmeal-no!Betweengettingthechildrenfedandthehousecleaned,andpreparingherselftogoshopping,sheforgottoeatatall!Whenshearrivedatthelargedepartmentstore,shespottedapileofsilkstockingsattheentrance.Asignnearbyannouncedthattheyhadbeenreducedinpriceayounggirlbehindthecounteraskedherifshewishedtoexaminethesilkylegcoverings.Shesmiledasifshehadbeenaskedtoinspectdiamondjewelry,andstartedtofeelthesoft,expensiveitems.MissusSommerspickedupablackpairandlookedatthemclosely.Tworedmarkssuddenlyshowedonherpaleface.Shelookedupattheshopgirlandsaidproudly,“Well,Iwillbuythispair.”MissusSommerschangedhercottonstockingsforthenewsilkonesintheladies’restarea.Shehadletherselfbecontrolledbysomemachine-likeforcethatdirectedheractionsandfreedherofresponsibility.Howgoodwasthetouchofthesilkonherskin!Thensheputhershoesbackonandputheroldstockingsintoherbag.Next,shewenttotheshoedepartment,whereshetriedonapairofnewboots.Herfootandanklelookedlovely.Shecouldnotbelievethattheywereapartofherself.注意：1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.至少使用5個(gè)短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4.續(xù)寫完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。Paragraph1：Afterbuyingapairofnewboots,shewalkedintotheclothingdepartment.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2：Shewasabouttoleavethestorewhenakidrunningaroundremindedherofsomething.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4.閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。Afarmergrewsomevegetablesinhisgarden.Onedayhiswifewasillandhehadnomoney.Hehadtosellsomecabbagesandcarrotsinthemarket.Thenextmorninghetooktwobasketsofvegetablestotown.Butitwassnowinghardthatafternoonandtherewerefewpeopleinthestreet.Whenhisvegetablesweresoldout,itwasdark.Heboughtsomemedicineandhurriedtohisvillage.Onhiswayhomehesawapersonlyingonthesnow.Heplacedhisbasketsonthegroundandwasgoingtohelpthepersontogetup.Atthattimehefounditwasadeadmanandtherewasmuchbloodonhisbody.Hewassoafraidthatheranawayquickly,withouttakingthebasketswithhim.Thenextafternoonthefarmerwassenttothepolicestation.Havingshownthebaskets,anofficerasked,“Aretheseyours?”“Yes,sir,”thefarmeransweredtimidly.“Haveyoukilledtheman?”“No,no,sir,”thefarmersaidinahurry."Whendidyouseethedeadman?"“Aboutsevenlastevening.”"Didyouseewhokilledtheman?""No,sir."Theofficerbroughtoutaknifeandasked,"Haveyouseenitbefore?”"No,sir."Theofficerbecameangryandtoldthepolicemantobeathimupandsenthimintoprison,Hewantedtotrapthefarmerintotheconfession(供認(rèn)),butthefarmerdidn'tadmithewasthemurderer.注意：1.所續(xù)寫的短文詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.應(yīng)使用5個(gè)以上短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已經(jīng)為你寫好；4.續(xù)寫完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。.Paragraph1:Theofficerwassoangrythatheaskedthepolicemantobeathimupagain.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Thefarmerwaslucky.Afewdayslater,______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文，續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。LastSundayafternoon,SandraandIwereeagertomeetupwithamanonDetroit’seastsidetohelphimgetreadyforajobinterviewthisweek.Butontheway,wespottedadoglyingneartheroadnexttohisowner.Wethoughthe’dbeenhitbyacar.Myfriend,SandraAbrahamianandI,hadassistedanimalrescuegroupsbeforeandwethoughttheremightbesomethingwecoulddo,sowequicklypulledovertohelp.Hisowner,awomantoldusthedog’snameisBosco,andshewaswalkinghimoveramileintheheattohernewhome.ShesaidBoscowasanoutsidedogandnoonewouldgivehimaridetohernewplace.That’swhensheandafrienddecidedtowalktheentireway.Hewasgoingfromalifeonachaininonebackyardtoanother.ShesaidBoscowashavingtroublebreathingalongtheway,buttheythoughthecouldmakeit.Butjustablockawayfromtheirdestination,Boscofelldown.Wecouldtellhewassufferingfromheatstroke(中暑).Shetoldushehadthrownupandcouldnolongerstand.Boscowasoutofbreathquickly,hisdrool(口水)wasalsothick.Bosco’sownersaidshewantedtogivehimawaybecauseshedidn’thavetimeforhim.Shesaidhewouldneverbeallowedintohernew“home”becauseherchildrenhaveallergies(過敏癥)andsheworriedhewoulddirtythecarpet.ImadeacalltoKristinaRinaldiofDetroitDogRescuetoaskiftheycouldhelpBoscobecauseitwasclearthathewasgoingtodiewithoutemergencycare.Toourhappiness,Rinaldisaidtheycouldhelp.AtonceshetoldthepeopleatOaklandVeterinaryReferralServicesthatadogwhichneededcriticalcarewasbeingrushedinandtheymustbereadytotrytheirbesttosavehim.Paragraph1:SandradrovewhileIstayedinthebackseattryingtocomfortBosco.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:SoBoscoisnowbeingcalledRoscoe,whosecriticalcareandrecoverywereestimatedtobeseveralthousanddollars.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案與解析1.【參考范文】Paragraph1:Butnotawordcameout.Sallyhadbeensoexcitedaboutputtingonadogshowforherclass.Shehadbeenquitefamiliarwiththehandsignalsandhadpracticedforweeks.Nowhereyesfoundmine.Inoddedencouragingly.Shetookadeepbreathandopenedhermouth.Hermouththenherwholebodyseemedtocloseinonitselfindefeat.Sallystoodofftotheside,headdown.Ifeltawful.Sallyreturnedtoherseat,notlookingatanyone,notevenBella.Paragraph2:Thenextweek,shetoldmeshewantedtotryagain,lookingupatmewithdetermination.IaskedwhethershewassureandsuggesteditwouldbeOkifshewaitedtillnextyear.Sherefusedandinsistedgivingherpresentationthatday.ThenweheadedtoSally’sclassroom.Thekidsweresittinginacircleonthefloorlisteningtotheteacher.Wewalkedtothefrontoftheroom.IshookSally’shandsandsteppedback.Forafewseconds,shestoodsilently,staringatherclassmates.Finallyshewhispered,“ThisisBella.”Then,alittlelouderwithmoreconfidence.“Bella.”【解析】通過閱讀所給文章可知，文章主要講了薩莉患有焦慮癥，這使她在社交場合不能說話。作者是一名護(hù)士，用貝拉來幫助社區(qū)里的孩子們，給他們帶來安慰和信心，只有狗才能做到這一點(diǎn)。在小狗貝拉的幫助下，薩莉逐漸可以在社交場合說話了。一天，在幼兒園里，大家都在等待著薩莉說話。續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：但是，薩莉一個(gè)字也沒有說出來，所以后文應(yīng)該是講述薩莉一言不發(fā)的尷尬場景。第二段開頭是：第二個(gè)星期，她抬頭堅(jiān)定地看著我，告訴我她想再試一次。本段應(yīng)該寫薩莉再次嘗試，成功地把自己的好朋友小狗貝拉介紹給了自己的同學(xué)們。最后還要注意所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右?！痉段狞c(diǎn)評(píng)】本文描寫詳略得當(dāng)，使用了高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句子。如：Sallyreturnedtoherseat,notlookingatanyone,notevenBella.現(xiàn)在分詞作伴隨狀語；IaskedwhethershewassureandsuggesteditwouldbeOkifshewaitedtillnextyear.賓語從句等高級(jí)句式。2.【參考范文】Paragraph1:Stretchingasfarashecould,Robertputhisrightlegoutinfrontofhim.Swinginghislegout,hesweptherasidewithhisfoot.Robertswiftlyleaptfromthemovingtrainandranbacktothechild.Shelaycryingbythetracks,bloodstreamingfromawoundbeneathherhair.AgreatreliefsweepingoverRobert,Robertliftedherfromthedirt.ItwasonlythenthatRobertnoticedthetrainhadstoppedandtherewereflashingredlightsofemergencyvehiclesalongsidethetracks.Withthebabyinhisarms,Robertbegantowalkandwasmetbythepolice.Paragraph2:Tellinghimselfhestillhadajobtodo,Robertwentbacktocheckonthecars.AsRobertaboardrestedinthetrain,hispent-upemotionsrushedtothesurface.Ithadallunfoldedsofast,andtherealityofwhathehaddonewasonlynowhittinghim.Withinminutes,LindleywasstandingbesideRobert,takingthecontrolsagain.Theylookedateachother,theirexpressionsofreliefandgratitudemorepersuasivethanwords.Robert’soverallswerestillspottedwithblood.ThetrainpulledslowlyoutofLafayette.【解析】這是一篇讀后續(xù)寫。本篇講述了一個(gè)故事。Robert和Lindley是經(jīng)驗(yàn)豐富且配合默契的火車駕駛員。一次他們駕駛的火車在全速前進(jìn)時(shí)，Lindley注意到遠(yuǎn)處的軌道上有個(gè)黑點(diǎn)，他意為是一條狗，后來證實(shí)這個(gè)黑點(diǎn)是一個(gè)嬰兒。他們要在保證火車安全的情況下，減速救下這個(gè)嬰兒。根據(jù)第一段的開頭可知，Robert盡可能把自己的腿伸長，然后右腿放在前面。故可以接著寫：Robert成功救出小孩，可能自己受了皮外傷，然后把孩子交給警察、孩子的家人或鐵路管理人員等，情節(jié)合理就可以接受。根據(jù)第二段的開頭可知，Robert雖然內(nèi)心緊張，但他告訴自己還有工作要做。故可以接著寫：Robert上車平靜后，可以描寫他的身體感覺，內(nèi)心活動(dòng)，或者描述在場人員對(duì)他的贊揚(yáng)，兩人的對(duì)話、動(dòng)作或眼神交流等，體現(xiàn)出他們工作之間的默契。在緊急停車之后，他們繼續(xù)前行。【范文點(diǎn)評(píng)】范文內(nèi)容完整，要點(diǎn)全面，語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當(dāng)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系。作者在范文中使用了一些高分句型，例如：ItwasonlythenthatRobertnoticedthetrainhadstoppedandtherewereflashingredlightsofemergencyvehiclesalongsidethetracks.使用了強(qiáng)調(diào)itwas…that…；LindleywasstandingbesideRobert,takingthecontrolsagain.使用了現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語。3.【參考范文】Paragraph1:Afterbuyingapairofnewboots,shewalkedintotheclothingdepartment.Comingtoadressingmirror,lookingatherselfinthemirror,“Won’tIlookmorebeautifulifmyshoematchesaperfectdressonmybody?”thoughtMissusSommers.Shewavingtothesalesgirlofthedepartmentandaskedherwhethershecouldtryonthefashionabledressstyles.Herrequestwasapproved,MissusSommerskepttryingon.Onedressafteranothertriedon,sheputthemintohershoppingcartfondly.Paragraph2:Shewasabouttoleavethestorewhenakidrunningaroundremindedherofsomething.“Oh,MyGod!Iforgotallaboutmykids!”yelledMissusSommers,startingtoblameherself.“Excuseme,salesgirl,wouldyoubesokindastoletmeputbackallIhadchosen,forIhadintendedtobuymydaughterJanieanewpairofshoes,boy’snewshirtsandallofthemnewstockings?Imusthavelostmyhead!”Asenseofresponsibilityofcaringaboutherkidsdrovehertothinkoftherightideawherethemoneyshouldgo.【解析】文章主要講的是Sommers太太意外得到了15美元，非常高興，想著給女兒和兒子們買鞋子和襯衫，結(jié)果在百貨公司試穿衣服時(shí)逐漸忘了自己要給孩子們買東西，最后讓售貨小姐退還了購物車?yán)锼械囊路墓适?。在給的第一段開頭中，“Afterbuyingapairofnewboots,shewalkedintotheclothingdepartment.”“theclothingdepartment”是關(guān)鍵詞，表示“服裝部”，說明Sommers后來去了服裝部，第一段應(yīng)當(dāng)圍繞她在服裝部發(fā)生的事情展開；在給的第二段開頭中“Shewasabouttoleavethestorewhenakidrunningaroundremindedherofsomething.”此句中的kid為關(guān)鍵詞，因?yàn)楹笪亩紘@這個(gè)詞在說?！靖叻志湫鸵弧緼fterherrequestwasapproved,MissusSommerskepttryingon.在她的請(qǐng)求被批準(zhǔn)后，Sommers太太繼續(xù)嘗試。運(yùn)用時(shí)間狀語從句?！靖叻志湫投緼lthoughshereallylikedtheseclothes,asenseofresponsibilityofcaringaboutherkidsdrovehertothinkoftherightideawherethemoneyshouldgo.雖然她真的很喜歡這些衣服，但是一種照顧孩子的責(zé)任感驅(qū)使她去想錢應(yīng)該花在哪里。運(yùn)用讓步狀語從句。4.【參考范文】Paragraph1:Theofficerwassoangrythatheaskedthepolicemantobeathimupagain.Thefarmerwasveryafraid,andhethoughthewouldbesentencedtodeathbykillingpeople,althoughhewasinnocent.Hemusttellpeoplethetruth,butnoonecouldhearhisvoice.Hehopedthatsomeonecouldcomeandsavehim.Paragraph2:Thefarmerwaslucky.Afewdayslater,ayoungmancametothepolicestationwithalotofjournalists,sayingthathesawthemurderer.Itwasthepoliceofficerwhokilledthemanonthesnow!Hesawthepoliceofficerkillingthemanwithaknifelateintheevening.Hewassofrightenedandranaway.Buttheyoungmanthoughtthefarmerwasinnocent.Sohetookthegreatcouragetoexposetherealcriminal.Aftertheinvestigation,theyoungmanwasright.Thepoliceofficerwassentintoprisonandthepolicemanwhobeatupthefarmerwasfired,andthebraveyoungmanwasregardedastheherobythevillagers.【解析】本篇書面表達(dá)是讀后續(xù)寫。通過閱讀所給文章可知，農(nóng)夫在超市買完菜回家的路上看到了倒在地方的人，他本想將他扶起，但發(fā)現(xiàn)他死了之后很害怕就跑了，并將自己的籃子忘在了那里。第二天警察找他問話，他不承認(rèn)自己是兇手。續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：警官非常生氣，他讓警察再打他