雅思作作文評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)

經(jīng)典word整理文檔，僅參考，雙擊此處可刪除頁(yè)眉頁(yè)腳。本資料屬于網(wǎng)絡(luò)整理，如有侵權(quán)，請(qǐng)聯(lián)系刪除，謝謝！雅思作文的評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)包括四個(gè)方面：TaskResponseCoherenceandCohesionLexicalResourceGrammaticalRangeandAccuracy雅思的4Gates就是其評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，分別為內(nèi)容，邏輯結(jié)構(gòu)，語(yǔ)法的準(zhǔn)確使用篇5.5分的雅思范文是如何在修改之前蛻變成為高分作品。Cambridge8Test2Nowadaysthewaymanypeopleinteractwitheachotherhaschangedbecauseoftechnology.Inwhatwayshastechnologyaffectedthetypesofrelationshipspeoplemake?Hasthisbecomeapositiveornegativedevelopment?原文：Nowadaysthewaypeopleinteractwitheachotherhaschangedbecauseoftechnology.Yes,thetechnologyhaschangedthepeoplesinteractioninveryenhancedmanner.Earlierpeopleusetowaitandtrytofindeasywaytocontacttheirfriendsorrelativesleavingfar.Inpasttherewasnoquicktechnologytocontactortoestablishanycommunicationbetweenonepersontoanotherperson.Thedrawbackwithpastcommunicationsystemswasthatitwereveryslowandweretimetakingprocesssuchastelegrams,letteretc.Peopleusedtoafraidtowritetheirpersonalfeedbacksorthingstotheirloveonesduetoinsecuremediumofcommunication.Whenitcomestoprofessionallevel,theprivacyandaccuracyshouldbemaintainbut,tothattimetherewerenosecurecommunications.Nowthethingshavechangedaround,peoplefromfardistancecontacttheirlovesoneinaneasyandquickwayswhichimprovestheinteractionlevelbetweentwoperson.Qualitytheleveloftheinteractionbetweenpeopletopeople,hasimprovedbecausethepeopleareequippedwithhigh-tectechnologywhichenhancesthecommunication.Therearemanymanymediumwhichareavailablenowsuchasinternet,calledcardsetc.Thetechnologyhasprovidedthemobilityfasterwhichhelppeopletotalkortointeractatanytimeanywhereintheworld.Peoplecancontacttheirfriendorrelativesanytimetheywant.Ithasbecomesoeasierandferiendlytobeintouchwithyourferiends,relativesevenwiththeunknownpeople.原文翻譯：今天，由于科技的發(fā)展人們相互交流的方式也發(fā)生了變化。統(tǒng)的問(wèn)題是速度慢，費(fèi)時(shí)間，比如：電報(bào)和信件等。在過(guò)去，人們不敢給愛(ài)人寫(xiě)但是在當(dāng)時(shí)根本沒(méi)有安全的通信可言。技，所以他們交流的方式已經(jīng)得到改善?，F(xiàn)在有了很多這類(lèi)媒體，比如：國(guó)際互聯(lián)網(wǎng)、語(yǔ)音卡等。他人溝通。得更容易了。SampleAnswer:ThisisananswerwrittenbyacandidatewhoachievedaBand5.5score.Hereistheexaminerscomment:這是一位考生寫(xiě)的5.5分作文。Thetopicintroductionhasbeencopiedfromthetaskandisdeductedfromthewordcount.Thisleavestheanswerunderlengthat236words,sothecandidatelosesmarksforthis.文章的開(kāi)篇是從題目中抄來(lái)的，所以不能算字?jǐn)?shù)。剩下的只有236個(gè)字，考生因此失分。Thisansweraddressesbothquestions,butthefirstisnotwellcoveredintermsofhowactualrelationshipshavechanged.Nevertheless,thereisaclearopinionthattheeffectshavebeenpositiveandrelationshipshaveimproved,withsomerelevantideastosupportthis.Thereisageneralprogressiontotheargument,withsomeeffectiveuseoftimemarkersandlinkers.Thereisalsosomerepetition,however.Paragraphingisnotalwayslogical,andideasarenotalwayswelllinked.Arangeofvocabularythatisrelevanttothetopicisused,includingsomepreciseandnaturalexpressions.Therearequitealotofmistakesinwordform,wordchoiceorspelling,butthesedonotusuallyreduceunderstanding.Avarietyofsentencetypeisused,butnotalwaysaccurately.Errorsingrammarandpunctuationaredistractingattimes,butonlyrarelycauseproblemsforthereader.于現(xiàn)實(shí)中的關(guān)系是如何變化的。但是，文章展示了清晰的.觀點(diǎn)(這些影響都是好的，而且這些關(guān)系都有所改善)并配以相關(guān)的觀點(diǎn)支持。文章的論證循序漸進(jìn)，使用了很多表示時(shí)間的提示詞以及連接詞，但是個(gè)別有些重復(fù)。分段不夠邏輯，的表達(dá)。雖然有一些詞性、詞義以及拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤，但是并不會(huì)太影響理解。使用了讀者產(chǎn)生太大的麻煩。修改后：Nowadays,.(Itistruethattechnologyhasshiftedpeoplescommunicativeways.利用Itistruethat的句式突出后面的事件;Change和shift是同義詞替換;thewaypeopleinteract和communicativeway是同義詞替換。這樣的變化可以避免引用題目中的原詞。)(拒絕非正式的用法。)Thetechnologyhaschangedthepeoplesinteractioninveryenhancedmanner.Earlierpeopleused(前后時(shí)態(tài)必須一致。)towaitandtrytofindeasyways(名詞單復(fù)數(shù))tocontacttheirfriendsorrelativesleavingfar.Inthepast,therewasno(詞匯使用不當(dāng)，應(yīng)該改成effective)technologytocontactothersortoestablishanycommunicationbetweentwopeople.And(重要的連接詞，表示本句和上一句共同解釋為什么人們一直在期待找到更有效的通訊方式。)thedrawbackofthepastcommunicationsystemswasthattheycommunicationsystems)weretoo(表示太。)slowandweretime-consuming(表示費(fèi)時(shí)),including(這是應(yīng)該使用分詞形式，表示對(duì)主句的communicationways的具體描述。)thetelegrams,theletteretc.Notonlythat,(這里需要連接詞)peopleusedtobeafraidtowritetheirpersonalfeedbacksorthingstotheirlovedonesbecauseof(becauseof強(qiáng)調(diào)外因dueto強(qiáng)調(diào)根據(jù))informationsecurity(根據(jù)上下文理解，此處應(yīng)該表達(dá)的是信息安全)ofcommunication.(Theyworriedtheirlettersmightbestolenorreadbysomestrangers.這里可以繼續(xù)描述人們的擔(dān)心。)However，(上文主要討論過(guò)去的情況，而接下來(lái)將討論現(xiàn)在的變化)nowthethingshavechangedaround.(必須避免使用，連接兩個(gè)句子。正確的處理方法是，要么采用斷句的方法，要么添加連詞。)Peopleinalongdistancecontacttheirlovesdonein(effectiveandefficient)ways,whichimprove(主謂一致，which代替ways。)theinteractionlevelbetweentwopersons.Quality(用詞重復(fù))oftheinteractionbetweenpeopleandpeople(主謂之間不能添加，。)hasbeenimproved(這里使用被動(dòng)是因?yàn)闇贤ㄙ|(zhì)量的提升是因?yàn)榧夹g(shù)的發(fā)展。)becausetheyareequippedwithhigh-techdeviceswhichenhancestheircommunication.T