讀后續(xù)寫寫作指導：送老人去養(yǎng)老院-2023屆高考英語一輪復習寫作備考

讀后續(xù)寫寫作指導：送老人去養(yǎng)老院閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Twentyyearsago,Idroveataxi.Once,Iwascalledat3a.m.topicksomeoneup.WhenIarrived,thebuildingwascompletelydarkexceptforonelightinawindow.Often,manydriverswouldjusthonk（按喇叭）onceortwice,waitashortminute,thendriveaway.Butunlessarealdanger,Ialwayswenttothedoortofindthepassenger.Itmightbesomeonewhoneededmyassistance.WouldInotwantadrivertodothesameifmymotherorfatherhadcalledforataxi?SoIwalkedtothedoorandknocked."Justaminute,“answeredaweakandelderlyvoice.Icouldhearthesoundofsomethingbeingdraggedacrossthefloor.A代eralongpause,thedooropened.Asmallwomaninher80sstoodbeforeme.Byhersidewasasmallsuitcase.“Wouldyoucarrymybagouttothecar?”shesaid."I'dlikeafewmomentsalone.Then；ifyoucouldcomebackandhelpme?I'mnotverystrong//Itookthesuitcasetothecab,thenreturnedtoassistthewoman.Shetookmyarm,andwewalkedslowlytowardthecab.Shekeptthankingmeformykindness."It'snothing/'Itoldher.justtrytotreatmypassengersthewayIwouldwantmymothertreated.0〃Oh,you'resuchagoodboy,“shesaid.Whenwegotinthetaxi,shegavemeanaddress.Thensheasked,“Couldyoudrivethroughthedowntown?"〃It'snottheshortestway,“Ianswered.don'tmind,“shesaid,'Tminnohurry.I'monmywaytothenursinghome."Isawhereyesshiningwithtears."Idon'thaveanyfamilyleft,“shecontinued."ThedoctorsaysIamtoooldtolivealone/1Iquietlyturnedoffthemeter（計程器）."Whatroaddoyouwantmetotake?”Iasked."First,takemetoSunriseStreet.That'swhereIwasborn.”注意：.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150詞左右;.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Forhours；wedrovethroughthecity.〃HowmuchdoIoweyou?”sheasked,reachingforherpurse.寫作指導:線索：時間:3a.m.人物（背景）：Idroveataxi.Asmallwomaninher80sstoodbeforeme.Z/Idon'thaveanyfamilyleft/7shecontinued.事件:Iquietlyturnedoffthemeter（計程器）.主題：WouldInotwantadrivertodothesameifmymotherorfatherhadcalledforataxi?Shekeptthankingmeformykindness.Z/IjusttrytotreatmypassengersthewayIwouldwantmymothertreated//情節(jié)推測：Forhours,wedrovethroughthecity..她說話（照應人物背景線索：don'thaveanyfamilyleft）.我聆聽.到地方“HowmuchdoIoweyou?”sheasked,reachingforherpurse..我回答：不收費（照應事件線索:Iquietlyturnedoffthemeter）.她反響：由驚奇到感激.我反響:照應線索主題（IjusttrytotreatmypassengersthewayIwouldwantmymothertreated.）Forhours,wedrovethroughthecity..她的表達（回憶過去）和她的神情初稿：Suddenly,shesaid,“ThisistheplacewhereIfirstmyhusband.我們提前預估，本文的對話會很多，如果續(xù)寫都這樣寫，不是太好，可以用轉(zhuǎn)述方式潤色：Suddenly,sheaskedmetopullupnearapeacefulsquare,where,asshetoldmeinagentlevoice,shefirstmetherhusband.Shesatonthebackseatstill,gazingatthesquarethroughamistoftearsforamoment,andthensignaledmetomoveon.技術手段：多角度豐富聲音:inagentlevoice眼睛：gazingatthesquarethroughamistoftearsforamoment手:andthensignaledmetomoveon動作:satonthebackseatstill.我的反響：聆聽初稿：Alltheway,Ijustlistenedattentively.潤色：Alltheway,IjustlistenedattentivelyasifIwasaloyalaudiencetomymotherwhousedtocalluphergoodolddays.技術手段：加上asif…比喻手法。這種手法是比擬好的，我記得有一次我女兒（小學三年級）給我說，我發(fā)現(xiàn)只要用比喻，作文就會被老師表揚。同時也是為主題鋪墊。.到達目的地初稿:Twohourslater,wearrivedatthegateofthenursinghomeatdawn.潤色：技術手段：Afterwhatseemed...Afterwhatseemedlikeamagicaljourneybacktothepast,weeventuallyarrivedatthegateofthenursinghomeatdawn.“HowmuchdoIoweyou?”sheasked,reachingforherpurse..我的回答：不收費初稿：“Nothing,“Isaid,pointingatthemeter.潤色：“Nothing,“Isaidquickly,shruggingwithalightlaugh,winkingatthemeter.技術手段：副詞：quickly肩膀:shrugging笑:withalightlaugh眼睛：winkingatthemeter.她的反響：由驚奇到感激初稿:Shewasverysurprisedandthenmoved.Shesaid,Oh,you'resuchagoodboy!Thankyou.”潤色：Shelookedatmewithwide-openeyes.Thenhershockslowlygavewaytogratefulunderstanding.〃Oh,you'resuchagoodboy!Thankyou."Sheheldmyhandtightly.技術手段：眼睛:lookedatmewithwide-openeyes情感變化：hershockslowlygavewaytogratefulunderstanding手:heldmyhandtightly.我的反響：主題“IjusttrytotreatyouthewayIwouldwantmymothertreated/'Isaidsoftly.潤色：Z/IjusttrytotreatyouthewayIwouldwantmymothertreated/'Irespondedsoftly.ThenIbentoverandgaveherahug.Asuddenwarmthandhappinesshitmelikeagentlebreezewipingmyface.AndIknewitwasthegraceofkindness.技術手段：動作：bentoverandgaveherahug心情：Asuddenwarmthandhappinesshitmelikeagentlebreezewipingmyface.修辭:比喻Iknewitwasthegraceofkindness.完整：Forhours,wedrovethroughthecity.Suddenly,sheaskedmetopullupnearapeacefulsquare,where,asshetoldmeinagentlevoice,shefirstmetherhusband.Shesatonthebackseatstill,gazingatthesquarethroughamistoftearsforamoment,andthensignaledmetomoveon.Alltheway,IjustlistenedattentivelyasifIwasaloyalaudiencetomymotherwhousedtocalluphergoodolddays.Afterwhatseemedlikeamagicaljourneybacktothepast,weeventuallyarrivedatthegateofthenursinghomeatdawn.“HowmuchdoIoweyou?”sheasked,reachingforherpurse.“Nothing,“Isaidquickly,shruggingwithalightlaugh,winkingatthemeter.Shelookedatmewithwide-openeyes.Thenhershockslowlygavewaytogratefulunderstanding.〃Oh,you'resuch