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1、一：網(wǎng)絡(luò)故事書（webstorybook service）reading網(wǎng)絡(luò)故事書的好處1.可以教小朋友讀書2.經(jīng)濟(jì)實惠，家長不需要為孩子買書了3.可以代替父母陪伴孩子，為家長節(jié)省時間lecture反駁1.使用時不能和小朋友互動（ask question and get feedback）2.網(wǎng)絡(luò)上的故事都是過時的，要想讀新故事還是要買書（不足）3.父母與孩子一起讀書可以增進(jìn)感情例文： The speaker rebuts the reading's argument by pointing out the inadequacy of the web-storybook service

2、s' interaction with children, the incompleteness of the data pool, and by undermining the assumption that saving parents' reading time is a benefit.The speaker begins by stating that merely pronouncing the words and story for the children will not provide adequate learning experiences. Despi

3、te the time saved and pronunciation utilities laid out in the reading, the web services can only respond with "correct" or "not correct". The lack of feedback to children's questions will not create an effective learning process.Then the speaker goes on to argue that the curr

4、ent web-storybook services have a very limited collection of books, thus not being able to save parents the cost of new books as the reading states, because the parents still have to buy many books that the web services do not provide.Lastly, the speaker challenges the validity of the assumption of

5、saving parents' time to read stories to children. The reading argues that saving the time is a benefit for the parents, but the speaker maintains that the whole point of reading stories is far beyond reading stories alone. In contrast, it is an essential way of communicating and building relatio

6、nship between parents and children.二：藥品廣告（drug advertisement）提出命題：藥品廣告所提供的信息都是客觀全面的，且病人對藥物了解得越多越好1.病人可以更多了解處方藥的相關(guān)信息（information）2.醫(yī)生開藥時，病人可以與廣告上進(jìn)行比較，有利于選藥3.通過廣告，病人可以了解到新藥的發(fā)展，提醒醫(yī)生挑戰(zhàn)命題：病人不需要對藥物了解太多，因為有時候了解得太多會對非專業(yè)的病人產(chǎn)生困擾，而且廣告所提供的信息也不完整全面1.廣告通常只有宣傳好處，對副作用（side effects）一筆帶過，病人很難判斷2.病人對藥物的準(zhǔn)確用法用量不了解，可能會用錯

7、3.廣告只宣傳新藥，對舊藥沒有宣傳，但是針對不同的病情，也許舊藥更為合適The speaker raises serious counterarguments against the reading paragraphs by providing drastically different evidences regardingthe effects of the advertisement, the impact of self-selecting medication, and the impact of trends in the pharmaceutical industry.Firs

8、tly, knowing more information from the ads will not necessarily help the patients make better-informed decisions, as the reading argues. On the contrary, patients, without professional training and knowledge, will be more susceptible to misunderstanding information. For example, they would focus onl

9、y on the positive sides of a certain medicine while ignoring the serious side effects.In addition, if the patients bear the responsibility of prescribing their own medication, they assume more responsibility to their own health. This makes doctors less liable for potential risks and undesirable cons

10、equences.Lastly, as for the new trends' benefits to the patients, the speaker does not challenge the reading directly. Instead, he argues that the new medicine, which will count for most of the ads may not necessarily be the best medicine, even though the patients can inform their doctors about

11、the new products.三：網(wǎng)絡(luò)問卷（web based survey）reading網(wǎng)絡(luò)問卷相對傳統(tǒng)問卷的優(yōu)勢1.調(diào)查范圍更廣，所以調(diào)查結(jié)果就更為準(zhǔn)確（邏輯錯誤：參加人多并不代表范圍廣，也不能保證效果好）2.發(fā)放，填寫和收集問卷更加方便簡單3.成本低lecture反駁網(wǎng)絡(luò)問卷的優(yōu)勢1.所取得的調(diào)查結(jié)果不全面（biased），因為不是所有人都會上網(wǎng)，中老年人上網(wǎng)會比較少，而年輕人上網(wǎng)比較多2.成本并不會低，因為一個好的網(wǎng)絡(luò)問卷需要一個團(tuán)隊的大量工作（提出新的證據(jù)：網(wǎng)絡(luò)問卷也需要成本和人力資源）3.大多數(shù)人對網(wǎng)絡(luò)問卷都不嚴(yán)肅，會得到不正確的信息，容易混淆視聽。例文： The speak

12、er questions the effectiveness of web based surveys by providing evidences contradictory to the reading.Firstly, he identified the reading's logical flaw in assuming that an increase in the scope and quantity of the survey will automatically translate to greater precision of the surveys. However

13、, if surveys aim to question people over 60 years old, how can these old people conduct surveys online since this group seldom surf the Internet? The web surveys are effective in reaching mainly the young generation. Thus the results cannot be extended to demonstrate the views of the whole populatio

14、n.Secondly, although the web-based surveys will lower paper cost, they will inevitably incur new costs in web designing, flashy features, and other elements, which will require more costly team work. This evidence effectively attacks the reading's argument that web surveys will certainly reduce

15、the cost of the survey.In the end, many web designers tend to overdo in the webpage and add fancy and flashy features. As a result, many people perceive the web-based surveys as not serious and are thus not willing to respond to the surveys. Unlike physical surveys that draw attention effectively, m

16、any web based surveys are simply ignored or even deleted.四：打分偏高（inflation of marks）reading老師給學(xué)生打的分?jǐn)?shù)越來越高1.分?jǐn)?shù)打得低會減低學(xué)生的學(xué)習(xí)意志2.會影響教師自己的測評結(jié)果3.因為別的老師給的成績高，如果不跟著給高分，學(xué)生出去找工作會吃虧lecture解決方案1.應(yīng)從小灌輸正確的學(xué)習(xí)觀念，不應(yīng)因一次小失利而喪失信心2.教師的評測可以改在學(xué)期結(jié)束前進(jìn)行，這樣學(xué)生的成績就不會影響到評測結(jié)果3.企業(yè)在選拔人才時可以看學(xué)生在班級中的排名而不是單純的成績例文：The speaker challenges th

17、e reasoning that supports the current inflation in college grading system, provides very specific alternatives to teacher evaluation timing and employer methodology in judging a student.The speaker firstly argues that the inflated grades will not enable students to truly know their weakness, not to

18、mention improve upon them. According to the reading, low grades will discourage students. The speaker rebuts this point and argues that the true meaning of education is not just to satisfy students. Letting the students make progress is the purpose and inflated grades will not help students in this

19、way.As for the reading's concerns that low grades will adversely affect teachers' evaluation, the speaker offers a solution. By finishing the teachers' evaluation before the end of the semester, we can sever the connections between the students' grades and teachers' evaluations.L

20、astly, the speaker argues that the school does not have to follow the trend of inflated grades invariably. The reading argues that if the school does not follow the trend, their students will be discriminated, the lecture says that this problem can be solved by providing a weighted relative score. T

21、his score will pinpoint a student's percentile in the whole student body and show the other students' scores, thus allowing employers to clearly position the student among the entire student body.五：加氟自來水（adding fluoride in public water）reading在自來水中加氟的好處1.防止蛀牙2.殺死細(xì)菌3.對骨骼有好處（decrease bone dise

22、ases）lecture反駁1.自來水并不會留在口中，對防止蛀牙沒有幫助2.氟會與輸水管（water pipe）中的化學(xué)物質(zhì)反應(yīng)，產(chǎn)生有毒物質(zhì)，其危害大于細(xì)菌3.過量的氟會使骨骼變脆例文：The speaker refutes the reading's argument about the benefits of adding fluoride to pipe water by providing contradictory evidence about pipe water's fluoride's effectiveness in preventing cavit

23、ies in teeth, killing bacteria, and decreasing bone diseases. Firstly, the speaker points out that the short contact of fluoride with teeth will not enable the fluoride to prevent cavities, as the reading argues. Instead, the water will pass the mouth and teeth quickly and go directly to the stomach

24、.Another argument raised in the lecture is that fluoride could undergo chemical reactions with heavy metals in the pipe, such as lead. This will create toxic substances which will pose serious health threat. In this way fluoride could be even more deadly than bacteria. Although the fluoride, as the

25、reading says, will kill some bacteria, the cure here is worse than the disease.In the end, the speaker maintains that overdose of fluoride will backfire to human bones. Although the reading illustrates that fluoride will improve bone strength, the lecture says overdose will cause serious damage to h

26、uman bones. 六、倫勃朗的油畫The lecture revises the idea presented in the text, that Rembrandt was not the artist who painted the famous painting "Portrait of an Elderly Woman in a White Bonnet”.  The inconsistency between the white cap, which identifies the woman as a servant, and the expensive fur collar she wears dissolves as the Professor explains that the fur collar was apparently painted over the original pa